高考英語讀后續(xù)寫微技能---動作鏈描寫

ActionChainsinContinuationWritingPresentor:MandyStart!1.預(yù)測前置Pleasereviewandfamiliarizeyourselveswithactionchaindescriptions!Learntoappreciatethem!Refertoyourlearningmaterial!AnalysisofTestPapar年份試卷版本情節(jié)側(cè)重點(diǎn)2024.06新高考I參加會與路遇暖心出租車司機(jī)側(cè)重心理描寫和動作描寫2023.06新高考I&II在老師鼓勵下參加作文比賽側(cè)重心理描寫和動作描寫2023.01浙江高考我意外救下蜂鳥側(cè)重動作描寫2022.06新高考I&IIDavid克服自身局限參加比賽側(cè)重心理描寫和動作描寫2021.06新高考I&II兄妹倆為媽媽正準(zhǔn)備早飯側(cè)重心理和動作描寫真題再現(xiàn)

（2024高考英語新課標(biāo)I讀續(xù))ImetGunteronacold,wetandunforgettableeveninginSeptember.IhadplannedtoflytoViennaandtakeabustoPragueforaconference.Duetoabigstorm,myflighthadbeendelayedbyanhourandahalf.ItoucheddowninViennajust30minutesbeforethedepartureofthelastbustoPrague.ThemomentIgotofftheplane,Iranlikecrazythroughtheairportbuildingandjumpedintothefirsttaxiontherankwithoutasecondthought.ThatwaswhenImetGunter.ItoldhimwhereIwasgoing,buthesaidhehadn’theardofthebusstation.Ithoughtmypronunciationwastheproblem,soIexplainedagainmoreslowly,buthestilllookedconfused.WhenIwasabouttogiveup,Gunterfishedouthislittlephoneandrangupafriend.Afteraheateddiscussionthatlastedforwhatseemedlikeacentury,Gunterputhisphonedownandstartedthecar.Finally,withjusttwominutestosparewerolledintothebusstation.Thankfully,therewasalongqueue(隊列)stillwaitingtoboardthebus.Gunterparkedthetaxibehindthebus,turnedaround,andlookedatmewithabigsmileonhisface.“Wemadeit,”hesaid.JustthenIrealisedthatIhadzerocashinmywallet.IflashedhimanapologeticsmileasIpulledoutmyPortuguesebankcard.Hetrieditseveraltimes,butthecardmachinejustdidnotplayalong.AfeelingofhelplessnesswashedovermeasIsawthebusqueuethinningout.Atthismoment,Gunterpointedtowardsthewaitinghallofthebusstation.There,attheentrance,wasacashmachine.Ijumpedoutofthecar,madeamadrunforthemachine,andpoppedmycardin,onlytoreadthemessage:“Outoforder.Sorry.”Paragraph1IranbacktoGunterandtoldhimthebadnews.Paragraph2Fourdayslater,whenIwasbackinVienna,IcalledGunteraspromised.actionchain1actionchain2Learningobjectives1.21’-25’:abletocreateavividpicturetovisualizethesituationbyusingactionchainsandactionscenesproperly;第一梯隊：21分-25分：能夠合理運(yùn)用動作鏈和動作面，創(chuàng)造出生動的畫面，將情境形象化；2.16’-20’:abletothoroughlycomprehendSCMprincipleandtrytostructureactionchainscorrectly;第二梯隊：16分-20分：能夠透徹理解SCM原理，并嘗試正確構(gòu)建動作鏈；3.11’-15’:abletorecognizethesignificanceof“Toshow,nottotell”method,andcultivatetheawarenessofusingactionchains.第三梯隊：11分-15分：能夠認(rèn)識到“toshow,nottotell”方法的意義，并培養(yǎng)使用動作鏈的意識。Invite!2.主題興發(fā)PleasewatchtheshortvideoclipanddescirbewhatBearGryllsdidtosavehimself?(Actions)

Oneday,BearGryllswasrunafterbyalion,whatactionsdidhetaketoescapefromthedanger…WhatdidBearGryllsdotosavehimself?貝爺毫不猶豫丟掉背包，爬進(jìn)卡車底部，擠進(jìn)車內(nèi)。已經(jīng)想到一個好點(diǎn)子，他迅速下車，小心翼翼將獅子鎖在后面。門鎖著，獅子也就被困住了。WhatdidBearGryllsdotosavehimself?Bear

Grylls,

without

hesitation,his

backpack,

under

the

truck

himself

into

the

car.

a

good

idea,

he

the

carquickly

and

carefully

the

lion

inthe

back.

,the

lion

threw

away

crawledand

squeezed

Having

come

up

with

got

off

lockedWith

the

door

lockedwas

trapped.Explore!3.獨(dú)研質(zhì)疑Ponder:Withoutshowingthevideo,howcanwecreateavividpicturethatvisualizesthesituationinwords?如何用文字創(chuàng)造生動畫面？讓讀者能夠身臨其境？Howtomakeyourcontinuationwritingvivid?描繪畫面平鋪直述ToShow,NottotellShowthereaderseverything,tellthemnothing.向讀者展示一切，什么都不告訴他們。

--ErnestHemingwayShewasverysad.Hewasveryangry.Iwasverynervous.Herushedoutoftheroom,slamming(狠摔)thedoor.

Shestoodsilently,tearsrollingdownhercheeks.Loweringmyhead,Itookalongdeepbreath.Whichoneismorevivid（生動）?tell=generaldescriptionshow=detaileddescriptionMethod:Usemore

tocreatethepicture.verbsExplore!4.悟道踐行

（1）Ponder:Howdoweeffectivelyuseverbstocreateapicture?Anyvalidprinciplestoreferto?怎樣有效運(yùn)用動詞創(chuàng)造畫面？有什么可以參考的行之有效的原則嗎？（SCMPrinciple）Displayofstudents’works分解動作Tosplit01學(xué)生出教室。拆解站起來抓起書包沖出教室ThatisThebellsignaledthatschoolwasover,andallthestudentsrosetotheirfeet,seizedtheirschoolbagsandrushedoutoftheclassroomlikearrows.eg.1簡易版：eg.2歌手開始演唱拆解：瞥一眼觀眾深吸一口氣開始演唱Thesingerglancedattheaudience,tookadeepbreathandbegantosing.Studentswalkedoutoftheclassroom.splittheaction老師寄語：細(xì)心觀察，捕捉最能體現(xiàn)人物特征的慢鏡頭。My

dad

and

I

headed

towards

the

mountains.MydadandI

ournewcowboyhats,

ourhorses,andslowly

towards

the

mountains.情境1：爸爸和我向群山走去。(浙江卷)Skill1:Followtimeorder關(guān)鍵：根據(jù)情境及中心動作前后有什么動作來拆分動作，

將結(jié)果性的動作，分解成更細(xì)致的連貫性的微動作，使動作結(jié)果過程化~put

ongotonheaded

情境3：男孩們跳入湖中玩耍。Boys

tothelakeexcitedly,

theirclothes

intothewater.rushedtookoffandjumped

實踐運(yùn)用

一解題思路：Beforejumpingintothewater,whatdidboysdo?（跑去湖邊？脫掉衣服？熱身運(yùn)動？......）Shehuggedhim.情境4：她跑去擁抱他。Keypoints：useasmanyconcreteverbsinsteadofgeneralverbs.Skill2:Useconcreteverbshughimtightly笑跑

抱Shehuggedhim.情境5：她跑去擁抱他。Shesmiledfromeartoear,dashedtoHarry,andhuggedhimtightly.Skill2:Useconcreteverbs她笑得合不攏嘴，沖到哈利跟前，緊緊地抱住他。情境6：Hazel看著Fein的畫，笑著說這是第三件壞事(六校聯(lián)考續(xù)寫）。Hazel_______Fein’spainting,__________and__________ittobethethirdbadthing.staredatannouncedsmirked實踐運(yùn)用二解題思路：怎么看？如何笑？咋說？She_____________________,_______________________,andexpressedhersinceregratitude.關(guān)鍵：利用一連串肢體動作使情緒表現(xiàn)更飽滿，更具畫面感。shookhishandsfirmlytwistedherheadslightlySkill3:AskyourbodypartsforhelpSheturnedtoandthankedWillis.情境7：她轉(zhuǎn)過來握手言謝

（山東卷續(xù)寫）。She_______________,_____________________infrontofher,and_______________________inshame.關(guān)鍵：利用頭部、手部、腳步動作體現(xiàn)羞愧情緒。claspedherhandsbowedherhead實踐運(yùn)用

三Shewasinshame.情境9：她很羞愧。draggedherfeetforward低著頭，雙手緊握在身前，拖著腳步走向前。2024年真題例解Para1IranbacktoGunterandtoldhimthebadnews.1.

Gunter反應(yīng)難以置信，問怎么辦？Step1拆解（Split）：肢體動作表驚訝/無奈/懷疑

→

看著我→

詢問解決辦法shrug/spreadhishands/

meetmyeyes/

askthesolution/raisehiseyebrows/

stare/gazeatme/

inquirewhattodo/eyeswideninsurprise/...

castalookatme/

wait...

looksbstraightintheeye...合并動作ToCombine02Explore!4.悟道踐行

（2）Ponder:Whatstructuralformscantheactionchainbepresentedintoachievetheeffectofsentencediversification?動作鏈可以以哪些結(jié)構(gòu)形式呈現(xiàn)，以達(dá)到句式多樣化的效果?1.她急忙出門前去開車。2.他套住了小牛。抓起車鑰匙→沖出房子→啟動發(fā)動機(jī)瞄準(zhǔn)小牛的脖子→扔去繩索→套住小牛He_________atthecalf’sneck,________theropeand_________thecalfsuccessfully.She________hercarkeys,__________outofthehouse,and__________theengine.grabbedrushedstartedaimedthrewtieddidA,didBanddidC動作三連結(jié)構(gòu)感知Iputonmycoathurriedly,grabbedmyschoolbagand

rushedtoschoolthismorning.微情景小練：Imagineyouwillsoonbelateforschoolinthemorning.Practice即學(xué)即練今天早上，我匆忙穿上外套，抓起書包，沖向?qū)W校。Thechildreneagerlyunwrappedthecolorfulpaper,openedtheirpresents,andscreamedwithdelight.________________________(unwrap)thecolorfulpaper,thechildrenopenedtheirpresents,andscreamedwithdelight.（主動，分詞動作先于謂語動詞動作）HavingdoneA,sb.didB(anddidC)非謂語Havingdone結(jié)構(gòu)感知HavingeargerlyunwrappedHavingqueuedfor3hours,hewastoldthattheticketshadbeensoldout.微情景小練：Hewastoldtherewerenoticketsavailableafterqueuingforatotalof3hours.Practice即學(xué)即練排了三個小時的隊后，他被告知票賣完了。David掙扎著站起來，繼續(xù)跑，沒有表現(xiàn)出任何放棄的跡象（2022讀續(xù)真題）。David___________________and_______________,__________nosignsofgivingup.（主動，現(xiàn)在分詞基本與謂語動詞同時發(fā)生）doingA,sbdidBanddidC...struggledtohisfeetcontinuedrunningshowing非謂語doing結(jié)構(gòu)感知Sittingonthesubway,theoldmanstaredathisphone,knittinghisbrows.微情景小練：Anoldmanistryinghisbesttoseethephonescreenclearly.Practice即學(xué)即練老人坐在地鐵上，盯著手機(jī)，皺著眉頭。在Jenny的鼓勵下，F(xiàn)orrest看著前方，向前跑以躲避那些霸凌者。________byJenny,Forrest_____________and______________toescapethosebullies.doneA,sbdidBanddidCEncouragedlookedaheaddashedforward非謂語done結(jié)構(gòu)感知（被動，過去分詞表被動）Encouragedbyhisteacher’swords,heraisedhishandandwhispered,“Ivolunteer.”微情景小練：Aboyraisedhishandafterbeingencouraged.Practice即學(xué)即練他被老師的話鼓舞，舉起手，小聲說：“我來?！?.Actionchains（動作鏈）summary:(1)didA,didB

and

didC(2)變形(≥2個動詞)non-finiteverbs,sbdidAanddidBsbdidAanddidB,non-finiteverbssbdidA,didBanddidC,non-finiteverbsnon-finiteverbs:主動且完成:Havingdonesth主動:doingsth被動:donesth2024年真題例解Para1IranbacktoGunterandtoldhimthebadnews.1.

Gunter反應(yīng)

難以置信，問怎么辦？Step1拆解（Split）：肢體動作表驚訝/無奈/懷疑

→

看著我→

詢問解決辦法

raisehiseyebrows

stare/gazeatme

askthesolution

castalookatCombine(1):Heraisedhiseyebrows,staredatmeandaskedwhattodo.Combine(2):Raisinghiseyebrows,hecastalookatme,askingwhattodo.Combine(3):HavingheardwhatIinformed,Gunterraisedhiseyebrowsandstaredatme,askingwhattodo.Combine(4):Surprisedbymywords,Gunterraisedhiseyebrowsandstaredatme,askingwhattodo.

改進(jìn)動作ToModify03我們需要在同一時間，安排多個相機(jī)在不同角度拍攝，然后把不同的鏡頭剪在一起，構(gòu)成一個飽滿的動作面。---邵田田《中國科技經(jīng)濟(jì)新聞數(shù)據(jù)庫》動作鏈?zhǔn)且粋€人的動作的依次連貫。但是若是想要描述更具有畫面感，可以通過構(gòu)造“動作面”來讓語言更豐富。比如我們可以從肢體、面部、語言和心理等多個維度來刻畫場景。Explore!4.悟道踐行

（3）Ponder:Howcanwemodifyandbeautifyactionsfromdifferentaspectstocreateamorevividpicture?怎樣從各方面改進(jìn)和美化動作，以創(chuàng)造出更生動的畫面？面部肢體語言/心理成句：Wideninghiseyesinextremehorror,hefledaway,screaming,“Mom,help!”

他驚恐地瞪大了眼睛，轉(zhuǎn)身就跑，一邊尖叫著:“媽媽，救命!”（非謂語+心理短語,精準(zhǔn)謂語動詞,語言描寫）Wideninghiseyes

inextremehorrorfledawayscreaming,“Mom,help!”動作面Actionscene盯著前方的Andy，表情

肢體

表情

StaringatAndyahead,Redadvancedtowardshimwithasuitcase,(with)asmilespreadingacrosshisface.TheShawshankRedemptionwith復(fù)合/獨(dú)立主格,主句與doing動作的邏輯主語不一致時Red提著行李箱走向Andy，臉上洋溢著笑容。動作面Actionscene動作面Actionscene在海邊拍照肢體面部語言\心理面帶微笑,低頭看花手捧鮮花，站在海邊想知道照片拍好了沒有Withabunchofflowersinherhands

,shestoodbesidetheseaand

lookeddownattheflowerswithasmile,wonderingifthephotowasdone.巧用with復(fù)合主格他們欣喜若狂，在黃昏又唱又跳。

心理肢體___________,theyweresinginganddancingfreelyatdusk.肢體Wildwithjoy動作面Actionscene巧用形容詞做伴隨狀語2024年真題例解Isighed,lookedbackovermyshoulder,andbeggedGunterforadelayedpayment,explainingwhyandwaitingforGunter’sresponse.Step3

改進(jìn)（Modify）:Isighedhopelessly,lookedbackovermyshoulder,checkingtheline,andthenbeggedGunterforadelayedpayment,explainingthatIcouldn’taffordtomisstheconference.Anxiousandexpectant,Irubbedmyhands,flashinghimanotherapologeticsmileandwaitingforGunter’sresponse.動作三連→didA,didBanddidC非謂語結(jié)構(gòu)(主語一致)①

同一對象同時發(fā)生不同動作，且表主動——主+謂,doingsth./doingsth.,主＋謂②

動作有先后關(guān)系時

——Havingdonesth,主+謂③

動作與主語邏輯關(guān)系為被動時

——Donesth.,主+謂動作描寫動作鏈動作面肢體面部語言心理環(huán)境巧用With復(fù)合/獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu)/adj./adv.SplitCombineModifyPractice!5.項目合作

主題語境:人與社會----互相理解、樂于助人文本大意：作者從維也納前往布拉格時，善良的出租車司機(jī)甘特給予了幫助和理解。作者結(jié)束旅行后如約和甘特再次見面。語篇價值：培養(yǎng)學(xué)生的文化意識，引導(dǎo)學(xué)生樹立正確的價值取向，即樂于助人、誠實守信。真題再現(xiàn)

（2024高考英語新課標(biāo)I讀續(xù))ImetGunteronacold,wetandunforgettableeveninginSeptember.Ihadplannedtofly

toViennaandtakeabustoPragueforaconference.Duetoabigstorm,myflighthadbeen

delayedbyanhourandahalf.ItoucheddowninViennajust30minutesbeforethedeparture

ofthelastbustoPrague.ThemomentIgotofftheplane,Iranlikecrazythroughtheairport

buildingandjumpedintothefirsttaxiontherankwithoutasecondthought.ThatwaswhenImetGunter.ItoldhimwhereIwasgoing,buthesaidhehadn’theardof

thebusstation.Ithoughtmypronunciationwastheproblem,soIexplainedagainmoreslowly,

buthestilllookedconfused.WhenIwasabouttogiveup,Gunterfishedouthislittlephone

andrangupafriend.Afteraheateddiscussionthatlastedforwhatseemedlikeacentury,

Gunterputhisphonedownandstartedthecar.Finally,withjusttwominutestosparewerolledintothebusstation.Thankfully,there

wasalongqueue(隊列)stillwaitingtoboardthebus.Gunterparkedthetaxibehindthebus,

turnedaround,andlookedatmewithabigsmileonhisface.“Wemadeit,”hesaid.JustthenIrealisedthatIhadzerocashinmywallet.Iflashedhimanapologeticsmileas

IpulledoutmyPortuguesebankcard.Hetrieditseveraltimes,butthecardmachinejustdid

notplayalong.AfeelingofhelplessnesswashedovermeasIsawthebusqueuethinningout.Atthismoment,Gunterpointedtowardsthewaitinghallofthebusstation.There,atthe

entrance,wasacashmachine.Ijumpedoutofthecar,madeamadrunforthemachine,and

poppedmycardin,onlytoreadthemessage:

“Outoforder.Sorry.”Paragraph1IranbacktoGunterandtoldhimthebadnews.Paragraph2Fourdayslater,whenIwasbackinVienna,IcalledGunteraspromised.actionchain1actionchain2Para1:IranbacktoGunterandtoldhimthebadnews.情節(jié)設(shè)計(十句五定)Gunter反應(yīng)難以置信，問怎么辦？我請求延遲支付解釋末班車&參加會議Para2:Fourdayslater,whenIwasbackinVienna,IcalledGunteraspromised.我問其電話號碼承諾回電和付款Gunter思考同意留電話號碼我感動沖向巴士Gunter到巴士站接我我感謝他,告知會議順利在去機(jī)場路上到機(jī)場我付兩次費(fèi)用,給小費(fèi)被拒結(jié)局：我再次被其善意感動升華：

傳播善意的決心…TocombineTomodifyTosplitGroupCGroupDGroupA+BTaskassignmentNChecklistscores13-4verbsareusedinonesentence(0-10)2Generalverbsaresplitedintoconcreteverbs(0-10)3Allverbsarecorrectlycombined(0-10)4Actionchainsareproperlymodified(0-10)5Around150wordsEvaluationReflect!6.反思總結(jié)

Ponder:WhathaveIlearntfromthislesson?1.Toshow,nottotell;2.SCMprinciple;3.Practicemakesperfect.動作鏈下水文

IranbacktoGunterandtoldhimthebadnews.Astonished,Gunterraisedhiseyebrows,staredatme,andaskedwhattodo.Iexplainedtohimtheurgencyofcatchingthebus,emphasizingthesignificanceoftheconferencetome.ThenIhurriedlytoreaslipofpaperfrommynotebook,signalinghimtowritedownhisphonenumberwithananticipatinglook.Amazingly,withoutasecondthought,Gunteracceptedmyslipofpaperandswiftlywrotedownhisphonenumber,asmiledancingaroundthecornersofhismouth.“Haveasafejourney!”addedGunter.

AfeelingofgratitudewashedovermeasIheardhiswords.Afterexpressingmythanks,Igrabbedthebriefcase,madeamadrunforthebus,andjumpedontoitjustbeforeitsdeparture.

Fourdayslater,whenIwasbackinVienna,IcalledGunteraspromised.Wemadeanappointmenttomeetatthebusstationwherehehaddroppedmeoff.ThemomentGunterrecognizedme,hepulledover,quicklygotoutofthecar,strodetome,andgavemeatighthugasifwewerelonglostintimatefriends.Withexcitement,Itoldhimtheconferencewentsmoothlythankstohisgeneroushelp.Uponarrivingattheairport,IhandedsomecashtoGunter,explainingthatIwaspayingforthe‘doublecarride’,backandforthfromtheairporttothebusstation,togetherwithageneroustipthatheturneddownatonce.Gunter’srefusalthistimemeltedthesoftestplaceinmyheart,justashisacceptancedidlasttime.Icouldn’tthankGuntertoomuch.Hiskindn