運(yùn)動(dòng)改變生活——————我的健身之旅

01引言與背景1.1寫(xiě)作任務(wù)與主題語(yǔ)境對(duì)比類文章假定你是李華，在“全民健身日”到來(lái)之際，你校英語(yǔ)報(bào)面向全體學(xué)生開(kāi)展征文比賽，要求參賽者通過(guò)寫(xiě)一篇關(guān)于自己運(yùn)動(dòng)前后變化的文章來(lái)宣傳運(yùn)動(dòng)的重要性。請(qǐng)你寫(xiě)一篇英語(yǔ)短文參賽。注意:詞數(shù)120左右。對(duì)比類文章概述02審題與提綱制定2.1文章結(jié)構(gòu)規(guī)劃人稱以第一人稱為主，時(shí)態(tài)以一般過(guò)去時(shí)、一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和現(xiàn)在完成時(shí)為主。主題確立與人稱時(shí)態(tài)2.2擬定寫(xiě)作提綱我們可以從以下三部分進(jìn)行寫(xiě)作:Para1運(yùn)動(dòng)前:身體素質(zhì)差肥胖不自信Para2運(yùn)動(dòng)后：身體健康勻稱非常自信Para3總結(jié)

變化要點(diǎn)概覽03收集與組織素材3.1核心詞匯與短語(yǔ)※單詞:confident,overweight,tired,kilograms...※短語(yǔ):comealong,fallinlovewith...,becomefit...

關(guān)鍵表述選取3.2核心句子構(gòu)建※句子:★Ididn'twanttocomealong.★Iwasnotconfidentenough.★Iwasabitoverweight.★Iwaseasilytired.★Ifellinlovewithit.Igrewconfident.Ilost10kilograms.★Ibecamefit.代表性句子展示04初稿撰寫(xiě)4.1運(yùn)動(dòng)前的狀態(tài)Ididn'twanttoexercise.IwasoverweightsoIwasnotconfident.Iwasn'tgoodatmakingfriends.Iwaseasilytiredduetomypoorphysicalcondition.個(gè)人挑戰(zhàn)與困境4.2運(yùn)動(dòng)后的轉(zhuǎn)變Ifellinlovewithit.Ilost10kilogramsandbecamefit.Igrewconfidentandmademanyfriends.正面影響與成果4.3總結(jié)反思Ireallyenjoybeachvolleyball.Ithasmademehealthier.綜合體會(huì)與呼吁05修改潤(rùn)色5.1提升文本連貫性初稿完成后，為了使文章表達(dá)準(zhǔn)確、邏輯清楚，需對(duì)初稿進(jìn)行修改潤(rùn)色。如：1.增加銜接詞使上下文更加連貫，如atfirst、moreover、evenif、lateron、aswell等；使用句型（如notonly...butalso...）或復(fù)合句，使句式豐富多樣；銜接詞與復(fù)雜句運(yùn)用建議5.2添加細(xì)節(jié)強(qiáng)化說(shuō)服力2.適當(dāng)添加細(xì)節(jié)，充實(shí)內(nèi)容，使文章更有說(shuō)服力，如Iwasabitoverweight、IwaseasilytiredevenifIexercisedforonlyawhile、Ithasmademebothphysicallyandmentallyhealthier等。具體事例與感受增強(qiáng)06定稿檢查6.1最終審查與修正...發(fā)現(xiàn)并改正拼寫(xiě)、標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)和語(yǔ)法上的錯(cuò)誤...錯(cuò)誤排查與完善07范文欣賞7.1成品展示

Lastsummervacation,mycousininvitedmetoplaybeachvolleyball.Atfirst,Ididn'twanttocomealongbecauseIwasabitoverweight,whichmakesmenotconfident.Besides,Iwasn'tgoodatmakingfriends.Moreover,duetomypoorphysicalcondition,IwaseasilytiredevenifIexercisedforonlyawhile.

Lateron,withencouragementfrommycousin,Igaveitatryandfellinlovewithit.Afterthesummervacationended,Inotonlylost10kilogramsbutalsobecamefit.Igrewconfidentandmademanyfriendsaswell.

Ireallyenjoybeachvolleyball,which