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閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Icouldn’tbearitanylonger!Mybestfriendhadgoneforlunchwiththemostpopulargirlinclass,leavingmetoeatmytunasandwichaloneinthelibrary.Worsestill,duringdanceclass,mypartner,aboy,refusedtoholdmyhandandbadmouthedmebehindmyback,furtherfeedingmyanger.Itwas,withoutadoubt,myworstdayinschool.Iwashurtandmad,andlookingforatargettoreleasemyanger.WhenIgothomefromschool,Motherhadbakedpeanutbuttercookiesandpiledthemuponaplate.Sheevenartfullydecoratedeachonewithroyalicingandtoppeditwithsugar.”Couldn’tyouhavemadechocolatechip?“Isaidmoodily.”Icouldhave,“sherepliedfromthelaundryroom,”butImadepeanutbutterones.Eatthemwhilethey’restillhot,sweetie.“AlthoughIthoughtMotherwasratherunthoughtful,Icavedinandtookafewbitesunwillinglyintheend.Later,whenshepulledagrilledchickenfromtheovenandsangamerrytune,Isomehowgotannoyedagain—NevermindthatMotherhadbusiedherselfthewholeafternoonwiththecookingjusttoputthishotmealonthetable.Iwantedhamburgers.
”Nobodyevenlikesthatkindoffood,Mum!Whydidn’tyoumakehamburgers?“Icomplained.Mothertookadeepbreath,ranherfingersthroughhermessyhairandlookedintomyeyeswithapuzzledlook.”Sweetheart,you’venevercomplainedabouthavingitbefore.What’sup?“shesaidmatter-of-factly(平淡地).Itwasfromtherethatallwentdownhill.IscreamedandcomplainednonstopuntilMotherhitherlimit.ItwasthefirsttimethatMotherhadgotmadatme.Nobodyseemedtocareaboutme,includingmybelovedmother!Ultimately,wehadashoutingmatchinthehallway.注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;2.請按如下格式作答。Unabletocontainheranger,”Nodinnerforyou!Gotobednow!"sheexploded.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Thenathick,juicysmellofhamburgersgreetedmynose.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________文章大意“我”在學(xué)校遭遇了糟糕的一天,好友拋下“我”和別人一起吃午飯,舞蹈課上男舞伴拒絕牽手還在背后說“我”壞話。回家后,“我”把怒氣撒在媽媽身上,抱怨她做的花生醬餅干和烤雞,而不是“我”想吃的巧克力曲奇和漢堡。媽媽詢問原因,“我”卻不停地尖叫抱怨,最終和媽媽在走廊大吵一架。五要素分析人物:“我”、媽媽。時(shí)間:放學(xué)后。地點(diǎn):家里。起因:“我”在學(xué)校不愉快,對媽媽準(zhǔn)備的食物不滿。經(jīng)過:“我”向媽媽抱怨、發(fā)脾氣,和媽媽吵架。結(jié)果:媽媽生氣地讓“我”去睡覺,不許吃晚飯。幾處伏筆及續(xù)寫中的回應(yīng)伏筆:“我”想吃漢堡,對媽媽做的食物不滿。回應(yīng):第二段續(xù)寫中媽媽為“我”做了漢堡,體現(xiàn)媽媽對“我”的愛和包容。伏筆:和媽媽吵架,媽媽生氣了?;貞?yīng):第一段續(xù)寫媽媽的憤怒爆發(fā),讓“我”去睡覺且沒晚飯;第二段續(xù)寫媽媽主動緩解關(guān)系,展現(xiàn)親情的力量。續(xù)寫要點(diǎn)第一段情感線:憤怒與委屈交織,媽媽的憤怒達(dá)到頂點(diǎn),“我”在被懲罰后既有對媽媽的埋怨,也有對自己行為的后悔。故事線:媽媽因“我”的無理取鬧而大發(fā)雷霆,命令“我”去睡覺,不許吃晚飯,“我”回到房間后情緒復(fù)雜。第二段情感線:驚訝、感動與愧疚,聞到漢堡味時(shí)的驚訝,看到媽媽時(shí)的感動,以及對之前行為的愧疚。故事線:漢堡的香味傳來,“我”發(fā)現(xiàn)是媽媽做的,媽媽向“我”道歉,“我”和媽媽和好。主旨升華句Lovefromfamilyislikeawarmfirethatcanmelttheiceofourangerandmisunderstanding.Intheseaoffamilylove,eventhebiggestwavesofangerwilleventuallysubside.Sometimes,wehurttheoneswelovemostinourmomentsofweakness,buttheirforgivenessalwaysshinesbrightly.Familyistheplacewhereloveovercomesall,evenourchildishtantrums.Thebondoffamilyissostrongthatitcanrepairthecrackscausedbyourhastywordsandactions.寫作示范第一篇Unabletocontainheranger,”Nodinnerforyou!Gotobednow!"sheexploded.Irantomyroom,tearsstreamingdownmyface.Ifeltsolonelyandmisunderstood.AsIlayonmybed,IthoughtabouthowmeanIhadbeen.IcouldhearMommovingarounddownstairs,andeachsoundmademyheartachemore.
Thenathick,juicysmellofhamburgersgreetedmynose.Igotupandopenedthedoor.TherewasMom,holdingaplateofhamburgers."Iknowyou'vehadabadday.Let'snotfight,"shesaidsoftly.Ihuggedhertightly,feelingsosorryformybehavior.第二篇Unabletocontainheranger,”Nodinnerforyou!Gotobednow!"sheexploded.IwasshockedbyherwordsbutalsoknewIdeservedit.Iwenttomyroom,feelingamixofangerandsadness.IthoughtaboutthedayandrealizedhowwrongIhadbeen.IheardMomsighoutsidemydoor.
Thenathick,juicysmellofhamburgersgreetedmynose.IwalkedouttoseeMomwithaplateofhamburgers.Shesaid,"Ithoughtyoumightwantthese.Iloveyou,andweshouldbekindtoeachother."Inodded,myeyesfulloftears.Weforgaveeachother.第三篇Unabletocontainheranger,”Nodinnerforyou!Gotobednow!"sheexploded.Istompedtomyroom,slammingthedoor.Iwasfuminginside,butalsostartedtofeelbad.IrememberedallthetimesMomhadbeennicetome.Ilayonmybed,cryingsoftly.
Thenathick,juicysmellofhamburgersgreetedmynose.IopenedthedoortofindMom.Shesaid,"Imadetheseforyou.Idon'twantustobeangry."Ilookedatherandsaid,"I'msorry,Mom."Wesharedahug,andtheangerdisappeared.參考答案Unabletocontainheranger,”Nodinnerforyou!Gotobednow!"sheexploded.Istoodthere,stunnedforamoment,thenrushedupstairsinafitofrage.Throwingmyselfontothebed,Iburiedmyfaceinthepillow,hottearsofangerandself-pitysoakingintoit.Icouldn'tbelieveshe'dpunishedmelikethis,yetdeepdown,IknewI'dbroughtitonmyself.Thenathick,juicysmellofhamburgersgreetedmynose.Isatup,confused.Curiositygotthebetterofme,andItiptoeddownstairs
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