?讀后續(xù)寫重點話題突破

04歷險、探險類

1精選最新名校試題

2話題故事背誦模板

3分類話題情節(jié)分析

4分類話題寫作步驟

5分類話題高分詞匯

6分類話題寫作高分句型

1．（2023江蘇省鎮(zhèn)江第一中學?？寄M預測）

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

PamBaleslefthercarandsteppedontothesnow-coveredJewellTrail.Sheplannedasix-hourhikethrough

NewHampshire’sMountWashingtonStatePark.ThehikeupthelowerpartofJewellwaspleasant.At8:30am,

stillbelowthetreeline,shetookthefirstinaseriesofon-the-trailselfies.

Lessthananhourlater,shetookanotherphoto,aftershe’dclimbedintocolderairanddeepersnows.She

madeherwayacrossthesnow-coveredridgetowardMountWashington.Thenshenoticedsomething:asingleset

offootprintsinthesnowaheadofher.She’dbeenfollowingfainttracksalldayandhadn’tgiventhemmuch

thought,becausesomanypeopleclimbJewellTrail.Butthese,sherealized,hadbeenmadebyapairoftrainers,

notsuitableforhikingonsnow.

By11am,Baleswasgettingcoldanddecidedtoabandonherplan.TheonlythingkeepingBalesonGulfside

Trailwasthetrainertracksinthesonw.Asshefoughtthewindandheavysleet(雨夾雪),thetracksmadeahard

left-handturnoffthetrail.

Nowshealarmed.Shewassurethehikercouldgetthroughintheowvisibilityandwasheadingstraight

towardthechallengingtrailsoftheGreatGulfWilderness.Balesstoodthere,stunned.Thetemperatureandclouds

wereinaracetofindtheirlowestpoint,anddarknesswasmerehoursaway.Sheturnedtotheleftandcalledout,

“Hello!”intothefrozenfog.

Nothing.Shecalledoutagain:“Isanybodyoutthere?Doyouneedhelp?”

Thestrongwesterlywindscarriedhervoiceaway.Sheblewintoherrescuewhistle.Forafleetingmomentshe

thoughtsheheardsomeonereply,butitwasjustthewindplayinggameswithhermind.Shestoodlistening,then

turnedandwalkedcautiouslyinthedirectionofthesinglesetoftracks.Balesfollowedthetrackscautiouslyfor20

to30meters.Sheroundedaslightcornerandsawamansittingmotionless.

注意：

1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右；

2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。

Whensheapproachedhimandsaidhello,hedidnotreact.

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Afterwakingthemanup,Balesrecognizedthattheyhadtogetoutoftheresoon.

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Whensheapproachedhimandsaidhello,hedidnotreact.Takingadeepbreath,Balesgotcloser,checkedhis

pulseandsuddenlyrealizedthatthemanmusthavepassedout.Sheknewshehadtowakehimupimmediatelyor

thedreadfulweathercouldputhimingreaterdanger.Outofherbag,Balestookacarpettowraptheman,gave

somehotwatertohim,calledoutrepeatedlyandshookhimhard.Fortunately,itdidn’ttakelongbeforetheman

cametohimself.

Afterwakingthemanup,Balesrecognizedthattheyhadtogetoutoftheresoon.Thewindkepthowlingwith

theheavysleetdrivingfiercely,andevenworse,darknessbegantofall.Anxious,Balesstruggledtohelptheman

up,supportinghisweightandinchingalongthetrail,followingthetracksleftbyherhikingboots.Afterwhat

seemedlikeages,theyfinallymadeittothefootofthemountain.Themanwasrushedtohospitalimmediately.

Exhaustedasshewas,Balesfeltawaveofhappinesswelledupinside.

【情節(jié)分析】

本文以人物為線索展開，講述了帕姆·巴勒斯計劃在新罕布什爾州的華盛頓山州立公園徒步六小時，不

到一小時后，她已經(jīng)爬進了更冷的空氣和更深的雪中。她穿過白雪覆蓋的山脊，向華盛頓山進發(fā)。然后她

注意到了一件事：她前面的雪上有一組腳印。她一整天都在跟蹤微弱的軌跡，并沒有給它們太多的思考，

因為有太多人爬珠爾小道。但她意識到，這些鞋是由一雙運動鞋制成的，不適合在雪地上徒步旅行。后來，

她在一個小角落，看見一個人一動不動地坐著。

【寫作步驟】

1.段落續(xù)寫：

①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“當她走近他打招呼時，他沒有反應。”可知，第一段可描寫巴勒斯救助這名已經(jīng)失去意

識的男子的過程。

②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“在叫醒那個人后，巴勒斯意識到他們必須盡快離開那里。”可知，第二段可描寫巴勒斯

和那名男子一起下山，脫離險境的過程。

2.續(xù)寫線索：檢查——拿出物品給男子取暖——喚醒男子——扶起那名男子——一起下山——脫離險境

——感受

【高分詞匯】

行為類

①檢查：check/examine

②喚醒：wakeup/awaken

③努力：struggletodo/makegreateffortstodo

情緒類

①高興：happiness/joy

②焦急：anxious/worried

【高分句型1】

Takingadeepbreath,Balesgotcloser,checkedhispulseandsuddenlyrealizedthatthemanmusthavepassedout.

(運用了現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語和that引導的賓語從句)

【高分句型2】

Anxious,Balesstruggledtohelpthemanup,supportinghisweightandinchingalongthetrail,followingthetracks

leftbyherhikingboots.(運用了形容詞和現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語)

【高分句型3】

Exhaustedasshewas,Balesfeltawaveofhappinesswelledupinside.(運用了讓步狀語從句的倒裝結(jié)構(gòu))

2.（2023·湖南郴州·統(tǒng)考三模）

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

KenScottkickedofthecoversandleaptoutofbedathishomeintheRockyMountaintownof

Mullan,Idaho.Itwas6a.m.onJanuary7,2020,andhewasonamission:He’djustheardontheradiothatthe

nearbySilverMountainResorthadbeenblessedwithnearlyafootandahalfofnewsnow.Asaskiaddictwho’d

workedintheindustryforthepast30yearsasaskipatroller(滑雪巡邏員)andequipmentsalesperson,hedidn’t

wanttomissthisperfectskiingchance.Theseconditionsarewhatskierslivefor-evenexperiencedandskilledas

Scott,who,at55,stillskied100daysayear.

WhenScottreachedSilverMountain’slockerroom,heranintohisfriendWarren,58,aformerskiinstructor

whohadalsobeenaregularontheseslopesformorethantwodecades.

“Canyoubelieveit?”hesaidastheychangedintotheirboots.“Sixteeninches!Areyouready?”

Forthenexthour,thepairskiedonvariousrunsunderalightlygloomysky,makingfreshtracks.Theywere

bothinaplayfulmood.Finally,theyreached16-to-1,anexpert-leveltrail,whichwasnowopen.Ithadbeenclosed

allseasonoverconcernsthatskiersmightcauseanavalanche(雪崩).Butthatmorning,patrollershadclearedloose

snowonthepeak,reducingthechanceofasnowslide.

“Whatdoyouthink?”askedWarren.

“Let’sgoforit!”Scottreplied.

Whentheyreachedthetopof16-to-1,WarrenexcitedlylookedbackatScott.Thehuge,toothygrinonhis

beardedfacewaswhatheneeded.Hepointedhisskisdownhillandtookoff.Sothrilledweretheythattheyisolated

everythingaroundthem.Flyingonthetrail,despitethebitingwind,theirheartsburntwithpassionforthisgreat

skiing.Whoomph!Asuddenroarfrombehindnearlydeafenedthem.

注意：

1．續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右；

2．請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。

Inasecond,theyrealizedwhatwashappening.

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“Bringhelp!Kenwasmissing,”Warrensaidanxiouslyonthephone.

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Inasecond,theyrealizedwhatwashappening.“Avalanche!”cryingout,theysawterrorineachother’seyes.

Instantly,bothwerehitbyheavyslabsofsnow.Warrenfeltitenclosinghim,movingquicklyuphisbackandover

hisshoulders,thenheavyagainsthisneck.Snowfilledthespaceinfrontofhimandpileduparoundhisbody.He

wasalmostburied.Strugglingoutofthesnowbank,helookedaround,tryingtofindKen.“KEN!”Warrenshouted

anxiously,butnoreply.WarrenknewhehadtoreachScottquicklybecauseofthe30-minutesurvivalwindow.He

pulledouthisphoneandcalledforhelp.

“Bringhelp!Kenwasmissing,”Warrensaidanxiouslyonthephone.Wordspreadquickly,andsoonSilver

Mountain’spatrolsandskiersarrivedattheavalanchesitewithshovelsandten-footpoleswithwhichtheycould

probeforScott.Rescuersformedahorizontallinealongtheslope,eachstandingjusttwofeetapart,andinserted

theirprobesdownintothedeep,chunkysnow,hopingtohitandlocatetheburiedskier.Twentyminutesintothe

search,arescuershouted,“Astrike!”Tearsstreamingdownhisface,Warrenknewtheyopenedthelifewindowfor

Scott.

【情節(jié)分析】

文章以滑雪的進展為線索展開，講述滑雪愛好者KenScott去SilverMountainResort滑雪時遇到了好友

Warren，兩人在天氣不好的情況下盡情地滑雪。當達到16-to-1這個專家級線路時，他們決定去嘗試，因為

巡邏人員早上清除了松散了雪，因此雪崩的幾率不大。正當兩人在賽道上飛馳時，聽到身后震耳欲聾的轟

鳴聲。

【寫作步驟】

1.段落續(xù)寫：

①根據(jù)第一段首句“一秒鐘后，他們意識到發(fā)生了什么?！苯Y(jié)合上文提到雪崩可知，下文可描寫雪崩發(fā)生時的

場景，以及兩人的遭遇——Warren幸存，KenScott不知去向。于是，Warren打電話求助。

②根據(jù)第二段首句“‘救命！肯不見了，’沃倫在電話里焦急地說?！笨芍挛目擅鑼懟┗氐幕┱吆凸?/p>

理人員聞訊趕來救助的畫面，以及KenScott最終得救。

2.續(xù)寫線索：雪崩發(fā)生——兩人的遭遇——Warren幸存并求助——打電話——眾人聞訊趕來——努力尋找

——找到KenScott

【高分詞匯】

行為類

①看見：see/takenoticeof

②大叫：shout/yell

③傳開：spread/getround

情緒類

①恐懼：terror/horror/fright

②焦急地：anxiously/worriedly

【高分句型1】Strugglingoutofthesnowbank,helookedaround,tryingtofindKen.（運用了現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語）

【高分句型2】Tearsstreamingdownhisface,WarrenknewtheyopenedthelifewindowforScott.（運用了獨立

主格結(jié)構(gòu)和省略引導詞that的賓語從句）

3.（2023·湖北武漢·統(tǒng)考模擬預測）

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

MariaandPeterlivedinacoastalcity.Thegreatestpleasureinsummerforthemwastoswimattheirlocal

beachafterschool.Butonedaytheystartedtolosetheirenthusiasmforswimminginthewaters.Moreoftenthan

not,theywouldfindplasticbagsthrownonthebeach.Worsesill,astheyswaminthewater,someplasticbags

wouldfloataroundthemandevensticktotheirlegswhentheywalkedtotheshore.

Theywereupsetanddecidedsomethingneededtobedonetostopthebeautifulseabecomingconsumedby

waste.Oneweekend,MariaandPeterbroughtabigbagtothebeachanddeterminedtocleanitup.Sweatstreamed

downfromtheirforeheadwhiletheybentdownandpickeduptheplasticbags.Totheirdisappointment,aftera

day’shardwork,therewerestillmanyplasticbagslyingonthebeachorfloatinginthewater.Goinghomewith

achinglegsandarms,MariaandPeterwerealmostdefeatedbyastrongsenseoffailure.

Thatnightoverdinnerwiththeirparents,thepairalesilently.Noticingtheirlowspirits,Motheraskedgently,

“Youtwolookedsodown.Whathappened?”ExchangingglanceswithPeter,Mariarepliedinalowvoice,“It’s

thoseannoyingplasticbags.Wetriedtocleanupbutitwasjustimpossible.”Understandingthepair’s

disappointment,theirfatherpattedthemonthebackandcomforted,”Well,it’sreallyhardforjusttwoofyoutofix

suchabigproblem.”“Justtwoofus.”complainedMariaandPeter,lookingateachother.Suddenly,anidealashed

throughtheirminds,theireyesshiningwithexcitement.“Yes,that’sthepoint!Weshouldmakemorepeopleaware

oftheproblemandencouragethemtotakeaction!”thepairsaidinchorus.

注意：

1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右;

2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。

Quicklyfinishingtheirdinner,thepairwentupstairsandstartedplanning.

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Excitedandnervous,theypostedthevideoandarticleonWeChat.

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Quicklyfinishingtheirdinner,thepairwentupstairsandstartedplanning.MariaandPeterdecidedtotake

advantageoftheInternet.“Maybewecanwriteanarticletoarousepeople'sawareness.”Mariaproposed.“Good

idea!Wecanalsomakeavideo!"Peteradded.Thenextfewhourswitnessedtheirheateddiscussionandgrowing

confidenceinacleanandbeautifulcoast.Thenextday,theywenttothebeachandfilmedashortvideoshowing

plasticbagslyingonthebeachandfloatinginthesea.Peter,whowasgoodatwriting,wroteanarticletalking

aboutthepresentsituationofthebeachandaskingpeopletotakepartintheclean-up.

Excitedandnervous,theypostedthevideoandarticleonWeChat.Totheiramazement,theirpostwentviral

onlineimmediately.Countlesscommentsfloodedinsayinghowheartbrokentheywerewhenlookingatthe

pollutedbeachandocean.WhatamazedMariaandPetermorewasthatnumerouspeopleintheircommunity,

encouragedbytheirefforts,offeredtojoinintheirclean-up.Moreandmorepeoplecametothebeachtocollect

plasticbagsandtheyalsoappealedtootherstoavoidthrowingorusingplasticbags.Ayearlater,withtheirjoint

andcontinuouseffort,thecoastregaineditsbeautyandMariaandPeterregainedtheirlong-awaitedpleasure.

【情節(jié)分析】

本文以人物為線索展開，講述了住在沿海城市的瑪麗亞和彼得發(fā)現(xiàn)塑料袋被扔在海灘上，對此很苦惱，

決定要做點什么來阻止美麗的大海被浪費掉。于是他們決定通過在網(wǎng)上制作視頻、寫文章來呼吁大家一起

愛護環(huán)境。視頻和文章得到了人們積極響應。在大家的共同和持續(xù)努力下，海岸恢復了美麗。

【寫作步驟】

1.段落續(xù)寫：

①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“兩人很快吃完晚飯，上樓開始計劃?！笨芍谝欢慰擅鑼慚ariaandPeter商量對策，

決定在網(wǎng)上制作視頻、寫文章來呼吁大家一起愛護環(huán)境。

②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“他們既興奮又緊張，在微信上發(fā)布了這段視頻和文章?！笨芍?，第二段可描寫視頻和文

章在網(wǎng)上發(fā)布后得到的反應以及大家的行動和結(jié)果。

2.續(xù)寫線索：商量——做視頻——呼吁——反應——行動——沙灘變美

【高分詞匯】

行為類

①利用：takeadvantageof/makeuseof

②建議：propose/suggest/advise

③鼓舞：encourage/inspire

情緒類

①驚訝：amazement/surprise

②傷心：heartbroken/broken-hearted/sad

【高分句型1】Peter,whowasgoodatwriting,wroteanarticletalkingaboutthepresentsituationofthebeachand

askingpeopletotakepartintheclean-up.（運用了關(guān)系代詞who引導的非限定性定語從句）

【高分句型2】Countlesscommentsfloodedinsayinghowheartbrokentheywerewhenlookingatthepolluted

beachandocean.（由連接詞how引導的賓語從句作saying的賓語）

【高分句型3】WhatamazedMariaandPetermorewasthatnumerouspeopleintheircommunity,encouragedby

theirefforts,offeredtojoinintheirclean-up.（由連接代詞what引導的主語從句和that引導的表語從句）

4.（2023·廣東清遠·高三?？茧A段練習）

ImettheManoftheTreesinsummertenyearsago,whenIwasvisitingUncleJita.

Thoseweredifficulttimes.Peoplewerecuttingdownourforest,andtherewasoftenflooding.Sometimesour

watersupplywasdirty.Whenourpump(水泵)didhavecleanwater,wehadtowaitinlineforages.Whenthepump

wasn’tworking,wehadtowalkfivekilometrestothecloseststream.

ButIwashappy.Iwasgoingtoseemyfavoriteuncle.Whenthedayfinallyarrived,DaddrovemetoUncle

Jita’shouseandleft.Oncehesawme,UncleJitaannounced,“Tomorrowwe’regoingtoexploreamagicalplace.

Hereismycamera,Amy.Youcantakephotosofwhatyousee.”

Thefollowingday,wewokeupandleftearlyonaboat.Thetripwasexciting.Butwhenwegotoff,there

was...nothinginfrontofus.“Idon’twanttotakepicturesofthis,”Icomplained.

Unclelaughed,“Startwalking,Amy.Ipromiseyou’llbesurprised.”Aftersometime,Icouldseetheoutlineof

aforestinthedistance.Alittlecloser,therewasamanwavingtous.

“That’sKabir.Theforestyouseeishis.Heplantedeverysingletree.”AswewalkedtowardsKabir,Uncle

explainedthatthirtyyearsago,thewholeareawasawasteland.ButonedayKabirdecidedtochangeallthatand

startedplantingtrees.Thankstohim,partofthewastelandisnowaparadise(天堂).

UncleintroducedmetoKabir,whohadgrayhairandadeterminedface.“Jitatoldmeyoulikeanimals.Are

youreadytoseesome?”heasked.“Ofcourse!”Ireplied.Wecontinuedwalkingandsoonwereunderthetrees.I

turnedmyheadandwasamazedatthedifferencebetweenthetwoplaces.Allbecauseoftheeffortsofoneman.

LikeUnclesaid,Kabir’sforestwasmagical.Wesawdeer,rhinos,andeventigers.Duringlunchtime,Kabir

explainedhow,byplantingtrees,itwaspossibletostopthelandfromeroding(侵蝕).

注意：

1．續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右；

2．請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。

Hearingthis,Iturnedtomyuncle,“Ithinkwecanplanttreestoo”

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Intheyearsthatfollowed,peopleinourvillageworkedhardtocarryoutourplan.

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Hearingthis,Iturnedtomyuncle,“Ithinkwecanplanttreestoo.”Grabbingthecamerainmyhand,Iadded

withexcitement.“I’vegotaplan!I’llshowthemthephotosofKabir’smagicalforest!”SeeingUncleandKabir’s

encouragingsmile,Iimmediatelysetdowntomywork,busilypressingmyshutterandcapturingtheamazing

scenesintheforest.WhenUncleandIwentbacktothevillageseveraldayslaterandshowedthesewonderful

picturestomyneighbour,theywerestunnedbythebeautyoftheforest.“Itwasthetreesthatturnedtheplaceintoa

paradise!”Wethenexplainedourtree-plantingplantothevillagers,whichwasquicklyacceptedbyallofthem.

Intheyearsthatfollowed,peopleinourvillageworkedhardtocarryoutourplan.Insteadofcuttingdown

ourforest,westartedtoplanttrees,whichhaseventuallyhelpedprotectthesoilandstoppedthelandfromeroding.

Thankstothetrees,thewaterhasbeenpurifiedandwefinallyhavecleanandstablewatersupply.Withourjoint

efforts,ourvillageisnowsurroundedbysmallthrivingforestswithbloomingflowers,livelyanimalsand

crystal-clearstreamsrunningthrough.Witnessingthegradualchangeofourvillage,wecametorealizethatonly

whenweliveinharmonywithnaturecanwehaveabrighterfuture.

【情節(jié)分析】

本文以人物為線索展開，講述了十年前，吉塔叔叔帶作者去探索一個神奇的地方。那里30年前一片荒

地，卡比爾決定改變這一切，開始植樹，最終變成了森林，并且?guī)砩鷳B(tài)環(huán)境改變的故事。

【寫作步驟】

1.段落續(xù)寫：

①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“聽了這話，我轉(zhuǎn)向叔叔說：“我想我們也可以種樹。””可知，第一段可描寫作者通過宣

傳森林讓更多人參與種樹。

②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“在接下來的幾年里，我們村里的人努力工作來實施我們的計劃?！笨芍诙慰擅鑼?/p>

植樹給村莊帶來的變化。

2.續(xù)寫線索：想到計劃——分享計劃——接受計劃——實施計劃——環(huán)境改變

【高分詞匯】

行為類

1.抓住：grab/takeholdof

2.返回：gobackto/return

3.展示：show/display

情緒類

1.鼓舞的：encouraging/inspiring

2.興奮：excitement/thrill

【高分句型1】

Wethenexplainedourtree-plantingplantothevillagers,whichwasquicklyacceptedbyallofthem（.運用了which

引導的非限定性定語從句）

【高分句型2】Witnessingthegradualchangeofourvillage,wecametorealizethatonlywhenwelivein

harmonywithnaturecanwehaveabrighterfuture.（運用了現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語以及that引導的賓語從句）

5.（2023·遼寧沈陽·沈陽二中校考三模）

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭句子，續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

WhenIworkedasanurse,Iwasondaydutywhilemyworkmateswereonnightduty.Ononeshift,Isensed

somethingjustbeforegoingoffdutyat11am.Iputdownthetray(托盤）onthetableandsuddenlyitfelloffthe

table.AtfirstIthoughtIhadaccidentallyknockeditover,butthenIfeltthewholebuildingshakingandheard

patientswerescreaming.

Irealizedthatanearthquakewashappening.Iquicklycaughtholdofanearbypatient,whowasterribly

frightenedandpushedherunderabed.Andthen,Igotunderanotherbedmyself.Assoonastheearthquake

stopped,Idecidedtotryandgetthepatientsafelyoutside.Icarriedheroutandhelpedherdowntothegrassland,

whereseveralotherpeoplehadgathered.

Afraidthatmyotherworkmateswereindanger,Iwentbackinsidethebuildingagain.WhenImetLucy,our

wardsister(護士長），Ifoundherpatientcouldn'twalk.Wemadeaseatforthepatientbylinkingourhandsand

arms,andcarriedheroutsidetogether.Wewentbackthroughthebuildingtochecknoonewasleftbehindinour

ward(病房）.

Justthen,wesawthatamandoctorwascallingforvolunteerstogodowntootherwardswithhimtohelp

morepeople.Sowewenttogether.Thedoctorwentaheadofusandfoundoneofthenursespartiallycoveredwith

rubble（碎石），luckilystillalive.Suddenly,theaftershock(余震）struckandthedoctororderedustoleave.The

bravedoctorintendedtostayaloneandriskhisownlifetosavethenurse.

注意：續(xù)寫字數(shù)應為150詞左右。

Paragraph1:However,withoutanyhesitation,wemadeupourmindstostaywiththedoctorandsavethenurse

together.

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Paragraph2:Laterintheafternoon,Ihadtimetolookaroundandsawsomedestroyedbuildings.

【范文模板】

However,withoutanyhesitation,wemadeupourmindstostaywiththedoctorandsavethenurse

together.Thedoctorencouragedthetrappednursetostaycalm,andinthemeanwhile,wefocusedoureffortson

removingthebricksandtherubblethattrappedherbody.However,sometimeswewerefacedwithfallingrubble

fromtimetotime,despitewhichwecontinued.Graduallyandslowly,weliftedthenurseoutoftherubble.The

doctorputthenurseonhisbackandwalkedoutofthebuildingwiththehelpofus.Finally,all,includingpatients,

nursesanddoctors,wereinthesafeplace.

Laterintheafternoon,IIhadtimetolookaroundandsawthesomedestroyedbuildings.Mybeautiful

workplacelaybeyondrecognition,evensomeinruins.Atthesightofthis,Ifeltaweightinmychest.Suddenly,the

gentlewinddancedaroundme,whichmademethoughtofallthepeoplesurvivingtheearthquakewithourhelp.It

wasourteamworkthatmadeadifference.Iheldthefirmbeliefthatsomedayinthefuturemyworkplacewould

camebacktolifeandtookonanewlook,wherewewouldcontinueworkingtogethertosavemorepatients.

【情節(jié)分析】

本文是以人物為線索，講述一名護士在值班時碰到了地震，就想方設(shè)法把盡可能多的人救出病房和醫(yī)

院大樓。

【寫作步驟】

1.段落續(xù)寫：

①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“然而，沒有猶豫，我們決定和那位醫(yī)生一起就那位護士?！笨芍?，第一段可描述作者、

護士長和醫(yī)生一起救那位護士的過程。

②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“下午晚點的時候，我有時間看看周圍，發(fā)現(xiàn)了一些被毀了的建筑。”可知，第二段可描

述作者在地震之后的所見所想。

2.續(xù)寫線索：和護士長留下——醫(yī)生鼓勵被困護士——挪開磚頭瓦礫——救出被困護士——感慨劫后余生

——期待震后重建

【高分詞匯】

行為類

①集中在…上：focusedon/fixon

②面對：werefacedwith/face

③繼續(xù)：continued/keepon

情緒類

①保持鎮(zhèn)定：staycalm/keepcalm

②感覺有壓力：feltaweightinmychest/feelstressed

【高分句型1】Thedoctorencouragedthetrappednursetostaycalm,andinthemeanwhile,wefocusedour

effortsonremovingthebricksandtherubblethattrappedherbody.（由that引導的定語從句）

【高分句型2】However,sometimeswewerefacedwithfallingrubblefromtimetotime,despitewhichwe

continued.（由which引導的定語從句）

【高分句型3】Iheldthefirmbeliefthatsomedayinthefuturemyworkplacewouldcamebacktolifeandtook

onanewlook,wherewewouldcontinueworkingtogethertosavemorepatients.（由that引導的同位語從句和

where引導的定語從句）

6．（2023·廣東廣州·廣州市第三中學?？家荒＃?/p>

閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

Whenatornado(龍卷風)toucheddowninasmalltownnearby,manyfamilieswereleftcompletedruined.

Afterwardallthelocalnewspaperscarriedmanyhuman-intereststoriesfeaturingsomeofthefamilieswhosuffered

thehardest.

OneSunday,aparticularpictureespeciallytouchedme.Ayoungwomanstoodinfrontofanentirely

shattered(破碎的)mobilehome,adepressedexpressiononherface.Ayoungboy,sevenoreightyearsold,stoodat

herside,eyesdownward.Clutching(緊握)atherskirtwasatinygirlwhostaredintothecamera,eyeswidewith

confusionandfear.

Thearticlethatwentwiththepicturegavetheclothingsizesofeachfamilymember.Withgrowinginterest,I

noticedthattheirsizescloselymatchedours.Thiswouldbeagoodopportunitytoteachmychildrentohelpthose

lessfortunatethanthemselves.Istuckthepictureoftheyoungfamilyonourrefrigerator,explainingtheirdifficulty

tomyseven-year-oldtwins,BradandBrett,andtothree-year-oldMeghan.

“Thesepoorpeoplenowhavenothing,”Isaid.“We’llsharewhatwehavewiththem.Ibroughtthreelarge

boxesdownfromtheroomupstairsandplacedthemonthelivingroomfloor.Meghanwatchedseriously,asthe

boysandIfilledoneoftheboxeswithcannedgoodsandfoods.

WhileIsortedthroughourclothes,Iencouragedtheboystogothroughtheirtoysanddonatesomeoftheir

lessfavoritethings.Meghanwatchedquietlyastheboyspiledupoldtoysandgames.

MeghanwalkedupwithLucy,herworn,much-lovedragdollhuggedtightlytoherchest.Shecametothebox

thatheldthetoys,pressedherroundlittlefac