高考英語讀后續(xù)寫語篇練習4歲女孩與老人的溫暖邂逅1題目分析讀后續(xù)寫題目再現(xiàn)范文呈現(xiàn)努力方向2Part1題目呈現(xiàn)3續(xù)寫原文“Mommy,canwegetsomecupcakesformybirthday?Please!”4-year-oldNorahsaid.IhesitatedaboutgoingtothegrocerystoreonaTuesday,SeniorCitizenDiscountDay.WehadalreadycelebratedNorah’sbigday.HertwoeldersisterswerealsoborninSeptember,sowehadonebigcelebrationforallofthem.ButtodaywasNorah’sactualbirthday.HowcouldIsayno?”O(jiān)kay,“Isaid，thinkingoftheseniorswhowouldcrowdtheaisles(過道)inthestore.“Butwehavetobequick.AtthestoreIputNorahinoneofthecartsshapedlikeacaranddidmybesttomoveittothebakeryquickly.Ipickedupapackageofcupcakes,swungtotheotherpartofthestoreforbirthdayballoonsandthengotdistractedbysaladdressings.4續(xù)寫原文Fromthecornerofmyeye,IsawNorahstandingupinthecartwavingexcitedly.“Hi,oldperson!It’smybirthdaytoday,”shesaidcheerfully.Anelderlymaninhis80sstaredatusstone-faced.BeforeIcouldexplainthat“oldperson”isn’texactlythebestwaytoaddresssomeone,themanhadalreadyopenedhismouthtoreplytoher.“Well,hello,littlelady,”hesaid.“Howoldareyoutoday?”“I’mfour,”Norahsaid,holdingupherfingers.Thenwechattedbriefly,longenoughforhimtotellmethathewasDanandthatheusuallytriedtoavoidthegrocerystoreonSeniorCitizenDiscountDayaswell.5續(xù)寫原文Wewentourseparateways.Severalminuteslater,Norahasked,“CanItakeaphotowiththeoldmanformybirthday?”Ifeltkindofstrangeaboutaskingacompletestrangertotakeaphotowiththiskidwhohadjustcalledhim“oldperson”.“Let’sseeifwecan,”Isaid.WewentbackandspottedMr.Danbythedairysection.“Thereheis!”Norahpointed.Hishairwasuncombed(亂的),andhewasdressedinaplaidshirt,jeansandsneakers.“Askhim,Mommy!”Norahsaid.“Okay,okay,I’llask,honey,”ItoldNorah,andthenapproachedtheoldman.6段首句Paragraph1：“Excuseme,Mr.Dan,”Isaid.Paragraph2：“Mywifepassedawaymonthsago,”Danexplained.7Part2題目分析8續(xù)寫原文分析9文章講述了四歲的諾拉在生日當天請求媽媽去雜貨店買紙杯蛋糕。在店里，諾拉興奮地和一位八十多歲的老人丹打招呼，稱其為“老人”。盡管一開始丹表情嚴肅，但很快就和諾拉愉快聊起來。分開后，諾拉想和丹合影。媽媽雖有些猶豫，還是去找丹詢問。之后，丹向媽媽解釋妻子幾個月前去世，今天對他來說很難熬，而諾拉的問候讓這一天變得特別。諾拉的純真善良不僅為自己生日增添色彩，也給孤獨的丹帶來慰藉。點1：位于續(xù)寫第一段段首，流暢銜接前面的記敘文和第一段段首語；點2：位于續(xù)寫第一段段尾，流暢銜接第二段段首句；點3：位于續(xù)寫第二段段首，續(xù)寫銜接第二段段首語；點4：文章結尾升華，給予讀者正能量，揭示和強調(diào)主題。情節(jié)構建的重點10續(xù)寫思路分析Para1：“Excuseme,Mr.Dan,”Isaid.媽媽懷著忐忑的心情走向丹，禮貌地說道：“打擾一下，丹先生，諾拉特別想和您拍張照片來慶祝她的生日，自從遇見您，她就一直念叨著這事?！钡は仁倾读艘幌?，隨后臉上露出了和藹的笑容，點頭答應了。諾拉開心得蹦蹦跳跳，快速跑到丹身邊，緊緊挨著他站好。媽媽拿出手機，調(diào)整好角度，此時周圍的顧客也被這溫馨的一幕吸引，紛紛投來善意的目光。伴隨著“咔嚓”一聲，照片定格下了諾拉燦爛的笑容和丹慈祥的面容，這一刻，整個雜貨店都仿佛充滿了溫暖。11續(xù)寫思路分析Para2：“Mywifepassedawaymonthsago,”Danexplained.拍完照后，丹的神情突然變得有些落寞，緩緩開口：“我的妻子幾個月前去世了，今天對我來說，本是個充滿悲傷回憶的日子?！眿寢尯椭Z拉聽后，心中滿是同情。諾拉伸出小手輕輕拉著丹的大手。丹看著諾拉，繼續(xù)說道：“但是這個可愛的小姑娘的出現(xiàn)，讓今天變得不一樣了，她的笑容就像一束光，照亮了我心里灰暗的角落?！眿寢尭锌卣f：“諾拉的純真總能給身邊的人帶來驚喜和溫暖?！彪S后，大家又聊了一會兒，分享著生活中的點滴趣事。分別時，諾拉給了丹一個大大的擁抱，丹也緊緊回抱她，眼中滿是不舍。諾拉和媽媽離開后，丹站在原地，望著她們離去的背影，臉上露出了欣慰的笑容。12Part3范文呈現(xiàn)13范文呈現(xiàn)"Excuseme,Mr.Dan,"Isaid,withabitofnervousnessinmyvoice.IexplainedthatNorahwasextremelyeagertotakeaphotowithhimforherbirthday.Sincetheirencounter,Norahhadbeenconstantlytalkingaboutit.Atfirst,Mr.Danseemedabitsurprised,butsoonakindsmilespreadacrosshisfaceandhenoddedinagreement.Norah,filledwithexcitement,skippedhappilytowardsMr.Danandstoodcloselybesidehim.Itookoutmyphone,carefullyadjustingtheangle.Atthatmoment,thesurroundingcustomerswerealsoattractedbythiswarmsceneandcastfriendlyglances.Witha"click",thephotocapturedNorah'sbrightsmileandMr.Dan'skindface.Atthismoment,thewholegrocerystoreseemedtobefilledwithwarmth.14范文呈現(xiàn)Aftertakingthephoto,Mr.Dan'sexpressionsuddenlyturnedabitsad.Heslowlybegantospeak,"Mywifepassedawaymonthsago,andtoday,forme,isadayfullofsadmemories."NorahandIfeltdeepsympathyuponhearingthis.NorahreachedoutherlittlehandandgentlyheldMr.Dan'sbighand.LookingatNorah,Mr.Dancontinued,"Buttheappearanceofthislovelylittlegirlhasmadetodaydifferent.Hersmileislikeabeamoflightthathasilluminatedthedarkcornerofmyheart."Isaidwithemotion,"Norah'sinnocencealwaysbringssurprisesandwarmthtothosearoundher."Then,wechattedforawhilelonger,sharinginterestingbitsandpiecesofourlives.Whenitwastimetopart,NorahgaveMr.Danabighug,andMr.Danhuggedhertightlyinreturn,hiseyesfullofreluctance.AfterNorahandIleft,Mr.Danstoodthere,lookingatourdepartingfigures,witharelievedsmileonhisface.15升級版范文呈現(xiàn)"Excuseme,Mr.Dan,"Isaid,myheartpoundingwithabitofnervousness.IexplainedthatNorah,whowasbrimmingwithexcitementeversincetheirchancemeeting,wasdesperatetotakeaphotowithhimtomarkherspecialday.Instantly,awarm,kindsmile,whichcouldmeltanyone'sheart,spreadacrossMr.Dan'sfaceashereadilyagreed.Withjoyradiatingfromeverypore,Norahskippedmerrilytowardshimandnestledcloselybesidehim.Takingoutmyphone,Icarefullyadjustedtheanglewhilethesurroundingcustomers,drawnbythisheartwarmingscene,castfriendlyglancesourway.Witha

"click",thephotoimmortalizedNorah'sradiantsmileandMr.Dan'sbenevolentvisage.Atthatverymoment,theentiregrocerystoreseemedtobesuffusedwithanirresistiblewarmth.16升級版范文呈現(xiàn)Afterthephoto-taking,Mr.Dan'scountenancesuddenlycloudedoverwithsadness.Hebegantospeakslowly,hisvoicetingedwithsorrow,"Mywifepassedawaymonthsago,andtoday,forme,isadaysteepedinmelancholymemories."NorahandIwerefilledwithprofoundsympathy.Norah,withhercharacteristicinnocence,reachedouthertinyhandandgentlyclaspedMr.Dan'slargeone.LookingtenderlyatNorah,Mr.Dancontinued,"Butthearrivalofthisadorablelittlegirlhastransformedtoday.Hersmile,likeabrilliantrayofsuns