專(zhuān)題05讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)之精彩結(jié)尾--新高考滿分作文讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)高分突破好的開(kāi)端需要精彩的結(jié)尾，精彩的結(jié)尾可以吸引讀者的眼球，這是獲取高分的關(guān)鍵。一主題升華1名言警句式結(jié)尾升華主題使用名言結(jié)尾往往能給文章增添文采和說(shuō)服力，同時(shí)也能起到深化主旨的作用，這樣的結(jié)尾可以抒發(fā)感情和渲染氛圍，合理運(yùn)用名言警句可以為讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)起到畫(huà)龍點(diǎn)睛的作用。同時(shí)也應(yīng)當(dāng)注意具體文本具體分析，使用名言警句合理得當(dāng)?！?022年高考浙江卷1月】OnedayIgotwordthathewasadmittedtohospitalforaseriousdisease.IfeltsosorrytohearthatandIthoughtIshouldvisithiminanycase.HewasalittlesurprisedtoseemewhenIsteppedintohiswardwithsomeflowersandfruits.Iofferedtodotherestworkofourprojectandheinvitedmetosharemyideastoperfectit.Webegantoworkasafineteamandfinallyfinishedourprojectontime.OurhardworkpaidoffandDr.Henderson’swasverysatisfiedwithourwonderfulfindings.Fromthisproject,wealsolearnedthesignificanceofteammates.Justasthesayinggoes,onepersoncangofar,butagroupofpersonscantravelfarther.【譯文】有一天，我得到消息，他因重病入院。聽(tīng)到這個(gè)消息，我感到非常遺憾，我想無(wú)論如何我都應(yīng)該去看他。當(dāng)我?guī)е恍r花和水果走進(jìn)他的病房時(shí)，他有點(diǎn)驚訝。我提出做我們項(xiàng)目的其余工作，他邀請(qǐng)我分享我的想法以完善它。我們開(kāi)始作為一個(gè)優(yōu)秀的團(tuán)隊(duì)工作，最終按時(shí)完成了我們的項(xiàng)目。我們的辛勤工作得到了回報(bào)，亨德森博士對(duì)我們精彩的發(fā)現(xiàn)非常滿意。從這個(gè)項(xiàng)目中，我們也了解到了隊(duì)友的重要性。俗話說(shuō)，一個(gè)人可以走得更遠(yuǎn)，但一群人可以走得更遠(yuǎn)?！窘Y(jié)尾升華】Justasthesayinggoes,onepersoncangofar,butagroupofpersonscantravelfarther.2特殊句型結(jié)尾升華主題（強(qiáng)調(diào)句、倒裝句、虛擬語(yǔ)氣等）【2022年新高考全國(guó)1卷】IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.Theracestarted.Itseemedthattherunwaywasextremelylongforyoungchildren,nottomentionachildwithabraindisease.Davidinsistedonrunningasifhehadforgottenallhisweaknesses,thoughhewastrippedoverwithintheafewkilometers.Itdidn’ttakelongbeforehepickedhimselfupagainandcontinuedhismission.Classmatesallappearedontheracingtrack,cheeringforhim.“Comeon!Youcanmakeit!Weareproudofyou!”theyshoutedenthusiastically.Toeveryone’sjoy,hereachedthefinallineandrankedthe20th.Itwasnomoreimportantwhetherhewonthefirstplaceornot.Itwashisbraveheartandstrongfaiththatcouldmakesomethingunusualhappenfinally.【譯文】我看著大衛(wèi)和其他跑步者一起走到起跑線上。比賽開(kāi)始了。對(duì)于年幼的孩子來(lái)說(shuō)，跑道似乎非常長(zhǎng)，更不用說(shuō)患有腦病的孩子了。大衛(wèi)堅(jiān)持要跑，好像他忘記了他所有的弱點(diǎn)，盡管他在幾公里內(nèi)被絆倒了。沒(méi)過(guò)多久，他又重新振作起來(lái)，繼續(xù)他的使命。同學(xué)們都出現(xiàn)在賽道上，為他加油?！皝?lái)吧！你可以做到！我們?yōu)槟愀械津湴?！“他們熱情地喊道。令所有人高興的是，他到達(dá)了最后一條線，排名第20位。他是否獲得第一名并不重要。正是他勇敢的心和堅(jiān)定的信念，才能讓不尋常的事情最終發(fā)生?！窘Y(jié)尾升華】Itwashisbraveheartandstrongfaiththatcouldmakesomethingunusualhappenfinally.3情感升華法【2022年高考浙江卷6月】IwassohappythatIhadearnedmyservicehoursinthisway.Thisexperiencemademerealizethattherearesomanypeopleinthisworldwhoneedourhelp.Italsomademerealizethatoursmallactofkindnesscanmakethemfeelwarmandmakeagreatdifferencetothem.Iwillneverforgetthewaytheylookedatmewhentheyweregivenfood.Iamanxioustourgetheworldtodoeverythingpossibletohelpthoseinneed.【譯文】我很高興我以這種方式贏得了我的服務(wù)時(shí)間。這次經(jīng)歷讓我意識(shí)到，這個(gè)世界上有這么多人需要我們的幫助。這也讓我意識(shí)到，我們的小善舉可以讓他們感到溫暖，并對(duì)他們產(chǎn)生巨大的影響。我永遠(yuǎn)不會(huì)忘記他們得到食物時(shí)看著我的樣子。我急于敦促世界盡一切可能幫助那些有需要的人?！窘Y(jié)尾升華】Iamanxioustourgetheworldtodoeverythingpossibletohelpthoseinneed.二畫(huà)面定格1.人物動(dòng)作的畫(huà)面定格1.【2021年高考浙江卷6月】Iunderstoodimmediatelywhatmyparentswere

worriedabout.TheywereworriedthatIwastooselfishtogive.Irealizedthatmylaborwasveryhard,butmygrowthandourwholefamilyhadbeendependingonthehardworkofmyparents!Dadnevercomplainedaboutunfairness!Heevenseemedtothinkthatwasfair.Ithought,“I’veonlyworkedfortwoweeks,buthowmanyyearsmyfatherhasworked!”Intheevening,Dadcameback.IproudlytookoutmyownmoneyandhandedittoDad.【譯文】我立刻明白了父母在擔(dān)心什么。他們擔(dān)心我太自私了，不能給予。我意識(shí)到我的勞動(dòng)非常辛苦，但我的成長(zhǎng)和我們整個(gè)家庭一直依賴于我父母的辛勤工作！爸爸從不抱怨不公平！他甚至似乎認(rèn)為這是公平的。我想：“我只工作了兩個(gè)星期，但我父親工作了多少年！晚上，爸爸回來(lái)了。我自豪地拿出自己的錢(qián)遞給爸爸?！緞?dòng)作畫(huà)面定格】Intheevening,Dadcameback.IproudlytookoutmyownmoneyandhandedittoDad.2.Hishardworkpaidoff!Holdingthesodatinfirmly,Reubenrushedfortheshoptobuythebrooch.Themomenthegotthebeautifulbrooch,heburstthroughthefrontdoorandplaceditinDora’shand.NeverhadDorareceivedsuchagift.Speechlessandhappy,sheheldhersontightlyintoherarms,withtearswellingupinhereyes.【譯文】他的努力得到了回報(bào)！魯本緊緊地握著汽水罐，沖向商店去買(mǎi)胸針。他一拿到那枚漂亮的胸針，就沖進(jìn)前門(mén)，把它放在朵拉的手里。多拉從來(lái)沒(méi)有收到過(guò)這樣的禮物。她高興得說(shuō)不出話來(lái)，緊緊地把兒子抱在懷里，眼淚涌了出來(lái)?！緞?dòng)作畫(huà)面定格】Speechlessandhappy,sheheldhersontightlyintoherarms,withtearswellingupinhereyes.3.【2021年新高考全國(guó)I卷】Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Whentheirmothersawthedeliciousandperfectbreakfastinfrontofher,shewasverysurprised.Itwasnotonlythegift,buttheloveofthechildrenforherthatmovedherverymuch.Thetwochildrencouldfinishcookingabreakfast,whichshedidn’texpect.Thechildrensaidloudly,“HappyMother’sDay!”Motherhuggedthemtightlyandkissedthemagainandagain.【譯文】雙胞胎把早餐端上樓，叫醒了媽媽。當(dāng)他們的母親看到眼前美味完美的早餐時(shí)，她非常驚訝。讓她非常感動(dòng)的不僅是禮物，還有孩子們對(duì)她的愛(ài)。兩個(gè)孩子能做完早餐，她沒(méi)想到。孩子們大聲說(shuō)：“母親節(jié)快樂(lè)！母親緊緊地抱著他們，一次又一次地親吻他們?！緞?dòng)作畫(huà)面定格】Motherhuggedthemtightlyandkissedthemagainandagain.4.Thebutterflycleanedhertearsontheface，“No.”Godfeltabitrelievedandsaid，“Tomorrowyoucanbecomehumanagain.”Butsheshookherheadandsaid,“No,Iwanttobeabutterflyfortherestofmylife...”Thenthebutterflywouldstaytogetherwithherloverforever.Onthetopofthemountain,sheseemedtoenjoythesunriseandthesunsethappilywiththem.【譯文】蝴蝶擦干了臉上的眼淚，說(shuō)，“不。”上帝松了一口氣，說(shuō)。“明天你就可以變回人類(lèi)了?！钡龘u了搖頭說(shuō)，“不，我想做一輩子蝴蝶...”然后蝴蝶就會(huì)永遠(yuǎn)和她的愛(ài)人在一起。在山頂上，她似乎和他們一起快樂(lè)地享受著日出和日落。【動(dòng)作畫(huà)面定格】Onthetopofthemountain,sheseemedtoenjoythesunriseandthesunsethappilywiththem.2.寫(xiě)景畫(huà)面定格1.【2021年新高考全國(guó)I卷】ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamessnow.JennatoldJefftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff’shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear!Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.【譯文】然后杰夫注意到蒸汽從鍋里噴出來(lái)，蓋子開(kāi)始搖晃。下一分鐘，粥沸騰了，滅火了。珍娜驚慌失措。值得慶幸的是，杰夫保持冷靜，迅速關(guān)掉了煤氣。但是爐子現(xiàn)在一團(tuán)糟。珍娜告訴杰夫清理一下，這樣他們就可以繼續(xù)煮剩下的粥了。但是杰夫的手碰到了熱火器，他發(fā)出了痛苦的叫聲。珍娜讓他把手放在冷水中。然后她聞到了燃燒的味道。哦，天啊！鍋里的那塊面包也變黑了?！緢?chǎng)景畫(huà)面定格】Ohdear!Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.2.【湖南師范大學(xué)附屬中學(xué)2022-2023學(xué)年高三上學(xué)期月考】AndsoitwasthatGeorgeleftallhispaintingequipmenttome.“Youhavethebesttalentandaremostlikelytouseitwell,”hesaid.Afterconsiderablepersuasion,Iacceptedthispreciousgift,insistingthathecouldreclaimitatanytime.Heneverdid,ofcourse,andIstillusemuchofhisequipmenttoday,morethan20yearslater.AsIpaint,IoftenrememberGeorge,hissunnypersonality,generousspiritandunfailingencouragement.Theredtoolboxwitnessedafriendshipthatlastedfor25years—untilthedayhepassedaway.【譯文】就這樣，喬治把他所有的繪畫(huà)設(shè)備都留給了我?！澳阌凶詈玫牟拍埽钣锌赡芎芎玫厥褂盟?，”他說(shuō)。經(jīng)過(guò)相當(dāng)多的勸說(shuō)，我接受了這份珍貴的禮物，堅(jiān)持他可以隨時(shí)收回它。當(dāng)然，他從來(lái)沒(méi)有這樣做過(guò)，20多年后的今天，我仍然使用他的許多設(shè)備。當(dāng)我畫(huà)畫(huà)時(shí)，我經(jīng)常想起喬治，他陽(yáng)光的個(gè)性，慷慨的精神和不懈的鼓勵(lì)。紅色工具箱見(jiàn)證了一段持續(xù)了25年的友誼——直到他去世的那一天?！緢?chǎng)景畫(huà)面定格】Theredtoolboxwitnessedafriendshipthatlastedfor25years—untilthedayhepassedaway.3.Lookingup,IsawthesunshinebrighterthanIeverknewbefore.Isawatreeinthedistanceglistengentlyasitreflectedthesun'srays.Myconsciousnessebbedawaywiththeheat.ItookafewblinksbeforeIlandedwithathud.【譯文】抬頭一看，我看到太陽(yáng)比我以前所知道的還要明亮。我看見(jiàn)遠(yuǎn)處有一棵樹(shù)反射著太陽(yáng)光，發(fā)出柔和的光輝。我的意識(shí)隨著熱度而衰退。我眨了眨眼，然后摔倒在地才猛然回到現(xiàn)實(shí)中，恢復(fù)了知覺(jué)。4.Theskywasabillionpureeyesoflightandthegrassgreenunderfoot,itwasasifnightanddayhadbecomeonebeautifulmoment.Dawnhadcome.【譯文】天空像是十億只純凈的眼睛拼接在一起，腳下是青草，仿佛黑夜和白晝已成為一個(gè)美麗的時(shí)刻。黎明已經(jīng)來(lái)臨。（黎明到來(lái)的畫(huà)面）5.Dawnsentshimmeringraysovertheplacidocean,bestowingagoldenpathfromtheshoretothehorizon.【譯文】黎明在平靜的海面上放射出出閃閃發(fā)亮的光線，留下一條從海岸到地平線橫亙而過(guò)的金色道路。（黎明前的海面）6.Thelingeringsunlightwasobliteratedbytherapidlyfallingnight，resemblingapitch-blackcurtaindrapedoverthesky.【譯文】逗留在天際的最后一縷陽(yáng)光被迅速落下的夜幕擦除，就像是天空被一層漆黑的幕布覆蓋。（日落的美景）7.Kissedbytherainandglistening,thewetgroundiscoldunderfoot.Adenseearthlysweetsmellrisesfromtheground,envelopingeverythingwithinitssoftembrace.【譯文】潮濕的地面走起來(lái)很冷，被雨水親吻后閃閃發(fā)光。一股濃郁的泥土般的香味從地上升起，把一切都包裹在它柔軟的懷抱里。（雨后的清新）三收尾呼應(yīng)首尾呼應(yīng)不僅能強(qiáng)調(diào)主題，引起共鳴，也能使文章結(jié)構(gòu)更加緊湊、嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)和自然。可以起到畫(huà)龍點(diǎn)睛的功能，但是不一定照搬開(kāi)頭原詞，可以使用詞匯替換或者變換句式的方法做到收尾呼應(yīng)?！鹃_(kāi)頭典例1】Itwassummerandmydadwantedtotreatmetoavacationlikeneverbefore.HedecidedtotakemeonatriptotheWildWest.【續(xù)寫(xiě)結(jié)尾1】NeverhadIhadsuchathrillingyetdangerousvacationbefore.ThespecialtriptotheWildWestwasdeeplyengravedinmymind.我從來(lái)沒(méi)有過(guò)這么刺激又危險(xiǎn)的假期。那次去西部的特別旅行，深深地印在我的腦海里。【開(kāi)頭典例2】Ihadaninterestingchildhood.Itwasfilledwithsuprisesandamusements,allbecauseofmymother--loving,sweet,yetabsent-mindedandforgetful.OnestrangefaimlytripwetookwhenIwaseleventellsalotabouther.【續(xù)寫(xiě)結(jié)尾2】Despitemom'sbeingabsent-mindedandforgetful,shewasstillakindandnicemom.盡管媽媽總是心不在焉，健忘，但她仍然是一個(gè)和藹可親的媽媽?！鹃_(kāi)頭典例3】AfunnythinghappenedtoArthurwhenhewasonthewaytoworkoneday.【續(xù)寫(xiě)結(jié)尾3】Whatafunnyday.Arthurcouldn'tstoplaughingwheneverhelookedbackonthishilariousexperience.多么有趣的一天啊，每當(dāng)亞瑟回想起這次歡樂(lè)的經(jīng)歷，他就忍不住笑個(gè)不停。四對(duì)話結(jié)尾以簡(jiǎn)單的對(duì)話形式結(jié)尾，適合記敘文續(xù)寫(xiě)，簡(jiǎn)單靈活，精心構(gòu)建的對(duì)話可以感染讀者，從而起到升華主題的作用。1.【2022年新高考全國(guó)I卷】IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartingline.Thestarter’sgunsounded.Buthehadonlygoneafewmetresbeforehetrippedandfellflatontheground.Myheartsank.AsIstartedtoshoutencouragement,othervoicesaroundmetookupthecall.“ComeonDavid,youcandoit!”Davidpickedhimselfupandstartedagainuntilhecrossedthefinishlinetowildcheersandapplause.Then,whenDavid’scoachslappedhimonthebackandsaidproudly,“Goodjob,David!”hecaughtmyeye,flashedmeatoothygrinandsaid,“Thatwaseasy!”【譯文】我看著大衛(wèi)走到起跑線上。發(fā)令槍響起。但他只走了幾米，就被絆倒在地上。我的心沉了下去。當(dāng)我開(kāi)始大聲鼓勵(lì)時(shí)，我周?chē)钠渌曇艚勇?tīng)了電話?！皝?lái)吧大衛(wèi)，你可以做到的！”大衛(wèi)振作起來(lái)，重新開(kāi)始，直到他在瘋狂的歡呼和掌聲中越過(guò)終點(diǎn)線。然后，當(dāng)大衛(wèi)的教練拍打他的背，自豪地說(shuō)：“干得好，大衛(wèi)！”他吸引了我的視線，沖我露出一個(gè)露齒的笑容，說(shuō)：“這很容易！”2.【2023屆浙江省杭州第二中學(xué)新高三上學(xué)期適應(yīng)性測(cè)試英語(yǔ)試題】Throughitswindow,Edunsawfarawaymeadowsandlakes,andmanymoremountains,awholenewworldemergingbeforehereyes.Thatnight,everybodystayeduplatetoseethestars.Somanystarsclusteringupthere,Edunproposed,“Ineedtotakeapictureofthem.”“Click!”Thecamerafrozethemoment.Radiantwithasmile,EdunapproachedMomandhuggedher,whispering,“Mom,thankyouforhavingmecome!”【譯文】透過(guò)窗戶，艾頓看到了遙遠(yuǎn)的草地和湖泊，還有更多的山脈，一個(gè)全新的世界出現(xiàn)在她的眼前。那天晚上，大家都熬夜看星星。這么多星星聚集在那里，Edun提議，“我需要給它們拍照。“咔嚓！”鏡頭定格了這一刻。艾頓笑容滿面，走近媽媽?zhuān)瑩肀?，低聲說(shuō)：“媽媽?zhuān)x謝你讓我來(lái)！3.【廣東省汕頭市金山中學(xué)2022-2023學(xué)年高三上學(xué)期第二次月考】Asthemusicended，thunderousapplausefilledthestadium.Withthefinalmarksannounced，Maryknewsheachievedhergoalandtearsbegantowellupinhereyes.Assheheadedbacktothedressingroom，Lindacameuptohercheerfullyandheldherhandtightly，“Congratulations!You’vedoneanamazingperformance!Youwin!”Marysmiledhappily，“Iwin.”【譯文】隨著音樂(lè)的結(jié)束，雷鳴般的掌聲充滿了體育場(chǎng)。隨著最后的分?jǐn)?shù)宣布，瑪麗知道她實(shí)現(xiàn)了自己的目標(biāo)，淚水開(kāi)始在她的眼睛里涌出。當(dāng)她回到更衣室時(shí)，琳達(dá)高興地走到她身邊，緊緊地握住她的手，“恭喜！你做了一個(gè)驚人的表演！你贏了！瑪麗開(kāi)心地笑了，“我贏了。4.HerhusbandspoketothedirectorofHeightvale,DoloresHaworth.Soonsheofferedhimajobworkingforthecompany.Shesaid，“Hejusthadabrilliantworkingattitudeandisdefinitelythetypeofemployeewearelookingfor.Iwastold,‘Ifhedoesthisforfree,imaginehisjobsifhewasbeingpaid.’Imethimandhewasalovelyandpoliteyoungmanandhehasalreadystartedworkingforus.”【譯文】她丈夫和Heightvale的主管DoloresHaworth談過(guò)了。很快她就給了他一份為公司工作的工作。她說(shuō)，“他的工作態(tài)度很好，絕對(duì)是我們要找的那種員工。有人告訴我，‘如果他這么做是免費(fèi)的，想象一下他的工作是有報(bào)酬的?！乙?jiàn)過(guò)他，他是個(gè)可愛(ài)又有禮貌的年輕人，他已經(jīng)開(kāi)始為我們工作了。”五結(jié)尾留白結(jié)尾留白，這樣的結(jié)尾給讀者留下思考的空間，引入入勝，從而起到加深主題的作用。1.Whileshewrappedthem,ItookadeepbreathandaskedJoy,“Doyouhavedinnerplans?”IexplainedthatI’dliketowaitabitbeforeIwentbacktothehospital–togiveGraceandherhusbandsometimealonewithbaby.“Wouldyoubeinterestedinjoiningmeinabitetoeat?”Iasked.“I’dloveto,”shereplied,hereyessparklinglikediamonds.And,thiswasthebeginningoftheendtomymonthsofheartbreakfollowingBetsy’sdeath.【譯文】當(dāng)她把它們包起來(lái)的時(shí)候，我深吸了一口氣，問(wèn)Joy：“你晚餐有安排嗎?”我解釋說(shuō)我想等一會(huì)兒再回醫(yī)院——讓Grace和她丈夫有時(shí)間單獨(dú)和孩子在一起?！澳阌信d趣和我一起吃點(diǎn)東西嗎?”我問(wèn)?！拔液軜?lè)意，”她回答，她的眼睛像鉆石一樣閃閃發(fā)光。而且，這是我在Betsy死后幾個(gè)月心碎的結(jié)束的開(kāi)始。2.Thebeggarhesitatedforamoment,thenhedecidedtoopenit.Hedeclaredaloud,“Whocares?Hewantedmetohaveitanyway.Imightaswellenjoyitnow.”Withthat,heunwrappedthewhitetissuepaper,buttohissurprise,therewasnohardrockcandyinside.Instead,intohisfingersfellashinywhitepearlworththousandsofdollars.【譯文】乞丐猶豫了一會(huì)兒，然后決定打開(kāi)它。他大聲宣布:“誰(shuí)在乎呢？不管怎樣，他還是想讓我擁有它。我還不如現(xiàn)在就享受呢?！闭f(shuō)著，他打開(kāi)了白色的紙巾，但令他驚訝的是，里面沒(méi)有硬糖。相反，一顆價(jià)值數(shù)千美元的閃亮的白珍珠掉進(jìn)了他的手指里。即時(shí)練一練(廣東省深圳市光明區(qū)2022-2023學(xué)年高三一模)閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。AMother’sHeartfeltNoteofLoveEverythingseemedtohavechangedformewhenIenteredhighschool.IneversawasinglepersonIknewfrommiddleschool.AthomeIwasjustaslonely.“Mybrothersandsisterallfitin.”Ithought,cominginthedoorafteranotherbaddayatschool.“Whycan’tI?”Momwastherewaitingforme.“Karole,yourbedroom’sadisaster.Whycan’tyoukeepitclean?”ThelastthingIneededwascriticismfrommymother.Whathadhappenedtothemotherwhousedtosnuggle(依偎)withmeonthesofa,lovingmewithcompleteacceptance?WhothoughteverythingIdidwaswonderful?Ididn’tbothertryingtoexplainmyunhappiness.Itwaseasiertohideinmybedroom,withoutsayingaword,likeIdideveryafternoon.Clearingoffsomespace,Isatdownatmydesk.YetanotherthingIwasn’tgoodatanymore.Mygradeshadslippedalongwithmyconfidence.Iturnedtoanewpageinmynotebookandstartedworkingoutthefirstproblem.Almostimmediately,IsawI’dmadeamistake.“Wrongagain!”Ithought.“Youcan’tdoanythingright!”Itorethepaperoutofmynotebook,balleditupinmyfistandthrewitatthewastepaperbasket.Theballlandedonthefloor.Iheardmymother’svoiceinmyhead,“Whycan’tyoukeepyourroomclean?”BythetimeIfinishedmyhomework,thefloorwaslitteredwithcrumpled(弄皺的)paper.ItgavemeakindofsatisfactiontoseethemessI’dmade.Likeitwasproofofallmyshortcomings.EverytimeIlookedatthosecrumpledballs,IremindedmyselfwhatafailureIwas.Butmyunhappinessstayedhiddenaway,justlikethosemistakes.Withmyfaceamaskofindifference,nooneknewwhatIwasreallyfeeling.Whowouldwanttolisten?Oneday,Icamehometoanemptyhouse.ItwasareliefnottobemetwithMom’slatestcomplaint.“NothingIdoisrightinhereyes.”Ithought.“Oranyoneelse’s,includingmine.”注意：1.續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。WhenIopenedmybedroomdoor,Ifrozeatthesightofaneatandorderlyroom._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Isatdownatmydesk,staringatthosewords._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】Onepossibleversion:WhenIopenedmybedroomdoor,Ifrozeatthesightofaneatandorderlyroom.Momhadobviouslydecidedtocleanitherself.Iwassurprisedtoseethecleanfloorbelowmybed.Allthecrumpledpaperhaddisappeared.Exceptone.Asinglesheetlayinplainview.IpickedupthesheetandrecognizedMom’sperfecthandwriting,saying“IhavefoundthatIhavealsobeenverycriticalofyoulately.Forthat,Iamtrulysorry.Ionlyexpectthatyouaretobeyoursamesweetself.”Isatdownatmydesk,staringatthosewords.Aweightseemedtoliftfromme.IrealizedthatMomstilllovedmethesameway.Whenshegothome,IfoundtheconfidencetoletdownmyguardandtalktoherabouthowIfelt.Sheandmyfatherteameduptooffersomeideasthatmighthelp,likejoiningafter-schoolclubs.Iseemedlikeeverythingchangedinhighschool,butoneheartfeltnotesetthestagefortherestofmyteenageyears.【導(dǎo)語(yǔ)】文章以作者的情緒變化展開(kāi)，講述作者因?yàn)樵谛聦W(xué)校的不適應(yīng)導(dǎo)致心情低落，成績(jī)也下降，加上媽媽批評(píng)她不打掃房間，作者更是難受，于是她故意把房間弄得更亂，并且用冷漠來(lái)偽裝自己。直到一天回家看到自己整潔干凈的房間，一切有了變化。【詳解】1.段落續(xù)寫(xiě)：①根據(jù)第一段首句“當(dāng)我打開(kāi)臥室的門(mén)時(shí)，我被房間整潔有序的景象驚呆了”可知，下文可描寫(xiě)作者知道是媽媽打掃了房間，發(fā)現(xiàn)媽媽留的字條，明白了媽媽其實(shí)一直愛(ài)著自己。②根據(jù)第二段首句“我坐在桌前，盯著這些字”可知，下文可描寫(xiě)作者放下防備，主動(dòng)和媽媽交流，并且一起討論該如何適應(yīng)新的學(xué)校生活。2.續(xù)寫(xiě)線索：驚嘆于房間整潔有序——知道是媽媽打掃的——發(fā)現(xiàn)字條——看著上面的話——放下防備主動(dòng)交流——探索適應(yīng)學(xué)校生活的方法——改變，感悟3.詞類(lèi)激活行為類(lèi)①?zèng)Q定做某事：decidetodo/bedeterminedtodo/makeupone’smindtodo②看見(jiàn)：see/spot/notice/find③意識(shí)到：recognize/realize情緒類(lèi)①對(duì)……不滿：becriticalof/beunsastifiedwith③真誠(chéng)的：heartfelt/sincere/【點(diǎn)睛】[高分句型1]IhavefoundthatIhavealsobeenverycriticalofyoulately.（運(yùn)用了that引導(dǎo)的賓語(yǔ)從句）[高分句型2]Whenshegothome,IfoundtheconfidencetoletdownmyguardandtalktoherabouthowIfelt.（運(yùn)用了when引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句和how引導(dǎo)的賓語(yǔ)從句）2.（湖北省九師聯(lián)盟2022-2023學(xué)年高三上學(xué)期質(zhì)量檢測(cè)聯(lián)考試題）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Icouldn’tbelieveit.AsIwalkedintocampus,Isawposterseverywherewiththewords“Throwoutthestudentunionpresident!”onthem.Asmyschoolmatesbeganarrivingoncampus,IwatchedthemgatheraroundthepostersandthenlookedtowardmebecauseIwasthepresident.Atthatmoment,IfeltthatIwastornintopiecesandtriedmybesttostaycalm.WhenIwaselectedthepresident,myfriendssaiditwasoneofthebestcampaignstheyhadeverseen.Istarteditbyorganizingagroupofstudentstoclimbthemountainnearourschool.Whenwereachedthetopofthemountain,itfeltlikewewereatsummercamp.Welaughed,dancedandtoldjokes.Itwasreallyfun.Whileplayinglikelittlechildren,weagreedtodoitagainthefollowingweekanddecidedthateachofuswouldbringanewfriend.Westartedoutwithasmallgroupofhikers.Butasthewordspread,thenumberofparticipantsincreased.Onedayoncampus,Imetagirlinawheelchairandwestartedtalking.HernamewasGrace.Iaskedherifshehadeverbeentothetopofthemountain.Shesaidshehadn’t.ItoldherthatmyfriendsandIwouldcarryherifshewereupforit.Graceacceptedtheoffer.Thenexttimewhenwewentupthemountain,wetookturnstocarryherinherchairallthewaytothemountaintop.ThiswasprobablyoneofthemostmeaningfulthingsIdidduringthecampaign.Bytheend,wehadoverseventy-fivepeopleclimbingthemountainonThursdays,includingGrace.Allofuswhoparticipatedfeltlikewewerepartofsomethingmuchbiggerthanwewere.WewerebuildingacommunityanditfeltgreatandnoonewassurprisedthatIhadwontheelection.注意：1.續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。ButIwassoproudofmyaccomplishmentthatIletmyprideoutofcontrol.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________WhenIrealizedIhadmadeamistake,Idecidedtochange.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】ButIwassoproudofmyaccomplishmentthatIletmyprideoutofcontrol.Ibeganspeakingdowntopeople,demandingtheylistentome.MyfriendsandsupporterstriedtocommunicatetomethatIhadchangedandthatIwasabusingmyposition,butIwasn’tlistening.Itwasn’tlongbeforetheverypeoplewhohadtrustedmebegantoturnagainstme.ButIstillwasn’tpayingattentionandevenhadpublicconflictswiththem.WhenIrealizedIhadmadeamistake,Idecidedtochange.IusedtothinkthatIhadtopretendtoknowwhatIwasdoingandthatIwasincharge.Itwasthatkindofthinkingthatgotmeintotroubleinthefirstplace.Now,Iwasfindingthattheeasiestwaytogainotherpeople’srespectwastoadmittothemwhatIdidnotknow.Ifeltgreatlyashamed.Eventually,Ifinishedmytermaspresident.【導(dǎo)語(yǔ)】本文以人物為線索展開(kāi)，講述了作者通過(guò)努力，克服困難，成功當(dāng)上了學(xué)生會(huì)主席。但很快作者被勝利沖昏了頭腦，驕傲自滿，濫用職權(quán)，最后遭到了眾人的反對(duì)。最后，作者認(rèn)識(shí)到自己的錯(cuò)誤，并且改過(guò)自新。【詳解】1.段落續(xù)寫(xiě)：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“但我對(duì)自己的成就太驕傲了，以至于我的驕傲失去了控制?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫(xiě)作者居高臨下，濫用職權(quán)，甚至引發(fā)沖突。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“當(dāng)我意識(shí)到我犯了一個(gè)錯(cuò)誤時(shí)，我決定改變。”可知，第二段可描寫(xiě)作者為改變做出的行動(dòng)，認(rèn)識(shí)自己的不足，去贏得別人尊重。2.續(xù)寫(xiě)線索：被指責(zé)不對(duì)——發(fā)生沖突——突然意識(shí)到問(wèn)題——愧疚——改變——感悟3.詞匯激活行為類(lèi)①濫用：abuse/misuse②某人陷入麻煩：otrouble/sb.bestuckintrouble③承認(rèn)：admit/acknowledge情緒類(lèi)①羞愧：feelashamed/feelguilty【點(diǎn)睛】[高分句型1].Itwasn’tlongbeforetheverypeoplewhohadtrustedmebegantoturnagainstme.(句中使用who引導(dǎo)的定語(yǔ)從句)[高分句型2].Now,Iwasfindingthattheeasiestwaytogainotherpeople’srespectwastoadmittothemwhatIdidnotknow.(句中使用that引導(dǎo)的賓語(yǔ)從句以及what引導(dǎo)的賓語(yǔ)從句)3.閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫(xiě)，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。Onefall,mywifeElliandIhadasinglegoal:tophotographpolarbears.Wewerestayingataresearchcampoutside“thepolarbearcapitaloftheworld”-thetownofChurchillinManitoba,Canada.Takingpicturesofpolarbearsisamazingbutalsodangerous.Polarbears-likeallwildanimalsshouldbephotographedfromasafedistance.WhenI'mfacetofacewithapolarbear,Ilikeittobethroughacamerawithatelephotolens.Butsometimes，thatiseasiersaidthandone.Thiswasoneofthosetimes.AsElliandIcookeddinner,ayoungmalepolarbearwhowasplayinginanearbylakesniffed,andsmelledourgarlicbread.Thehungrybearfollowedhisnosetoourcamp,whichwassurroundedbyahighwirefence.Hepulledandbitthewire.Hestoodonhisbacklegsandpushedatthewoodenfenceposts.Terrified,ElliandItriedallthebeardefenseactionsweknew.Weyelledatthebear,hitpotshard，andfiredblankshotgunshellsintotheair.Sometimesloudnoiseslikethesewillscarebearsoff.Notthispolarbearthough-hejustkepttryingtoteardownthefencewithhismassivepaws(爪子).Iradioedthecampmanagerforhelp.Hetoldmeahelicopterwasonitsway,butitwouldbe30minutesbeforeitarrived.Makingthebestofthiscloseencounter(相遇),Itooksomepicturesofthebear.ElliandIfearedthefencewouldn’tlastthrough30moreminutesofthebear'spunishment.ThecampmanagersuggestedIusepepperspray.Thesprayburnsthebears’eyes,butdoesn'thurtthem.SoIapproachedouruninvitedguestslowlyand，throughthefence,sprayedhimintheface.Withanangryroar(吼叫),thebearrantothelaketowashhiseyes.注意:1.所續(xù)寫(xiě)短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.至少使用5個(gè)短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)；3.續(xù)寫(xiě)部分分為兩段，每段的開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)已為你寫(xiě)好；4.續(xù)寫(xiě)完成后，請(qǐng)用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)。Paragraph1:Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived._______________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp,thenwerealizedthesprayhadonlyangeredhimevenmore,forheseemedmuchfiercerthistimeandviolentlypushedthefencelikemad.Myheartracedwildly,notknowingwhattodo.Atthiscriticalmoment,Elligrabbedseveralpiecesofgarlicbreadandthrewthemoverthefence.Itworked!Thebearstoppedtheattackandrantothebread.Butitwasn’tlongbeforeheeatupallthebreadandcamebackagain.Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.“Thankgoodnesswearesaved!”Ellicriedout.Oncethehelicopterlanded,wegotontoitinnotime,excitedandrelieved.Whenweweresafeonthehelicopterupintheair,Iwasamazedtothespotthatthebearhadfinallytoredownthefenceandrantowardsthefoodweleftbehind.Iquicklytookoutthecameraandphotographedtherarescene-wewererobbedbyapolarbear.【解析】【分析】本文以事件為線索展開(kāi)，講述了作者和妻子前往被稱(chēng)為“北極熊之都”的加拿大丘吉爾鎮(zhèn)拍攝北極熊。夫妻二人做飯之時(shí)，一頭饑餓的雄性幼熊跟著面包的蒜香味，靠近了營(yíng)地，猛烈撞擊營(yíng)地邊上的鐵絲圍欄。作者和妻子使出渾身解數(shù)，想嚇退這頭熊，不料它“不破籬笆誓不歸”。無(wú)奈之下，作者求助營(yíng)地管理員，被告知救援直升機(jī)要30分鐘后才能趕到，只得先嘗試用胡椒噴霧噴灑北極熊的眼睛，不料這使熊變得更加暴躁，在千鈞一發(fā)之際直升機(jī)及時(shí)趕到，他們得救了的故事。【詳解】1.段落續(xù)寫(xiě)：由第一段首句內(nèi)容“幾分鐘后，熊返回了我們的營(yíng)地?！笨芍谝欢慰擅鑼?xiě)作者夫妻二人如何再次對(duì)付熊及兩人在此過(guò)程中的緊張害怕。由第二段首句內(nèi)容“就在那時(shí)，直升機(jī)趕到了?！笨芍诙慰擅鑼?xiě)作者夫妻二人獲救時(shí)的心情。2.續(xù)寫(xiě)線索：熊返回營(yíng)地——緊張害怕——用面包攻擊——直升機(jī)趕到——快速登上飛機(jī)——熊把籬笆推到——拍下熊“打劫”的畫(huà)面3.詞匯激活行為類(lèi)①激怒：anger/provoke/enrage②抓起：grab/snatchup③拿出：takeout/fetchout情緒類(lèi)①瘋狂的：mad/crazy②興奮的：excited/thrilled【點(diǎn)睛】[高分句型1]thenwerealizedthesprayhadonlyangeredhimevenmore,forheseemedmuchfiercerthistimeandviolentlypushedthefencelikemad.Myheartracedwildly.（for引導(dǎo)的原因狀語(yǔ)從句）[高分句型2]Myheartracedwildly,notknowingwhattodo.（現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語(yǔ)）[高分句型3]Oncethehelicopterlanded,wegotontoitinnotime,excitedandrelieved.(once引導(dǎo)時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句和形容詞作狀語(yǔ))4.（浙江省十校聯(lián)盟2022-2023學(xué)年高三上學(xué)期10月聯(lián)考）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。CharlesRoselivedinthecountrywithhisfather,whotaughthimtoreadandtowrite.Mr.Rosetoldhissonthat,whenhismorninglessonswereover,hemightamusehimselfforonehourashepleased.Therewasarivernearby.Onitsbankstoodthehutofapoorfisherman,wholivedbysellingfish.Hiscarefulwifekeptherwheelgoingearlyandlate.Theybothworkedveryhardtokeepthemselvesabovewant.Buttheyweregreatlytroubledforfearthattheironlysonshouldneverlearntoreadandtowrite.Theycouldnotteachhimthemselves,andtheyweretoopoortosendhimtoschool.Charlescalledatthehutofthisfishermanoneday,toinquireabouthisdog,whichwasmissing.Hefoundthelittleboy,whosenamewasJoe,sitingbythetable,onwhichhewasmakingmarkswithapieceofchalk.Charlesaskedhimwhetherhewasdrawingpictures.“No.Iamtryingtowrite,”saidlittleJoe,“butIknowonlytwowords.ThoseIsawuponas