CONTENTS目錄概要寫(xiě)作評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)及得分要點(diǎn)01概要寫(xiě)作得分技巧02CONTENTS目錄概要寫(xiě)作評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)及得分要點(diǎn)01概要寫(xiě)1CONTENTS目錄概要寫(xiě)作評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)及得分要點(diǎn)01概要寫(xiě)作得分技巧02CONTENTS目錄概要寫(xiě)作評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)及得分要點(diǎn)01概要寫(xiě)作得2

評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)檔次內(nèi)容語(yǔ)言A55B44C33D22E11F00評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)3評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)1.本題總分為10分,其中內(nèi)容5分,語(yǔ)言5分。2.評(píng)分時(shí)應(yīng)注意的主要方面:內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)、信息

呈現(xiàn)的連貫性和準(zhǔn)確性。3.詞數(shù)超過(guò)60，酌情扣分。評(píng)分細(xì)則評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)1.本題總分為10分,其中內(nèi)容5分,語(yǔ)言5分。4內(nèi)容部分能準(zhǔn)確、全面地概括文章主旨大意,并涵蓋主要信息。語(yǔ)言部分A.能用自己的語(yǔ)言連貫、正確地表述。A檔給分要求評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)內(nèi)容部分A檔給分要求評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)5Moustache（胡子）

forCash“Movember”,astheannualeventisknown,seesmenincountriesincludingtheUK,USandAustraliagrowouttheirfacialhairwhilecollectingsponsorshipmoneyfromfriends,familyandcolleagues,withthemoneygoingtocancercharities.Themonthofnoshavingbeganunofficiallyin2003,whenapairofmenfromAustraliapersuadedtheirfamilytojointhemingrowingamoustacheinordertoencouragementogetthemselvescheckedforcancer,whichisseenasdistastefulbysomemales.Ayearlater,thegroupdecidedtosetuptheMovemberFoundation,askingfriendsandcolleaguestoofferdonationsofmoneytosupporttheirefforts,andraisedamassiveA$54,000whichwassharedbetweenanumberofhealthprojects.Withthanksmostlikelytosocialmedia,Movembersoonwentglobalandthefoundationnowoperatesworldwide,havingraisedover￡440millionsince2004.Theeffectsofthefundraisingarewide-reaching,whichhadmadeasignificantdiscoveryinthetreatmentofcancer.Theissueofsomemenbeingtooself-willedtovisittheirdoctorforacheckup,orperhapsbeingraisedinacultureof“toughitout”,hasledsomemalestoneglecttheirhealth,whichmaymeanitcouldbetoolateifsomethingpotentiallydeadlydiddevelop.However,Movemberishelpingtobreakdowntheshameofmalehealthbymakingitmoreaccessible,meaningthatmenaremorelikelytovisittheirdoctors.Theyfoundawaytoappealtomeninawaythatothercampaignsjustdon’t–withasortofblokey①jokiness.

blokey:behavinginawaythatissupposedtobetypicalofmen,especiallymenenjoyingthemselvesinagroup.”“Itssuccessisduetoitswaytohavemenvisittheirdoctorswithblokeyjokiness.（要點(diǎn)5）MengrowmoustacheformoneyusedforcancercharitiesinMovember.（要點(diǎn)1）In2003,twomenstartedMovember.（要點(diǎn)2）In2004,thefoundationwassetup.（要點(diǎn)3）

Sincethenithasgoneglobalandraisedlotsofmoney.（要點(diǎn)4）Moustache（胡子）forCash“Mo6Movemberisanannualeventwhenmenstopshavingtoraisemoneyforcancercharities.SomeAustraliamenfirststartedittoencouragementodocancerchecksregardlessofdiscrimination.Thankstosocialmedia,Movemberspreadsglobally,resultinginadvancementincancertreatment.TheaimofMovemberistoprovideaneasyaccesstocheckupsformen.(58)3+4=71“Movember”,anannualeventstartedinAustraliain2003appealstomenstogrowoutmoustachetoraisemoneyforcancercharities.Withthehelpofmediaitspreadsworldwideandhelphumanstreatcancer.Movemberhelpstobreakdownmen'sshameofvisitingdoctorsthroughblokeyjokinesstoletmentoconcernabouttheirhealth.(56)4+3=72評(píng)分范例語(yǔ)言連貫語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤缺少要點(diǎn)2和要點(diǎn)3缺少要點(diǎn)3內(nèi)容部分B.能準(zhǔn)確概括文章主旨大意，但遺漏個(gè)別主要信息。（4分)C.能概括文章主旨大意，但遺漏部分主要信息。（3分)語(yǔ)言部分B.能用自己的語(yǔ)言較連貫、正確地表述，但有個(gè)別語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤。（4分)C.基本能用自己的語(yǔ)言連貫、正確地表述，但連貫性較差，且有少量不影響表意的語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤。（3分)Movemberisanannualeventwh7“Movember”isanannualeventencouragingmentogrowouttheirmoustachewhilecollectingmoneyforcancercharities.TheeventisinitiallylaunchedbyapairofmenwhosetuptheMovemberFoundationayearlater,whichhasraisedmuchmoneyandoperatesworldwidenow.Movembercanhelpmanbreakingdowntheshameofmalehealthbymakingitmoreaccessible,whichishelpfultocancertreatment.(68)4+3-1=63“Movember”seesmengrowouttheirfacialhair.Theissueofsomemenbeingraisedinacultureof“toughitout”hasledsomewomentoneglecttheirhealth.However,Movemberishelpingtobreakdowntheshameofmalehealth.Theyfoundawaythatmenenjoyingthemselvesinagrouptoappealtomen.(57)1+1=24評(píng)分范例字?jǐn)?shù)限制內(nèi)容及語(yǔ)言缺少要點(diǎn)5只有要點(diǎn)1和要點(diǎn)5部分關(guān)鍵詞沒(méi)有用自己的話表述內(nèi)容部分E.幾乎不能概括文章的主旨大意，未涉及文中有意義的相關(guān)信息。(1分)語(yǔ)言部分E.幾乎不能用自己的語(yǔ)言連貫、正確地表述。(1分)“Movember”isanannualevent8CONTENTS目錄概要寫(xiě)作評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)及得分要點(diǎn)01概要寫(xiě)作得分技巧02CONTENTS目錄概要寫(xiě)作評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)及得分要點(diǎn)01概要寫(xiě)作得9Concise!!!1Determinethetypeofwritingandidentifythetopicaswellastheauthor'spurpose.Dividethepassage&summarizethemainideaofeachpart.Determine&Divide3Addsometransitionalwordstomakethepassagesmooth.Checkthesummary.(tense,spell,etc.)Add&Check2Highlightthekeyinformation.Rewritethesamemeaning.(usingyourownwords,phrasesorstructures)Highlight&

RewriteSummaryStepsConcise!!!1Determinethetype10030102銜接（照應(yīng)、替代、省略、連接和詞匯銜接）邏輯同義轉(zhuǎn)換:近義詞、同義詞等替換句子重構(gòu):調(diào)整詞類(lèi)、時(shí)態(tài)、語(yǔ)態(tài)等語(yǔ)言提煉（刪除細(xì)節(jié)、刪除具體例子、避免重復(fù)）整合要點(diǎn)SkillsofSummaryWriting030102銜接邏輯同義轉(zhuǎn)換:近義詞、同義詞等替換語(yǔ)言提煉11Part1段落概括Part1段落概括12PRACTICE1However,moreresearchiscalledfortoensureitssecurity.Butmoreresearchisneededtoassureitssafety.(2017崇明區(qū)一模)同義轉(zhuǎn)換PRACTICE1However,moreresear13PRACTICE2Peoplereadpoemsforenjoymentaswellasacademicpurposes.Whydowereadpoetry?Firstobviousone:becauseweenjoyit.Theonlyotherreasonisforacademicpurposes,andthat'snotwhythisishere.(2017奉賢區(qū)二模)H&RA&CPeoplereadpoemsforenjoyment.Peoplereadpoemsforacademicpurposes.aswellas/and調(diào)整詞類(lèi)PRACTICE2Peoplereadpoemsfo14PRACTICE3Thebeststrategytoachievegoodresultsintheexamistostudybooksearly.So,it'stheexamtimeagain—haveyoudonethenecessaryworktogetgoodmarks?Sleepingwiththetextbookunderthepillowinthehopethatknowledgewillbemagicallyabsorbedintoyourbrainasyousleepdoesn'twork.Thebeststrategyistospaceyourpracticeout,ratherthancraw(死記硬背)italltogether.Itmeanshitthebooksearly!

(2017虹口區(qū)一模)H&RA&Ctoachievegoodresultstostudybooksearly提煉（刪除細(xì)節(jié)、刪除具體例子、避免重復(fù)）PRACTICE3Thebeststrategyto15PRACTICE4Aninterestingstorymotivates/inspiresustoreadcontinuously,foritreflectsourreallives.Agoodstoryencouragesustoturnthenextpageandreadmore.Wewanttofindoutwhathappensnextandwhatthemaincharactersdoandwhattheysaytoeachother.Wemayfeelexcited,sad,afraid,angryorreallyhappy.Thisisbecausetheexperienceofreadingorlisteningtoastoryismuchmorelikelytomakeus'feel'thatwearepartofthestory,too.Justlikeinour'real'lives,wemightloveorhatedifferentcharactersinthestory.Perhapswerecognizeourselvesorothersinsomeofthem.Perhapswehavesimilarproblems.(2017寶山區(qū)一模)H&RA&CforAninterestingstorymotivates/inspiresustoreadcontinuouslyitreflectsourreallives提煉（刪除細(xì)節(jié)、刪除具體例子、避免重復(fù)）PRACTICE4Aninterestingstory16PRACTICE5AstudyshowsworkstillupsetspeoplethoughcompaniesaretryingtomakeworkplacesfunInordertomaketheiremployeeshappier,companiesaroundtheworldhavebeenbusyinstallingplayequipmentintheworkplace.Tablefootball,computergamesandactionfigureshavebecomecommoninsomeworkplaces.Despiteallthiseffort,unfortunately,workstillmakespeopleunhappy.AccordingtoastudybytheLondonSchoolofEconomics,theplacewherepeoplefeelmostmiserableiswork.(2017崇明區(qū)二模)D&DH&RA&Cthoughcompaniesaretryingtomakeworkplacesfunworkstillupsetspeople調(diào)整詞類(lèi)PRACTICE5Astudyshowsworks17Part1不同體裁概要寫(xiě)作Part1不同體裁概要寫(xiě)作18概括的形式

文體主題句支撐句議論文記敘文說(shuō)明文文章論點(diǎn)（一句）文章論據(jù)（兩三句）故事的寫(xiě)作目的/主題（一句）故事大意（兩三句）說(shuō)明的對(duì)象/觀點(diǎn)/現(xiàn)象解釋/分述概括的形式文章論點(diǎn)（一句）文章論據(jù)（兩三句）故事的寫(xiě)作目的19Example1Gettingupearlyhasbeenregardedasagoodhabitsinceancienttimes.Manyyearsago,peoplethoughtthatifwewenttobedearlyandgetupearly,wewouldbeenergeticthewholeday.Therefore,gettingupearlyisofgreatimportancetousall.Infact,morningisthebesttimeofaday.Inthemorning,theairisthefreshestandpeopleareusuallyinthebestconditions.Manyofusmayhavetheexperiencesthatwememorizesomethingsmorequicklyandaccuratelyinthemorningthananyothertimeoftheday.Ifwedosomemorningexerciseoronlytakeashortwalkinthemorning,wecanbuildourbodiesandbecomemuchhealthier.Alsowewillhaveenoughtimetomakeaplanandgetreadyforourworkorstudyofthedayifwegetupearly.However,ifwegetuplate,wewillprobablyhavetodoeverythinginagreathurry.Letusremembergettingupearlyisagoodhabitandtryourbesttokeepit.Ifwesticktogettingupearlyeveryday,wewillcertainlybenefitalotfromit.D&D議論文D&DExample1D&D議論文D&D2021論點(diǎn)

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21論點(diǎn)論據(jù)議論文概括的形式3結(jié)論21Gettingupearlyhasbeenregardedasagoodhabitsinceancienttimes.Manyyearsago,peoplethoughtthatifwewenttobedearlyandgetupearly,wewouldbeenergeticthewholeday.Therefore,gettingupearlyisofgreatimportancetousall.Infact,morningisthebesttimeofaday.Inthemorning,theairisthefreshestandpeopleareusuallyinthebestconditions.Manyofusmayhavetheexperiencesthatwememorizesomethingsmorequicklyandaccuratelyinthemorningthananyothertimeoftheday.Ifwedosomemorningexerciseoronlytakeashortwalkinthemorning,wecanbuildourbodiesandbecomemuchhealthier.Alsowewillhaveenoughtimetomakeaplanandgetreadyforourworkorstudyofthedayifwegetupearly.However,ifwegetuplate,wewillprobablyhavetodoeverythinginagreathurry.Letusremembergettingupearlyisagoodhabitandtryourbesttokeepit.Ifwesticktogettingupearlyeveryday,wewillcertainlybenefitalotfromit.D&D議論文D&D論點(diǎn)論據(jù)1論據(jù)2論據(jù)3結(jié)論Gettingupearlyhasbeen22H&RGettingupearlyhasbeenregardedasagoodhabitsinceancienttimes.Manyyearsago,peoplethoughtthatifwewenttobedearlyandgetupearly,wewouldbeenergeticthewholeday.Therefore,gettingupearlyisofgreatimportancetousall.Infact,morningisthebesttimeofaday.Inthemorning,theairisthefreshestandpeopleareusuallyinthebestconditions.Manyofusmayhavetheexperiencesthatwememorizesomethingsmorequicklyandaccuratelyinthemorningthananyothertimeoftheday.Ifwedosomemorningexerciseoronlytakeashortwalkinthemorning,wecanbuildourbodiesandbecomemuchhealthier.Alsowewillhaveenoughtimetomakeaplanandgetreadyforourworkorstudyofthedayifwegetupearly.However,ifwegetuplate,wewillprobablyhavetodoeverythinginagreathurry.Letusremembergettingupearlyisagoodhabitandtryourbesttokeepit.Ifwesticktogettingupearlyeveryday,wewillcertainlybenefitalotfromit.gettingupearlyinthemorningisagoodhabit（刪除細(xì)節(jié)、刪除具體例子）abettermemory（同義轉(zhuǎn)換、調(diào)整詞類(lèi)）betterpreparationfortheday（同義轉(zhuǎn)換、調(diào)整詞類(lèi)）healthierbody（句子重構(gòu)）

benefitusalotHighlightthekeyinformationandrewrite論點(diǎn)論據(jù)1論據(jù)2論據(jù)3結(jié)論H&RGettingupearlyhasbe23A&Cgettingupearlyinthemorningisagoodhabitabettermemorybetterpreparationforthedayhealthierbody議論文benefitusalotgettingupearlyisagoodhabitandtryourbesttokeepitThepassagemainlytellsusgettingupearlyinthemorningisagoodhabitthatwillbenefitusalot.Addsometransitionalwords刪除，避免重復(fù)論點(diǎn)

論據(jù)結(jié)論Itenablesustohaveabettermemory,healthierbodyandbetterpreparationfortheday.A&Cgettingupearlyinthemor2421論點(diǎn)

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gettingupearlyinthemorningisagoodhabitabettermemorybetterpreparationforthedayhealthierbodybenefitusalotgettingupearlyisagoodhabitandtryourbesttokeepit

Possibleanswer:Thepassagemainlytellsusgettingupearlyinthemorningisagoodhabitthatwillbenefitusalot.Itenablesustohaveabettermemory,healthierbodyandbetterpreparationfortheday.21論點(diǎn)論據(jù)議論文概括的形式3結(jié)論gettingup25高考概要寫(xiě)作專(zhuān)題課件26Concise!!!1Determinethetypeofwritingandidentifythetopicaswellastheauthor'spurpose.Dividethepassage&summarizethemainideaofeachpart.Determine&Divide3Addsometransitionalwordstomakethepassagesmooth.Checkthesummary.(Tense,spell,etc.)Add&Check2Highlightthekeyinformation.Rewritethesamemeaning.(usingyourownwords,phrasesorstructures)Highlight&

RewriteSummaryStepsConcise!!!1Determinethetype27Example2HopeNothinginmylifehadpreparedforwhatIhadtodo.Choosingmywordscarefully,andfightingtostaycalm,Itoldmy4-year-olddaughterthathergrandmotherhadsufferedastroke（中風(fēng)）,thatshewasunconscious,andthatthedoctorssaidshewouldprobablyneverwakeup.Asshemovedclosertome,Amelialookedatme,eyesbright,andsaid,“MaybeGrandmawillbeokay.““Maybeshewill,“Isaid,keepingbackthetears.ButIknewbetter.IwasflyinguptoMytleBeach,SouthCarolina,fromourFloridahomeinthemorningtosaygood-byetomymom.Therestofthatawfulweek,Ijoinedmybrotherandfathersittingbymymother’ssideinthehospitalroom.Iheldherhandandtalkedtoher.Itoldherthatwestillneededher.Itoldherthatitwasn’ttimetoleaveyet.ItoldherhowmuchIlovedher.AndItoldherthatherlittlegranddaughter,Amelia,believedthatshe’dgetbetter.Thedoctors,withallyearsoftrainingandexperience,offerednohopeforrecovery.Thedamagewassimplytooextensive.Acoupleofweekslater,anoddthinghappened.Momwokeup!Andthenshepreservedthroughalongandtoughprocessofrestorationtohealth,duringwhichshehadtolearntowalk,read,andwritealloveragain,andeventuallyreturnedhometoDad.Theonlyonewhowasn’tshockedwasAmelia.Thedoctorscouldn’texplainit.Ameliadidn’tneedto.Hopecameasnaturallytoheraspossible.Sowhyarewesoafraidtohopesometimes?Maybeit’sbecauseovertheyears,life’sdisappointmentscanturnustodisillusionment（理想破滅）.Howmanytimeshaveyouheardsomeonesay,“Hopeforthebest,expecttheworst?”That’snotreallyhopeatall.Hopeisbeingabletolookatourworldwithallofthejoyandwonderofachild.D&D記敘文D&DExample2HopeD&D記敘文D&D28記敘文概括的形式1敘事2結(jié)果3意圖(whodidwhat)記敘文概括的形式1敘事2結(jié)果3意圖(whodidwhat29HopeNothinginmylifehadpreparedforwhatIhadtodo.Choosingmywordscarefully,andfightingtostaycalm,Itoldmy4-year-olddaughterthathergrandmotherhadsufferedastroke（中風(fēng)）,thatshewasunconscious,andthatthedoctorssaidshewouldprobablyneverwakeup.Asshemovedclosertome,Amelialookedatme,eyesbright,andsaid,“MaybeGrandmawillbeokay.““Maybeshewill,“Isaid,keepingbackthetears.ButIknewbetter.IwasflyinguptoMytleBeach,SouthCarolina,fromourFloridahomeinthemorningtosaygood-byetomymom.Therestofthatawfulweek,Ijoinedmybrotherandfathersittingbymymother’ssideinthehospitalroom.Iheldherhandandtalkedtoher.Itoldherthatwestillneededher.Itoldherthatitwasn’ttimetoleaveyet.ItoldherhowmuchIlovedher.AndItoldherthatherlittlegranddaughter,Amelia,believedthatshe’dgetbetter.Thedoctors,withallyearsoftrainingandexperience,offerednohopeforrecovery.Thedamagewassimplytooextensive.Acoupleofweekslater,anoddthinghappened.Momwokeup!Andthenshepreservedthroughalongandtoughprocessofrestorationtohealth,duringwhichshehadtolearntowalk,read,andwritealloveragain,andeventuallyreturnedhometoDad.Theonlyonewhowasn’tshockedwasAmelia.Thedoctorscouldn’texplainit.Ameliadidn’tneedto.Hopecameasnaturallytoheraspossible.Sowhyarewesoafraidtohopesometimes?Maybeit’sbecauseovertheyears,life’sdisappointmentscanturnustodisillusionment（理想破滅）.Howmanytimeshaveyouheardsomeonesay,“Hopeforthebest,expecttheworst?”That’snotreallyhopeatall.Hopeisbeingabletolookatourworldwithallofthejoyandwonderofachild.D&D記敘文D&D敘事結(jié)果意圖HopeD&D記敘文D&D敘事結(jié)果意圖30H&RHopeNothinginmylifehadpreparedforwhatIhadtodo.Choosingmywordscarefully,andfightingtostaycalm,Itoldmy4-year-olddaughterthathergrandmotherhadsufferedastroke（中風(fēng)）,thatshewasunconscious,andthatthedoctorssaidshewouldprobablyneverwakeup.Asshemovedclosertome,Amelialookedatme,eyesbright,andsaid,“MaybeGrandmawillbeokay.““Maybeshewill,“Isaid,keepingbackthetears.ButIknewbetter.IwasflyinguptoMytleBeach,SouthCarolina,fromourFloridahomeinthemorningtosaygood-byetomymom.Therestofthatawfulweek,Ijoinedmybrotherandfathersittingbymymother’ssideinthehospitalroom.Iheldherhandandtalkedtoher.Itoldherthatwestillneededher.Itoldherthatitwasn’ttimetoleaveyet.ItoldherhowmuchIlovedher.AndItoldherthatherlittlegranddaughter,Amelia,believedthatshe’dgetbetter.Thedoctors,withallyearsoftrainingandexperience,offerednohopeforrecovery.Thedamagewassimplytooextensive.(whodidwhat)mylittledaughter,Amelia,fullofhopeaboutmymother’sstrokeDoctorswerepessimisticaboutmymother’sstrokeourfamilygatheredtobidfarewelltoherinhospitalIpassedonAmelia’shope要點(diǎn)整合同義轉(zhuǎn)換敘事HighlightthekeyinformationandrewriteH&RHope(whodidwhat)mylittl31H&RHopeAcoupleofweekslater,anoddthinghappened.Momwokeup!Andthenshepreservedthroughalongandtoughprocessofrestorationtohealth,duringwhichshehadtolearntowalk,read,andwritealloveragain,andeventuallyreturnedhometoDad.Theonlyonewhowasn’tshockedwasAmelia.Thedoctorscouldn’texplainit.Ameliadidn’tneedto.Hopecameasnaturallytoheraspossible.Sowhyarewesoafraidtohopesometimes?Maybeit’sbecauseovertheyears,life’sdisappointmentscanturnustodisillusionment（理想破滅）.Howmanytimeshaveyouheardsomeonesay,“Hopeforthebest,expecttheworst?”That’snotreallyhopeatall.Hopeisbeingabletolookatourworldwithallofthejoyandwonderofachild.sherecoveredshecamebackhomeafteraperiodofrestorationHopedoesbringpeopleintroubleamazement.同義轉(zhuǎn)換結(jié)果意圖HighlightthekeyinformationandrewriteH&RHopesherecoveredshecame32A&Cmylittledaughter,Amelia,fullofhopeaboutmymother’sstrokeDoctorswerepessimisticaboutmymother’sstrokeourfamilygatheredtobidfarewelltoherinhospitalIpassedonAmelia’shopesherecoveredDoctorswerepessimisticaboutmymother’sstrokewhilemylittledaughter,Amelia,fullofhope.IpassedonAmelia’shopewhenourfamilygatheredtobidfarewelltoherinhospital.AddsometransitionalwordsIncredibly,sherecoveredandcamebackhomeafteraperiodofrestoration.敘事

結(jié)果意圖Hopedoesbringpeopleintroubleamazement.shecamebackhomeafteraperiodofrestorationA&Cmylittledaughter,Amelia,33記敘文概括的形式(whodidwhat)Doctorswerepessimisticaboutmymother’sstrokewhilemylittledaughter,Amelia,fullofhope.IpassedonAmelia’shopewhenourfamilygatheredtobidfarewelltoherinhospital.Incredibly,sherecoveredandcamebackhomeafteraperiodofrestoration.Hopedoesbringpeopleintroubleamazement.

Possibleanswer:Doctorswerepessimisticaboutmymother’sstrokewhilemylittledaughter,Amelia,fullofhope.IpassedonAmelia’shopewhenourfamilygatheredtobidfarewelltoherinhospital.Incredibly,sherecoveredandcamebackhomeafteraperiodofrestoration.EveryonewasastonishedexceptAmelia.Hopedoesbringpeopleintroubleamazement.(55words)1敘事2結(jié)果3意圖記敘文概括的形式(whodidwhat)Doc34Example3Aroundtheworld,musictherapy(療法)isbeingusedtotreatdifferentmedicalconditionsandillnesses.Someofthewayspeopleusemusictherapyaretoreducepain,suchasinchildbirthorduringcancertreatments,ortostimulatebrainactivityafteraninjuryormoneyloss.Musictherapyhasalsobeensuccessfulinaidingchildrentoovercomedisabilities.Childrencanmovetheirbodieswiththemusicandstampalongtothebeat.

Whyismusicausefultherapy?Musicissoothingandrelaxing,butitalsostimulatesourbrains.Emotionallyandphysically,werespondtothesoundsofmusic.Butthecomplexityofmusic(thedifferenttempos,rhythms,melodiesandharmonies)provokes(激發(fā))thebiggestresponse.Thus,classicalmusicismosttypicallyusedfortherapiesduetocomplexsoundsandpatterns.Althoughraporhiphopmightbefuntolistento,it’sunlikelythatsuchstylesofmusicwouldproducethesamekindoftherapeuticeffect.Playingamusicalinstrumentratherthansimplylisteningtomusiccanalsobetherapeuticforsomepeople,helpingrelievestressandanxiety.

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Whyismusicausefultherapy?Musicissoothingandrelaxing,butitalsostimulatesourbrains.Emotionallyandphysically,werespondtothesoundsofmusic.Butthecomplexityofmusic(thedifferenttempos,rhythms,melodiesandharmonies)provokes(激發(fā))thebiggestresponse.Thus,classicalmusicismosttypicallyusedfortherapiesduetocomplexsoundsandpatterns.Althoughraporhiphopmightbefuntolistento,it’sunlikelythatsuchstylesofmusicwouldproducethesamekindoftherapeuticeffectPlayingamusicalinstrumentratherthansimplylisteningtomusiccanalsobetherapeuticforsomepeople,helpingrelievestressandanxiety

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Musichasbeenshowntoreducepainincancerpatientsbyincreasingthereleaseendorphins(內(nèi)啡肽).Endorphinsarethebody’snaturalpainkillers,andwhenwelistentomusic,ourbrainsrespondbyreleasingthesenaturalpainkillers.Ithasalsobeenknowntocontributetothebraindevelopmentofthebabieswhohavejustbeenbornandevenbabiesstillinthemother’swomb.Certaintypesofmusichavealsobeenfoundtolowerbloodpressureandslowaperson’sheartrate.Manypeoplearehopefulthatmusiccouldreplacetheneedforsomemedications(藥物)thatarenormallyusedtotreatcertainillnesses.Atpresent,musictherapyisusedinavarietyofsettingssuchashospitals,rehabilitationcenters,nursinghomes,daycares,andschools.

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