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——讀后續(xù)寫2022·新高考Ⅰ卷:大衛(wèi)賽跑1.Readthestory2.Predictthestory3.Writethestory目錄情節(jié)主題人物Brainstorming故事的三要素story（葛文山，2022）（衡很亨，2023）情節(jié)設(shè)計主題揭示續(xù)寫出“與給定材料有邏輯銜接、情節(jié)和結(jié)構(gòu)完整的短文”（教育部考試中心，2015）人物塑造Brainstorming讀后續(xù)寫的三大任務(wù)1Readthestory閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Winstonwatchedrainpourdown.Hesighed.“Thisisjusttypical!Schoolholidaysandit

rains!"Hisyoungersister,Hannahdidn'tanswerandcarriedonrolingaroundthefloorwith

Grandma'sdog,Mac.Amomentlater,thedooropenedand16-year

old

Sophie,

headphonesglued

asusualtoherears,boundedupstairs.Maccertainlyneedednosecondchanceandwasoutofthe

room

andintothegardenbefore

Hannahcouldgettoherfeet.Winstonyelled,“We'resupposedtokeephimin.Hedoesn'tknow

hiswayaroundthisendoftown."Grabbingtwocoats,Hannahjoinedherbrotheronthestep,just

intimetoseetheblackandwhitedogwalkslowlyuptheroad.“NotimetoleaveanotetoMom,”Winstondecided,takingcharge.“Let'sgethim.Thelastthing

Grandma

needstoknowwhenshe's

inhospitalisthatwe'velostherdog,"headded.ThetwochildrenrushedtowardMac.Wagging(擺動)histailenergetically,heracedofftowardthepark.Macledthemtowardthegatewaytothetownparkandsetoffatoncetowardtheduckpond.WinstonandHannahwereclosebehindbutcannoned(猛撞)roundthecormerstraightintoawomanpushingababycarriage.“Watchwhereyou'regoing,”sheyelled.“Sorry,"theysaid.“Ican'tseeMacanymore,"Winstonannouncedwhenthewomanhadgoneonherway.AfewminutesofracingalongthepathsintheparkfinallyconvincedthechildrenthattheyhadlostMac,“We'renevergoingtofindhimbyourselves,"Hannahsaid.“Abus!Comeon!Let'sgohomeandphoneMom,”Winstonshouted.BeforeHannahcouldargue,hehadpulledhissisterontothebusandpaidtheirfares.Later,Hannahdidtrytotellhimthatthebuswasgoingthewrongwaybutbythenitwasmuchtoolate.Theybothrealizedtheyweregoingeastinsteadofwest.Hannahburstintotears.Shecried,“I'mcold.I'mscaredbecausewe'llbeinREALtroublenow.We'velostMac!"注意：1．續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2．請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Paragraph1：Thebusturnedaroundacornerandasmallhousecameintoview.___________________________________________________________________Paragraph2：Theyrodethebushomewiththedog.___________________________________________________________________1.閱讀全文，確定背景(Readforsetting)time(When)place(Where)character（Who）

background(What)settingWinston,Hannah(sister),Sophie(16),Mom,Grandma;MacAmomentlater,afewminutes,later（過去時）Room,Park,Bus;asmallhouseWinstonwatchedrainpourdown.Schoolholidaysanditrains!2.畫故事山，構(gòu)情節(jié)線和情感線(Readforplotsandemotions)risingactionfallingactionendingplotsbeginningemotionsclimaxAsmallhousecameintoview.Macwasoutoftheroom.Thetwochildren(HannahandWinston)rushedtowardsMac.Theyrodethebushomewiththedog.TheyhavelostMac.HannahandWinston:anxiousanddecidedHannahandWinston:urgentHannahandWinston:worriedHannahandWinston:surprisedHannahandWinston:happy2PredictthestoryParagraph1:Thebusturnedaroundacornerandasmallhousecameintoview.Paragraph2:Theyrodethebushome

withthedog.銜接句1.Who’shouse2.DidtheyfindthedogWhereandwhy1.Whathappenedathome2.Whoelsecareaboutthedog3.根據(jù)故事山，預(yù)測情節(jié)和主題(Predicttheplotsandtheme)主題句口訣：兩段首句定一框，二框二首正能量3.根據(jù)故事山，預(yù)測情節(jié)和主題(Predicttheplotsandtheme)回應(yīng)前文/點出主題1.lost-found2.rain-dryoff3.worried-don’tworry3.根據(jù)故事山，預(yù)測情節(jié)和主題(Predicttheplotsandtheme)口訣：兩段首句定一框，二框二首正能量銜接句主題句Aftertheygothome,Adamwenttohisroomandregrettedhavingdonethat.“Whathappened”sheaskedwithconcern.Step1:MaincontentsofPara2andpositiveending.Step2:MaincontentsofPara1andlinkingsentence.Let'sgethimhomeanddryhimoff.Hannahsaidbrightly.“He'shadalovelyday.Notroubleatall!”4.Draftforwriting一個角色的所言、所行、所感、所想會引起其他角色的一系列反應(yīng)。ActionResponse銜接句Thebusturnedaroundacornerandasmallhousecameintoview.Para1主題句Theyrodethebushome

withthedog.Para2Let'sgethimhomeanddryhimoff.Hannahsaidbrightly.“He'shadalovelyday.Notroubleatall!”3WritethestoryTip1forwriting口訣：人物時態(tài)和事件，語言特色不要變58細節(jié)添加法Tip2forwritingToshowin3aspects:①Bodylanguage②Facialexpression③Voice?Toshow,nottotell.(王初明“寫長法”)Telling:Hefoundthedog.Showing:bodylanguage+facialexpression肢體語言+面部表情Hestaredinamazement

atasmall,verywetandblackandwhitedogsittingonthedoorstep,waitingpatiently.Tip2forwritingToshow,nottotell.(王初明“寫長法”)Tip3forwriting語言協(xié)同：創(chuàng)造性的模仿（原文風(fēng)格）原文:“Let’sgethim.ThelastthingGrandmaneedstoknowwhenshe’sinhospitalisthatwe’velostherdog,”headded.寫作:“Ohyoumustn'tworry,Grandma,”Hannahsaidbrightly.“He'shadalovelyday.Notroubleatall!”negative:worriedpositive:lovely;notrouble評分標準參考【優(yōu)秀作文賞析】Paragraph1:Thebusturnedaroundacornerandasmallhousecameintoview.“Ohlook,"saidWinston.“Grandma'shouse.Oh...”Hestaredinamazementatasmall,verywetandblackandwhitedogsittingonthedoorstep,waitingpatiently.Thechildren

gotoffthebusatthe