10滿分攻略轉(zhuǎn)述緊扣主題滿分攻略攻略---概要寫作語言優(yōu)化攻略概要寫作的評(píng)分原則之一是“對(duì)各要點(diǎn)表達(dá)的獨(dú)立性情況”，即要用自己的語言表述原文要點(diǎn)，不能照抄原文的語句。同時(shí)各要點(diǎn)之間應(yīng)注意利用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪^渡銜接詞匯，使所寫的句子連貫流暢。一、優(yōu)化你的語言1．替換單詞、短語在找出文中的要點(diǎn)后，利用替換單詞、短語等方法來增強(qiáng)語言表達(dá)的獨(dú)立性。①利用同義詞(短語)或近義詞(短語)代替原文單詞或短語。②將原文動(dòng)詞短語轉(zhuǎn)換為介詞短語、名詞短語替換成動(dòng)詞短語、動(dòng)詞轉(zhuǎn)換為名詞、形容詞轉(zhuǎn)換為副詞等。2．調(diào)整句式除了用替換單詞、短語等方式增強(qiáng)語言表達(dá)的獨(dú)立性外，還可以采用靈活調(diào)整句式的方式達(dá)到語氣目標(biāo)。(1)長變短：壓縮長的句子和詞組，使其變得短小精悍，如兩個(gè)簡單句整合為一個(gè)并列句或主從復(fù)合句；復(fù)合句或并列句簡化為簡單句、從句簡化為介詞短語或者分詞短語等。(2)主動(dòng)變被動(dòng)：主動(dòng)句變?yōu)楸粍?dòng)句式，更生動(dòng)更符合英語表達(dá)。(3)善用定語從句、名詞性從句、狀語從句、倒裝句、強(qiáng)調(diào)句、省略句等豐富的句型結(jié)構(gòu)等。二、恰當(dāng)過渡銜接概要寫作的評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)之一是上下文的連貫性，要求你有效運(yùn)用一定的銜接手段。3種使上下文連貫的銜接手段①詞匯銜接：運(yùn)用原詞、近義詞或反義詞、上下義詞等的復(fù)現(xiàn)。②邏輯銜接：利用表邏輯關(guān)系的過渡詞銜接上下文，如besides,inaddition,therefore等，在選用過渡銜接詞時(shí)，應(yīng)考慮前后句子之間的內(nèi)在邏輯關(guān)系。③語法銜接：常見的語法銜接有替代和省略。替代：用代詞替代前面的名詞(短語)和句子，用助動(dòng)詞代替前面的動(dòng)詞(短語)。省略：在語境表達(dá)清晰的情況下，為了表達(dá)簡潔，省略上文或下文的某個(gè)詞句?！緦懽餮菔尽块喿x下面短文，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容寫一篇60詞左右的內(nèi)容概要。(2019年6月，浙江高考)Parentseverywherepraisetheirkids.JennBerman,authorofTheAtoZGuidetoRaisingHappyandConfidentKids,says,“We'vegonetotheoppositeextremeofafewdecadesagowheneq\a\vs4\al(parentstendedtobemorestrict).”Bygivingkidsalotofpraise,parentsthinkthey'rebuildingtheirchildren'sconfidence,when,infact,itmaybejusttheopposite.eq\a\vs4\al(Toomuchpraisecanbackfire)and,whengiveninawaythat'sinsincere,makekidsafraidtotrynewthingsortakeariskforfearofnotbeingabletostayontopwheretheirparents'praisehasputthem.Still,don'tgotoofarintheotherdirection.eq\a\vs4\al(Notgivingenoughpraise)eq\a\vs4\al(canbejustasdamagingasgivingtoomuch).Kidswillfeellikeeq\a\vs4\al(they'renot)eq\a\vs4\al(goodenoughorthatyoudon'tcare)and,asaresult,mayseenopointintryinghardfortheiraccomplishments.Sowhatistherightamountofpraise?Expertssaythateq\a\vs4\al(thequality)eq\a\vs4\al(ofpraiseismoreimportantthanthequantity).Ifpraiseissincereandfocusedontheeffortnottheoutcome,youcaneq\a\vs4\al(giveitasoftenasyour)eq\a\vs4\al(childdoessomethingthatdeservesaverbalreward).“Weshouldespeciallyrecognizeourchildren'seffortstopushthemselvesandworkhardtoachieveagoal，”saysDonahue,authorofParentingWithoutFear:LettingGoofWorryandFocusingonWhatReallyMatters.“Onethingtorememberisthatit'stheprocessnottheendproductthateq\a\vs4\al(matters).”Yoursonmaynotbethebestbasketballplayeronhisteam.Butifhe'soutthereeverydayandplayinghard,youshouldpraisehiseffortregardlessofwhetherhisteamwinsorloses.eq\a\vs4\al(Praisingtheeffortandnot)eq\a\vs4\al(theoutcome)canalsomeanrecognizingyourchildwhenshehasworkedhardtocleantheyard,cookdinner,orfinishabookreport.Butwhateveritis,praiseshouldbegivenonacase-by-casebasisandbeproportionateeq\a\vs4\al(相稱的totheamountofeffortyourchildhasputintoit).________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【概要思路點(diǎn)撥】第1步讀懂原文，明確篇章結(jié)構(gòu)本文是議論文，提出當(dāng)前父母對(duì)孩子進(jìn)行過度贊揚(yáng)和不表揚(yáng)是同樣有害的，正確的做法是找到其閃光點(diǎn)進(jìn)行適度的表揚(yáng)，以培養(yǎng)其自信樂觀的心態(tài)。文章四個(gè)自然段，就是4個(gè)意義段，對(duì)應(yīng)4個(gè)要點(diǎn)。第一段：指出過度表揚(yáng)不利于孩子的成長。第二段：對(duì)孩子的表揚(yáng)不足同樣有害。第三段：對(duì)孩子的表揚(yáng)要恰當(dāng)而且適時(shí)。第四段：關(guān)注孩子的努力，不必太過關(guān)注結(jié)果。第2步去次留精，提煉關(guān)鍵信息本文關(guān)鍵信息已在文中用畫線和陰影形式體現(xiàn)，其中畫線詞為與主題句相關(guān)的關(guān)鍵詞，其他則為次要信息。第3步歸納要點(diǎn)，合理轉(zhuǎn)換表達(dá)采用同義轉(zhuǎn)述、句式轉(zhuǎn)換等方法靈活準(zhǔn)確歸納要點(diǎn)，如：①第一段主題句可歸納為要點(diǎn)1：該要點(diǎn)中的“theopposite”可利用同義表達(dá)改為contraryto；“stayontopwheretheirparents'praisehasputthem”(指的是父母對(duì)孩子過度表揚(yáng)而設(shè)定的目標(biāo))可轉(zhuǎn)換為unrealisticgoals。②第二段主題句可歸納為要點(diǎn)2：該要點(diǎn)中的“Notgivingenoughpraise”可轉(zhuǎn)換為inadequatepraise;“they'renotgoodenoughorthatyoudon'tcare”可轉(zhuǎn)換為theyarenotdoingwellortheyareignored。第4步句式多樣，注意過渡銜接句式要多樣，可利用非謂語動(dòng)詞、定語從句和名詞性從句，歸納整合要點(diǎn)。要點(diǎn)1指出過度表揚(yáng)不利于孩子的成長，而要點(diǎn)2說明對(duì)孩子的表揚(yáng)不足同樣有害，由此前兩個(gè)要點(diǎn)為轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系，可利用however銜接；第3個(gè)要點(diǎn)說明要給予恰當(dāng)適時(shí)的表揚(yáng)，由此可知該要點(diǎn)與前兩個(gè)要點(diǎn)是因果關(guān)系可利用therefore銜接；第3個(gè)要點(diǎn)中的恰當(dāng)適時(shí)的表揚(yáng)與第4個(gè)要點(diǎn)中的表揚(yáng)努力為并列關(guān)系，可利用表“并列，順承”的過渡銜接詞匯，如besides,additionally等?！緟⒖挤段摹緾ontrarytothepast,someparentsarelikelytooverpraisetheirkids,makingthemfeelgivenunrealisticgoals.(要點(diǎn)1)eq\a\vs4\al(However)，othersgivetheirkidsinadequatepraise,whichgivesthemafalseideathattheyarenotdoingwellortheyareignored.(要點(diǎn)2)eq\a\vs4\al(Therefore)，praisingthemproperlyandpunctuallyisdefinitelyfavorable.(要點(diǎn)3)eq\a\vs4\al(Additionally)，todosoparentsareadvisedtofocusontheirkids'effortinsteadoftheresult.(要點(diǎn)4)經(jīng)典演練經(jīng)典演練（寧波市2020年新高考適應(yīng)性考試）閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容寫一篇60詞左右的內(nèi)容概要。Itisquitereasonabletoblametrafficjams,thecostofgasandthegreatspeedofmodernlife,butmannersontheroadarebecominghorrible.Everybodyknowsthatthenicestmenwouldbecomefiercetigersbehindthewheel.Itisallrighttohaveatigerinacage,buttohaveoneinthedriver'sseatisanothermatter.Roadpolitenessisnotonlygoodmanners,butgoodsense.Ittakesthemostcool-headeddriversgreatpatiencetogiveupthedesiretobeatbackwhenforcedtofacerudedriving.Ontheotherhand,alittlepolitenessgoesalongwaytowardsreducingthepossibilityofquarrelingandfighting.Afriendlynodorawaveofthanksinanswertoanactofpolitenesshelpstocreateanatmosphereofgood:willandbecomessonecessaryinmoderntrafficconditions.Butsuchbehaviorsofpolitenessarebynomeansenough.Manydriversnowadaysdon'tevenseemabletorecognizepolitenesswhentheyseeit.However,misplacedpolitenesscanalsobedangerous.Typicalexamplesarethedriverwhowavesachildcrossingthestreetatawrongplaceintothepathofoncomingcarsthatmaynotbeabletostopintime.Thesamegoesforencouragingoldladiestocrosstheroadwhereverandwhenevertheywantto.Anexperienceddriver,whosemannersarefaultless,toldmeitwouldhelpifdriverslearnedtocorrectlyjoinintrafficstreamwithoutcausingtotalblockagesthatgiverisetounpleasantfeelings.Unfortunately,modemdriverscan'tevenlearntodr