Anexperienceinthelift電梯驚魂試題呈現(xiàn)：Whenwewerefinallydismissedfromthelastclassoftheday,thestudentsstreamedoutoftheclassrooms.Itwasanotherboringdayafterschool.IdraggedmyfeethomeasIsighed.Yetanotheruneventfulday,Ithought.LittledidIknowthatthedaywouldtakeaturnfortheworse.Theliftlobby(電梯間)

ofmyflatwasoldanddirty.Thewalls,whichwerepaintedwhite,hadbeendirtiedovermanyyears.Ireachedmyflat’slobby,andpressedtheliftbuttonandwentin.Justthen,Mrs.

Lim,myelderlyneighbour,hobbled

(蹣跚)

in.Shelookedancientwithtissuepaperwhitehair,wearingafadedold-fashioneddress.Iheldtheliftdooropen,

flashingafriendlysmile,andpolitelygreetedher.Iaskedherhowshefeltthatdayandpressedthebuttons.Shethankedmeforbeingsopolite,thenweweresilentfortherestoftheride.Theliftfelldownincreasinglyfast.Therewereloudclankingsoundshereandtherewhiletheliftgrewslowerandslower.Myheartbeathardandfastasmyhandsturnedcoldand

wetwithsweat.Unfortunately,theliftcametoanabruptstopatthefifthfloor.Ipressedthebuttonshardseveraltimes,butitwasofnohelp.Thelightsonthebuttonshadgoneout.Itsoondawnedonmethatweweretrapped.

Anicyfearcreptupmyspine.Mrs.

Limwashysterical

(歇斯底里的).“Wewillnevergetout!”shecriedwithherfacepale.Ithadbecomeacolourlessmask.Ihadnotimetolose.Ipressedthebellintheliftimmediately.Thesoundwassurelydeafening,butwhatotherchoicedidIhave?Mrs.

Limburstintotears.Itriedmyverybesttocomforther,tellingherthateverythingwouldbeallrightandthatweneededtofindouthowtogetoutsafely.Mrs.

Limbeganhavingtroublebreathing,andIimmediatelyhelpedhersitdownandloosenedhercollar.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Paragraph1:

Severalminutespassed,butnohelpcame.Paragraph2:

Bang!MyhopeswereliftedwhenIheardthefirefightersontheothersideoftheliftdoor.寫作指導(dǎo)

1.

確定人稱：第三人稱2.

梳理原文情節(jié)：3.

文章走向：

文章主旨？：4.

構(gòu)思情節(jié)Paragraph1:Severalminutespassed,butnohelpcame.【P1】似乎沒東西可寫，按照我們之前講過的構(gòu)思技巧，可逐一通過主人公場景來添加，也可以用上遇險類求助無果套句，所以P1并不難。①【銜接1】場景描寫：電梯里籠罩著可怕的氛圍②

Mrs.Lim的反應(yīng)：虛弱，不斷啜泣

發(fā)抖③

我的反應(yīng)：盡力安撫Mrs.Lim+自己，表現(xiàn)得平靜④

我的反應(yīng)：敲電梯門求助，but

無果⑤【銜接2】隨著時間流逝，心態(tài)要崩了。

Paragraph2:Bang!MyhopeswereliftedwhenIheardthefirefightersontheothersideoftheliftdoor.①【銜接3】我的反應(yīng)：大喊，“快救救我們

+

里面有老人”②

firefighters

的回應(yīng)：讓我們保持鎮(zhèn)定+等待救援③

我的反應(yīng)：轉(zhuǎn)頭安撫Mrs.Lim，營救人員來了④

過了一會門終于開了，我們也獲救了⑤【結(jié)尾】回應(yīng)下開頭：回到家癱在沙發(fā)上，回想著這不安穩(wěn)的一天，珍惜平凡普通的一天?！鞠滤魑摹縋aragraph1:Severalminutespassed,butnohelpcame.Theelevatorwasenvelopedinaterrifyingatmosphere,thedimlightanddeadlysilenceaddingtoourmountingfear.Mrs.Lim,myelderlyneighbor,wasapictureofdespair,herbodytremblingasshecontinuouslysobbedandgaspedforair.Despitethefearthatgrippedme,Iputonabraveface,tryingtocomfortherwithreassuringwordsandagentlepatonhershoulder.Ithenturnedmyeffortstotheliftdoors,poundingandshoutingforassistance,yettheonlyresponsewastheechoofmyowndesperatecallsbouncingoffthecoldmetalwalls.Astimeworeon,thetensionbecameunbearable,andIcouldfeelmycomposurebeginningtofrayattheedges.Paragraph2:Bang!MyhopeswereliftedwhenIheardthefirefightersontheothersideoftheliftdoor.

"Pleasehelpus!There'sanelderlywomaninhere!"Iyelledatthetopofmylung,myvoicetingedwithrenewedhopeandrelief.Thefirefightersrespondedwithcalmingwords,instructingustoremaincomposedandassuringusthatrescuewasimminent.TurningbacktoMrs.Lim,Iconveyedthegoodnews,comfortingherthathelphadarrivedandwewouldsoonbesafe.Afterwhatseemedlikeaneternity,thedoorfinallycreakedopen,andwewereusheredintothewelcomingarmsofourrescuers.Backhome,Icollapsedontothecouch,reflectingontheday'seventsandremindingmyselftocherishtheordinary,seeminglyunremarkabledays.【參考范文】Severalminutespassed,butnohelpcame.Theair-conditioninghaddiedout,andtheliftbecamereallystuffy.Weweresweatingbuckets.Wetriedtoringtheemergencyalarmagain.Everysecondthatpassedwaspainful."Help!!!"Iscreamedatthetopofmylungs,tryingtogetsomeone'sattention.Awaveofdespairwashedoverme.Ifeltlikewewouldnevermakeit.Inonelasteffort,Itriedbangingonthedoors.Thenextfewminutesfeltlikehoursaswewaitedincompletesilence.Bang!Myhopeswereliftedwhen1heardthefirefightersontheothersideoftheliftdoor.Helpwasfinallyhere!Thebravefirefightershitthedoorsopenusingtheirtools.Itfeltlikeahundredpoundweightwasliftedoffme,andMrsLimthankedtheheavensthats