Breaktheruleornot?閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。續(xù)寫的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。Oneday,inthemiddleoftheyear,weallfiledintotheclassroomasusual.MrWilliamsfollowedus,enteringtheroomlast,stealthilysidesteppingandholdingsomethingbehindhisback.“Ihaveasurpriseforyou,”hesaid,dramaticallyrevealingaplasticbagwithatropicalfishinit.Hehelditupanddemonstratedthatthefishwouldbeourclasspet.Afterputtingthefishinthetank,heaskedustonameitandfeediteveryday.Therewasonlyonerule—notnegotiable.Wecouldnot,underanycircumstance,touchthefishwithourhands.MrWilliamswarnedusthatifhecaughtanystudentwiththehandsinthetankorifourfingersdirectlycameclosetothosetechnicolorscales,wewouldbesuspendedfromschoolfortwodays,noquestionsasked.Thisironrulewasthusformedinourclass.Dayafterdaywe’detoclassandfeedthefish.TherewasagirlstudentnamedAmyinourclass,whowasenchantedbythisbeautifulfishinparticular.Sheoftenpicturedwhatthefishcoulddoifitwereswimmingfreeinthelake.Evensometimesshepressedherfaceuptotheglasswatchingthisrainbowinmotionswimbackandforth.Overtime,shesettledonanameforit:Confucius.AboutaweekintoConfucius’sdesirablefamilyresidence,wetookturnsconductingitsdailyfeedingwithcaution.Thefamiliarbellringing,MrWilliamscasuallysteppedontotheplatformforclass.Theintenseeyeshadtofixonhim,afraidtoneglectthekeypointsoftheexam.Suddenlyaterrifyingsoundinterruptedourattentivegaze,likeatsunamiing.Unexpectedly,Confuciusjumpedfromthetanktotheground.MaybeitlistenedtoMrWilliamscheering.Confuciusflippedandgasped,strugglingdesperatelyontheground.FinallyAmygotupfromherseat._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Relieved,weturnedoureyestoMrWilliams.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【文本解讀】本文屬于主題語境中人與社會；人與自我。Williams老師給學(xué)生帶來一條熱帶魚，養(yǎng)在教室里的金魚缸里。學(xué)生們可以給它取名，可以喂養(yǎng)它，唯一的要求是絕對不能用手直接觸碰它的身體，不然會被停學(xué)。有一個叫艾米的女生特別喜愛這條魚，還給它取名“孔子”。意外的事情發(fā)生了，在同學(xué)們認真上課的時候，“孔子”從魚缸里跳了出來到了地上，拼命掙扎，奄奄一息。【建議主題】規(guī)則意識。在不違背原則的情況下，靈活處理規(guī)則?！娟P(guān)鍵詞】theawarenessofrules;applyrulesflexibly【情節(jié)構(gòu)建】續(xù)寫第一段參考情節(jié)：①Amy的反應(yīng)；②教室里課堂混亂的場面及同學(xué)們的反應(yīng)；③Amy在規(guī)則制度下的掙扎；④Amy想出了一個不違規(guī)的方法，救助奄奄一息的“孔子”的過程。(如：戴手套或用工具把魚放到魚缸里，手就沒有直接觸碰魚)。如寫到Amy直接用手救魚也可。續(xù)寫第二段參考情節(jié)：①Williams老師準備懲罰違規(guī)的Amy；②“孔子”得救后同學(xué)們的反應(yīng)；③Amy為自己辯護。④Williams老師繼續(xù)上課，引出主題：在不違背原則的情況下，靈活處理規(guī)則是一項聰明之舉。如第一段寫到Amy直接用手救，這一段可寫在危急時刻，對應(yīng)規(guī)則靈活處理也可?！緦懽鲉栴}】情節(jié)問題：續(xù)寫第一段未對Amy在規(guī)則制度下掙扎的描寫，而是直接寫救起了魚，弱化了本文強調(diào)的規(guī)則意識；續(xù)寫第二段未提及規(guī)則意識或者未強調(diào)在不違背原則的情況下，靈活處理規(guī)則，而是只對救起了魚之后感到松了一口氣或者只是抒發(fā)傳遞善良與愛心的情感。語言問題：①直接引語過多；②語言貧乏，尤其是Amy去救助奄奄一息的“孔子”這一過程的細節(jié)描寫不夠?！揪时磉_】“救魚”場景描寫Amyeasedherwaytothetank,crouchedandreachedherhand,buthesitatedasifaninvisiblethreadwaspullingher,whenthefearofironrulecrawledonherheart.Tooursurprise,AmyputonapairofglovesmadeofspecialofmaterialsandchargedtowardsConfucius,onthevergeoflosingbreath.Wewatchedherbenddown,carefullystrokeoutthedustonitstechnicolorscalesandputitintothetank.WitnessingourbelovedConfuciusflippingontheground,suffocatedandhopeless,Amyfeltheartsplitandwaseagertosaveit,buttheironrulelingeredinhermind—notouch.Timewastickingaway.Amycuppeditwithbothhandsmeticulouslyandlifteditsosoftlyandswiftlytothetank.AlltheeyesweregluedonAmy,afraidofherbreakingtherule.Butshesteppedinfrontofthestrugglingfish,caughttheslipperybodyandtookitintothetank,herradiantfaceglowingwithfort.巧妙結(jié)尾Werubbedourchinsthoughtfully,withaninsightintotheruleandflexibility.Thereinthetank,Confuciuswasdancinginthewater,withitstechnicolorscales,singingforitslittlehero’ssympatheticandflexiblemind.(26班李雨函)【優(yōu)秀范文1】FinallyAmygotupfromherseat.Thebrightgirl,onthevergeoftears,flewtoConfuciuslikeagustofwind.“No!”Weletoutadeafeningroarinchaos,withanoisydiscussionhangingovertheclassroom.“Therule!”MrWilliams’swarningechoedinAmy'smindrepeatedly.“Undernocircumstancesareyoutotouchthefish.”Hesitantly,shetookastepback.Confuciuslayontheground,withitsmouthgaspingforairanditstailgraduallystoppingswinging.Weallsatfrozeninplace,andjustwatched,atalosswhattodoinpanic.AtthiscriticalmomentAmyhadanidea.Sheputtheplasticbagoverherhandswiftly,pickedConfuciusuplikealivegrenadeandputitbackintothetank.Thankfully,thelovelycreaturecametolifeinthewater.Itswammerrily,asiftoexpressitsgratitudetothesweetangelAmy.Relieved,weturnedoureyestoMrWilliams.Unfortunately,MrWilliams,withaseverelookonhisface,toldAmytopackherbagsandsuspendedherfromschoolfortwodays.“Areyouserious?”Wewereallbabbling,wearingawoebegoneexpression.ButMrWilliamsdidnotshowtheslightestinclinationtochange.Weflockedtothetank,andpressedourfacesuptotheglasstowatchConfucius,wallowinginourguilt.Justthen,Amyraisedherheroichandhigh,stillwrappedintheplasticbag.“Look!”Aconfidentsmilespreadacrossherlips.Shedidn’ttouchthefishdirectlywithherfingers.Thatwasnotagainsttherule.MrWilliamsnoddedinagreementandwentbacktolecturing.DelightedandproudofAmy,weallcasteyesnowandthenonAmy,whoinvitedustowitnesshowsmartitwastoapplyrulesflexiblywithoutviolatingprinciples．【優(yōu)秀范文2】FinallyAmygotupfromherseat.Staringatthedistressedrainbow,sheshiveredbadlyandalmostdissolvedintoheartbrokentears.Innotime,shesprintedtoherbelovedfishasfastasacricketandreachedouttoholdit.Suddenly,herhandsfrozeinair,whichremindedallofusoftheironrule.Inourgazefullofanxietyandconcern,Amyquicklyfishedoutacleantowelfromherpocketandgentlymadeitwetwiththewaterinthetank.ThenshedelicatelywrappedConfuciuswiththetowel,whichseemedtoeffectivelyalleviateitsstruggleandsootheit.Withexceedinglycare,Amyplacedtherainbowontoawritingboard,movedittothetankandfinallyrescuedthecharmingcreaturebacktothewater.ThepanickedfishslidintoitsresidenceanddancedfreelyasifitwereexpressingitsgratitudetoAmy,whowatchedwithherfacepressedontotheglass.Relieved,weturnedoureyestoMr.Williams.Toourgreatsurprise,hewasradiantwithasmile