讀后續(xù)寫人際關(guān)系＋感激溫暖篇para.1-3：“我”的家庭和我想為孩子們織圍巾的想法para.4：Jane和她貧困的家庭para.5：Jane和David成為很好的玩伴溫暖的圍巾Analyze(分析)thestructurepara.6：David一直盼望的圍巾織好了疫情居家，停課，食品供應暫停，寒冬，社會處于危機模式background1RReadforthecharactersIDavidmyeldestsonaproudmotherofthreechildrenJaneashygirl，aged14theonlydaughterofafinanciallydisadvantagedfamilyalwaysworeoldclothesakindandconsiderateboyAidamylastlittlechildAnnmymother-in-lawwantedtomakescarvesforthreechildrenasChristmasgiftsnomoreclothestowearinthisextremelycoldwinterbecamegoodcomapnionslove,warmth,consideration

company(陪伴），care,kindness,warmthReadforthethemeDuetothepandemic,societywasthrownintocrisismode.Schoolswereclose，foodsuppliesanddeliveriesweresuspendedandchildrenwerestuckathome.Insuchdiscouragingtimes，however,theybecamegoodcompanions，talkingandplayingathomeoraroundthehouses.Itwasdreadfullycoldthiswinter.Itseemedthatshecamefromafinanciallydisadvantagedfamily，forshealwaysworeoldclothes.Worsesill，insuchcolddays，shehadnomoreclothestowearandtrembledwithcold.IwantedtomakescarvesformythreechildrenasChristmasgifts.Onlylove,warmth,kindness,andcarecanhelpgothroughhardtime.

emotionalchangesReadforplotsandemotionalchangeshadthethoughtofmakingscarvesforchildrenjoyfuleagercaring,proudDavidandJanebecamegoodcampaniesforplayDavidlookedforwardtohavingthescarfIfinishedthescarfforDavidexcitedIwrappedthescarfaroundDavid'sneck.happy,warmLaterthatdayDavidcamebacksayingJanealsodeservedascarf.出現(xiàn)意外轉(zhuǎn)折agoodendingclimax沒有圍巾織圍巾渴望圍巾得到圍巾送出圍巾Readforlanguage

利用簡單句和so連接的并列句，敘述“我”想給孩子們織圍巾的想法，一個愛孩子的媽媽呈現(xiàn)面前簡單介紹女孩的家庭情況：貧困。女孩缺少溫暖的衣服御寒，為續(xù)寫部分埋下伏筆連續(xù)利用被動句，介紹社會背景，埋下續(xù)寫伏筆：困難時期應以溫暖和愛相迎，不畏寒冬非謂語動詞連用，營造出兩個孩子嬉戲的快樂場景人物活動場景描寫：生動描寫了一個在外面臉凍得紅紅的男孩跑進屋，渴望圍上溫暖的圍巾，又要安慰媽媽自己不著急的溫馨場面Readthe2givensentences推測續(xù)寫情節(jié)IwrappedthescarfaroundDavid'sneck.HowdidDavidreact?feelings,action,wordsHowdidIreact?myresponseWhatdidhedoafterthat?wentouttoplaywithJaneLaterthatdayDavidcamebacksayingJanealsodeservedascarf.一段結(jié)尾句如何與二段首句銜接？LaterthatdayDavidcamebacksayingJanealsodeservedascarf.Whydidihesaythat?HowdidIrespond?explainedhisreason;myresponseWhatdidhedoafterthat?dashedouttogiveawayhisscarfHowdidIthinkaboutmyson'sact?myfeelings----theme(love,kindness)續(xù)寫3principlesaction-responseconflict-solutionnegative-positive捕捉續(xù)寫點可在二段描寫“我”因David而感到驕傲二段可添加對話描寫David想將圍巾送給Jane作為圣誕節(jié)禮物二段可添加細節(jié)描寫，David說明Jane也應該有條圍巾的理由：在寒風中瑟瑟發(fā)抖一段圍巾可添加場景細節(jié)描寫：David戴著圍巾和Jane在外面開心地嬉戲玩耍因為善良體貼，David會看到Jane沒有御寒衣物凍得發(fā)抖一段和二段可添加環(huán)境描寫，表現(xiàn)外面的寒風的冷，反襯人與人之間溫情的暖，突出主題“溫暖的圍巾”情感細節(jié)描寫：激動、快樂，溫暖動作細節(jié)描寫：添加人物肢體動作：跑，走適當?shù)膶υ捈毠?jié)描寫：David向“我”解釋送Jane圍巾的話場景細節(jié)描寫：David圍著圍巾和Jane在外面玩耍的場景環(huán)境細節(jié)描寫：外界寒冷的風添加細節(jié)描寫（與原文語言特點一致）1.他低頭看著我剛剛完成的圍巾，高興極了。他的臉照亮了整個房間，黑色的眼睛像鉆石般閃爍。①Helookeddownatthescarflhadjustfinished,hewasoverjoyed._______________________________________________________.（情感詞匯+神態(tài)描寫+比喻）②Lookingdownatthescarflhadjustfinished,hewasoverjoyed,_________________________________________________________________.（現(xiàn)在分詞做狀語+獨立主格）情感細節(jié)描寫（利用無靈主語句和獨立主格）Hisfacelitupthewholeroomanddarkeyestwinkledlikediamondshisfacelightingupthewholeroomanddarkeyestwinklinglikediamonds2.他既高興又激動，不能自已。他一下子撲到我的懷里，喃喃道：媽媽，謝謝你。①Hewasunableto________________________.Hethrewhimselfintomyarms,andmurmured,“Thankyou,dearmum.”（情感描寫+具體動作+語言描寫）②___________________________________________，hethrewhimselfintomyarms,murmuring,“Thankyou,dearmum.”(用形容詞短語做狀語+分詞做狀語)containhisjoyandexcitementUnabletocontainhisjoyandexcitement各種“說”utter發(fā)出(聲音)say/tell/inform說/告訴whisper低語answer/reply/respond/react回答；回應comfort安慰explain解釋mumble小聲咕噥declare/announce宣布shout/scream大聲叫howl/roar怒吼murmur咕噥scold責罵3.看到大衛(wèi)在外面玩得很開心，圍巾為他遮風避雨，抵御刺骨的寒風，我欣慰而滿足。①_____________________,asIsawDavidplayhappilyoutside,andthescarfshelteredhimtobravethebone-chillingwind.②______________________,IsawDavidplayhappilyoutside,withthescarfshelteringhimtobravethebone-chillingwind.(形容詞短語做狀語+with復合結(jié)構(gòu)）IfeltrelievedandcontentRelievedandcontent4.看著大衛(wèi)手里拿著圍巾沖進簡的家，我感到一陣驕傲。①IsawDavidrushintoJane'shousewiththescarfinhishand,andIfeltaburstofpride.(動作+情感描寫）②______________________________________________________________________________.（非謂語動詞做狀語）SeeingDavidrushintoJane'shousewiththescarfinhishand,Ifeltaburstofpride動作細節(jié)描寫（構(gòu)建動作鏈，利用雙連動詞或非謂語動詞）1.他像只快樂的小鹿一樣蹦蹦跳跳地出去找Jane，脖子上的圍巾在空中飛舞著。①HeskippedouttojoinJanelikeahappydeer,and____________________________________.（具體動作描寫和修辭+場景描寫)②HeskippedouttojoinJanelikeahappydeer,___________________________________________.（with復合結(jié)構(gòu)）hisscarfaroundhisneckflewintheairwithhisscarfaroundhisneckflyingintheair各種“走”limp瘸著走tiptoe躡手躡腳dance雀躍;蹦蹦跳跳march列隊走pace踱步skip蹦蹦跳跳地走wander漫步fly疾行dash/rush沖常用短語giveajumpintheair跳到空中(表示開心)jumptoone'sfeet跳起來(表示震驚)slip/stealoutof偷偷溜出makearunningstepback跑著后退dashback沖回pacerestlessly/aimlessly不安地/無目的地踱步2.聽到我的話，他低下了頭，陷入了沉思，然后抬起頭問他是否可以把他的圍巾給Jane.①Atmywords,he_________________________________,andhewaslostinthought.ThenheraisedhiseyesandaskedifhecouldgivehisscarftoJane.②Atmywords,__________________________________________________________________,beforeraisinghiseyesandaskedifhecouldgivehisscarftoJane.(非謂語動詞做狀語;before+非謂語動詞)lowered/hung/bent/droopedhisheadhelowered/hung/bent/droopedhishead,lostinthought3.他感激地笑了笑，跳了起來，吻了吻我的臉頰，然后一陣風似地沖了出去。①Hesmiledgratefully,_____________________,kissedmeonthecheekand_______________.（四連動+比喻）②______________________________________________________________________________.（非謂語動詞做狀語）leapedtohisfeetdashedoutlikewindSmilinggratefully,heleapedtohisfeet,kissedmeonthecheekand