ESLWritingModelAnswerAnalysisWeek9Exercise6Recentlyyouwereinvitedtoanimportantfamilycelebrationheldinanothertown.Unfortunatelyyouweredelayedonthejourneyandarrivedlate.Writealettertoafriendexplainingwhathappened.Yourlettershouldbeabout150-200wordslong.Don’tforgettoinclude:whythecelebrationwasbeingheldwhatkindofproblemyouhadonthejourneywhathappenedintheend.Youwillreceiveupto9marksforthecontentofyourletter,andupto9marksforthestyleandaccuracyofyourlanguage.ModelanswerJustaquicklinetotellyouwhathasbeenhappeninghere.Myunclehasbeenmanagerofatoyfactoryfortwentyyearsandheretiredlastweek.Hiscompanygaveabigpartyforhim,tothankhimandcelebratedhisretirement.Familymemberswereinvitedtoo.Unfortunately,onthewaytothepartyanothercarcrashedintous!Wehadstoppedtoletawomanwithapushchaircrosstheroad,anothercarcameroundthecornertoofastandthedrivercouldn’tstopintime.Luckily,noonewashurt---justabitshaken.I’mgladIwaswearingmyseatbelt,Icantellyou!However,thebackofDad’scarwasreallysmashedup.Thedriverreluctantlyagreedtopayforthedamageandwecontinuedourjourneybytaxi.ModelanswerWearrivedatthepartytothesoundofcheeringasmyunclewentontotheplatformtomakehisretirementspeech.Weweresogladwemadeitintime.Writetomesoonandletmeknowallyournews.Exercise7Yourlocalnewspaperisleadingacampaigntoopenapostofficeinyourvillage,whichwillalsoprovideinternetandinternationaltelephonefacilitiesforthecommunity.Theeditorhasaskedpeopletowritetothenewspapersayingwhethertheysupportthisidea.Herearesomeofthecommentsreceived:Exercise7‘It’salongwalktothenearestpostofficeatpresent.’‘We’relookingforwardtobeingabletobuystampsandsendparcelsfromourownvillage.’‘Ihaven’tgotacomputerathomeandI’dliketobeabletousetheinternetforinformationandcommunication.’‘Itwillcauseallsortsofproblems---peoplewillcrowdintouseitanddroprubbisheverywhere.’‘Itwillcreateseveralnewjobsinthevillage,whichwereallyneed.’Exercise7Writealettertothenewspapergivingyourviewsabouttheidea.Yourlettershouldbeabout150-200wordslong.Beginyourletter‘DearEditor’.Donotwriteanaddress.Thecommentsabovemaygiveyousomeideas,butyouarefreetouseanyideasofyourown.Youwillreceiveupto9marksforthecontentofyourletter,andupto9marksforthestyleandaccuracyofyourlanguage.ModelanswerIamwritingtoexpressmysupportforyourcampaignforapostofficeinourvillage.Atthemoment,residentshavetotravelseveralkilometrestobuystamps,topostorcollectparcelsandtoobtainlicencesorpassportforms;itwillhelpusalltobeabletodothesethingslocally.Thenewpostofficewillalsobringmoderntechnologytoourvillage.Accesstoinformationontheinternetwillhelpusall,andbeingabletouseemailwillbenefitourcommunicationskills.Inaddition,thisnewbusinesswillcreateatleasteightnewjobsinthevillage.ModelanswerSomepeoplewholiveneartheintendedpostofficesiteareworriedaboutthenoiseoftheconstantrushofcustomersduringbusinesshours.Somearealsoconcernedthatpeopleusingthepostofficewillleaverubbishbehindanddamagetheenvironment.However,thesedisadvantagescanbemanagedbyemployingsufficientpostofficestafftocopeefficientlywithhighnumbersofcustomers.Thebenefitsofthenewpostofficewillfaroutweighthepossibleproblems.Inmyview,ourlocalcommunityshouldrecognisetheneedforthisbusinessandgiveyoufullsupportinyourcampaign.Exercise6Isyourteacherspecial?Telluswhyheorshedeservestowinthisyear’sOUTSTANDINGTEACHERAWARDYourlettershouldreachusby30thJune.Exercise6YouhaveseenthisnoticeinyourlocalcollegeanddecidetowritealettertothecollegePrincipalnominatingoneofyourteachers.Yourlettershouldbeabout150-200wordslong.Don’tforgettoexplain:whotheawardshouldgotowhytheawardshouldbegivenwhatisspecialaboutthenamedteacher.Youwillreceiveupto9marksforthecontentofyourletter,andupto9marksforthestyleandaccuracyofyourlanguage.ModelanswerIwouldliketonominatemyInformationTechnologyteacherMrBandafortheOutstandingTeacherAward.HehastaughtusforfiveyearsandweknowsomuchmoreabouttheWorldWideWeb,aswellashowtouseallkindsofsoftware,becauseofhisteaching.Thisnowmakesourstudiessomucheasier.Wecanallnowproduceexcellentworkforourotherclassesbecauseourcomputerskillshaveimprovedsomuch.Ourotherteachershavenoticedtheimprovement.ModelanswerTheawardshouldbegiventoMrBandabecauseheisspecialandhenevergetsangryorimpatientwithus,nomatterhowmanytimesweaskhimforhelp.Hehasareallyclearwayofmakingcomplicatedthingsseemverysimple.Sometimeshewillstaylatewithussowecanfinishaprojectorunderstandsomedifficultideas.Weallfeelhelikesusandwantsustodowellandgetgoodgradesinourexams.MrBandaalwaysgoesthatextramileforus,soIthinkweshouldshowhimhowmuchweappreciatehimbygivinghimthisaward.Exercise7ThemembersofyourcollegeHistorySocietybelievethathistoryshouldnotbeseenasjustalistofdatesandeventsbutasanimportantpartofourdailylives.Tomakepeopleawareoftheimportanceofhistorytheyareorganisingacampaigncalled‘HistoryMatters’.Herearesomeofthecommentstheyhavereceivedfrompeopletheyhavetalkedto:Exercise7‘Buildings,paints,institutions,landscapesandhorizonsareallpartofourhistory.’‘Peoplematter,nothistory.’‘Historyisallaboutthepast;weneedtoworryaboutthepresent.’‘Weneedtounderstandhistorytounderstandwhatishappeningnow.’‘Eachdaywewriteourownhistory.’Exercise7Writeanarticleforyourcollegemagazinegivingyourviewsonthesubject.Yourarticleshouldbeabout150-200wordslong.Thecommentsabovemaygiveyousomeideas,butyouarefreetouseanyideasofyourown.Youwillreceiveupto9marksforthecontentofyourarticle,andupto9marksforthestyleandaccuracyofyourlanguage.ModelanswerEachday,thousandsofpeopleareinspiredbyavisittoaplaceofinterest,oraprogrammeabouthistory,orabookorpicturelinkedwithahistoricalevent.Souvenirs,postcardsandphotographsallremindusofourownhistoricalexperiences.Weallneedtothinkwhyhistorymatters.Itcan,forexample,bealessonlearnedandaninsuranceagainstarepeatofdisastrousevents.Topromotethe‘HistoryMatters’campaign,theorganiserswanteveryonetosendinafewlinesaboutwhyhistorymattersthem.TheyaskyoutostepawayformiPods,emailandmobilephonesforjustafewminutesandconsidertheimportanceofhistory.ModelanswerHistory,ofcourse,isnotjustaboutthepast---italsohastodowiththefuture.Whatdoweretainthatwashereahundredyearsagoandwillstillbehereinanotherhundredyears?Historyiscultureandcivilisation---itismankind,andeachindividual.Itneedstobekeptalive,valuedandrespected,andpassedonfromgenerationtogeneration,sothatourgrandchildrenmayhavethesamewonderfulexperiencesoftheirheritagethatourgreat-grandparentshadintheirownyouth.Ourhistorymatters---passiton!Exercise6Aforeignfriendiscomingtostaywithyouandyourfamilyforashortvisit.Youdecidetowritealetterexplaining:whattheycanlookforwardtodoingwithyouandyourfamilywhattheywillneedtobringwiththemthingstheywillfinddifferentfromtheirowncountry.Yourlettershouldbeabout150-200wordslong.Youwillreceiveupto9marksforthecontentofyourletter,andupto9marksforthestyleandaccuracyofyourlanguage.ModelanswerMyfamilyandIarereallylookingforwardtoyourvisit.Wearehopingthattheweatherwillbegoodsowecandolotsofthings.You’llneedtobringclothesforwarmweatherandaraincoatjustincaseitrains.Apartfromthatwecanprovideeverythingelseyoumightneed.Therearesomanythingstodohere.Firstofallwe’llshowyouourtown.It’squitesmallsoit’seasytofindyourwayaround,andtherearesomeinterestingshops.MaybewecantakeapicnictotheCastlePark.Ithaslovelygardenswithaboatinglakewherewecanhireaboatifyoulike.IftheweatheristoohotwecangoinsidetheCastleMuseum,whichexplainsthehistoryofthetownrightuptothepresentday.ModelanswerSomethingsareverydifferentfromyourcountry.Forastarttheweatherisverychangeableandtheroadsarealwaysbusy.Youmightnoticethecarealmosteveryonetakeswiththeirsmallbutcolourfulgardensatthistimeofyear.Wehopethatyouaregoingtohaveawonderfultimewithus.Haveasafejourney.Exercise7Expertshavediscoveredthatsomepeoplearenotgettingenoughfolicacid,avitaminimportantforhealth,intheirdiet.Theyaresuggestingthatfolicacid(whichisfoundnaturallyinsomegreenvegetables)shouldbeaddedartificiallytobread.Herearesomecommentsfrompeopleyouhavediscussedthiswith:Exercise7‘Idon’tmindaslongasthebreaddoesn’tcostmoreortasteanydifferent.’‘Noway!Ilikemybreadjustasitis.Expertsdon’thavetherighttointerferewithhowIeat!’‘Goodidea!It’llmakeushealthier,andIthinkwe’drathergetfolicacidfrombreadthanfromvegetables.’‘I’magainstit!Wecouldgettoomuchofthisvitamin,orbeunabletoabsorbitfrombread.Wecouldendupbeinglesshealthy.’Exercise7Writealettertoyourlocalnewspapergivingyourviewsonthesuggestion.Yourlettershouldbeabout150-200wordslong.Beginyourletter‘DearEditor’.Donotwriteanaddress.Thecommentsabovemaygiveyousomeideas,butyouarefreetouseanyideasofyourown.Youwillreceiveupto9marksforthecontentofyourarticle,andupto9marksforthestyleandaccuracyofyourlanguage.ModelanswerAsIseeit,addingfolicacidtobreadisagooddevelopment.Wehavelotsofunhealthyadditivesinourfood,sowhyshouldweworryaboutthisvitaminbeingaddedwhenitisgoodforus?Thelabelonsomewhitebreadinshopssaysbleachisoneoftheingredients,whichismuchworseforourhealth.Somereadersareconcernedthatthegovernmentisinterferinginourlivesandtryingtocontrolus.Idon’tagree,asyouarestillfreetomakeyourownbreadifyouwantto.Ialsobelievethataddingthisvitamincouldhelppeoplewhodon’tlikegreenvegetables,orcan’taffordthem,tobehealthier.ModelanswerFurthermore,thesuggestionthatwedon’tknowwhatfolicacidinbreadwoulddotoourlong-termhealthisridiculous.Nooneknowsexactlyhowfoodwillaffectuseventually,asnothinginthefutureisguaranteed;butexpertshavedonescientifictrialstoshowthisideaisreasonablysafe.Iknowmanyofyourreaderswillstillbemakingtheirmindsupaboutthis.Ihopereadingmyviewswillhelppersuadethemthatthisdevelopmentwillbenefitusall.Exercise6Howdoyoufeelaboutbeingtheageyouarenow?Isbeingateenagerthebestorworstagetobe?Writetouswithyourviewsandwe’llpay$10foreveryarticleweprintand$15fortheStararticle!YouhavejustseenthisannouncementinMagical,ateenagemagazine.Exercise6Writeanarticleforthemagazinegivingyourviews.Yourarticleshouldbeabout150-200wordslong.Inyourarticleyoushould:sayhowoldyouareandwhatyouenjoyaboutbeingtheageyouarenowexplainwhatteenagerscanfinddifficultaboutteenagelifesaywhatyouthinkthebestagetobeis.Youwillreceiveupto9marksforthecontentofyourarticle,andupto9marksforthestyleandaccuracyofyourlanguage.ModelanswerIam16yearsoldandwhatIenjoyaboutbeingtheageIamnowisalltheexcitingopportunitiesthatareaheadofme.AlthoughIhaven’tmadeupmymindwhatIwanttodointhefuture,itdoesn’tworryme.Ithinktherearemanychoicesavailableandallmyoptionsarestillopen.WhatmanyofmyfriendsandIfinddifficultisthefactthatatouragewedon’thavemuchmoneyofourown.IfIhadalotofmoneyI’dbuyaDVDplayerforthewholefamily,aswelovewatchingfilms.Also,whenyoudon’thavemoneyyoucan’thelpothers.I’dliketopayoffmyparents’mortgageorbuythemmorelandforourfarm,butIcan’t.ModelanswerWhatisthebestagetobe?I’mnotsure.Ilovedbeingyounger,asIcouldplayallday,butI’malsolookingforwardtobeing24.AroundthatageIwillhavefinishedcollegeandwillperhapshavestartedinagoodcareer.ImightbeabletodosomeofthethingsIhavealwaysdreamedof,liketravellingandseeingtheworld.Exercise7Yourlocalmuseumhasinvitedthepublictomakesuggestionsaboutimprovingthefacilitiesforstudentsandothervisitors.Herearesomeideasfromlocalpeople:‘Itwouldbeinterestingtoknowmoreaboutthethingsinthemuseumbutthelabelsaren’tveryclear.’‘Weneedsomewheretositdownafterlookinground.’‘I’dliketobeabletotouchtheexhibitstoseewhattheyarereallylike.’‘Thebusesonlygopasttheendoftheroad,whichisn’tveryconvenient.’E