讀后續(xù)寫社會溫情＋焦慮緊張篇1RReadforthecharactersIpassengersaprettygirlandherboyfriendayoungwomanandababyotherpassengerssittingnexttomeeveryonewasdoingtheirusualtimeReadforplotsandemotionalchangeseveryonewasdoingtheirusualpeacefulconfusedtenminuteslateranxious,worriednineo'clockam20minuteslaterthetrainstoppedsuddenlythetrainwastrappedinthetunnelbecauseofpowerfailureThehopelesswaitinginthedarknessdroveuscrazycrzayReadfortheconflictsconflictsarearising

thetrainsloweddownandthencametoastand-stillthetraindidn'tmovethepowerfailurehadfailednohopeofgettingtoworkontimethetrainwastrappedinthetunnelandwasgettinghotandstuffy,nocellphonesignalThehopelesswaitinginthedarknessdroveuscrazycare,help,responsibility

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人物和事物活動場景的描寫：開心聊天的漂亮女孩和她的男友，年輕的媽媽，突然減速停車的地鐵心理活動的描寫：利用一般疑問句和suppose的賓語從句，描寫在地鐵停在隧道中不啟動時，乘客們對地鐵的突然停運的猜測，表現(xiàn)了乘客們的焦慮和煩躁。描寫車廂的氛圍，和“我”的心理活動，烘托乘客的焦躁，為續(xù)寫埋下伏筆Readthe2givensentences推測續(xù)寫情節(jié)Thehopelesswaitinginthedarknessdroveuscrazy.Howwasthesituationinthetrain?Whatdidthepassengersdo?Howcrazilydidtheyreact?想象人在悶熱黑暗的環(huán)境中的心情？會做什么？描寫人物活動的場景才能與原文銜接融洽添加細(xì)節(jié)描寫“我”的所做、所說、所感和其他乘客的所做所說WhatdidIsayanddotohelplessenothers'anxietyandworry?Howdidotherpassengersreact?

Whatwastheresultoftheincident?-------agoodending捕捉和對應(yīng)原文續(xù)寫點特定細(xì)節(jié)和物品原文主題原文首段和結(jié)尾漂亮女孩和她的男友，年輕的媽媽和小寶寶在續(xù)寫部分的人物活動場景中應(yīng)“出鏡”如何減輕乘客們的焦慮是在續(xù)寫第二段“我”應(yīng)解決的問題之一沖突繼續(xù)升級，被困隧道、熱、悶、黑暗、無信號、無能為力.......，續(xù)寫一段可寫這些因素導(dǎo)致的人們的反應(yīng)-----crazycrzay的場景：人物的焦躁、憤怒、不耐煩、絕望,擔(dān)憂等anxiety,annoyance,anger,umpatience,hopelssness,worry平靜下來的場景：“我”作出努力后乘客們的場景、地鐵重新啟動后乘客們的高興、如釋重負(fù)等活動場景calmness,happiness，joy,relief添加人物活動場景描寫人物活動的場景描寫madeusrestless2.站在窗邊的人試圖把窗打開，讓新鮮空氣進來，但沒有成功。①Those__________________________attemptedtoopenthemtoletinfreshairbutinvain.(定語從句)②Those____________________________attemptedtoopenthemtoletinfreshairbutinvain.（分詞做定語）whostoodbythewindows

standingbythewindows3.漂亮女孩既惱火又焦慮，她對她的男朋友皺起了眉頭，指責(zé)他選擇了錯誤的路線。①______________________________________________________________.Shefrownedatherboyfriend,andblamedhimforselectingthewrongroute.(無靈主語句+神態(tài)描寫+語言描寫)②______________________________________________,theprettygirlfrownedatherboyfriend,blaminghimforselectingthewrongroute.（獨立主格結(jié)構(gòu)+非謂語動詞做狀語）Annoyanceandanxietyswallowed/seized/sewptover/floodedovertheprettygirlAnnoyanceandanxietyswallowing/seizing/sweepingover/floodingoverher4.一些人不耐煩地跺腳，而另一些人則憤怒地捶打著墻。Some__________________whilesomeangrilypoundedonthewall.(動作+副詞)5.沒想到，那個漂亮的女孩和她的男朋友一聽到我唱就和我一起唱起來。____________,theprettygirlandherboyfriendjoinedmeimmediatelytheyheardme.（副詞做狀語）stampedimpatientlyUnexpectedly然后，越來越多的乘客跟著唱了起來。寶寶不哭了，聽著，咯咯地笑起來。Then,moreandmorepassengerssangalong.Thebabystoppedcrying，listened,and_______.giggledagoodending①自然式結(jié)尾我們眉開眼笑，燦爛的笑容照亮了整個車廂。Ourfacesbeamedand_________________________.②首尾呼應(yīng)式結(jié)尾每個人臉上都洋溢著歡樂。我知道我會永遠(yuǎn)記得這不同尋常的一天。Therewascheerineveryface.Iknewthiswouldbe___________________Iwouldalwaysremember.anunusualdayourbrightsmileslitupthetrain③場景+氛圍描寫式結(jié)尾燈光閃爍著，火車慢慢地向下一站駛?cè)ァ；疖嚿蠌浡环N釋然而愉快的氣氛。Thelightflashedandthetrainmovedslowlyofftowardsthenextstation.___________________settledoverthetrain.（無靈