專(zhuān)題20讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)：情感刻畫(huà)（原卷版）情感細(xì)節(jié)包括人物的感受、情緒，是續(xù)寫(xiě)中必不可少的細(xì)節(jié)描寫(xiě)之一。合理的情感情緒描寫(xiě)與刻畫(huà)，可以凸顯人物的性格、人際關(guān)系的特征、以及烘托故事高潮進(jìn)而突出語(yǔ)篇主題等。因此，合理的情感情緒刻畫(huà)在續(xù)寫(xiě)中是非常必要的。以下就是讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)過(guò)程中，刻畫(huà)人物情感情緒的四個(gè)方法：一、直接描寫(xiě)法直接利用恰當(dāng)?shù)谋砬楦械男稳菰~、副詞或名詞、介詞短語(yǔ)等表達(dá)人物的喜怒哀樂(lè)例如：快樂(lè)(happy,delighted,pleased,joyful,enjoyable等)、吃驚(surprised,shocked,amazed,astonished)等形容詞或介詞短語(yǔ)(toone'ssurprise,inrelief,inpanic)等描述人物的情緒。二、環(huán)境烘托法利用環(huán)境細(xì)節(jié)“融情于景”烘托人物的情感【例1】Dellafinishedhercryinganddriedherface.Shestoodbythewindowandlookedoutunhappilyatagraycatwalkingalongagrayfenceinagraybackyard.(小說(shuō)《麥琪的禮物》中利用3個(gè)形容詞gray，體現(xiàn)了Della的難受和不開(kāi)心。)【例2】涌上心頭

sth.welluponme/sth.sweptoverme

Afloodoffearwelledupinme.一股恐懼涌上心頭。高考真題：(1)[2020.7全國(guó)新?爆米花]Hewassodelightedthathecouldhardlyspeak,buthisbrightsmilefacespokeforhim.(2)[2020.1浙江?給Poppy買(mǎi)狗作伴]Poppyjumpedwithjoyatthesightofthelittledog.(3)[2017.11浙江?與善忘母親一同旅游]Everytimewementionedthefunnyincidentsofthejourney,apleasantsmilewouldspreadoverMom’sface.三、動(dòng)作反映法利用恰當(dāng)?shù)膭?dòng)作描寫(xiě)反映人物的情緒例如：下面文章片段中的句子：Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace,sheturnedaround,hoping_to_see_the_lake.(動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)，說(shuō)明Jane滿懷期望)Tohersurprise,(利用介詞短語(yǔ)體現(xiàn)Jane的吃驚)shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnow-cappedmountaintop.(寓情于景，體現(xiàn)Jane的無(wú)望失落)Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.四、句式變換法利用高級(jí)句式和修飾成分細(xì)化情感細(xì)節(jié)句型1：獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu)①“Absolutely！”repliedJohn,excitementshinninginhiseyes.(利用名詞excitement和獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu)，描寫(xiě)John的興奮激動(dòng))約翰答道，“一定”，他兩眼興奮地閃閃發(fā)光。句型2：so...that結(jié)構(gòu)②Soangrywasthebearthatitroaredandsmackedthefenceviolently.(so...that倒裝句型)熊怒火中燒，開(kāi)始咆哮并用爪子猛烈地拍擊護(hù)欄。句型3：how+賓語(yǔ)從句③Youcannotimaginehowfrightenedwewereattheapproachofthepolarbear.(how引導(dǎo)的賓語(yǔ)從句，介詞短語(yǔ))你無(wú)法想象北極熊向我們逼近時(shí)我們多么的恐懼。句式4：非?！?/p>

Iammorethan+情感類(lèi)形容詞to…

I’mmorethanhappytolearnthatyouareadmittedtoPekingUniversity.得知你被北京大學(xué)錄取，我非常高興。句式5：讓我非常…的是…

Muchtomy+情感類(lèi)名詞,…

Muchtomydisappointment,noonecameuptogivemeahelpinghand.令我非常失望的是，沒(méi)有人站過(guò)來(lái)幫助我。句子演練Ⅰ.按要求補(bǔ)全下面動(dòng)作、情感和心理細(xì)節(jié)的句子1．簡(jiǎn)又害怕又無(wú)助，靠著一棵樹(shù)坐下，歇歇疼痛的雙腳。,Janesatagainstatree,.(形容詞短語(yǔ)/非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞作狀語(yǔ))2．“如果我沒(méi)有和湯姆吵架，我現(xiàn)在就不會(huì)被困在這里了，”她想，悔恨的淚水模糊了她的眼睛。“，”shethoughttoherself.(虛擬語(yǔ)氣的倒裝句，with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu))3．她掙扎著站起來(lái)尋找那個(gè)湖。4．她精疲力竭，她爬上一塊大石頭，躺了下來(lái)，很快睡著了。(so...that狀語(yǔ)從句，一連串的動(dòng)作)5．簡(jiǎn)醒來(lái)時(shí)天已經(jīng)亮了。6．盡管很沮喪，她還是決定繼續(xù)前進(jìn)。,shedecidedtocontinueforcingherwayahead.(讓步狀語(yǔ)從句),shedecidedtocontinueforcingherwayahead.(狀語(yǔ)從句的省略句)7．隨著小溪的聲音，她向水邊走去。,shewalkedtowardthewater.(非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞作狀語(yǔ))8．突然，她注意到遠(yuǎn)處有一個(gè)熟悉的身影向她走來(lái)。(非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞作賓補(bǔ))Ⅱ.將以上補(bǔ)全后的各句合并為短文，注意恰當(dāng)?shù)你暯舆^(guò)渡【補(bǔ)充語(yǔ)料1】1.憤怒類(lèi)(1)Hewasfumingwithrage.

他氣得大發(fā)雷霆。（fumev.發(fā)怒）(2)Hecouldhardlycontrolhisrage.他幾乎控制不住怒火。(3)Hisfacecloudedwithanger.他氣得臉色陰沉。（臉上一塊烏云）2.悲傷憂愁類(lèi)(1)Hestoodsilently,tearsrollingdownhischeeks.他靜靜站著，眼淚順著面頰流了下來(lái)。(2)IfeellikeIamfloatinginanoceanofsadness.我漂浮在悲傷的海洋里。(3)Herhandswereshaking.Shewasonthevergeoftears.她手在顫抖，她快要哭了。（verge邊緣）(4)Hearingthenews,sodesperatewashethathewasdrownedwithsadness.聽(tīng)到消息，他淹沒(méi)在悲傷中。(5)Theysattherewithglumlooksontheirface.他們坐在那里，帶著一臉憂郁。3.害怕類(lèi)(1)[2018.6浙江卷：農(nóng)場(chǎng)游玩迷路]Tearsoffearandregretrolleddownmycheeks.(2)[2017.6浙江卷：與朋友騎車(chē)遇狼]AfterhearingMac’sexperience,theyfroze,theirmouthshangingopen.(3)Heturnedtome,withhiseyesfullofhorror.他轉(zhuǎn)過(guò)身來(lái)，眼里充滿了恐懼。(4)Fearsslowlycreptuponher.恐懼慢慢蔓延到她身上。(5)Herfaceturnedpaleandstoodtheretongue-tied.她臉色蒼白站在那里，舌頭打結(jié)，說(shuō)不出話。【補(bǔ)充語(yǔ)料2】關(guān)于情感句子的積累：(表達(dá)情感的形容詞+動(dòng)作具體描寫(xiě)），用so..that...興奮：Iwassoexcited/thrilledthatIgaveajumpintheair.我激動(dòng)得跳了起來(lái)開(kāi)心：Iwassohappy/cheerfulthatIjumpedupanddown.我高興得上躥下跳。感動(dòng)：IwassomovedthatIfailedtosayaword.我感動(dòng)得一句話也說(shuō)不出來(lái)。悲傷：IwassosadthatIhidmyfaceinmyhands.我難過(guò)得用手捂住了臉。生氣：IwassoangrythatIfailedtosayaword.我氣得一句話也說(shuō)不出來(lái)。害怕：Iwassoscared/frightenedthatmypalmssweatedandmyheartpounded.我害怕得手心冒汗，心怦怦直跳。羞愧：IwassoashamedthatIcouldfeelmyfaceburning.我羞愧得感覺(jué)自己的臉在燃燒。模擬練習(xí)01讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)

閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫(xiě)，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。MissusSommers

onedayfoundherselftheunexpectedowneroffifteendollars.Itseemedtoheraverylargeamountof

money.

Foradayortwoshewalkedaroundinadreamystateasshethoughtaboutherchoices.HerdaughterJaniewaswearingwornshoesandneedednewones.Shewouldbuyclothfornewshirtsfortheboys.HerdaughterMagshouldhaveanother

dress.Andstilltherewouldbeenoughleftfornewstockingsforherchildren.Theideaabouthowtospendthedollarsmadeherrestlesswithexcitement.Onthedaysheplannedtogoshoppingwiththemoney,sheatealightmeal-no!Betweengettingthechildrenfedandthehousecleaned,andpreparingherselftogoshopping,she

forgot

toeatatall!Whenshearrivedatthelarge

department

store,shespottedapileofsilkstockingsattheentrance.Asignnearbyannouncedthattheyhadbeenreducedinpriceayounggirlbehindthecounteraskedherifshewishedtoexaminethesilkylegcoverings.Shesmiledasifshehadbeenaskedtoinspectdiamondjewelry,andstartedtofeelthesoft,expensiveitems.MissusSommerspickedupablackpairandlookedatthemclosely.Tworedmarkssuddenlyshowedonherpaleface.Shelookedupattheshopgirlandsaidproudly,“Well,Iwill

buy

thispair.”MissusSommerschangedhercottonstockingsforthenewsilkonesintheladies’restarea.Shehadletherselfbecontrolledbysomemachine-likeforcethatdirectedheractionsandfreedherof

responsibility.Howgoodwasthetouchofthesilkonherskin!Thensheputhershoesbackonandputheroldstockingsintoherbag.Next,shewenttotheshoedepartment,whereshetriedonapairofnewboots.Herfootandanklelooked

lovely.Shecouldnotbelievethattheywereapartofherself.注意：1.所續(xù)寫(xiě)短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.至少使用5個(gè)短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)；3.續(xù)寫(xiě)部分分為兩段，每段的開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)已為你寫(xiě)好；4.續(xù)寫(xiě)完成后，請(qǐng)用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)。Paragraph1：Afterbuyingapairofnewboots,shewalkedintotheclothingdepartment.______________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2：Shewasabouttoleavethestorewhenakidrunningaroundremindedherofsomething.______________________________________________________________________________________翻譯小練習(xí)：1.來(lái)到化妝鏡前，上下打量著鏡子里的自己，眼睛盯著鞋子，“如果我的鞋子和我身上完美的衣服搭配，我看起來(lái)會(huì)更漂亮嗎？薩默斯太太心想，向部門(mén)的女售貨員招手。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2.薩默斯太太問(wèn)她今年的時(shí)裝款式是什么，是否可以試穿一下。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3.她的要求得到了批準(zhǔn)，薩默斯太太繼續(xù)嘗試她認(rèn)為在她身上最好的東西。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________4.身上穿著不同的衣服，她在鏡子前轉(zhuǎn)來(lái)轉(zhuǎn)去，像時(shí)裝秀上的超級(jí)模特一樣欣賞自己。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________5.她一件接一件地試穿，深情地把它們放進(jìn)購(gòu)物車(chē)?yán)铩_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________