模板19讀后續(xù)寫之開頭模板

侈強(qiáng)蟹篌

年份卷別話題

2024新高考I&II卷誠(chéng)信回報(bào)陌生司機(jī)相助

浙江卷1月卷突破自我腦圖定位找目標(biāo)

2023新高考I&II卷在老師的鼓勵(lì)下參加作文比賽

浙江卷1月卷“我”與蜂鳥的神奇邂逅

2022新高考I&II卷鼓勵(lì)身殘志堅(jiān)男孩繼續(xù)參加越野賽

浙江卷6月卷為無(wú)家可歸的人們發(fā)放食物

浙江卷1月卷與“最不合拍”搭檔成為好友

題型真題示例

【新高考I&II卷】Paragraph1：

IranbacktoGunterandtoldhimthebad

讀后續(xù)寫news.__________________________________________

Paragraph2：

Fourdayslater,whenIwasbackinVienna,IcalledGunteraspromised.______

讀后續(xù)寫的語(yǔ)篇類型一般是記敘文，或敘議結(jié)合。故事通過(guò)設(shè)置較為真實(shí)的問(wèn)題情境，考查考生

考點(diǎn)揭秘能否運(yùn)用英語(yǔ)基礎(chǔ)知識(shí)準(zhǔn)確理解文章故事情節(jié)，并結(jié)合所給文本材料及兩個(gè)段落首句，分析篇

章結(jié)構(gòu)、情節(jié)脈絡(luò)，發(fā)揮其獨(dú)立思考能力，展開合理想象。運(yùn)用英語(yǔ)詞匯、語(yǔ)法等基礎(chǔ)寫作知

識(shí)技能，完成一篇與給定材料有邏輯銜接、情節(jié)和結(jié)構(gòu)完整的短文。讀后續(xù)寫題型創(chuàng)造性地將

“閱讀，，與“寫作，，深度結(jié)合，能夠更加有效地考查考生的綜合語(yǔ)言運(yùn)用能力、思維能力、學(xué)習(xí)能

力和書面表達(dá)能力。反映考生在面對(duì)生活實(shí)踐或?qū)W習(xí)探索問(wèn)題情境時(shí)，能否在正確的思想價(jià)值

觀念指導(dǎo)下合理運(yùn)用思維方法，有效整合英語(yǔ)語(yǔ)言學(xué)科知識(shí)，具備高質(zhì)量地認(rèn)識(shí)問(wèn)題、分析問(wèn)

題和解決間題的綜合素質(zhì)。這個(gè)新題型能較全面容觀地反映高考評(píng)價(jià)體系中“四層”的考查內(nèi)容

和，，四翼，，的考查要求。

從選材上來(lái)看，語(yǔ)篇選材情節(jié)曲折，邏輯性強(qiáng)。讀后續(xù)寫所提供的語(yǔ)篇材料一般是具有正能量

而且故事性比較強(qiáng)的文章。一般來(lái)說(shuō)，文章內(nèi)容通俗易懂，故事線素的邏輯性較強(qiáng)，寫作要求

續(xù)寫的部分多是故事的高潮或結(jié)局。例如2022年全國(guó)新高考I卷的讀后續(xù)寫，所給文章講述

了作者在一次越野賽跑前發(fā)現(xiàn)學(xué)生David打算放棄比賽。續(xù)寫部分內(nèi)容大致為了解清楚原因之

后，在作者的鼓動(dòng)下，David勇敢地參加了比賽。

從語(yǔ)言特點(diǎn)上來(lái)看，讀后續(xù)寫原材料一般是記敘文，或夾敘夾議類體裁，敘述性語(yǔ)言和描寫性

語(yǔ)言相結(jié)合。語(yǔ)言生動(dòng)、細(xì)膩、富有感情，簡(jiǎn)潔樸素，畫面感強(qiáng)。因此，考生在續(xù)寫過(guò)程中，

應(yīng)該體會(huì)原材料故事中的語(yǔ)言特點(diǎn)，繼而完成語(yǔ)言風(fēng)格契合度高的短文。

（一）把握故事主題

續(xù)寫故事應(yīng)符合積極的世界觀和價(jià)值觀取向，邏輯合理，情節(jié)連費(fèi)。要閱讀語(yǔ)篇，從人與自我、

人與社會(huì)、人與自然三個(gè)主題語(yǔ)境進(jìn)行分析，把握故事主題，防止主題跑偏和故事情節(jié)離奇荒

誕。

（二）學(xué)會(huì)分析情節(jié)

分析故事情節(jié)一般從故事六要素著手，即who,when,where,what,why,howo然后理順故事情

節(jié)發(fā)展線和主人公的情感變化線。這樣，故事的人物、事件和主要人物的心理變化就會(huì)一目了

然，為接下來(lái)的續(xù)寫做好準(zhǔn)備。

技巧解讀（三）構(gòu)思續(xù)寫情節(jié)

1.分析段首句，根據(jù)段首句的關(guān)鍵信息，提出問(wèn)題，預(yù)設(shè)故事情節(jié)發(fā)展走向。

2.關(guān)注段首句和續(xù)寫部分的銜接，思考續(xù)寫第一段和第二段的銜接，思考故事如何結(jié)尾，如何

與前文做好首尾呼應(yīng)，邏輯性應(yīng)強(qiáng)，體現(xiàn)故事主題。

（四）優(yōu)化語(yǔ)言表達(dá)

1.教學(xué)過(guò)程中，教師應(yīng)該重視故事閱讀，重視優(yōu)質(zhì)文本材料的開發(fā)和解讀，引導(dǎo)學(xué)生積累有效

的語(yǔ)言素材。

2.語(yǔ)言提升可以從場(chǎng)景描寫、人物動(dòng)作描寫、情感情緒描寫、人物心理活動(dòng)描寫、神態(tài)肖像刻

畫等方面分類整理，進(jìn)行微情境訓(xùn)練，提升語(yǔ)言表達(dá)的質(zhì)量。

◎根磔）建

【六招高分開頭技巧】

第一招：非謂語(yǔ)開頭

Lookingaroundhimcautiously,heslippedintotheroomandsoftlyclosedthedoor.他小心翼翼地環(huán)顧四周，溜進(jìn)

了房間，輕輕地關(guān)上門。

Feelingdisappointed,Janehadtostayaloneforanothernight.簡(jiǎn)感至U失望，不得不再呆一夜。

Feelingrefreshed,shecontinuedtowalkalongthestreamtofindthewayout.她感到神清氣爽，繼續(xù)沿著小溪散

步，尋找出去的路。

第二招：形容詞短語(yǔ)開頭

Curioustoknowwhatwasinside,hetiptoedintothedarkcave.他好奇地想知道里面是什么,踮著腳尖走進(jìn)了黑

暗的洞穴。

Unabletosayaword,hewasrootedtothespot.一句話也說(shuō)不出來(lái)，他就楞在了原地。

Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.突然，一只小兔子跳到了我的馬前。

AfraidthatImighthurtthelovelysmallcreature,Iautomaticallyletoutacrytostopmyhorse.我害怕我會(huì)傷害

這個(gè)可愛的小生物，我自動(dòng)發(fā)出一聲喊叫來(lái)阻止我的馬。

文章給的提示句是：Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark.我們不知道自己在哪里，天變黑了。

Exhaustedandhungry,Iwonderedifwecouldfindourwayback.我又累又餓,想矢口道我們能不能找至回去的路。

第三招：副詞開頭

Carefully,hesteppedoverallthebrokenglass.他小心翼翼地踩過(guò)了所有的碎玻璃。

Joyfully,heskippedupthestreet.他很高興地跳過(guò)了街道。

Immediately,anabsolutedarknessruledtheforest.立亥!],一片黑暗籠罩著森林。

第四招：對(duì)話或獨(dú)白開頭

：“Let'sseewhogetstherefirst!9,Rachelshouted,asshepedaledfastandzoomedpastJenny."讓我們看看誰(shuí)先到

那里去！”瑞秋一邊叫著，一邊飛快地蹬著車從珍妮身邊沖過(guò)去。

nGetintothecar.nPaulshoutedatMac.“上車！”保羅對(duì)麥克喊道。

第五招：背景描寫

Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway（我們開車穿過(guò)了幾個(gè)州，沿途看到了

很多好風(fēng)景。）

Ilookedoutofthecarwindow,windingrivers,loftymountains,sunnybeachesanddeepvalleys,holdingme

entirelyintheirfascination.

我望著車窗外，蜿蜒的河流，高聳的山脈，陽(yáng)光明媚的海灘和深邃的山谷，完全吸引了我的注意力。

第六招：行為描寫

Furrystartedwagginghistailandrunningaroundincircleswhenhesawhismastertakingaleashoutfromthe

drawer.Furrywasallreadyforhiseveningwalk.

當(dāng)他看到他的主人從抽屜里拿出一條皮帶時(shí)，F(xiàn)urry開始搖，繞著圈跑。Furry準(zhǔn)備好了晚上的散步。

Dadexchangedaglancewithme.WhynotcamptosatisfyMom?爸爸和我相互看了一眼。為什么不露營(yíng)來(lái)滿

足媽媽？

【開頭萬(wàn)能10句基礎(chǔ)版】

第一段：萬(wàn)能10句

1.Fixingmyeyesonit,Iwasoverwhelmedbymixedfeelings.

緊盯著它，我被復(fù)雜的感覺(jué)淹沒(méi)。

2.Hearingthat,sbfailedtoutterasingleword,totallyamazed.

聽到這，某人說(shuō)不出話，全是驚訝

3.Thinkingaboutthesituation,Iwasfullyawarethatimmediateactionshouldbetaken.

考慮到當(dāng)時(shí)的情況，我完全意識(shí)到應(yīng)該立即采取行動(dòng)，

4.Reflectingonwhathadhappened,Ihadamomentofenlightenment.回想發(fā)生的一切，我頓時(shí)恍然大悟

5.Thinkingforawhile,shecametorealizewhathappenedandwhattodo.思考了一會(huì)兒，她意識(shí)到發(fā)生了什么以

及該怎么做。

6.Inspired,hecollectedhimselfandmadeaquickdecision.

到鼓舞，他振作起來(lái)，迅速做出了決定。

7.Pluckingupcourage,hemadeuphismindtoaddressthechallenge.

鼓起勇氣，他下定決心迎接挑戰(zhàn)。

8.Withoutdelay,shebegantotakeaction.毫不拖延，她開始采取行動(dòng)。

9.Raisingherhead,sherosetoherfeet.抬起頭，她站了起來(lái)。（積極）

10.Droppingherhead,shebitherlipshard.低下頭，她狠狠地咬了咬嘴唇。（消極）

【開頭萬(wàn)能10句升級(jí)版】

1,Hearingwhatshesaid,Iwasshockedbutalsogreatlyencouraged,mypreviousnervousnessanduncertainty

givingwaytoincreasingconfidenceanddetermination（句式:三￡謂語(yǔ)，主句，獨(dú)立主格.）

聽到她的話，我震驚但也受到極大鼓舞之前的緊張和不確定讓路于越來(lái)越多的信心和決心。

2.Catchingsightofthescene,Ifeltawaveofwarmthmeltingthesoftestplaceinmyheart.

（句式:非謂語(yǔ)，主句+非謂語(yǔ)）看到這幕，我感到一股暖流融化了心中最柔軟之處。

3、Fixingmyeyesonsth,IrealizedwhatIshoulddo,myheartbeatingwithdeterminatio1.

（句式:非謂語(yǔ)，主句，獨(dú)立主格）緊盯某物，我意識(shí)到該做什么，心堅(jiān)定地跳動(dòng)。

4、Thinkingaboutthesituation,Iwasfullyawarethatimmediateactionshouldbetaken.

考慮到當(dāng)時(shí)的情況，我完全意識(shí)到應(yīng)該立即采取行動(dòng)。

5、Reflectingonwhathadhappened,Ihadamomentofenlightenment/epiphany.

回想發(fā)生的一切，我頓時(shí)恍然大悟。

6、Consideringwhathadhappened,heclearedhismindandinstantlyfiguredoutwhatshouldbedonenext.

考慮到發(fā)生了什么，他理清了思路，立即想出了下一步該怎么做。

【開頭萬(wàn)能10句升級(jí)版】

1、Uncontrollably,hefeltawaveofdelightracinginhisheart.

（非謂語(yǔ)/取代“他開心”）不可控地，他感到一股開心在他內(nèi)心奔騰。

2.Instantly,anintensewaveofreliefandgratitudesurroundedhimlikeabeamofsunlight,throwinghimintoasea

ofkindnessandwarmth.

（無(wú)靈主語(yǔ)+非謂語(yǔ)）瞬間，強(qiáng)烈的釋然和感激像一束陽(yáng)光包圍著他把他扔進(jìn)了善良和溫暖的海洋，

3、Guiltyandashamed,shemadeheartyapologiesandconveyeddeepregrets,withbittertearsstreamingdownher

cheeks.

（句首形容詞做狀語(yǔ)+獨(dú)立主格）愧疚和羞愧，她衷心道歉表達(dá)深深的遺憾，苦澀的淚水順著臉頰流下。

4、Inspiredandhighlymotivated,shecollectedherselfandstruggledtoaddressthechallenge,hereyesshining

withmountingdeterminationandconfidence.

（形容詞做狀語(yǔ)+獨(dú)立主格）受到鼓舞和推動(dòng)，她振作起來(lái)，努力應(yīng)對(duì)挑戰(zhàn)，眼里閃著遞增的決心和信心。

5、Movedtotears,Daviddashedtothemandthrewhimselfintotheirarms,withgoldensunlightfallingonthem

warmlyandcelebratinghisaccomplishment.

（非謂語(yǔ)+獨(dú)立主格/寫景）大衛(wèi)感動(dòng)得熱淚盈眶，沖到他們身邊，撲進(jìn)他們的懷里，全色的陽(yáng)光溫暖地落在他

們身上，慶視他的成就。

6、Whatmadehimpridewasthathestruggledandendeavored,insteadofgivingwaytoobstacles.

（非謂語(yǔ)+獨(dú)立主格）讓他感到自豪的是，他奮斗和努力，而不是向困難障礙讓步。

d思型?折

◎/我,示例

【新高考I&II卷】閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

ImetGunteronacold,wetandunforgettableeveninginSeptember.IhadplannedtoflytoViennaandtakeabus

toPragueforaconference.Duetoabigstorm,myflighthadbeendelayedbyanhourandahalf.Itoucheddownin

Viennajust30minutesbeforethedepartureofthelastbustoPrague.ThemomentIgotofftheplane,Iranlike

crazythroughtheairportbuildingandjumpedintothefirsttaxiontherankwithoutasecondthought.Thatwas

whenImetGunter.ItoldhimwhereIwasgoing,buthesaidhehadn'theardofthebusstation.Ithoughtmy

pronunciationwastheproblem,soIexplainedagainmoreslowly,buthestilllookedconfused.WhenIwasaboutto

giveup,Gunterfishedouthislittlephoneandrangupafriend.Afteraheateddiscussionthatlastedforwhat

seemedlikeacentury,Gunterputhisphonedownandstartedthecar.Finally,withjusttwominutestosparewe

rolledintothebusstation.Thankfully,therewasalongqueuestillwaitingtoboardthebus.Gunterparkedthetaxi

behindthebus,turnedaround,andlookedatmewithabigsmileonhisface."Wemadeit,"hesaid.JustthenI

realisedthatIhadinmywallet.IflashedhimanapologeticsmileasIpulledoutmyPortuguesebankcard.Hetried

itseveraltimes,butthecardmachinejustdidnotplayalong.AfeelingofhelplessnesswashedovermeasIsawthe

busqueuethinningout.Atthismoment,Gunterpointedtowardsthewaitinghallofthebusstation.Thereatthe

entrance,wasacashmachine.Ijumpedoutofthecar,madeamadrunforthemachine,andpoppedmycardin,

onlytoreadthemessage:"Outoforder.Sorry."

1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Paragraph1：

IranbacktoGunterandtoldhimthebadnews.__________________________________________

Paragraph2：

Fourdayslater,whenIwasbackinVienna,IcalledGunteraspromised.

【答題思路】

故事講述在一個(gè)寒冷多雨的九月夜晚，“我”因航班延誤，在維也納落地后僅有30分鐘趕去布拉格的末

班車。匆忙中搭乘出租車，司機(jī)Gunter不熟悉車站位置，經(jīng)打電話詢問(wèn)朋友后成功送達(dá)。然而，“我”錢

包無(wú)現(xiàn)金，銀行卡刷不了，車站取款機(jī)也故障，陷入無(wú)法支付車費(fèi)的困境。

情緒渲染思路：著重描繪“我”此刻焦急、尷尬又愧疚的情緒。強(qiáng)調(diào)內(nèi)心的煎熬，比如“我”

一方面擔(dān)心錯(cuò)過(guò)巴士，另一方面又為無(wú)法支付車費(fèi)而感到難堪，通過(guò)細(xì)膩的情緒描寫，讓讀者迅速代入情

境，也為后續(xù)情節(jié)中“我”與Gunter的互動(dòng)奠定情感基礎(chǔ)。

對(duì)話引出思路：以“我”和Gunter之間簡(jiǎn)短而關(guān)鍵的對(duì)話作為開頭?？梢允恰拔摇睅е敢夂徒辜毕騁unter

再次說(shuō)明情況，而Gunter

則給出簡(jiǎn)短回應(yīng)，這樣能直接推動(dòng)情節(jié)發(fā)展，快速進(jìn)入故事核心，即如何解決車費(fèi)和趕車的雙重問(wèn)題。

細(xì)節(jié)描述思路：

聚焦周圍環(huán)境的細(xì)節(jié)，如巴士站閃爍的燈光、即將發(fā)動(dòng)的巴士、周圍乘客匆匆的腳步等，以及Gunter

出租車內(nèi)的氛圍，如儀表盤上的時(shí)間跳動(dòng)、車內(nèi)安靜到能聽見呼吸聲等。這些細(xì)節(jié)能營(yíng)造緊張的氛圍，同

時(shí)也暗示著時(shí)間的緊迫和情況的棘手。

塑方答圈

1.情緒渲染模板：

Withmyheartpoundingwildlyinmychest,IsprintedbacktoGunter'staxi,eachstepheavywithamixofanxiety

andembarrassment.Standingbesidetheopencardoor,Istammeredoutthebadnews,myvoicebetrayingmy

distress.''Gunter,thecashmachineisoutoforder.I...Ireallydon'tknowwhattodo,"Isaid,myeyespleadingwith

himforunderstanding.Thethoughtofmissingthebusandleavinghimunpaidwaslikeaheavystoneweighingon

myconscience,andIcouldfeeltheheatofshamerisingtomycheeks.

（我的心在胸腔里瘋狂跳動(dòng)，我沖回Gunter的出租車，每一步都因焦慮和尷尬而沉重。站在敞開的車門前，

我結(jié)結(jié)巴巴地說(shuō)出了這個(gè)壞消息，聲音中透露出我的痛苦。"Gunter,取款機(jī)壞了。我……我真的不知道該

怎么辦了，"我說(shuō)，眼神中懇求他的理解。想到錯(cuò)過(guò)巴士還無(wú)法付他車費(fèi)，就像一塊大石頭壓在我的良心

上，我能感覺(jué)到羞愧的熱潮涌上臉頰。）

2.對(duì)話引出模板：

"Gunter,there'sahugeproblem/IexclaimedbreathlesslyasIjumpedbackintothetaxi.nThecashmachineisn't

working,andIstillcan'tpayyou.'*Gunterturnedaroundinhisseat,lookingatmecalmly.nDon*tworrytoomuch,"

herepliedinasoothingtone.nWe'llfiguresomethingout.Thebusisstillthere,andwehavealittletimeleft.*'His

words,thoughsimple,somehowmanagedtoeasemypanicabit,andIbegantothinkaboutpossiblesolutionswith

him.

（"Gunter,出大問(wèn)題了，"我跳回出租車，氣喘吁吁地喊道?！叭】顧C(jī)壞了，我還是沒(méi)辦法付你錢。"Gunter

在座位上轉(zhuǎn)過(guò)身，平靜地看著我?！皠e太擔(dān)心，”他用安撫的語(yǔ)氣回答道?！拔覀儠?huì)想出辦法的。巴士還在那

兒，我們還有點(diǎn)時(shí)間。”他的話雖然簡(jiǎn)單，卻不知為何讓我的恐慌稍微緩解了一些，我開始和他一起思考

可能的解決辦法。）

3.細(xì)節(jié)描述模板：

Thedimlightsofthebusstationflickereduneasily,castinganeerieglowoverthescene.Thebus,withitsengine

rumblingimpatiently,seemedtobeonthevergeofleavingatanymoment.InsideGunter'staxi,thesilencewas

deafening,brokenonlybythetickingoftheclockonthedashboard.Iranbacktothecar,myeyesfixedonthebus

queuethatwasgettingshorterbythesecond.HGunter,thecashmachineisoutoforder,"Isaid,myvoicealmost

drownedoutbythenoiseofthestation.Thesituationwasgrowingmoredesperatebythesecond,andIwondered

howwecouldpossiblyresolvethismess.

（巴士站昏暗的燈光不安地閃爍著，給這一幕投下了詭異的光。巴士的發(fā)動(dòng)機(jī)不耐煩地轟鳴著，似乎隨時(shí)

都可能出發(fā)。在Gunter的出租車?yán)铮澎o得令人窒息，只有儀表盤上時(shí)鐘的滴答聲打破了沉默。我跑回車

里，眼睛盯著那一秒比一秒更短的巴士隊(duì)列。“Gunter,取款機(jī)壞了，“我說(shuō)，我的聲音幾乎被車站的嘈雜

聲淹沒(méi)。情況每一秒都變得更加危急，我想知道我們究竟如何才能解決這個(gè)麻煩。）

◎真墓示例

[2023年新高考全國(guó)I&II卷】WhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoentera

writingcontest.Isaidnowithoutthinking.Ididnotlovewriting.MyfamilycamefromBrazil,soEnglishwasonly

mysecondlanguage.Writingwassodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaper

onthesinkingoftheTitanicbyactingoutaplay,whereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.

So,whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofail?Hisreply:"BecauseIloveyour

stories.Ifyou'rewillingtoapplyyourself,Ithinkyouhaveagoodshotatthis."Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedto

giveitatry.

IchosePaulReveredhorseasmysubject.PaulReverewasasilversmith（電艮匠）inBostonwhorodeahorseat

nightonApril18,1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethatBritishsoldierswerecoming.Mystorywouldcomestraight

fromthehorse9smouth.Notabrilliantidea,butfunny;andunlikelytobeanyoneelse'schoice.

Whatdidthehorsethink,ashespedthroughthenight?Didhegettired?Havedoubts?Didhewanttoquit?I

sympathizedimmediately.Igottired.Ihaddoubts.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeReveredhorse,Ikeptgoing.Iworked

hard.Icheckedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.IcheckedoutahalfdozenbooksonPaul

Reverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.

WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloud,andsaid,"Great.Now,writeitagain.^^I

wroteitagain,andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoyment

ofwriting.IfIdidn'twin,Iwouldn'tcare.

注意：

1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個(gè)左右；

2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.

Iwenttomyteacher9sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.

【答題思路】

1.深入理解原文情節(jié)與主題：

情節(jié)梳理：作者原本不愛寫作，因英語(yǔ)是第二語(yǔ)言寫作困難，老師卻鼓勵(lì)其參加寫作比賽。作者以保羅口

里維爾的馬為獨(dú)特視角創(chuàng)作，寫作過(guò)程中克服諸多困難，反復(fù)修改，最后享受寫作本身，不在意比賽結(jié)果

主題把握：文章圍繞老師的鼓勵(lì)對(duì)學(xué)生的影響展開，體現(xiàn)了老師的引導(dǎo)以及學(xué)生在挑戰(zhàn)中的成長(zhǎng)與心態(tài)轉(zhuǎn)

變。

2.明確續(xù)寫段落的方向與重點(diǎn)：

第一段"Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.”：

結(jié)果揭曉：重點(diǎn)描寫得知比賽結(jié)果時(shí)的場(chǎng)景和自身反應(yīng)。若獲獎(jiǎng)，可描述驚喜、激動(dòng)、難以置信等情緒，

從動(dòng)作（如跳起來(lái)、捂住嘴）、神態(tài)（瞪大雙眼、滿臉通紅）、心理（如

“我怎么也沒(méi)想到……”）等方面刻畫；若未獲獎(jiǎng)，可寫雖有一絲失落但因享受過(guò)程而坦然接受，強(qiáng)調(diào)心態(tài)

的成熟。

關(guān)聯(lián)前文：回憶寫作過(guò)程的艱辛，與此刻的結(jié)果形成呼應(yīng)，突出努力的意義。

第二段"Iwenttomyteacher'sofficeaftertheawardpresentation."：

感恩互動(dòng)：主要寫與老師的交流。向老師表達(dá)誠(chéng)摯的感謝，描述老師的回應(yīng)，如肯定、鼓勵(lì)的話語(yǔ)和欣慰

的神情，體現(xiàn)老師對(duì)自己的關(guān)心與期望。

展望未來(lái)：可以提及自己在寫作方面的新想法或計(jì)劃，如想繼續(xù)參加比賽、寫更多有趣的故事等，展示在

老師影響下對(duì)寫作態(tài)度的積極轉(zhuǎn)變和對(duì)未來(lái)的期待，進(jìn)一步深化老師鼓勵(lì)的積極作用這一主題。

您垣答翹

1.情緒渲染模板

Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.MyheartwaspoundingwildlyasIheard

mynamebeingannouncedasoneofthewinners.Arushofdisbeliefandjoysurgedthroughme,makingmyhands

trembleinvoluntarily.Icouldn*tquitebelievethatmyhardworkhadpaidoff.Thememoryofthoselonghours

spentwritingandrewritingtheessayflashedbeforemyeyes.Ihadbeensofilledwithself-doubtduringthe

process,constantlyquestioningwhethermyeffortswereinvain.Now,allthatanxietyandworrywerereplacedby

asenseofprideandaccomplishment.

Iwenttomyteacherofficeaftertheawardpresentation.Myheartwasstillracingwithexcitement,andmysteps

werelightasIwalkeddownthehallway.Standinginfrontofhisdesk,Ifeltalumpinmythroat,overwhelmed

withgratitude."Thankyousomuch,"Imanagedtosay,myvoiceshakingslightly."Ifitweren*tforyou,Iwould

neverhaveeventried.'11lookedathim,myeyesshiningwithemotion,andsawaproudsmileonhisface.

2.對(duì)話引出模板

Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews."Hey,youwonthewritingcontest!nmy

classmateshoutedatmeacrosstheclassroom.Ifrozeinmytracks,myeyeswidewithshock."What?Youmustbe

kiddingme,"Ireplied,myvoicefilledwithdisbelief."No,I'mserious.Theyjustannouncedit,"myclassmate

insisted.Icouldn'thelpbutletoutascreamofexcitement.ThiswasthelastthingIhadexpected.

Iwenttomyteacher\officeaftertheawardpresentation."Sir,Iwon!"IexclaimedassoonasIwalkedin.He

lookedupfromhisdeskandsmiled,"Iknewyoucoulddoit,"hesaid."Yourhardworkpaidoff."Inodded,still

grinningfromeartoear.''Thankyouforpushingme,"Isaidsincerely.nIowethistoyou."

3.細(xì)節(jié)描述模板

Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.Themorningsunfilteredthroughthe

classroomwindows,castingawarmglowonthedesks.Suddenly,theschoolsecretarywalkedinwithastackof

papersinherhand.Sheclearedherthroatandannouncedthewinnersofthewritingcontest.Myearsperkedupat

thesoundofmyname.Istaredather,myeyesfixedonherlips,makingsureIwasn'timaginingthings.The

studentsaroundmestartedtoclap,andIfeltablushcreepingupmycheeks.

Iwenttomyteacher'sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.Theofficewasfilledwiththesmellofoldbooksand

coffee.Iknockedonthedoorgentlyandentered.Myteacherwassittingathisdesk,lookingthroughsomepapers.

HelookedupasIcameinandsmiled.Inoticedthebookshelvesfilledwithbooksonwritingandhistory,which

hadinspiredmeduringmyresearch.nIwon,sir,*'Isaid,abigsmileonmyface.Hestoodupandpattedmeonthe

back."Welldone,1'hesaid,hiseyestwinklingwithpride.

@奉一攻三

（2024?湖南衡陽(yáng)?模擬預(yù)測(cè)）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的

短文。

Lastsummer,ItraveledtoRockville,Maryland,tovisitmyparents.ThetripwasspecialbecauseIhad

broughtalongmyten-year-olddogDakota,whohadbeenpartofmyfamilysincehewasapuppy.Myparentshad

notseenhimsinceImovedtoCaliforniatwoyearsago,andtheywereexcitedaboutseeinghimagain.

Onthewayback,mybrotherdroppedDakotaandmeattheairport.Aftercheckingin,IstayedwithDakota

untilanairportworkercametogethim.Seeinghimoff,Iheadedtothegateandboardedtheplane.

Abouttwohoursintotheflight,thecaptaincameuptome.Hetoldmethathehadreceivedacallfromthe

airportworkerwhosaidthatDakotahadbeencarelesslyloadedinthewrongcargohold（貨艙）.Hewentonto

explainthattheplanewasdividedintotwocargoholds-forwardandrear.Therearcargoholdwasdesignedas

animalcargo,asitwaslighted,pressurizedandheated,whiletheforwardcargowasnotdesignedorusedfor

animalcargo.HesaidDakotahadbeenmisplacedintheforwardcargohold,andsinceitwasnotproperlyheated,

hecouldnotbesurethatDakotawasokay,especiallyinthefreezingtemperaturesatthirtythousandfeet.

Icouldn'tbelievewhathewastellingme.Iturnedwhiteasaghostasmyeyeswateredwithtears.The

captainthentoldmethathewasgoingtomakeanunscheduledlandinginDenver.Againhesaidthathedidnot

knowifDakotawasstillalive.EventhoughIwasveryupset,Iwasgratefulthatthecaptainwasgoingtostopin

Denver.Hewentontoexplainthatoncewelanded,IcouldgowithhimtocheckifDakotawasalright.

注意：

1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在相應(yīng)位置作答。

UnfortunatelyforDakotaandme,wehadanotherhourtogobeforewecouldlandinDenver.

WhenwelandedinDenver,Icouldhearthegroundcrewopeningthecargoholddoor.

【答題思路】

1.梳理原文情節(jié)：作者帶狗狗Dakota

回父母家，返程時(shí)狗狗被機(jī)場(chǎng)工作人員誤裝進(jìn)沒(méi)有合適保暖設(shè)施的前貨艙，機(jī)長(zhǎng)告知作者后決定在丹佛緊

急降落，以便查看狗狗狀況。

2.確定續(xù)寫方向

第一■段"UnfortunatelyforDakotaandme,wehadanotherhourtogobeforewecouldlandinDenver.^^：

心理描寫：

著重刻畫作者在等待降落的這一小時(shí)內(nèi)極度焦慮、擔(dān)憂的心理狀態(tài)。如不斷想象狗狗在冰冷貨艙里可能遭

遇的危險(xiǎn)，回憶與狗狗相處的溫馨畫面，內(nèi)心充滿自責(zé)與恐懼，通過(guò)細(xì)膩的心理活動(dòng)展現(xiàn)情感張力。

動(dòng)作細(xì)節(jié)：

描述作者在飛機(jī)上的不安舉動(dòng)，如坐立難安、頻繁看表、雙手緊握等，從側(cè)面反映其焦急心情，使讀者更

能感同身受。

第二段“WhenwelandedinDenver,Icouldhearthegroundcrewopeningthecargoholddoor."：

場(chǎng)景與動(dòng)作：

詳細(xì)描繪打開貨艙門時(shí)的緊張場(chǎng)景，作者迫不及待沖過(guò)去的動(dòng)作，以及看到狗狗時(shí)的第一反應(yīng)，是驚喜地

發(fā)現(xiàn)狗狗安然無(wú)恙，還是看到狗狗狀況不佳后的悲痛。

結(jié)局升華：

若狗狗沒(méi)事，可表達(dá)對(duì)機(jī)長(zhǎng)和工作人員的感激，以及對(duì)生命的慶幸；若狗狗情況不好，可寫作者的悲傷和

對(duì)機(jī)場(chǎng)管理失誤的反思，最后以對(duì)狗狗未來(lái)的期待或自己的感悟收尾，深化故事主題。

塑方答翹

1.情緒渲染模板

UnfortunatelyforDakotaandme,wehadanotherhourtogobeforewecouldlandinDenver.Fearandworry

gnawedatmyheartlikeahungrybeast.Everypassingsecondfeltlikeaneternity.Isatthere,rigidinmyseat,my

handsclaspedtightlytogether,knucklesturningwhite.ImagesofDakotashiveringinthefreezingcoldcargohold

flashedthroughmymindcontinuously.Iwasonthevergeofabreakdown,mybreathcominginshort,ragged

gasps.Thenoiseoftheplaneenginesseemedtofadeintothebackground,andallIcouldfocusonwasthe

uncertaintyofDakota'sfate.

WhenwelandedinDenver,Icouldhearthegroundcrewopeningthecargoholddoor.Myheartpoundedso

violentlythatIthoughtitwouldburstoutofmychest.Isprintedtowardsthecargohold,mylegsbarelyableto

keepupwithmyurgency.Tearsstreameddownmyface,blurringmyvision.Iwasbothterrifiedandhopeful,

prayingwithallmymightthatDakotawasstillalive.

2.對(duì)話引出模板

UnfortunatelyforDakotaandme,wehadanotherhourtogobeforewecouldlandinDenver."Ican'tstandthis

waiting,"Imurmuredtothepassengernexttome,myvoicecrackingwithemotion.nrmsoworriedaboutmydog.

Whatifhe*salready...HIcouldn'tevenbringmyselftosaythewords.Thepassengergavemeasympatheticlook

andsaid,"Trytostaypositive.Thecaptainisdoingeverythinghecan."Butherwordsdidlittletosoothemyfrayed

nerves.Ikeptlookingoutofthewindow,willingtheplanetolandfaster.

WhenwelandedinDenver,Icouldhearthegroundcrewopeningthecargoholddoor.nPlease,lethimbeokay,"I

whisperedundermybreath.Justthen,thecaptainappearedbesidemeandsaid,HStaycalm.We'llknowsoon."As

wewalkedtowardsthecargohold,mylegswereshakingsomuchthatIcouldbarelywalk.Iaskedthecaptain,nDo

youthinkhemadeit?”Hereplied,MWe'llfindoutinamoment."

3.細(xì)節(jié)描述模板

UnfortunatelyforDakotaandme,wehadanotherhourtogobeforewecouldlandinDenver.Theplane*sinterior

seemedtocloseinonme,theairthickandsuffocating.Istaredattheclockonthewall,watchingthesecondstick

bywithagonizingslowness.Theseatbeltdugintomywaist,butIhardlynoticed.Aroundme,passengerswere

chattingorreading,completelyunawareoftheturmoilinmyheart.Ibitmyliphard,tastingblood,asItriedtohold

backmysobs.

WhenwelandedinDenver,Icouldhearthegroundcrewopeningthecargoholddoor.Theharshsoundofthe

metaldoorscrapingagainstthefloormademeflinch.Thecold,dampairfromthecargoholdrushedout,hittingme

intheface.Ipushedpastthegroundcrew,myeyesscanningthedimlylitspaceforanysignofDakota.Therewere

boxesandbagsstrewnabout,andinthecorner,IthoughtIsawasmall,furryfigure.MyheartskippedabeatasI

rushedtowardsit.

@t敢型通關(guān)

Passage1

1.（2025,廣東?一模）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

OntheeveofThanksgivingDay,Emily,theproprietressofaninvitingcafe,wasintheprocessofconcluding

herbusinessoperationssubsequenttoaneventfulday.Sincethedemiseofherspouseafewyearsprior,shehad

consistentlyspenteachThanksgivingasasolitaryindividual,herprogenyresidingatadistanceforcollege-level

educationandmerelymakingsporadictelephonecalls.

Assherotatedthesignboardtodisplay“Closed”,preparingtoconfrontyetanotherdesolateholiday

celebration,sheobservedamaleindividualseatedonthefrigidstepsoutside.Heappearedtobeinthelatterpartof

hisfourthdecade,attiredingarmentsthathadseenbetterdays,hiscountenanceetchedwiththemarksofarduous

experiences.Heraisedhisgaze,hiseyesmirroringablendoffatigueandunvoicedadversities."Pardonme,

Madam,9,heutteredinalowvoice,t4Ihavebeendeprivedofaproperandsatisfyingmealforseveraldays.Wouldit

bepossibleforyoutospareasmallportion?^^Emilypausedmomentarilybutpromptlyunlockedthedoor,gesturing

warmlytoinvitehimin."ItisThanksgivingEve,“shedeclaredwithanamiablesmile,“Noindividualoughtto

experiencehungeronthisparticularday.”

Themale,whoidentifiedhimselfasJames,expressedhisgratitudeandtookaseatnearthecomerwindow.

Emilyproceededtoprepareasubstantialandnourishingrepast:steaminghotpumpkinpie,freshly-bakedbread,

andaroastedturkey.AsJamespartookofthemeal,hesharedfragmentsofhislifestory-hehadpreviouslybeen

atruckdriver,buthadunfortunatelylosthisoccupation,whichsubsequentlyledtothelossofhisdwellingplace

andcompelledhimtowanderfromonelocationtoanother.Emilylistenedwithraptattention,experiencingan

unforeseensurgeofempatheticsentimentassheestablishedaconnectionwiththisunfamiliarperson.

Upontheconclusionofthemeal,Jamesdelvedintohisworn-outoutergarmentandproducedadiminutive,

meticulouslyfoldedpapercrane."Icraftedthisanextendedperiodago,"hementionedinagentletone."Itisthe

finaloneinmypossession.Idesireforyoutoacceptit,asasymbolofthebenevolenceyouhavedemonstrated

today.^^Movedbythisgesture,Emilyexpressedherappreciationand,onasuddenimpulse,proposedapart-time

employmentopportunityatthecafetoJames.James9seyesfilledwithtearsofthankfulness.atIwouldbehonoredto

accept,heresponded.

注意：

（1）續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

（2）請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Fromthatdayforward,Jamesworkedatthecafe.

Oneevening,asEmilyandJameswereenjoyingtheirdinner,Emily9ssonunexpectedlycalled.

Passage2

（2025?山東?模擬預(yù)測(cè)）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

OnaparticularlygloomyWednesdayafternoon,Edisonandhismother,Ami,wereseatedintheircozyliving

room,theirattentionfixedonthetelevisionscreen.Thenewsbroadcastwasfilledwithheart-wrenchingimagesof

thewildfiresinMaui.Flamesengulfedhomes,smokebillowedintothesky,andfamilieswereforcedtofleewith

onlytheclothesontheirbacks.Edison,hissmallbrowfurrowedindeepconcern,turnedtohismotherwith

pleadingeyes.Hisvoice,laced