WritingWorkshopUnit2SuccessWhoisthepersonyouadmiremostinyourlife?LEADINGINPairWorkYouaregoingtowritealifestoryofapersonyoulikeoradmire.Discusswithyourpartner.GETREADYFORWRITING·Whoareyougoingtowriteabout?·Whatisspecialabouthim/her?·Whatbigeventsdidhe/sheexperienceinhis/herlife?GETREADYFORWRITINGI'mgoingtowriteaboutYaoMing.Hewasabasketballplayerandhewasreallytall.Inmyopinion,hewasthebestChinesebasketballplayerwhoplayedfortheNBA.Readthearticle.Answerthequestions.1.WhoisLangPing?2.WhywasLangPingnamed"IronHammer"?READFORWRITINGLangPingisoneofChina'smostrecognisedathletes.Herstrongandpowerfulplayingstyleearnedherthename"IronHammer".3.WhatisLangPing'sexperienceasanathlete?READFORWRITINGInthe1984Olympics,China'steamwonthegoldmedal.WithLangPing'shelp,theteamachievedaseriesofamazingwinsfrom1981to1985,includingtheWorldCup,OlympicsandtheWorldChampionship.4.WhatisLangPing'sexperienceasacoach?READFORWRITINGAfterretiringasanathletein1986,shehasbeensuccessfulasavolleyballcoachintheUnitedStatesandItaly.In1995,shereturnedtobecomethecoachofthewomen'snationalteamwhowonthe2015WorldCup.5.WhydopeoplelikeLangPing?READFORWRITINGPeoplelikehernotonlybecauseofherdevotiontohercareer,butalsobecauseofherhugeinfluenceonthesportofvolleyball.FOCUSONSTRUCTUREANDLANGUAGELabeltheparagraphs(a-c)intheboxesofeachparagraph.a.importantlifeorworkexperiencesofthepersonb.generalintroductionofthepersonc.majorawardsandcommentsPara1:_____Para2:_____Para3:_____Para4:_____baacWrite2-3sentencesaboutthepersonthatyouaregoingtowriteabout.UsetheSentenceBuildertohelpyou.FOCUSONSTRUCTUREANDLANGUAGEFOCUSONSTRUCTUREANDLANGUAGETimeExpressions(1)duringLangPingplayedonChina'snationalvolleyballteamduringthe1980s.atLangwasamemberoftheteamwhentheyachievedaseriesofsuccessincludinggoldmedalsatthe1984Olympics...SentenceBuilderFOCUSONSTRUCTUREANDLANGUAGEAfterAfterretiringasanathletein1986shehasbeensuccessfulasavolleyballcoachintheUnitedStatesandItaly.thatyearThatyear,LangPingwasgiventheBestCoachandtheSportsSpecialContributionawards...SentenceBuilderTuYouyou,agreatscientist,devotedmostofhertimetofindingthecureformalaria.In2015,shewasawardedtheNobelPrizeinMedicinefordiscoveringartemisinim,whichisthekeytothetreatmentofmalaria.FOCUSONSTRUCTUREANDLANGUAGEALIFESTORY生活故事是通過描寫人物，即通過文字間接地把人物的外貌、性格等呈現(xiàn)給讀者。生活故事的特點(diǎn)是通過某個(gè)故事用語言描繪人物的外表、行為、心理活動(dòng)等。ALIFESTORY一、內(nèi)容劃分第一部分：引入話題（生活故事所涉及的人物的評(píng)價(jià)等）；第二部分：具體介紹（故事發(fā)生的時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)、方式、過程、結(jié)果等）；第三部分：總結(jié)評(píng)價(jià)（呼應(yīng)第一段，總體評(píng)價(jià)或作者的感想）。ALIFESTORY二、寫作要點(diǎn)1.選好角度，順序合理角度是指用第一人稱還是第三人稱來描寫人物。用第一人稱時(shí)，主要是本人的經(jīng)歷或耳聞目睹之事，用第三人稱時(shí)，則主要是他人的經(jīng)歷。ALIFESTORY二、寫作要點(diǎn)1.選好角度，順序合理順序是指以怎樣的順序描寫人物，刻畫人物的性格。一般采用從外表到內(nèi)心活動(dòng)的敘述，把描寫的重點(diǎn)放在與其他人物的不同之處。ALIFESTORY2.突出重點(diǎn)，選材得當(dāng)發(fā)生在一個(gè)人物身上的事很多，寫作時(shí)，我們既要抓住其顯著的、與眾不同的方面，也要抓住能體現(xiàn)人物性格的主要活動(dòng)和事件。ALIFESTORY3.稍加評(píng)論，畫龍點(diǎn)睛在描述和敘述中，要敘述與評(píng)價(jià)相結(jié)合，不要一味地?cái)⑹觯獙?duì)人物實(shí)時(shí)評(píng)價(jià)，突出人物性格。ALIFESTORY4.語言精練，時(shí)態(tài)準(zhǔn)確在對(duì)生活故事人物描寫中，語言要簡短精練，故事要生動(dòng)感人。另外，時(shí)態(tài)的使用要根據(jù)實(shí)際情況而定。ALIFESTORY三、常用表達(dá)1.wasborninapoor/richfamily出生在一個(gè)貧窮/富裕的家庭2.beverystrictwith...對(duì)……嚴(yán)格要求3.duringone'schildhood在童年時(shí)期4.beinterestedin.../befondof...對(duì)……感興趣/喜歡ALIFESTORY5.dowellin...在……方面做/學(xué)得很好6.haveagiftforsth.對(duì)某事有天賦7.devoteone'slife/timeto把某人的生命/時(shí)間奉獻(xiàn)給8.winagoldmedal/firstprize贏得金牌/一等獎(jiǎng)ALIFESTORY9.setagoodexampletosb.為某人樹立好榜樣10.speak/thinkhighlyof高度評(píng)價(jià)11.beregardedas被視為12.berespected/admiredby受到尊敬/欽佩COMPOSEYOURWRITINGFindmoredetailedinformationaboutthepersonyouaregoingtowriteabout.TuYouyoustudiedatthedepartmentofpharmaceuticsofBeijingMedicalCollege.Afterearningadegreetherein1955,shewaschosentojointheInstituteofMateriaMedicaattheAcademyofTraditionalChineseMedicine(latertheChinaAcademyofChineseMedicalSciences).COMPOSEYOURWRITINGFrom1959to1962,sheparticipatedinafull-timetrainingcourseintheuseoftraditionalChinesemedicinethatwasgearedtowardresearcherswithknowledgeofWesternmedicine.ThecourseprovidedafoundationforherlaterapplicationoftraditionalChinesemedicalknowledgetomoderndrugdiscovery.)COMPOSEYOURWRITING2.OutliningCompletetheoutlineoftheperson'slifestorybasedonActivity3.3.DraftingUseyouroutlineandtheWritingHelptowriteyourfirstdraft.WritingHelpWritinganInvitationLetterIt'simportantto:·focusonwhatisspecialaboutthepersonyouarewritingabout;·chooseimportanteventsandachievementstoshowwhyhe/sheisspecial;·usetimeexpressionstodescribepasteventsorexperiences;·usepasttensestowriteabouteventsinthepast.COMPOSEYOURWRITINGCOMPOSEYOURWRITING4.EditingEdityouressayinpairs.Thensharewhatyouhavewritteninclass.Doesthewritingshowtheperson'sspeciality?Doesthewriteruseimportanteventstoshowhis/herspeciality?Doesthewriterusecorrecttenses?Doesthewriterusepropertimeexpressions?Canyougetanimageoftheperson'spersonalityfromthewriting?COMPOSEYOURWRITINGIammorethanhappytowriteaboutmyfavoritescientist,whosenameisTuYouyou.TuYouyou,agreatscientists,devotedmostofhertimetofindingthecureformalaria.In2015,shewasawardedtheNobelPrizeinMedicinefordiscoveringartemisinim,whichisthekeytothetreatmentofmalaria.Sogreatishercontributiontotheworldthathehasbecomeanidolofmanypeople,includingme.Inspiredbyherstory,Idecidedtostudyhardersoastorealizemydream.Ihopeherstorycanalsohaveapositiveeffectonyouall.SampleWritingPRACTICE請(qǐng)根據(jù)霍英東的有關(guān)信息寫一篇短文。1.1923年5月，出生于香港，兒時(shí)家境貧困，七歲喪父；2.三十多歲時(shí)，經(jīng)營建筑、航運(yùn)、石油等。歷經(jīng)艱難，終成為海內(nèi)外知名的成功商人；3.改革開放以來，先后捐資支持國內(nèi)教育、文化、體育和福利事業(yè)款項(xiàng)達(dá)100多億港元；4.2007年被評(píng)選為“感動(dòng)中國”人物。Dr.HuoYingdongwastakenasoneofthemostfamousbusinessmenintheworld.HewasborninapoorfamilyinHongKonginMay,1923.Unfortunately,whenhewasattheageofseven,hisfatherdiedofillness.Asaresult,helivedinpovertyallthroughhischildhood.Hewentthroughallkindsofdifficultiesinhislife.Hewasengagedinarchitecture,shippingandpetroloneafteranother.HeOnepossibleversion:PRACTICEworkedhardandearnedgreatwealth.Hewassuchasuccessinbusinessthathebecamefamousallovertheworldinhisthirties.Sincethebeginningofthereformandopenpolicy,hehaddonatedover10billionHKdollarstosponsoreducation,culture,sports,publicwelfareinmainland.Becauseofhisgreatcontributionstoconstructingandbenefitingourcountry,DrHuoYingdongwasmadea"TouchingChinaPersonality"