如何得高分？如何得高分？TheLastDeliveryTheLastDeliveryTheMicro-skillsTraininginwriting表達(dá)微技能：之動(dòng)作、語言描寫：驚訝或?qū)擂纹覀兛梢酝ㄟ^對(duì)人物的動(dòng)作、語言、心理活動(dòng)、表情和環(huán)境等細(xì)節(jié)的描寫以及修辭等多種方式來豐富內(nèi)容，增強(qiáng)敘述的畫面感和內(nèi)容的厚實(shí)感。已知文本側(cè)重描寫人物的動(dòng)作和神態(tài)描寫，使得文章充滿可讀性。在續(xù)寫中我們要延續(xù)這種寫作風(fēng)格，聚焦人物的外在動(dòng)作和內(nèi)心情感的變化。為了更好地提高表達(dá)能力，我們可以從已知文本和課外素材中積累各種好的詞匯和表達(dá)，通過訓(xùn)練不同的句型，達(dá)到表達(dá)多樣化和內(nèi)容豐富化的效果。TheMicro-skillsTraininginwTheMicro-skillsTraininginwriting表達(dá)微技能：之動(dòng)作、語言描寫：安慰的肢體動(dòng)作和語言篇I.詞匯的積累：名詞：complaint動(dòng)詞：throw,mind,argue,bargain,settlefor,struggle,trust,inquire,file,stop形容詞：rich,fixed,mere,single,poor,happy,angry副詞：still,always,immediatelyTheMicro-skillsTraininginw

II.詞塊和句的積累：1.throwaparty,beofhighcost,fixedprice,purchase,drop...off,healthy,looking,torn,meetone’sdailyneeds,quote,bargainwith,settlefor,bestrugglingtodo...,getangryatsb.,feedoneself,inquire,fileacomplaintagainstsb.2.Theywantedtomaintaintheirhighlivingstandardssotheydidn'tmindpayingalotforit.3.Hisclothesweretorn,andhelookedasifhewasn’tevenabletomeethisdailyneeds.4.Yet,thecouplearguedandbargainedwiththeporter,andfinallyhesettledfor$15.

2.妻子尷尬地站在那里，滿臉漲得通紅。①Thewifestoodtherewithembarrassment,________________________________________.(運(yùn)用并列句結(jié)構(gòu))Haveatry牛刀小試：句子翻譯與句型轉(zhuǎn)換又累又餓，老人在灼熱的大中午再也走不動(dòng)了。①Theold______________________________goanyfurtherinthisheatofthenoon.(運(yùn)用..too...to...句型))②___________________,theoldportercouldn’tgoanyfurtherinthisheatofthenoon.(運(yùn)用形容詞作主語補(bǔ)足語)TiredandhungrytootiredandhungrytoandshefeltthebloodrushingtoherfaceHaveatry牛刀小試：句子翻譯與句型轉(zhuǎn)換②Thewifestoodtherewithembarrassment,________________________________________.(運(yùn)用現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語)③Thewifestoodtherewithembarrassment,________________________________________.(運(yùn)用介詞with的復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu))④Thewifestoodtherewithembarrassment,________________________________________.(運(yùn)用獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu))feelingthebloodrushingtoherface

thebloodrushingtoherfacewiththebloodrushingtoherface打包讀后續(xù)寫高考英語作文新題型5課件老人誠實(shí)的品質(zhì)讓妻子深受觸動(dòng)，臉上寫滿了愧疚之情。①________________________________________________,guiltwritteninherredface.(運(yùn)用…so...that...結(jié)構(gòu))②________________________________________________,guiltwritteninherredface.(運(yùn)用So...that放句首的倒裝句型)③_____________________________________________,guiltwritteninherredface.(運(yùn)用強(qiáng)調(diào)謂語動(dòng)詞句型)Thehonestyoftheoldporterdidstrikethewifeagreatdeal

SohonestwastheoldporterthatthewifewasstruckagreatdealTheoldporterwassohonestthatthewifewasstruckagreatdeal老人誠實(shí)的品質(zhì)讓妻子深受觸動(dòng)，臉上寫滿了愧疚之情。

④Thewifestoodtherewithembarrassment,________________________________________.(運(yùn)用獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu))thebloodrushingtoherfacethebloodrushingtoherfacePossibleversion1Para.1Theangrywifeaskedhim,“Whereisthatoldthief?Thisisourstuff.”Shewasabouttoaddmorecontemptuouscommentsontheoldporterwhenshesuddenlynoticedthatthemanwasglaringather

resentfully.“Madam,pleasecalmdown.Jackisnotathief!”retortedtheporter,“Heisactuallyterriblysickandisn’tabletoearnenoughtoevenhaveasinglemealoftheday.Justnow,onthewaytodeliveryourstuff,hewastooweaktogoanyfurtherinthisheatofthenoon.Despitefallingdown,heneverforgothispromiseandhandedme$15,keepingtellingmetodeliveritasfastaspossible”

Possibleversion1Para.1Possibleversion1Para.2Uponhearingthis,thehusbandhadtearsinhiseyesandturnedtohiswife.“Hewashungry,hewaspoor,buthewastrulyanhonestman,”thehusbandadmittedwithtremblingvoice.Atthat,thewifewasstruck

dead

with

shame,heart

beating

painfully

fast

and

banging

against

her

ribs.Howcouldshebeangrywithsuchakindandresponsibleman?Likeachildwhomadeamistake,shehadnocouragetolookintoherhusband’seyes.Throughalltheseunexpectedthings,iteventuallydawnedonherthathonestyhasnoclassandsheshouldrespecteveryoneregardlessoftheirfinancialandsocialstatus.打包讀后續(xù)寫高考英語作文新題型5打包讀后續(xù)寫高考英語作文新題型5Possibleversion1Para.2打包讀后續(xù)Possibleversion1評(píng)點(diǎn)：妻子的傲慢與年輕工友的義憤填膺，丈夫的熱淚盈眶與妻子的滿臉窘迫，這些細(xì)節(jié)的描寫，都使人物的鮮明的性格躍然紙上?！癱ontemptuous”,“resentfully”,“retort”,“struckdeadwithshame”等與情感有關(guān)的高級(jí)詞匯的使用，使文章變得有血有肉，讀起來津津有味。最后，妻子的幡然悔悟?qū)ξ恼逻M(jìn)行了一個(gè)主題上的升華，通過人物的改變給故事畫上了圓滿的句號(hào)。打包讀后續(xù)寫高考英語作文新題型5打包讀后續(xù)寫高考英語作文新題型5Possibleversion1評(píng)點(diǎn)：妻子的傲慢與年輕Possibleversion2Para.1Theangrywifeaskedhim,“Whereisthatoldthief?Thisisourstuff.”

Baffled,theporterrespondedatonce,“YoumeanJack?Heisnotathief!HeisthebestguyI’veeverknown.”However,thewifesneered,“Youmustbehisaccomplice,orourstuffcouldn’thaveendedinyourcart.”Theporter,hisfaceflushing

with

irritation,retorted,“Wearenotthieves.Weearnourlivinginanhonestway!ActuallyJackhadacaraccidentafterhesetoffwithyourshopping.Thoughbadlyinjured,heanxiouslycalledmeupandhandedme$15tohelphimdeliveritforyou.”

打包讀后續(xù)寫高考英語作文新題型5打包讀后續(xù)寫高考英語作文新題型5Possibleversion2Para.1打包讀后Possibleversion2Para.2Uponhearingthis,thehusbandhadtearsinhiseyesandturnedtohiswife.“Honey,wedidmisunderstandsuchanhonestman.Weowehimasincereapology,”regrettedthehusband,seekingforhiswife’sadvice.Butthencameadeadsilenceforawhile.Thewifestoodthereembarrassed,thebloodrushingtoherface.Neverdidsherealizesuchapoormanshouldbesohonestandresponsible.Withquiveringvoice,thewifepolitelyapologizedandthendecidedtovisitJackatonce.Gazingaftertherichcoupleuntiltheyvanishedfromhissight,theportersmiledandcontinuedhisdeliveringinthesun.Amazingly,hedidn’tfeelunbearablyhotanylonger.

打包讀后續(xù)寫高考英語作文新題型5打包讀后續(xù)寫高考英語作文新題型5Possibleversion2Para.2打包讀后Possibleversion2

評(píng)點(diǎn)：妻子不但懷疑老人是小偷，還懷疑他的工友是同謀，將故事的矛盾激化到了極致，使文章充滿了張力。結(jié)尾處妻子一改之前傲慢囂張的脾氣，誠摯地道歉，并決定去看望老人。工友看著夫妻兩人離去，微微一笑，似乎炎熱的天氣也變得沒有那么熱，這些描寫使文章變得節(jié)奏緩慢，卻又觸動(dòng)人心。總之，張弛有度，節(jié)奏把握得很好。另外，“baffled”,“sneer”,“flushwithirritation”,“regret”,“quiveringvoice”,“gazeafter”等與情感有關(guān)的動(dòng)作神態(tài)的描寫，使文章充滿畫面感，增強(qiáng)了故事的感染力，使人物形象栩栩如生。打包讀后續(xù)寫高考英語作文新題型5打包讀后續(xù)寫高考英語作文新題型5Possibleversion2

評(píng)點(diǎn)：妻子不但懷疑打包讀后續(xù)寫高考英語作文新題型5打包讀后續(xù)寫高考英語作文新題型5打包讀后續(xù)寫高考英語作文新題型5打包讀后續(xù)寫高考英語作文新題

1.沈從文的創(chuàng)作風(fēng)格趨向浪漫主義，他要求小說的詩意效果，融寫實(shí)、紀(jì)夢、象征于一體，語言格調(diào)古樸，句式簡峭、主干突出，單純而又厚實(shí)，樸訥而又傳神，具有濃郁的地方色彩，凸現(xiàn)出鄉(xiāng)村人性特有的風(fēng)韻與神采。2.沈從文創(chuàng)作的小說主要有兩類，一種是以湘西生活為題材，一種是以都市生活為題材，前者通過描寫湘西人原始、自然的生命形式，贊美人性美；后者通過都市生活的腐化墮落，揭示都市自然人性的喪失。3.從作者的描述看，作者的觀察敏銳，記憶超強(qiáng)，對(duì)現(xiàn)象世界十分傾心，對(duì)大自然的聲音、氣味，社會(huì)上的人與事懷有濃厚的興趣。他把大自然與社會(huì)生活稱為一本“大書”，他從這本“大書”中學(xué)到了許多書本上沒有的東西，他在自然和社會(huì)中傾心體驗(yàn)，尊重生命本真的做法，并非不愛學(xué)習(xí)，而是為了更好的學(xué)習(xí)。

4.不少評(píng)論家覺得沈從文擅長寫景，且晴朗明澈，但是缺少深度。也有評(píng)論家認(rèn)為好就好在沒有深度，因?yàn)闆]有深度的“看”風(fēng)景，其實(shí)就不為一般的社會(huì)價(jià)值所局限，這樣也就拋棄了自以為是的優(yōu)越感和置身事外的位置，而是在宇宙萬匯的動(dòng)靜之中“看”。5.一次眼光看風(fēng)景萬物，多了一份包涵和寬容，看到的歷史也就不是戰(zhàn)爭、王朝更迭之類的東西，而是千百年來凡夫俗子們的哀樂、努力和命運(yùn)。它們代表了更為現(xiàn)實(shí)逼真的生存和價(jià)值。6.抒發(fā)的感情真誠感人，不寫自己的品學(xué)兼優(yōu)、勤奮用功，而是如實(shí)地展現(xiàn)自己的天生的野性，充滿了閱讀和學(xué)習(xí)“生活”這本大書所得到的歡欣鼓舞的生命體驗(yàn)，表現(xiàn)了對(duì)自然和生命無比好奇和熱愛以及泰然面對(duì)一切殘忍和苦難的生活觀。7.學(xué)習(xí)了這篇傳記讓我們了解到了沈從文從小如何“讀社會(huì)這本大書”，感受到他青春期的悲歡得失。由于傳主生活經(jīng)歷的太多苦難，加上作者在回憶中不時(shí)融入淳厚的情感，讓我們讀來有某種沉重與辛酸，也讓我們學(xué)生受到啟發(fā)：對(duì)于強(qiáng)者，生活中的風(fēng)霜雨雪也和陽光雨露一樣，都從不同側(cè)面或者以不同的方式滋潤著我們的生命，現(xiàn)實(shí)中的曲折、坎坷、苦難可能拓展人的精神空間，讓人能更加以闊大的心胸與堅(jiān)強(qiáng)的意志，去感受生命，理解生活的意義。打包讀后續(xù)寫高考英語作文新題型5打包讀后續(xù)寫高考英語作文新題型51.沈從文的創(chuàng)作風(fēng)格趨向浪漫主義，他要求小說的詩意效果，融如何得高分？如何得高分？TheLastDeliveryTheLastDeliveryTheMicro-skillsTraininginwriting表達(dá)微技能：之動(dòng)作、語言描寫：驚訝或?qū)擂纹覀兛梢酝ㄟ^對(duì)人物的動(dòng)作、語言、心理活動(dòng)、表情和環(huán)境等細(xì)節(jié)的描寫以及修辭等多種方式來豐富內(nèi)容，增強(qiáng)敘述的畫面感和內(nèi)容的厚實(shí)感。已知文本側(cè)重描寫人物的動(dòng)作和神態(tài)描寫，使得文章充滿可讀性。在續(xù)寫中我們要延續(xù)這種寫作風(fēng)格，聚焦人物的外在動(dòng)作和內(nèi)心情感的變化。為了更好地提高表達(dá)能力，我們可以從已知文本和課外素材中積累各種好的詞匯和表達(dá)，通過訓(xùn)練不同的句型，達(dá)到表達(dá)多樣化和內(nèi)容豐富化的效果。TheMicro-skillsTraininginwTheMicro-skillsTraininginwriting表達(dá)微技能：之動(dòng)作、語言描寫：安慰的肢體動(dòng)作和語言篇I.詞匯的積累：名詞：complaint動(dòng)詞：throw,mind,argue,bargain,settlefor,struggle,trust,inquire,file,stop形容詞：rich,fixed,mere,single,poor,happy,angry副詞：still,always,immediatelyTheMicro-skillsTraininginw

II.詞塊和句的積累：1.throwaparty,beofhighcost,fixedprice,purchase,drop...off,healthy,looking,torn,meetone’sdailyneeds,quote,bargainwith,settlefor,bestrugglingtodo...,getangryatsb.,feedoneself,inquire,fileacomplaintagainstsb.2.Theywantedtomaintaintheirhighlivingstandardssotheydidn'tmindpayingalotforit.3.Hisclothesweretorn,andhelookedasifhewasn’tevenabletomeethisdailyneeds.4.Yet,thecouplearguedandbargainedwiththeporter,andfinallyhesettledfor$15.

2.妻子尷尬地站在那里，滿臉漲得通紅。①Thewifestoodtherewithembarrassment,________________________________________.(運(yùn)用并列句結(jié)構(gòu))Haveatry牛刀小試：句子翻譯與句型轉(zhuǎn)換又累又餓，老人在灼熱的大中午再也走不動(dòng)了。①Theold______________________________goanyfurtherinthisheatofthenoon.(運(yùn)用..too...to...句型))②___________________,theoldportercouldn’tgoanyfurtherinthisheatofthenoon.(運(yùn)用形容詞作主語補(bǔ)足語)TiredandhungrytootiredandhungrytoandshefeltthebloodrushingtoherfaceHaveatry牛刀小試：句子翻譯與句型轉(zhuǎn)換②Thewifestoodtherewithembarrassment,________________________________________.(運(yùn)用現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語)③Thewifestoodtherewithembarrassment,________________________________________.(運(yùn)用介詞with的復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu))④Thewifestoodtherewithembarrassment,________________________________________.(運(yùn)用獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu))feelingthebloodrushingtoherface

thebloodrushingtoherfacewiththebloodrushingtoherface打包讀后續(xù)寫高考英語作文新題型5課件老人誠實(shí)的品質(zhì)讓妻子深受觸動(dòng)，臉上寫滿了愧疚之情。①________________________________________________,guiltwritteninherredface.(運(yùn)用…so...that...結(jié)構(gòu))②________________________________________________,guiltwritteninherredface.(運(yùn)用So...that放句首的倒裝句型)③_____________________________________________,guiltwritteninherredface.(運(yùn)用強(qiáng)調(diào)謂語動(dòng)詞句型)Thehonestyoftheoldporterdidstrikethewifeagreatdeal

SohonestwastheoldporterthatthewifewasstruckagreatdealTheoldporterwassohonestthatthewifewasstruckagreatdeal老人誠實(shí)的品質(zhì)讓妻子深受觸動(dòng)，臉上寫滿了愧疚之情。

④Thewifestoodtherewithembarrassment,________________________________________.(運(yùn)用獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu))thebloodrushingtoherfacethebloodrushingtoherfacePossibleversion1Para.1Theangrywifeaskedhim,“Whereisthatoldthief?Thisisourstuff.”Shewasabouttoaddmorecontemptuouscommentsontheoldporterwhenshesuddenlynoticedthatthemanwasglaringather

resentfully.“Madam,pleasecalmdown.Jackisnotathief!”retortedtheporter,“Heisactuallyterriblysickandisn’tabletoearnenoughtoevenhaveasinglemealoftheday.Justnow,onthewaytodeliveryourstuff,hewastooweaktogoanyfurtherinthisheatofthenoon.Despitefallingdown,heneverforgothispromiseandhandedme$15,keepingtellingmetodeliveritasfastaspossible”

Possibleversion1Para.1Possibleversion1Para.2Uponhearingthis,thehusbandhadtearsinhiseyesandturnedtohiswife.“Hewashungry,hewaspoor,buthewastrulyanhonestman,”thehusbandadmittedwithtremblingvoice.Atthat,thewifewasstruck

dead

with

shame,heart

beating

painfully

fast

and

banging

against

her

ribs.Howcouldshebeangrywithsuchakindandresponsibleman?Likeachildwhomadeamistake,shehadnocouragetolookintoherhusband’seyes.Throughalltheseunexpectedthings,iteventuallydawnedonherthathonestyhasnoclassandsheshouldrespecteveryoneregardlessoftheirfinancialandsocialstatus.打包讀后續(xù)寫高考英語作文新題型5打包讀后續(xù)寫高考英語作文新題型5Possibleversion1Para.2打包讀后續(xù)Possibleversion1評(píng)點(diǎn)：妻子的傲慢與年輕工友的義憤填膺，丈夫的熱淚盈眶與妻子的滿臉窘迫，這些細(xì)節(jié)的描寫，都使人物的鮮明的性格躍然紙上?！癱ontemptuous”,“resentfully”,“retort”,“struckdeadwithshame”等與情感有關(guān)的高級(jí)詞匯的使用，使文章變得有血有肉，讀起來津津有味。最后，妻子的幡然悔悟?qū)ξ恼逻M(jìn)行了一個(gè)主題上的升華，通過人物的改變給故事畫上了圓滿的句號(hào)。打包讀后續(xù)寫高考英語作文新題型5打包讀后續(xù)寫高考英語作文新題型5Possibleversion1評(píng)點(diǎn)：妻子的傲慢與年輕Possibleversion2Para.1Theangrywifeaskedhim,“Whereisthatoldthief?Thisisourstuff.”

Baffled,theporterrespondedatonce,“YoumeanJack?Heisnotathief!HeisthebestguyI’veeverknown.”However,thewifesneered,“Youmustbehisaccomplice,orourstuffcouldn’thaveendedinyourcart.”Theporter,hisfaceflushing

with

irritation,retorted,“Wearenotthieves.Weearnourlivinginanhonestway!ActuallyJackhadacaraccidentafterhesetoffwithyourshopping.Thoughbadlyinjured,heanxiouslycalledmeupandhandedme$15tohelphimdeliveritforyou.”

打包讀后續(xù)寫高考英語作文新題型5打包讀后續(xù)寫高考英語作文新題型5Possibleversion2Para.1打包讀后Possibleversion2Para.2Uponhearingthis,thehusbandhadtearsinhiseyesandturnedtohiswife.“Honey,wedidmisunderstandsuchanhonestman.Weowehimasincereapology,”regrettedthehusband,seekingforhiswife’sadvice.Butthencameadeadsilenceforawhile.Thewifestoodthereembarrassed,thebloodrushingtoherface.Neverdidsherealizesuchapoormanshouldbesohonestandresponsible.Withquiveringvoice,thewifepolitelyapologizedandthendecidedtovisitJackatonce.Gazingaftertherichcoupleuntiltheyvanishedfromhissight,theportersmiledandcontinuedhisdeliveringinthesun.Amazingly,