高考讀后續(xù)寫浙南名校聯(lián)盟10月聯(lián)考讀后續(xù)寫十句五定法解析在這次浙南名校聯(lián)盟10月聯(lián)考中，英語續(xù)寫題《It’sMyGraduationDay!》講述了一位身患神經(jīng)障礙的女孩，在好友Sally的鼓勵下，克服恐懼、走上舞臺、完成自我救贖的故事。這類題目看似平凡，卻最能體現(xiàn)一個學(xué)生的心理遞進(jìn)與語言控制能力。真正的高分作文，不是詞匯堆砌，而是能讓讀者“看到畫面、感受心跳、讀出力量”。這正是“十句五定法”的魔力所在。 閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。It’smygraduationday!TheceremonywastobeheldinalargeauditoriumdowntownonadampDecemberafternoon.AsIpreparedforthisimportantday,choosingasimpleblackdressandevenputtingonmakeup—bothunusualforme—mymindwasoccupiedwithanxietyratherthanexcitement.Duetomyneurologicalconditionthataffectedmymobilityandcoordination,theupingceremonyfilledmewithfear.IhadlearnedthatIwouldneedtonegotiateaflightofstairsduringtheproceedings.Themerethoughtofwalkingacrossthestagewasterrifyingenough,buttheadditionalchallengeofstairsseemedimpossible.Tomakemattersworse,Iwouldhavetoshakehandswithmyprofessorsandreceivemydiplomawithmyrighthand,whichhaslimitedcontrolduetomycondition.Theseseeminglysmalldetailsfeltlikeimpossibleobstacles.Consumedbyfear,IcalledSallyintears,tellingherIcouldn’tgothroughwithit.Shehadbeenmynotetakerthroughoutuniversitybecauseofmycondition,butshewasfarmorethanthat.Wehadbeenthroughmanyroughspotsduringthepasttwoyears.Wetookallourclassestogether,studiedtogether,andeditedeachother’swork.SallylistenedpatientlyasIpouredoutmyanxieties.Then,sherespondedwithdeterminedsupport.“Youarewalking,damnit!”shedeclaredfirmly.Shepromisedtohandleeverythingandmademepromisetoshowupattheauditorium.Thoughstillfearful,Isplashedcoldwateronmytearstainedface,touchedupmymakeup,andwhisperedtomyself,“I’mdoingthis.”WhenIarrivedattheauditorium,therealityofthosefrighteningstairshitmeagain.Justaspanicbegantoseizeme,Sallyfoundmeimmediately.Shehuggedmetightlyandassuredme,“Ihaveitallworkedout.It’sgoingtobefine.”Tomysurprise,Inoticedmanyofmyclassmatesgatherednearby,theirfacesfilledwithwarmsmilesandencouragingnods.Atthis,Ifeltasurgeofstrengthflowingthroughme,thoughIstillcouldn’timaginehowIwouldmanagethechallengesahead.Paragraph1:

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Walkingdownthestairsontheotherside,Ifeltanoverwhelmingsurgeofpride.一．解題思路情節(jié)主線：被點名→勇敢走上舞臺→掌聲響起→克服恐懼→收獲成長情感遞進(jìn)：緊張→堅定→感動→自豪→升華寫作策略：第一段聚焦“恐懼的對抗”；第二段完成“勇氣的蛻變”。關(guān)鍵詞技巧：動作鏈+情感描寫+環(huán)境烘托主旨升華二．十句五定法結(jié)構(gòu)應(yīng)用Paragraph1Asmynamewascalled,Itookadeepbreathandbeganmovingtowardthestage.1.情感描寫Awaveoffearanddeterminationwelledupinsideme,battlingfiercelyasthespotlightfoundmytremblingfigure.2.細(xì)節(jié)描寫Myfingerstightenedaroundtherailing,myknucklespaleagainstthecoldmetal,andmykneeswobbledslightlywitheverystep.動作鏈推進(jìn)Stepbystep,Imovedforward—liftingmychin,adjustingmygown,andforcingmyfeettofollowmywillratherthanmyfear.環(huán)境渲染Theentireauditoriumfellsilent,theechoofmyfootstepsblendingwiththerhythmicbeatingofmyheart.情節(jié)轉(zhuǎn)折NosoonerhadIreachedtheedgeofthestagethanthunderousapplauseerupted,wrappingmeinawaveofwarmthandcourage.Paragraph2Walkingdownthestairsontheotherside,Ifeltanoverwhelmingsurgeofpride.1.情感轉(zhuǎn)變Tearsblurredmyvisionasreliefreplacedfear,andasoftsmilebrokethroughthetremblingofmylips.2.動作與情感結(jié)合Holdingmydiplomaclosetomychest,Idescendedthestairsslowly,eachstepfirmerandsteadierthanthelast.3.他人反應(yīng)Sallywaswaitingbelow,hereyesglisteningasshemouthed,“Youdidit,”whilemyclassmatesrosetotheirfeet,clappingwildly.4.結(jié)局升華Havinggonethroughthetremblingandtears,Ifinallystoodtall,realizingthateverystepforwardhadbeenaquietvictoryoverfear.5.主題點睛Thisexperiencehasetcheditselfintomyheart,teachingmethatcourageisnottheabsenceoffearbutthewilltoriseaboveit.三．高分范文Paragraph1Asmynamewascalled,Itookadeepbreathandbeganmovingtowardthestage.Awaveoffearanddeterminationwelledupinsideme,battlingfiercelyasthespotlightfoundmytremblingfigure.Myfingerstightenedaroundtherailing,myknucklespaleagainstthecoldmetal,andmykneeswobbledslightlywitheverystep.Stepbystep,Imovedforward—liftingmychin,adjustingmygown,andforcingmyfeettofollowmywillratherthanmyfear.Theentireauditoriumfellsilent,theechoofmyfootstepsblendingwiththerhythmicbeatingofmyheart.NosoonerhadIreachedtheedgeofthestagethanthunderousapplauseerupted,wrappingmeinawaveofwarmthandcourage.Paragraph2Walkingdownthestairsontheotherside,Ifeltanoverwhelmingsurgeofpride.Tearsblurredmyvisionasreliefreplacedfear,andasoftsmilebrokethroughthetremblingofmylips.Holdingmydiplomaclosetomychest,Idescendedthestairsslowly,eachstepfirmerandsteadierthanthelast.Sallywaswaitingbelow,hereyesglisteningasshemouthed,“Youdidit,”whilemyclassmatesrosetotheirfeet,clappingwildly.Havinggonethroughthetremblingandtears,Ifinallystoodtall,realizingthateveryste