臨沂市高三教學質量檢測考試讀后續(xù)寫二次開發(fā)學案教師版閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。SoonafterwemovedtoaremoteparceloflandintheSierrafoothillsthathadn'tbeenbuiltonformilesaround,webroughtintwostraycats,NoseyandQuincy,tokeepdownthepestpopulation.Wehadneverbeencatownersbefore,andIfeareditwouldbeachallengeforouragingLacy,butshebecametheirbestfriendrightfromthestart.Sheletthemdrinkfromherwaterbowl,sleeponherdogbed,andIevenwatchedherlickingcatfoodfromtheirfuratimeortwo.Thethreepanionsformedquiteabond.AsLacycontinuedtoage,hercatfriendsstayedclose.Whenwedroveupourlongdrivewayinghomefromwork,Lacywouldlimptogreetus,trailedbythecats,evenwhenherjointpainmadeithardforhertogetofftheporch.Asherconditionworsened,wespentmuchtimeatthevet'sofficeseekingtherightmedicationtoeaseherpain.Ononevisit,Iquestionedthedoctor:"Therearetimesnowwhenourdogseemsconfused.Iknowshehassufferedsomehearingloss,butthereseemstobemoretoherbehaviorthanjustthat.AmIimaginingthings?”"No,you'renot."Herreplywasunexpected."Dogscansufferfromakindofmentalconfusionintheiroldage,"shecontinued."It'shardtoknowifthat'shappening,butIsuggestkeepingherinmostly.Shecouldwanderoffandforgethowtoehome,especiallywithallthatlandaroundyourhouse."IaskedmythreeteenagerstokeepaneyeonLacy.Withahousefullofteenagers,thingstendedtogetchaotic,butIencouragedthem:"Wecan'tletLacygooutsideunlesssomebodygoeswithher.”TheyagreedandkeptwatchuntilonebustlingThursdaynight.Thehousewasfulloftheirfriends,whostayeduntilYouthGroupstartedatchurchlater.Kidscameandwentfromeverydoor.Asthelastkidleft,IrealizedLacywasnowhereinthehouse.Itwasdark,somyhusbandandIgrabbedflashlightsandsearchedthehillside,callingforherforhoursthoughIdoubtedshecouldhearus.Wedidn'tseethecatseither,butfiguredtheywereontheirnightlywanderaroundtheproperty.Atmidnightwegaveup,decidingwe'dhavebetterchancesindaylight.注意：1．續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150個左右；2．請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。Para1：Thenextmorningtheentirefamilyjoinedinthesearch.Para2:AsIwentouttostartthecar,Icouldn'tbelievemyeyes.【原文翻譯】我們搬到塞拉山麓一處偏遠的地塊后不久，這里方圓數(shù)英里都沒有建筑物。隨后，我們收養(yǎng)了兩只流浪貓——諾西（Nosey）和昆西（Quincy），希望它們能幫忙控制害蟲數(shù)量。我們以前從未養(yǎng)過貓，還擔心這對日漸衰老的狗狗萊西（Lacy）來說會是個難題，可萊西從一開始就成了兩只貓最好的朋友。它讓貓咪喝自己水碗里的水，睡自己的狗窩，我甚至還見過一兩次，它幫貓咪舔掉毛上沾著的貓糧。這三個小伙伴之間，建立了十分深厚的羈絆。隨著萊西日漸衰老，它的貓咪朋友們始終待在它身邊。每當我們下班開車駛過長長的車道回家時，萊西總會一瘸一拐地來迎接我們，身后還跟著那兩只貓——即便關節(jié)疼痛讓它連從門廊上下來都很困難，它也依然如此。后來它的身體狀況越來越差，我們花了很多時間跑獸醫(yī)診所，只為找到能緩解它疼痛的合適藥物。有一次復診時，我問醫(yī)生：“最近我們家狗狗有時候顯得有些糊涂。我知道它聽力已經(jīng)有些下降了，但它的行為舉止里，似乎還有別的問題。是我想多了嗎？”“不，你沒有想多?！贬t(yī)生的回答出乎我的意料。“狗狗年老時也可能會出現(xiàn)一種老年精神混亂的情況，”她接著說，“很難確定萊西是否正經(jīng)歷這種狀況，但我建議盡量讓它待在室內。它可能會走失，而且忘了怎么回家，尤其是你們家周圍還有這么大一片地方?！蔽叶诩依锏娜齻€十幾歲的孩子，要多留意照看萊西。家里滿是半大的孩子，往往會顯得有些亂，但我還是鼓勵他們：“除非有人陪著萊西，否則絕不能讓它獨自出門?！焙⒆觽兇饝?，也一直照看著萊西，直到一個忙碌的周四晚上。那天家里擠滿了他們的朋友，這些孩子一直待到晚些時候教堂青年團活動開始才離開。孩子們從各個門口進進出出，十分熱鬧。等最后一個孩子離開后，我才發(fā)現(xiàn)萊西不在屋子里。天已經(jīng)黑了，我和丈夫趕緊拿起手電筒，去山坡上搜尋，一邊喊著萊西的名字，一邊找了好幾個小時——盡管我心里清楚，它可能根本聽不見我們的聲音。我們也沒看到那兩只貓，但想著它們大概像往常一樣，在院子里夜游。到了午夜，我們實在撐不住，只好放棄了搜尋，決定等天亮后再找，那時機會或許會大些?！緦懽饔柧毑襟E】第一步：通讀全文，深度解讀讀情節(jié)開端：“我”家搬到偏遠山區(qū)，收養(yǎng)兩只流浪貓Nosey和Quincy，家中老狗Lacy與它們迅速建立深厚友誼，相處融洽。發(fā)展：Lacy日漸衰老，不僅關節(jié)疼痛，還出現(xiàn)老年精神混亂癥狀，獸醫(yī)建議盡量將其留在家中，防止走失，“我”叮囑三個青少年孩子留意Lacy。轉折：一個忙碌的周四晚上，家中因孩子和朋友往來混亂，Lacy意外走失，“我”和丈夫深夜搜尋無果，決定次日白天繼續(xù)尋找。高潮：第二天全家一同加入搜尋Lacy的隊伍。續(xù)寫開端：描寫全家搜尋的過程、遇到的困難以及可能出現(xiàn)的線索。續(xù)寫結局：闡述找到Lacy的場景以及此次經(jīng)歷帶來的影響與感悟。讀人物“我”（第一人稱敘述者）：細心負責，重視家人與寵物的情感，面對Lacy走失焦急且不放棄。Lacy（老狗）：溫順友善，與貓咪建立深厚情誼，年老體衰，面臨健康問題與走失風險。Nosey和Quincy（流浪貓）：與Lacy關系親密，是Lacy的忠實同伴。家人（丈夫、三個青少年）：配合搜尋，重視Lacy的安危，是搜尋過程中的重要力量。讀時態(tài)全文以一般過去時為主，續(xù)寫需嚴格保持一致。讀沖突外在沖突：Lacy意外走失，全家搜尋面臨山區(qū)環(huán)境復雜、線索稀缺等困難，能否成功找到Lacy存在不確定性。內在沖突：“我”面對Lacy走失的焦急與擔憂，以及對能否找回Lacy的忐忑心理。讀情緒發(fā)展擔憂→焦急→堅持搜尋→（續(xù)寫發(fā)展：搜尋中的期待與失落交織，出現(xiàn)線索后的振奮）→（續(xù)寫結局：找到Lacy后的釋然與感動，情感更加深厚）讀主題寵物與人類的深厚情感（ProfoundEmotionBetweenPetsandHumans）家庭責任與協(xié)作（FamilyResponsibilityandCooperation）堅持與不放棄的力量（ThePowerofPersistenceandNeverGivingUp）二、【十句五定法】——搭建你的寫作框架請根據(jù)兩個段落的開頭語，構思并完成以下句子，以搭建清晰的段落結構。段落句子功能你的句子構思第一段1.接續(xù)Hint1描述清晨全家搜尋的場景，點明搜尋范圍和各自的行動（例如：丈夫沿車道搜尋，孩子分散在山坡各處，“我”呼喚Lacy的名字）。2.動作/心理推進描寫搜尋過程中的困難（如地形復雜、毫無線索）以及“我”內心的焦急與擔憂。3.有效過渡搜尋陷入僵局時，出現(xiàn)一絲轉機（如發(fā)現(xiàn)貓咪的蹤跡，或聽到微弱的聲音）。4.有效銜接描述跟隨線索尋找的過程，以及貓咪在其中起到的關鍵作用（如貓咪停留在某處發(fā)出叫聲指引）。5.段落收束以靠近目標地點、內心充滿期待與緊張結束本段，為第二段找到Lacy埋下伏筆。第二段6.接續(xù)Hint2具體描寫看到Lacy時的場景（如Lacy的狀態(tài)、所處位置，貓咪在其身邊陪伴）。7.情節(jié)發(fā)展描述“我”和家人上前照料Lacy的動作與互動（如檢查身體、溫柔安撫，帶Lacy回家）。8.主題升華通過內心獨白或家人間的對話，點明此次經(jīng)歷對“我”的觸動（如感受到寵物間的情誼珍貴，家庭協(xié)作的力量）。9.結局呈現(xiàn)描述Lacy回家后的狀態(tài)，以及家人與寵物間更加親密的相處場景（如精心照料Lacy，貓咪依舊陪伴左右）。10.富有余韻的結尾用一句溫暖的句子結束故事，回扣主題（如：在這片偏遠的山區(qū)，愛與陪伴讓每個生命都不再孤單）。三、【微寫作訓練】——打磨你的語言【人物心理描寫】焦急擔憂：Awaveofanxietysurgedthroughmeaswesearchedendlessly;MyheartsankwitheachfruitlesscallforLacy.期待振奮：AglimmerofhopeignitedinmychestwhenIspottedthecats;Excitementcoursedthroughmyveinsaswedrewnearthesound.釋然感動：TearsofreliefstreameddownmyfacewhenIheldLacyinmyarms;Thewarmthoftheirpanionshipmeltedalltheanxietyaway.【情感描寫】堅持的決心：Clutchingtheflashlighttightly,Iresolvedtokeepsearchingnomatterhowlongittook.重逢的喜悅：Thejoyfulbarksandgentlepurrsfilledtheair,asweetsymphonyofreunion.溫暖的陪伴：Lacyleanedagainstmeweakly,whilethecatscurledupbesideher,asifguardingtheirdearfriend.【動作描寫】焦急搜尋：Istumbledoverrocksandbushes,callingLacy'snameatthetopofmylungs,myeyesscanningeverycornerfrantically.細心照料：IgentlystrokedLacy'smattedfur,feedinghersmallsipsofwaterandcheckingforanyinjuriescarefully.默契互動：ThecatsrubbedtheirheadsagainstLacy'sbody,thenturnedtolookatus,asifleadingthewaytotheirtrappedfriend.【環(huán)境象征描寫】偏遠山區(qū)→從搜尋障礙到情感紐帶：Theremotemountainousarea,onceabarrierinoursearch,becameawitnesstothedeepbondbetweenourfamilyandthepets.清晨陽光→從迷茫到希望：Theearlymorningsunbrokethroughtheclouds,castinglightonourpathandliftingourspiritsinthedesperatesearch.貓咪蹤跡→從微弱線索到希望指引：Thefaintfootprintsofthecatsweremorethanjustclues;theywerebeaconsofhopeleadingusbacktoLacy.【微寫作訓練】——為你的故事注入靈魂訓練一：環(huán)境描寫?烘托心情（選擇最貼合故事氛圍的詞語，并嘗試造句）心情可選詞匯（中英對照）你的造句焦急、迷茫荒無人煙(desolate);四處搜尋(searcheverywhere);毫無頭緒(clueless)山區(qū)里荒無人煙，我們四處搜尋，卻依舊毫無頭緒，焦慮感不斷蔓延。期待、振奮蹤跡顯現(xiàn)(traceappeared);精神一振(perkup);滿懷希望(fullofhope)當貓咪的蹤跡顯現(xiàn)時，我們瞬間精神一振，滿懷希望地朝著那個方向奔去。釋然、溫暖安然無恙(safeandsound);緊緊相擁(hugtightly);暖意融融(warmallover)看到Lacy安然無恙地待在那里，我們連忙上前緊緊相擁，心中暖意融融。訓練二：人物刻畫?于細微處見真情（將左邊抽象的描述與右邊具體的表達連線，并選擇一句仿寫）我很焦急。A.Ipacedbackandforthrestlessly,myeyesdartingaroundthehillside,callingLacy'snamerepeatedly.孩子很自責。B.Hehunghisheadlow,hisvoicetremblingashesaid,"I'msorryIdidn'tkeepaclosereyeonher."貓咪很忠誠。C.Theyrefusedtoleavethespot,meowingloudlyandlookingbackatusasifurgingustofollow.（參考答案：1A;2B;3C）訓練三：情感表達?找到“高級替身”（圈出你會在正式寫作中使用的詞語，并替換掉直白的表達）想說"worried"(擔心):試試asenseofunease(一陣不安),myheartwasinmymouth(心提到了嗓子眼),overewithanxiety(焦慮不安)想說"happy"(開心):試試aburstofjoy(一陣喜悅),radiantwithdelight(喜形于色),myspiritssoared(精神振奮)想說"thankful"(感激):試試filledwithgratitude(滿懷感激),heartfeltthanks(由衷的感謝),Ifeltblessed(感到幸運)例句升級：原句：IwasworriedbuthappywhenwefoundLacy.升級句:Asenseofuneaselingeredinmyheartthroughoutthesearch,butitwasquicklyreplacedbyaburstofjoyaswespottedLacysafeandsound,filledwithgratitudeforthecats'help.訓練四：動作細節(jié)?讓情感可視化（請為以下情境，設計一個包含具體動作和身體反應的句子）情境1：“我”清晨開始搜尋Lacy時，焦急萬分。直白版:IsearchedforLacyanxiouslyinthemorning.細節(jié)版:I______,myhands______thebranchesasideroughly,whilemyvoice______fromcallingLacy'snametoomuch.(參考：hurriedupthehillside;pushing;hoarse)情境2：看到Lacy后，“我”上前安撫它。直白版:IwenttofortLacy.細節(jié)版:Kneelingdowngentlybesideher,I______,"It'sokay,girl,we'rehere."She______,hertailwaggingweaklyasshenuzzledmyhand.(參考:whisperedsoftly;liftedherheadslowly)訓練五：象征與隱喻?讓主題更深刻（將抽象概念與具體意象連接，完成句子）貓咪的陪伴(Thecats'panionship)→不僅是日常的相伴，更象征著______(aloyalguardianthatneverabandonsitsfriend,guidingusthroughthedarknesstoreunion)。搜尋的過程(Thesearchprocess)→從______(adesperatejourneyfilledwithuncertainty)變成了______(atestamenttothepowerofloveandpersistencethatbindsafamilyandtheirpets)。這次走失經(jīng)歷(TheexperienceofLacy'sdisappearance)→是“我”從______(takingthepets'panionshipforgranted)到______(cherishingeverymomentwiththemandvaluingthebondweshare)的轉折點?！疚懽饔柧殹繀⒖即鸢赣柧氁唬涵h(huán)境描寫?烘托心情焦急、迷茫：山區(qū)里荒無人煙，我們四處搜尋，卻依舊毫無頭緒，焦慮感不斷蔓延。期待、振奮：當貓咪的蹤跡顯現(xiàn)時，我們瞬間精神一振，滿懷希望地朝著那個方向奔去。釋然、溫暖：看到Lacy安然無恙地待在那里，我們連忙上前緊緊相擁，心中暖意融融。訓練二：人物刻畫?于細微處見真情連線答案:1A;2B;3C仿寫示例(選擇第2句):Shebitherlowerliptightly,hereyesglisteningwithtearsasshewhispered,"Ishouldhavestayedathometowatchherinsteadofgoingout."訓練三：情感表達?找到“高級替身”想到Lacy可能獨自在山區(qū)過夜，我感到一陣不安(asenseofunease)。當看到Lacy向我們走來時，我精神振奮(myspiritssoared)。對于貓咪的指引，我滿懷感激(filledwithgratitude)。例句升級:Asenseofuneaselingeredinmyheartthroughoutthesearch,butitwasquicklyreplacedbyaburstofjoyaswespottedLacysafeandsound,filledwithgratitudeforthecats'help.訓練四：動作細節(jié)?讓情感可視化情境1(細節(jié)版):Ihurriedupthehillside(匆忙沖上山坡),myhandspushing(用力撥開)thebranchesasideroughly,whilemyvoicehoarse(因頻繁呼喚Lacy的名字而變得沙啞)fromcallingLacy'snametoomuch.情境2(細節(jié)版):Kneelingdowngentlybesideher,Iwhisperedsoftly(輕聲低語),"It'sokay,girl,we'rehere."Sheliftedherheadslowly(緩緩抬起頭),hertailwaggingweaklyasshenuzzledmyhand.訓練五：象征與隱喻?讓主題更深刻貓咪的陪伴(Thecats'panionship)→不僅是日常的相伴，更象征著aloyalguardianthatneverabandonsitsfriend,guidingusthroughthedarknesstoreunion(一個永不拋棄朋友的忠誠守護者，指引我們穿越黑暗走向重逢)。搜尋的過程(Thesearchprocess)→從adesperatejourneyfilledwithuncertainty(一段充滿不確定性的絕望旅程)變成了atestamenttothepowerofloveandpersistencethatbindsafamilyandtheirpets(一份證明愛與堅持力量的見證，這種力量將家庭與寵物緊密相連)。這次走失經(jīng)歷(TheexperienceofLacy'sdisappearance)→是“我”從takingthepets'panionshipforgranted(理所當然地享受寵物的陪伴)到cherishingeverymomentwiththemandvaluingthebondweshare(珍惜與它們相處的每一刻，重視我們之間的羈絆)的轉折點。四、【微動作訓練】——讓情感在行動中展現(xiàn)訓練一：動作情緒綁定（請根據(jù)中文提示，補全英文句子，完成“動作情緒”的精準綁定）場景：焦急搜尋英文：Iclenchedmyfiststightly(緊緊攥緊拳頭),myfootstepsquickeningasIscannedtheunderbrushforanysignofLacy(腳步加快，仔細掃視灌木叢尋找Lacy的任何蹤跡).中文：我緊緊攥緊拳頭，腳步加快，仔細掃視灌木叢尋找Lacy的任何蹤跡。場景：發(fā)現(xiàn)線索英文：WhenIsawthecatslingeringbyarock,mybreathcaughtinmythroat(breathcaughtinmythroat屏住呼吸),andIwavedeagerlytosignalthefamilytoeover(急切地揮手示意家人過來).中文：當我看到貓咪在一塊石頭旁徘徊時，我屏住呼吸，急切地揮手示意家人過來。場景：重逢Lacy英文：CradlingLacyinmyarmsgently(輕輕把Lacy抱在懷里),tearsofreliefstreameddownmyfaceasIpressedasoftkissonherforehead(釋然的淚水順著臉頰流下，輕輕吻了吻她的額頭).中文：輕輕把Lacy抱在懷里，釋然的淚水順著臉頰流下，輕輕吻了吻她的額頭。訓練二：細節(jié)放大鏡（請將簡單的動作，通過添加12個細節(jié)進行升級，使其更具表現(xiàn)力）原句：IcalledLacy.細節(jié)升級：Icuppedmyhandsaroundmymouth,shoutingLacy'snamerepeatedly,myvoiceechoingthroughthequietmountainvalley(雙手攏在嘴邊，反復呼喊Lacy的名字，聲音在寂靜的山谷中回蕩).原句：Thecatsledus.細節(jié)升級：Thecatstrottedaheadslowly,pausingeveryfewstepstolookbackatus,asifmakingsurewewerefollowingclosely(貓咪在前面慢慢小跑，每走幾步就停下來回頭看我們，仿佛在確保我們緊緊跟上).原句：WetookLacyhome.細節(jié)升級：We______,______.(參考：carefullyliftedLacyintothecar,wrappingablanketaroundhertokeepherwarmaswedroveslowlyalongthebumpydriveway)訓練三：綜合情景創(chuàng)作（請運用以上所有技巧，為以下情景創(chuàng)作一個包含微動作描寫的句子）情景：當全家找到Lacy，帶著它回家時，內心充滿感動與釋然。要求：必須包含一個照料Lacy的細節(jié)和一個面部表情或身體姿態(tài)的細節(jié)，來表現(xiàn)“我”此時的心情。你的創(chuàng)作：（參考：AsIgentlybrushedthedirtoffLacy'sfurwithmyfingers,asoftandcontentedsmilespreadacrossmyface,andIleanedagainstthecarseat,feelingaprofoundsenseofpeaceknowingwehadourbeloveddogbacksafeandsound.）【微動作訓練】參考答案訓練一：動作情緒綁定我緊緊攥緊拳頭，腳步加快，仔細掃視灌木叢尋找Lacy的任何蹤跡。Iclenchedmyfiststightly,myfootstepsquickeningasIscannedtheunderbrushforanysignofLacy.當我看到貓咪在一塊石頭旁徘徊時，我屏住呼吸，急切地揮手示意家人過來。WhenIsawthecatslingeringbyarock,mybreathcaughtinmythroat,andIwavedeagerlytosignalthefamilytoeover.輕輕把Lacy抱在懷里，釋然的淚水順著臉頰流下，輕輕吻了吻她的額頭。CradlingLacyinmyarmsgently,tearsofreliefstreameddownmyfaceasIpressedasoftkissonherforehead.訓練二：細節(jié)放大鏡原句:IcalledLacy.細節(jié)升級:Icuppedmyhandsaroundmymouth,shoutingLacy'snamerepeatedly,myvoiceechoingthroughthequietmountainvalley.原句:Thecatsledus.細節(jié)升級:Thecatstrottedaheadslowly,pausingeveryfewstepstolookbackatus,asifmakingsurewewerefollowingclosely.你的練習:原句:WetookLacyhome.細節(jié)升級:WecarefullyliftedLacyintothecar,wrappingablanketaroundhertokeepherwarmaswedroveslowlyalongthebumpydriveway.訓練三：綜合情景創(chuàng)作你的創(chuàng)作(參考示例):AsIgentlybrushedthedirtoffLacy'sfurwithmyfingers,asoftandcontentedsmilespreadacrossmyface,andIleanedagainstthecarseat,feelingaprofoundsenseofpeaceknowingwehadourbeloveddogbacksafeandsound.五、綜合訓練與范文引導讀后續(xù)寫范文語法填空題（側重關鍵信息考察）閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)續(xù)寫情節(jié)的關鍵信息，在空白處填入恰當?shù)膯卧~，使短文完整通順。Thenextmorningtheentirefamilyjoinedinthesearch.Wesplitintogroups,walkingalongtheovergrown______(填“環(huán)境相關詞，表搜尋路徑”)withLacy’sfavoritetreats,callinghernamesoftly.Theteenscheckedtheold______(填“地點名詞，表teens搜尋的具體場所”)andthecreek,whilemyhusbandandIbedthehillsidewherewe’dsearchedthe______(填“時間名詞，表與前一晚搜尋的關聯(lián)”)before.Bynoon,sweatsoakedourclothes,anddisappointmentweighedheavyonour______(填“身體部位名詞，表情感載體”)—westillhadnotfoundthedogwelovedsomuch.Worndownbydespairandexhaustion,weresolvedtodrivedowntowninalastditchattemptto______(填“動詞，表‘追蹤、尋找’”)herdown.AsIwentouttostartthecar,Icouldn’tbelievemyeyes.WalkingupthelongdrivewaywasLacy,______(填“形容詞，表Lacy歸來時的核心