讀后續(xù)寫training12345三大原則試題文本寫作過程得分技巧評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)目錄CONTENTS1ThreePrinciples

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ThreePrinciples

1.coherence原文一致原則內(nèi)容要前后銜接，上下連貫3.positivity正能量原則傳達的主題要積極2.twist曲折性原則故事的發(fā)展要曲折變化2試題文本TWO閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。PamBalesplannedasix-hourhikethroughNewHampshire’sMount.Onthedashboard(汽車儀表板)wasadetailedplanensuringshecouldreturnbeforethearrivalofsomeforecastedbadweather.Differentfromformerhike,though,thistime,shehadpackedforalmosteveryaccidentandintendedtowalkalone.Atabout8a.m.,she’dcheckedtheweatherforecast.Balesknewfromexperiencethatherhikewasrealistic.Besides,shehadtwoemergencyplansandextralayersofclothingtobetterprotecthercoretemperatureasconditionschanged.Balesfeltexcitedasshewalkedupintosnowypaths.Shewaswearingafleecetanktop(絨衣)anhikingpants,andnoglovesorhatbecausetheairwasmild.Thirtyminuteslater,sheclimbedintocolderairanddeepersnows.Shenowwasinaquarter-zipfleecetopandgloves.At10a.m.,theweatherwasshowingitsteeth.Balesaddedmorelayerstoresistcoldwindsanddensefog.Makingherwayacrossthesnow-coveredridge,shenoticedsomething:asinglesetoffootprintsmadebyapairofsneakers.Notgivingthemmuchthought,shewalkedon.閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。By11a.m.,Baleswasgettingcold.Shedecidedtoreturntohercar.Onherwaydown,sheagainspottedthesneakertracks,whichsuddenlymadeahardleft-handturnoffthetrail.Nowshefeltgenuinelyalarmed.Shewassurethehikerlosthiswayinthelowvisibility.IfBalescontinuedtofollowthetracks,she’daddriskandtimetoherreturn.Butshecouldn’tletthisgo.Sheturnedtotheleftandcalledout,“Hello!”Nothing.Balesfollowedthetracks,roundedaslightcornerandsawamansittingmotionless.Heworetennissneakers,shorts,alightjacketandfingerlessgloves.Hisskinwaspaleandhehadaglazed(呆滯的)lookonhisface.“Oh,hello,”Balesapproachedandsaid,“What’syourname?”Themandidn’treact.Obviously,nothingwasconnectingforhimandhewasinreallybigtroubleMainidea本文以人物為線索展開，講述了帕姆·巴勒斯計劃在新罕布什爾州的華盛頓山州立公園徒步六小時，不到一小時后，她已經(jīng)爬進了更冷的空氣和更深的雪中。她穿過白雪覆蓋的山脊，向華盛頓山進發(fā)。然后她注意到了一件事：她前面的雪上有一組腳印。她一整天都在跟蹤微弱的軌跡，并沒有給它們太多的思考，因為有太多人爬珠爾小道。但她意識到，這些鞋是由一雙運動鞋制成的，不適合在雪地上徒步旅行。后來，她在一個小角落，看見一個人一動不動地坐著。83寫作過程THREEI.準(zhǔn)確理解材料，理清人物事件。

Task1.淺層信息理解

首先要審題：⑴

文體：_______⑵

人稱：_________⑶

時態(tài)：____________⑷5Ws：who_________________when______________________________where______________what________________________why__________________narrativethirdpersonsimplepasttensePamBalesandanunconsciousman

onthewaytohikeNewHampshire’sMountwellpreparedhiked,foundsomestrangetracksbadweather,herwarmheartTask2.深層信息理解理清故事的發(fā)展線索（How）paragraph（段落）mainideaFounctionPara1beforehikingplannedasix-hourhikethroughNewHampshire’sMountintroducethebackgroundTask2.深層信息理解理清故事的發(fā)展線索（How）paragraph（段落）mainideaFounctionPara2，3，48a.m.checkedtheweatherforecast,readytogo

10.a.m.weatherwasshowingitsteeth,addedmorelayers11.a.m.gettingcold,returnedtohercardevelopmentofherhikingTask2.深層信息理解理清故事的發(fā)展線索（How）paragraph（段落）detailsfounctionPara5followedthetracks,foundamanwithpaleskinandglazedfacepushthestoryintoclimax(3).提煉信息要點

beforehikingPamBalesplannedasix-hourhikethroughNewHampshire’sMount.Onthedashboard(汽車儀表板)wasadetailedplanensuringshecouldreturnbeforethearrivalofsomeforecastedbadweather.Differentfromformerhike,though,thistime,shehadpackedforalmosteveryaccidentandintendedtowalkalone.Atabout8a.m.,she’dcheckedtheweatherforecast.Balesknewfromexperiencethatherhikewasrealistic.Besides,shehadtwoemergencyplansandextralayersofclothingtobetterprotecthercoretemperatureasconditionschanged.cautious,bold,adventurous1.FindsomedetailstodescribeBales

Balesfeltexcitedasshewalkedupintosnowypaths.Shewaswearingafleecetanktop(絨衣)anhikingpants,andnoglovesorhatbecausetheairwasmild.Thirtyminuteslater,sheclimbedintocolderairanddeepersnows.Shenowwasinaquarter-zipfleecetopandgloves.At10a.m.,theweatherwasshowingitsteeth.Balesaddedmorelayerstoresistcoldwindsanddensefog.(3).提煉信息要點

whilehiking2.FindsomeexpressionstodescribetheweatherterribleweatherwhilehikingMakingherwayacrossthesnow-coveredridge,shenoticedsomething:asinglesetoffootprintsmadebyapairofsneakers.Notgivingthemmuchthought,shewalkedon.By11a.m.,Baleswasgettingcold.Shedecidedtoreturntohercar.Onherwaydown,sheagainspottedthesneakertracks,whichsuddenlymadeahardleft-handturnoffthetrail.Nowshefeltgenuinelyalarmed.Shewassurethehikerlosthiswayinthelowvisibility.IfBalescontinuedtofollowthetracks,she’daddriskandtimetoherreturn.Butshecouldn’tletthisgo.Sheturnedtotheleftandcalledout,“Hello!”Nothing.changeofherattitude3.Whatdidshefindandherresponse?climaxBalesfollowedthetracks,roundedaslightcornerandsawamansittingmotionless.Heworetennissneakers,shorts,alightjacketandfingerlessgloves.Hisskinwaspaleandhehadaglazed(呆滯的)lookonhisface.“Oh,hello,”Balesapproachedandsaid,“What’syourname?”Themandidn’treact.Obviously,nothingwasconnectingforhimandhewasinreallybigtrouble.1.whathappenedtohim?2.whatwouldBalesdonext?Para1：Whensheapproachedhimandsaidhello,hedidnotreact.由第一段首句內(nèi)容“當(dāng)她走近他打招呼時，他沒有反應(yīng)?！笨芍谝欢慰擅鑼懓屠账咕戎@名已經(jīng)失去意識的男子的過程。18寫作思路分析Para2：Afterwakingthemanup,Balesrecognizedthattheyhadtogetoutoftheresoon.由第二段首句內(nèi)容“在叫醒那個人后，巴勒斯意識到他們必須盡快離開那里?！笨芍?，第二段可描寫巴勒斯和那名男子一起下山，脫離險境的過程。19寫作思路分析續(xù)寫線索檢查——拿出物品給男子取暖——喚醒男子——扶起那名男子——一起下山——脫離險境——感受20寫作思路分析可用詞匯：行為類①檢查：check/examine②喚醒：wakeup/awaken③努力：struggletodo/makegreateffortstodo情緒類①高興：happiness/joy②焦急：anxious/worried21續(xù)寫素材可用句型：[高分句型1]Takingadeepbreath,Balesgotcloser,checkedhispulseandsuddenlyrealizedthatthemanmusthavepassedout.(運用了現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語和that引導(dǎo)的賓語從句)[高分句型2]Anxious,Balesstruggledtohelpthemanup,supportinghisweightandinchingalongthetrail,followingthetracksleftbyherhikingboots.(運用了形容詞和現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語)[高分句型3]Exhaustedasshewas,Balesfeltawaveofhappinesswelledupinside.(運用了讓步狀語從句的倒裝結(jié)構(gòu))22續(xù)寫素材Whensheapproachedhimandsaidhello,hedidnotreact.Takingadeepbreath,Balesgotcloser,checkedhispulseandsuddenlyrealizedthatthemanmusthavepassedout.Sheknewshehadtowakehimupimmediatelyorthedreadfulweathercouldputhimingreaterdanger.Outofherbag,Balestookacarpettowraptheman,gavesomehotwatertohim,calledoutrepeatedlyandshookhimhard.Fortunately,itdidn’ttakelongbeforethemancametohimself.23范文Afterwakingthemanup,Balesrecognizedthattheyhadtog