讀后續(xù)寫2020.6山東（新高考）:爆米花救助窮人11分鐘確立中立+情節(jié)2萬能情境表達(dá)公式34核對與糾正目錄CONTENTS1分鐘快速閱讀2020山東試題再現(xiàn)歷年高考英語讀后續(xù)寫真題分析1.TheMeredithfamilylivedinasmallcommunity．Astheeconomywasindecline，somepeopleinthetownhadlosttheirjobs．Manyoftheirfamilieswerestrugglingtomakeendsmeet．Peopleweretryingtohelpeachothermeetthechallenges．2.Mrs.Meredithwasamostkindandthoughtfulwoman．Shespentagreatdealoftimevisitingthepoor．Sheknewtheyhadproblems，andtheyneededallkindsofhelp．Whenshehadtime，shewouldbringfoodandmedicinetothem．3.Onemorningshetoldherchildrenaboutafamilyshehadvisitedthedaybefore．Therewasamansickinbed，hiswife，whotookcareofhimandcouldnotgoouttowork，andtheirlittleboy．Thelittleboy﹣hisnamewasBernard﹣hadinterestedherverymuch．4."Iwishyoucouldseehim，"shesaidtoherownchildren，John，Harry，andClara．"Heissuchahelptohismother．Hewantsverymuchtoearnsomemoney，butIdon'tseewhathecando．"5.Aftertheirmotherlefttheroom，thechildrensatthinkingaboutBernard．"Iwishwecouldhelphimtoearnmoney，"saidClara．"Hisfamilyissufferingsomuch．"6."SodoI，"saidHarry．"Wereallyshoulddosomethingtoassistthem．"7.Forsomemoments，Johnsaidnothing，but，suddenly，hesprangtohisfeetandcried，"Ihaveagreatidea!Ihaveasolutionthatwecanallhelpaccomplish（完成）．"8.Theotherchildrenalsojumpedupallattention．WhenJohnhadanidea，itwassuretobeagoodone．"Itellyouwhatwecando，"saidJohn．"YouknowthatbigboxofcornUncleJohnsentus？Well，wecanmakepopcorn（爆米花），andputitintopaperbags，andBernardcantakeitaroundtothehousesandsellit．"

WhenMrs．MeredithheardofJohn'sidea，shethoughtitwasagoodone，too._____________________

Witheverythingready，Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.__________________________________11分鐘快讀閱讀忽略無效細(xì)節(jié)230秒定中心：個人成長關(guān)系幫助救助困難330秒7詞定情節(jié)大綱：轉(zhuǎn)折式直線發(fā)展式1分鐘快讀讀的快讀得準(zhǔn)歷年英語讀后續(xù)寫精講01Para.1:

WhenMrs．MeredithheardofJohn'sidea，shethoughtitwasagoodone，too.當(dāng)Meredith太太聽到了John的主意，她也覺得非常棒。Para.2:Witheverythingready，Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.一切準(zhǔn)備就緒，Bernard開始了自己的新生意。獲知：John想出主意，得到Meredith太太的支持，幫助Bernard開始生意。疑問：Bernard有什么困難？新生意是什么？人物關(guān)系？（如何幫助？生意進(jìn)展如何？）

段首句分析1.TheMeredithfamilylivedinasmallcommunity．Astheeconomywasindecline，somepeopleinthetownhadlosttheirjobs．Manyoftheirfamilieswerestrugglingtomakeendsmeet．Peopleweretryingtohelpeachothermeetthechallenges．2.Mrs.Meredithwasamostkindandthoughtfulwoman．Shespentagreatdealoftimevisitingthepoor．Sheknewtheyhadproblems，andtheyneededallkindsofhelp．Whenshehadtime，shewouldbringfoodandmedicinetothem．3.Onemorningshetoldherchildrenaboutafamilyshehadvisitedthedaybefore．Therewasamansickinbed，hiswife，whotookcareofhimandcouldnotgoouttowork，andtheirlittleboy．Thelittleboy﹣hisnamewasBernard﹣hadinterestedherverymuch．4."Iwishyoucouldseehim，"shesaidtoherownchildren，John，Harry，andClara．"Heissuchahelptohismother．Hewantsverymuchtoearnsomemoney，butIdon'tseewhathecando．"5.Aftertheirmotherlefttheroom，thechildrensatthinkingaboutBernard．"Iwishwecouldhelphimtoearnmoney，"saidClara．"Hisfamilyissufferingsomuch．"6."SodoI，"saidHarry．"Wereallyshoulddosomethingtoassistthem．"7.Forsomemoments，Johnsaidnothing，but，suddenly，hesprangtohisfeetandcried，"Ihaveagreatidea!Ihaveasolutionthatwecanallhelpaccomplish（完成）．"8.Theotherchildrenalsojumpedupallattention．WhenJohnhadanidea，itwassuretobeagoodone．"Itellyouwhatwecando，"saidJohn．"YouknowthatbigboxofcornUncleJohnsentus？Well，wecanmakepopcorn（爆米花），andputitintopaperbags，andBernardcantakeitaroundtothehousesandsellit．"

WhenMrs．MeredithheardofJohn'sidea，shethoughtitwasagoodone，too._____________________

Witheverythingready，Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.__________________________________1段主題句：段尾句鄰里互助友愛。1段主題句：段首句Meredith太太樂于助人34主題句：Meredith太太講述窮人孩子Bernard的故事5678主題句：

共同想辦法幫助1分鐘快讀忽略無效細(xì)節(jié)的關(guān)鍵心中有中心，目標(biāo)明確，心無旁騖?。?！好主意是什么？新生意是什么？人物關(guān)系1分鐘確立中心7詞定情節(jié)大綱歷年英語讀后續(xù)寫0230秒確定中心個人成長/人與人的關(guān)系/幫助/解決困難雙主題合并：幫助孩子的成長故事類型歷年高考英語讀后續(xù)寫真題分析矛盾轉(zhuǎn)折式3個詞：矛盾

轉(zhuǎn)變誘因

轉(zhuǎn)變直線上升式

4個詞：行動

進(jìn)展

結(jié)果

升華

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第一段順利發(fā)展WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.

當(dāng)meredith太太聽說john的主意，她也覺得這是個很棒的主意。行動：準(zhǔn)備Theywenttothesupermarkettobuymaterials.

進(jìn)展：制作爆米花Theybegantomakepopcorn.結(jié)果：成功Theymadealotofpopcorn.（銜接）TheytookthepopcorntoBernard’s.Paragraph2Paragraph2：

第二段順利發(fā)展Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.一切準(zhǔn)備就緒，bernard開始了自己的新生意行動：開始賣爆米花Hewentdoortodoortosellpopcorn.進(jìn)展：生意狀況Hesoldallthepopcorn.結(jié)果：表達(dá)感激中心：bernard學(xué)會獨(dú)立表達(dá)感激鄰里和諧愛

John長大懂事歷年高考英語讀后續(xù)寫真題分析易跑題陷阱：如何做爆米花？如何賣爆米花？歷年高考英語讀后續(xù)寫真題分析03萬能模版拓細(xì)節(jié)經(jīng)過了四套真題的講解，相信大家已經(jīng)對常用模版比較熟悉了，這里復(fù)習(xí)一下：1情緒心理模版2語言對話模版承接語言模版3動作模版：兩動作連用三動作連用（后面動詞改成非謂語）4簡單敘事模版5混合元素模版：二混合三混合（語言動作心理情緒）6中心模版：強(qiáng)調(diào)模版轉(zhuǎn)折模版7常用銜接模塊8皇冠情緒模塊9短句子的拓展（本句話內(nèi)）10單一句子變成復(fù)合句式經(jīng)驗總結(jié)：1中心>情節(jié)>句型>短語>單詞

（中心吻合情節(jié)合理通順句子流暢=17分）

（中心吻合情節(jié)合理通順句子句式充分=19–21）2中心不模糊3情節(jié)不跑題情節(jié)大綱簡單通順

（簡單的大綱能幫助我們不跑題更容易套用模版補(bǔ)充細(xì)節(jié)）4無句型不寫作句型的變化（不熟悉的時候可以把情節(jié)大綱和常用句型模版寫到稿紙上）5想著情節(jié)配句型邊寫邊考慮句子的長度和飽滿度）從這次課開始，我們正式進(jìn)入情節(jié)的構(gòu)思指導(dǎo)環(huán)節(jié)。先解決情節(jié)問題，再幫助進(jìn)行句型模版的套用。句型模版是英文的基礎(chǔ)和水平。情節(jié)構(gòu)思是中文記敘文的寫作水平。因為我們的續(xù)寫只有150詞，10–12句，且文章情節(jié)簡單，重復(fù)性強(qiáng)，因此寫好續(xù)寫不是難題。好，馬上開動歷年高考英語讀后續(xù)寫真題分析一陌生情境如何構(gòu)思（直播精講）陌生無思路情境1:怎么為做爆米花做準(zhǔn)備？思路舉例：陌生復(fù)雜情境日?；攀龌睘楹喸趺礈?zhǔn)備？去超市購置需要的東西Sotheyheadedto

thelocalsupermarket

togethertomakeprepareationsforthecookingpopcorn，and/wheretheyboughtabagofcornand

somespecialbagsforpopcorn.（動作模版：雙動詞或者三動詞）陌生無思路情境2：怎么做爆米花？在某人幫助下/克服重重困難，終于做成怎么做成：很不容易做成，做完裝袋WiththehelpofMrMeredith,Johneventuallysucceededinmakingdecilicouspopcornandputthemintospecialbags.在meredith太太的幫助下，John終于做好了美味的爆米花，并且裝進(jìn)了特別的袋子里敘事模版：succeedin/failin/manageto/makegreateffortsto/makegreatprogress等等withthehelpof歷年高考英語讀后續(xù)寫真題分析二時間空間內(nèi)容跨度大的情節(jié)如何處理？如何避免流水賬？（去鄰居家—告訴對方，對方反應(yīng)）情境：跨越距離，跨越時間，推動故事快速發(fā)展模版：串聯(lián)情節(jié)模版到了那里告知了一切g(shù)otoBernard’shome,tellhimeverythingWiththepopcorn,theywenttoBernard’shomeandtoldeverythingtohim.高手表達(dá)升級：英語中超高頻的with結(jié)構(gòu)withsth“帶著東西”“帶著表情”with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)witheverythingready/withhisheadlowed/withhiseyesfixedonsthwentandtold可以轉(zhuǎn)換成went,tellingdoing可以做伴隨或者結(jié)果狀語因此很好用歷年高考英語讀后續(xù)寫真題分析幫助情節(jié)如何使用句型？感激感動幫助后的感激感動模版(常用：擁抱givesbahug;感謝expressgratitudetosb;tearswelledupinhereyes感動surprisedandmoved,witha…lookonhisface)Surprisedandmoved,Bernardandhisparentsexpressedtheirgratitudetothetimelyhelpofferedbytheirthoughtfulneighbors.驚訝又感動，Bernard和他的父母表達(dá)了對熱心鄰居的深深感激。短句子本身的延長：定語從句或者后置定語豐富名詞歷年高考英語讀后續(xù)寫真題分析陌生情節(jié)？陌生情節(jié)：賣爆米花的過程情節(jié)思路一：取起始點(diǎn)和結(jié)束點(diǎn)。He

tookthepopcornaround

totheneighbourhoodandknockedatthedoorsoftheneighbours.Tohisastonishment,hispopcornwasquicklysoldoutinonlytwohours.他帶著爆米花去到每一家，敲開了鄰居的門。讓他驚訝的是，他的爆米花竟然僅僅兩個小時就賣光了。情節(jié)思路二：聚焦寫對話交流+交流結(jié)果（缺的情節(jié)用簡單句+and處理）Heknockedattheneighbors’doors,explainingthathewouldliketosellpopcornsandmakesomemoneyforhisfamily.Tohisastonishment,allhisneighborssupportedhimandhispopcornwasquicklysoldoutinonlytwohours.他敲開了鄰居的門，解釋說自