ContinuationWritingBuildactionchain&actionscene

讀后續(xù)寫專題之構(gòu)建動作鏈和動作面STARTLookatthetwopictures:Whichoneisbetter?Whatproblemsdothesentenceshave?Leadin

START1.Whichoneisbetter?2.Whatproblemsdothesentencesinpictureonehave?①②Inthisclass,wewill:1.Knowsomeusefulskillstoperfectcontinuationwritingbymakingactionsmorevivid,mainlyfromtwoaspects:actionchainandactionscene.2.Appreciateandimitateexamplesofdescriptionsentences.3.Learntocooperatewitheachotherandjoininclassactivitiestoimproveourselves.Learningaims:STARTHowtopolishourwritingbyusingactionchainandactionscene讀后續(xù)寫微技能，構(gòu)造動作鏈與動作面START01

Theywenttotheamusementparkbycar.或Theydrovetotheamusementpark.

Warmingup簡單描述描述一：他們開車去游樂園。START02Childrenjumpedintothewaterforfun.

描述二：孩子們跳入水中玩耍START03描述三、媽媽沉迷于玩手機。Motherwasaddictedtohersmartphone.START04描述四、她抱住她的孩子Shehuggedherkid.讀后續(xù)寫作為記敘文，其核心只有一個，那就是“人”。因此一切的筆墨，都是為了塑造人物形象，使人物更加飽滿。想把我們的人物塑造得更飽滿，就必須要有支撐他/她的各類描寫，其中，動詞是英語語言的主角，很多句子肯定都包含動作描寫。但是我們在描寫動作的時候往往會犯一個毛病，那就是太過于單薄。那么該如何將動作構(gòu)建得飽滿?要想把動作寫得生動有畫面感，其中的兩個思路:構(gòu)造“___________”。前言動作鏈、動作面Pre-writing在描寫動作時，把動作過程分解成一連串細微的動作，形成動作鏈，寫出動作的連貫性Pre-writing:Howtomodifyandbeautifyyoursentences?

Skill1.Buildtheactionchain構(gòu)建動作鏈樂園1

如何延長這句話：拆解動作，構(gòu)造動作鏈跳上車向著游樂園出發(fā)

Hejumpedintothecarand

drovetotheamusementpark

excitedly.

用副詞增加色彩他們開車去游樂園。前

后

對

比一般表達：

Theywenttotheamusementparkbycar.提分表達：Theyjumpedintothecarand

drovetotheamusementpark

excitedly.

表示連續(xù)的或者并列的動作2

如何延長這句話：拆解動作，構(gòu)造動作鏈孩子們跳入水中玩耍跳進水里爬上池邊用副詞增加色彩Childrenclimbedontheplatformand

jumpedintothewaterhappilyforfun.前后

對

比一般表達：Childrenjumpedintothewaterforfun.提分表達:Childrenclimbedontheplatformand

jumpedinto

thewaterhappily

forfun.1.Theyjumpedintothecarand

drovetotheamusementpark

excitedly.2.Childrenclimbedontheplatformand

jumpedintothewaterhappily.用法總結(jié)，使用2個并列的______________0102動詞主語+謂語動作A+and+謂語動作B.

表示連續(xù)的或者并列的動作3

如何延長這句話：拆解動作，構(gòu)造動作鏈媽媽沉迷于玩手機坐在椅子上玩手機拿出手機用副詞增加色彩Mothersatinachair,took

outhersmartphoneandwas

completelyaddictedtoplayingit

.

前

后

對

比一般表達：Motherwasaddictedtohersmartphone.

提分表達：

Mothersatinachair,took

out

her

smartphoneand

wascompletely

addictedtoplayingit

.3

如何延長這句話：拆解動作，構(gòu)造動作鏈她抱住她的孩子她沖向前把兒子攬進懷里跪了下來用副詞增加色彩Shedashedforwardinahurry,kneltdownand

heldhersonintoherarms.

前

后

對

比一般表達：

Shehuggedherkids.提分表達：

Shedashedforward

inahurry,kneltdown

andheldhersonintoherarmstightly.1.Mothersatinachair,took

outhersmartphoneandwasaddictedtoplayingit.2.Shedashedforward

inahurry,kneltdown

andheldhersonintoherarmstightly.

用法總結(jié)，使用3個并列的______________010203動詞主語+謂語動作A,謂語動作Band謂語動作C李煜句型1:1.突然，小男孩被沙灘上的玩具車吸引，離開了水池。

Suddenly,thelittleboy____________byatoycaronthebeachand____thepool.2.我走近我爸爸，驕傲地拿出我自己的錢遞給他。(2021年浙江高考)

I__________Dad,proudly_________ownmoneyand_______ittohim.3.雙胞胎準備好早餐托盤，加上一張他們做的漂亮的卡片，走出廚房。

Thetwins_______thebreakfasttray,________________theyhadmade,and____________________.

(2021新高考卷1)4.老師走上前，拍了拍我的肩膀，溫柔地說:“有志者，事竟成?！?2023)

主語+動作Aand動作B/主語+動作A,

動作B

and

動作C

（三個/兩個并列動詞的連接）preparedaddedabeaitifulcardTheteachersteppedforward,pattedmeontheshoulder,andsaidsoftly,"wherethereisawill,thereisaway."stepped

outofthekitchenapproachedtookoutofhandedwasattractedleftExerciseASkill2Buildanactionscene構(gòu)建動作面

Pre-writing:Howtomodifyandbeautifyyoursentences?321EmotionsDialoguesInnerthoughts4Actions動作面=動作+情感，環(huán)境，語言，心理等5Surroundings

情緒

動作

語言

DialogueAction

Emotion“我去給你們拿點咖啡，”她笑道，朝廚房走去。Appreciationandimitation“我去給你們拿點咖啡，”她笑道，朝廚房走去?！癐'llgetyousomecoffee,”shesmiled,headingforthekitchen.AppreciationandimitationHe

wasoverwhelmedwithjoy,

singinganddancing

intherain.他欣喜若狂，在雨中又唱又跳。EmotionAction

Appreciationandimitation站在海邊,他們仰望天空,享受著這份珍貴的平靜。Standing

attheseashore,they

lookedupinto

thesky,enjoying

thepreciouspeacefromwithin.SurroundingsActionInnerthoughtAppreciationandimitation被老師的話鼓舞，Lucy舉起了手，小聲說：“我來試試?！盓ncouraged

bytheteacher'swords,Lucy

raised

herhand,whispering,”Iwanttohaveatry”.Appreciationandimitation

句型二：句型三：句型四：

小結(jié)主語+謂語，doinganddoing（伴隨動作）Doing，主語+謂語,doing(主動動作)Done，主語+謂語,doing(被動動作)1.Onasunnyafternoon,Peter_________(參觀)thescenicspot,_________(欣賞)themagnificentwaterfalland______(拍照)countlesspictures,relaxed

and

overjoyed.

ExerciseBvisitedtakingappreciating

2.面對這四個強壯的人，狼可能會感到受到威脅，開始撤退。

(2017.浙江高考卷）

Facingthefourstrongmen,thewolfmightfeelthreatened，startingtowithdraw.

高考鏈接3.聽完后深受鼓勵，David伸出雙臂抱住了我并微笑著說：“我可以做到！”

(2022年新高考I讀后續(xù)寫)Deeplyencouragedafterhearingthis,Davidheldouthisarmsandhuggedme,replyinginadelightedvoice“Icandoit！”

高考鏈接ExerciseC

Rewritethesentencesusingthesentencepatternswejustlearned.

1.Theoldmansatunderthesunset._______________________________________________________________________

2.Thechildrenbegantocry.______________________________________________________________

3.Hesteppedontothestage._______________________________________________________________

Theoldmansatunderthesunset,reading

thenewspaperandlisteningtotheradio.Deeplymovedbythemovie,thechildrenbegantocry,feelingthemovieasuccessFeelingfullofenergy,he

steppedontothestage,beginningtorecitethearticlebravely.Output:IntegratedSkillsThescene:reunion(重聚)Tomwasseparatefromhisdogforalongtime.Whenhewentbackhome,……(40-60words)While-writing

Tips:UsingthemethodofactionchainandactionscenetowriteactionThesimplepasttense(一般過去時)

Showandshare

ShowyourdraftandPolishitcarefully!Evaluation(評價):Judgingbytense,content,writing,goodwords/phrases/sentences好詞，短語結(jié)構(gòu)，句式波浪線畫出PostwritingPostwriting

Possibleanswer:WhenTomwent

backhome,thedogrushedtohim,waggedhertailand

barkedwithjoy.HappinesstookholdofTomassoonashesawthedog.Tombentdown,givingherabearhugandsaying:“Imissyorsomuch!"Then,tearsofjoyflowed