2025年11月溫州十校期中考試英語讀后續(xù)寫講評講義閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。I'dlovedhiphopdancingsincemychildhood,andinhighschoolItookclassesthatfocusedonjazzandhiphop.Dancewasmyfavoriteclass,andIlookedforwardtogoingeveryday.Andthisyear,mysenioryear,wasgoingtobethebestdanceclassyet,Moreover,therewasashowcaseperformedatourhighschooltheaterattheendofthesemester.AsIheadedtothestudio,myfriendJessicaranuptome,herfaceserious.=8\*GB3⑧“'Sarah,haveyouheard?"shewhispered.“"Wehaveanewteacher,Ms.Barton.s...she's...strictlyballet.”①M(fèi)yexcitementdisappeared.Ballet?I'dnevertakenaclassinmylife.Astrongfeelingofanxietyformedinmystomach,butapartofmeacceptedthechallenge.ThestudioIenteredwastransformed.②Gonewasthelivelyenergy;initsplacewasanervoussilence.Everyothergirlworetightblackclothesandballetshoes.③Lookingdownatmybaggy'Tshirtandsportstrousers,Ifeltlikeapleteoutsider.Iquicklychanged,butstillfeltawkwardandoutofplace.=4\*GB3④Ms.Bartonstoodasstraightasanarrow,herseriousexpressionmakingtheroomfeelcold.Atthebarre,shebegancallingoutFrenchtenmsplié,tendu.=4\*GB3④Itriedtocopytheothers,mymovementsfeelingawkwardandwrong.“Grandplié,"sheordered.③Ibentmyknees,doingmybesttocopytheelegantpositionoftheothers.IthoughtIwasdoingokay,untilthemusicsuddenlystopped.s,Barton'ssharpeyeswerefixedonme.“"Whatisyourname?"=4\*GB3④sheasked,hervoicecuttingthroughthesilence.“Sarah,"Ireplied,tryingtomanageasmile.“Class,IwanteveryonetowatchMissSarah,"sheannounced.Myheartjumped.=5\*GB3⑤Wasshegoingtopraiseme?Itookadeepbreathandperformedthegrandpliéagain.pletesilence.Everyeyewasonme.“'Now,class,"=6\*GB3⑥Ms.Barton'svoicerose,sharpandloud.“ThisisaperfectexampleofwhatNOTtodo."=7\*GB3⑦M(jìn)yfaceburnedasifI'dbeenslapped(拍打).注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;2.請按如下格式在題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。用幾個短語列出續(xù)寫提綱Paragraph1:IspenttherestofthedaywonderingifIshouldquit._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Finally,therecametheshowcaseatourhighschooltheater._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________賞析原文中標(biāo)序號的句子標(biāo)號用法解析①1.

情緒轉(zhuǎn)折句式：以“積極情緒消失（excitementdisappeared）→疑問引發(fā)緊張（Ballet?）→消極情緒產(chǎn)生（anxietyformed）→but...acceptedbut...acceptedthechallenge）”的邏輯鏈，層層推進(jìn)人物心理，避免情緒描寫扁平化；2.

短句與疑問句結(jié)合：用短句“Ballet?”強(qiáng)化驚訝感，比陳述句“Balletiswhatsheteaches”更具畫面張力，貼合人物突然得知新情況的慌亂狀態(tài)。②完全倒裝結(jié)構(gòu)：將表語“Gone”置于句首，打破“主語+謂語”常規(guī)語序，通過“l(fā)ivelyenergy”與“nervoussilence”的對比，快速凸顯場景氛圍從“活潑”到“壓抑”的驟變，比常規(guī)句更簡潔有力，增強(qiáng)語言表現(xiàn)力。③現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語：1.前句“Lookingdownat...”作伴隨狀語，先呈現(xiàn)“低頭看服飾”的動作細(xì)節(jié)，再引出“感到格格不入”的心理，動作與心理銜接自然；2.后句“doingmybest...”作伴隨狀語，補(bǔ)充“屈膝”動作時的狀態(tài)（努力模仿），讓動作描寫更豐滿，體現(xiàn)人物的笨拙與努力。④獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu)：由“名詞（herseriousexpression/mymovements/hervoice）+現(xiàn)在分詞（making/feeling/cutting）”構(gòu)成，補(bǔ)充說明主句動作發(fā)生時的伴隨狀態(tài)（老師站姿帶來的冷感、“我”動作的笨拙、聲音打破寂靜的穿透力），避免使用并列句導(dǎo)致的句式冗長，讓句子更緊湊且細(xì)節(jié)豐富。⑤疑問句表心理猜測：用疑問句直接呈現(xiàn)人物內(nèi)心的期待與不確定，比陳述句“Iwonderedifshewasgoingtopraiseme”更具代入感，貼合“我”在老師關(guān)注下既緊張又期待的復(fù)雜心理。⑥形容詞作伴隨狀語：用“sharpandloud”補(bǔ)充“voicerose”時的聲音特質(zhì)，無需額外添加動詞（如“Ms.Barton'svoiceroseanditwassharpandloud”），簡潔地凸顯老師語氣的嚴(yán)厲，強(qiáng)化場景的緊張感。⑦生理反應(yīng)+比喻句式：先描寫“faceburned”的生理感受，再用“asif”引導(dǎo)的比喻（仿佛被扇耳光）將抽象的“羞恥感”具象化，比直接抒情“Ifeltextremelyashamed”更含蓄且有沖擊力，讓讀者直觀體會人物的窘迫。分句式仿寫練習(xí)句式①：情緒轉(zhuǎn)折句式（積極消失→疑問→消極→轉(zhuǎn)折）仿寫框架：My______disappeared.______?I'dnever______before.Astrongfeelingof______formedinmystomach,but______mademe______.學(xué)生仿寫：我堅持下去的勇氣消失了。要放棄嗎？我以前從未在舞蹈上半途而廢過。一股強(qiáng)烈的無助感涌上心頭，但想起第一次跳街舞的場景，我又猶豫著不愿離開。___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________句式②：完全倒裝句式（氛圍對比）仿寫框架：Gonewas______;initsplacewas______.學(xué)生仿寫：我曾經(jīng)感受到的舞蹈樂趣消失了，取而代之的是一種壓在心頭的沉重悲傷。__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________句式③：現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語（動作+心理/狀態(tài)）仿寫框架1：______(現(xiàn)在分詞短語),I______(主句，含心理感受).學(xué)生仿寫：走過練功房窗戶時，我看到其他女孩正在整齊地練習(xí)屈膝動作，她們的姿態(tài)流暢又優(yōu)雅。__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________句式④：獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu)（名詞+現(xiàn)在分詞，補(bǔ)充伴隨狀態(tài)）仿寫框架：______(主句),+______(現(xiàn)在分詞，補(bǔ)充細(xì)節(jié))＋_____(獨(dú)立主格)學(xué)生仿寫1：我把手貼在玻璃上，默默地看著她們，手指微微顫抖。_________________________________________________________________________________________學(xué)生仿寫2：巴頓老師尖銳的話語在我腦海里回響，那冰冷的語氣讓我眼睛發(fā)燙。__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________句式⑤：形容詞作伴隨狀語（補(bǔ)充動作特質(zhì)）仿寫框架：______(主語+動詞),______(形容詞短語，描述動作特征).學(xué)生仿寫1：我掏出手機(jī)，準(zhǔn)備給杰西卡發(fā)消息說我要放棄了，拇指卻在屏幕上方懸著遲遲不按。__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________學(xué)生仿寫2:我的決心漸漸增強(qiáng)，變得堅定而堅決。_________________________________________________________________________________________句式⑥：疑問句表心理猜測（期待/不確定）仿寫框架：______(疑問句式，體現(xiàn)內(nèi)心猜測).學(xué)生仿寫：我真的要因?yàn)橐淮问д`就放棄嗎？_________________________________________________________________________________________句式⑦：生理反應(yīng)+比喻句式（強(qiáng)化情緒）仿寫框架：My______(生理反應(yīng))asif______(比喻，具象化情緒).學(xué)生仿寫：我把手機(jī)放回口袋，臉頰泛紅，心里既羞愧又堅定——仿佛剛剛從一個想要放棄的愚蠢夢境中醒來。__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________其他句式①：采用“并列名詞短語”結(jié)構(gòu)學(xué)生仿寫：我想起自己花在練街舞上的那些時光，想起流過的汗水，還有媽媽看我跳舞時臉上的笑容。__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________其他句式②：采用“并列謂語結(jié)構(gòu)(動作鏈)學(xué)生仿寫：我走回練功房門口，深吸一口氣，推開了門，想向巴頓老師請教額外的練習(xí)技巧。__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Finally,therecametheshowcaseatourhighschooltheater.（終于，學(xué)校劇院的展演開始了。）(可采用第一段的句型進(jìn)行描寫)我的緊張感稍稍緩解了一些。要表演了嗎？我以前在人群面前跳過舞，但從未表演過芭蕾。一股強(qiáng)烈的興奮感涌上心頭，但仍有一絲擔(dān)憂揮之不去。第一節(jié)課時那種笨拙尷尬的感覺消失了，取而代之的是一種連我自己都驚訝的平靜自信。走上舞臺后，我看向觀眾席，目光很快在第一排找到了巴頓老師。我深吸一口氣，緩緩抬起手臂，盡全力將芭蕾的優(yōu)雅與街舞的活力融合在一起。音樂響起，我隨著節(jié)奏舞動，旋律讓我的心情變得昂揚(yáng)起來。我的雙腳在舞臺上輕盈滑動，身體記得每一次課后練習(xí)的動作。觀眾們喜歡我的表演嗎？我看到杰西卡朝我揮手，臉上掛著大大的笑容，我的心頓時安定了下來。巴頓老師的表情柔和下來，眼神里滿是溫暖與贊許。當(dāng)我完成最后一個屈膝動作時，劇院里爆發(fā)出熱烈的掌聲。我的眼睛濕潤了，仿佛得到了世界上最好的禮物——我知道自己不僅攻克了芭蕾，更戰(zhàn)勝了內(nèi)心對失敗的恐懼。我深深鞠躬，心中涌起一種前所未有的自豪感。_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________答案:1.Mycouragetostaydisappeared.Quit?I'dnevergivenupondancebefore.Astrongfeelingofhelplessnessformedinmychest,butthememoryofmyfirsthiphopperformancemademehesitatetoleave.GonewasthejoyofdancingIusedtofeel;initsplacewasaheavysadnessthatweighedonme.Walkingpastthestudiowindow,Isawtheothergirlspracticingpliéneatly,theirmovementssmoothandelegant.Ipressedmyhandagainsttheglass,watchingthemsilently,myfingerstremblingslightly.Ms.Barton'ssharpwordsechoedinmymind,theircoldtonemakingmyeyesburn.Ipulledoutmyphone,readytotextJessicathatI'dquit,mythumbhoveringoverthescreen.WasIreallygoingtogiveupjustbecauseofonemistake?Mydeterminationgrew,steadyandfirm.Iputmyphonebackinmypocket,mycheeksflushingwithamixofshameandresolve—asifI'djustwokenupfromasillydreamofgivingup.IthoughtofthehoursI'dspentpracticinghiphop,thesweatI'dshed,andthesmileonmymom'sfacewhenshewatchedmedance.附模仿句型范文(字?jǐn)?shù)太多,僅供學(xué)習(xí)句型用)Para1:IspenttherestofthedaywonderingifIshouldquit.Mycouragetostaydisappeared.Quit?I'dnevergivenupondancebefore.Astrongfeelingofhelplessnessformedinmychest,butthememoryofmyfirsthiphopperformancemademehesitatetoleave.GonewasthejoyofdancingIusedtofeel;initsplacewasaheavysadnessthatweighedonme.Walkingpastthestudiowindow,Isawtheothergirlspracticingpliéneatly,theirmovementssmoothandelegant.Ipressedmyhandagainsttheglass,watchingthemsilently,myfingerstremblingslightly.Ms.Barton'ssharpwordsechoedinmymind,theircoldtonemakingmyeyesburn.Ipulledoutmyphone,readytotextJessicathatI'dquit,mythumbhoveringoverthescreen.WasIreallygoingtogiveupjustbecauseofonemistake?IthoughtofthehoursI'dspentpracticinghiphop,thesweatI'dshed,andthesmileonmymom'sfacewhenshewatchedmedance.Mydeterminationgrew,steadyandfirm.Iputmyphonebackinmypocket,mycheeksflushingwithamixofshameandresolve—asifI'djustwokenupfromasillydreamofgivingup.Iwalkedbacktothestudiodoor,tookadeepbreath,andpusheditopentoaskMs.Bartonforextrapracticetips.Paragraph2:Finally,therecametheshowcaseatourhighschooltheater.Mynervousnessfadedalittle.Perform?I'ddancedinfrontofcrowdsbefore,butneverballet.Astrongfeelingofexcitementwelledupinmyheart,butatraceofworrystilllingered.GonewastheawkwardnessIfeltinthefirstclass;initsplacewasacalmconfidencethatsurprisedevenmyself.Steppingontothestage,Ilookedattheaudience,myeyesquicklyfindingMs.Bartoninthefrontrow.Itookadeepbreath,raisingmyarmsslowly,doingmybesttoblendballet'sgracewithhiphop'senergy.Themusicstarted,itsrhythmliftingmyspiritsasImoved.Myfeetglidedacrossthestage,mybodyrememberingeverypracticeI'ddoneafterclass.Wastheaudienceenjoyingit?IcaughtsightofJessicawavingatme,abigsmileonherface,andmyheartsettled.Ms.Barton'sexpressionsoftened,warmandapproving.WhenIfinishedthefinalgrandplié,thetheatereruptedinapplause.MyeyeswateredasifI'dbeengiventhebestgiftintheworld—IknewI'dnotonlyconqueredballet,butalsomyownfearoffailure.Bowingdeeply,IfeltasenseofprideI'dneverexperiencedbefore.聯(lián)盟讀后續(xù)寫范文Paragraph1:IspenttherestofthedaywonderingifIshouldquit.However,mylovefordancewouldn'tallowit.Iwouldshowthatteacher.Theemptystudiobecamemysecondhome.Ipractiseddaybyday,weekbyweek,andIwasproudtosaythatIwasstillstandingbytheendofthesemester.Ms.Bartonseemedtotoleratemyballetandbegantoappreciatemyhiphopstyle.Sooncamehersurprisingrequest:todesigntwohiphopdancesforthefinalperformance.那一天剩下的時間里，我一直在糾結(jié)是否應(yīng)該放棄。然而，我對舞蹈的熱愛不允許我這么做。我要向那位老師證明我能行?？帐幨幍木毠Ψ砍闪宋业牡诙€家。我日復(fù)一日、周復(fù)一周地練習(xí)，值得驕傲的是，學(xué)期結(jié)束時我依然沒有放棄。巴頓老師似乎開始容忍我跳芭蕾的樣子，并且漸漸欣賞起我的嘻哈風(fēng)格。不久后，她提出了一個令人驚訝的要求：為最終的表演設(shè)計兩支嘻哈舞蹈。Paragraph2Finally,therecametheshowcaseatourhighschooltheater.Myhandswereshakingwithnerves,butwhenthemusicbegan,myfearsimplydisappeared.Ihadthebesttimedancingtoitandgaveitmyall,leavingouraudiencecheeringandclapping.Afterwards,Ms.Bartonannouncedthe“MostImprovedDancer”award.Icouldn'tbelievemyearswhenshecalledmyname!Asmyfriendscheered,Iwalkeduptoreceivetheaward.Withtearsinmyeyes,IsmiledatMs.Bartonandsaid,“Thankyouforchallengingme.”Irealizedthatthisballetjourneyhadtaughtmethecouragetoembracechallenges.終于，學(xué)校劇院的表演展示會如期而至。我緊張得雙手發(fā)抖，但當(dāng)音樂響起時，我的恐懼徹底消失了。我跳得非常盡興，全身心投入其中，臺下的觀眾們歡呼鼓掌。表演結(jié)束后，巴頓老師宣布了“進(jìn)步最大舞者”獎項。當(dāng)她念到我的名字時，我簡直不敢相信自己的耳朵！朋友們歡呼著，我走上臺領(lǐng)獎。我眼里含著淚水，笑著對巴頓老師說：“謝謝您給我挑戰(zhàn)自己的機(jī)會?！蔽乙庾R到，這段芭蕾學(xué)習(xí)之旅教會了我勇敢接受挑戰(zhàn)。同類句子積累（貼合“挑戰(zhàn)與成長”“堅持與收獲”情境）1.心理糾結(jié)與信念堅定類Itossedandturnedallnight,questioningwhetherIshouldgiveupthepianopetitionthathadstressedmeoutformonths.However,thememoryofmyfirstpianolesson—whenIpromisedmyselftosticktomusic—keptmegoing.（我整夜輾轉(zhuǎn)反側(cè)，糾結(jié)是否該放棄讓我壓力山大數(shù)月的鋼琴比賽。但第一次上鋼琴課時，我對自己承諾要堅持音樂的記憶，支撐著我繼續(xù)前行。）Hestoodatthestartinglineofthemarathon,hislegsachingfromweeksoftraining.Avoiceinhisheadtoldhimtoquit,butheclenchedhisfistsandwhispered,“I’veetoofartostopnow.”（他站在馬拉松起跑線上，幾周的訓(xùn)練讓他的腿隱隱作痛。腦海里有個聲音讓他放棄，但他攥緊拳頭輕聲說：“我已經(jīng)走了這么遠(yuǎn)，不能現(xiàn)在停下?！保?.投入練習(xí)與環(huán)境烘托類Thequietartstudio,withpaintbrushesscatteredonthetableandsunlightstreamingthroughthewi