“特寫鏡頭”描寫大法

在英語讀后續(xù)寫中，“特寫鏡頭”式的細(xì)節(jié)描寫能夠讓文章增色不少，使故事更加生動(dòng)形象、

富有感染力。下面將從什么是特寫鏡頭、使用場景、運(yùn)用技巧以及實(shí)際案例等方面進(jìn)行詳細(xì)介紹。

一'解讀特寫鏡頭

特寫鏡頭在故事創(chuàng)作中具有獨(dú)特的作用，主要體現(xiàn)在以下幾個(gè)方面：

1.突出關(guān)鍵細(xì)節(jié)：聚焦故事里的關(guān)鍵元素，比如某個(gè)重要物品、人物的顯著特征，或者情節(jié)

轉(zhuǎn)折的關(guān)鍵節(jié)點(diǎn)，從而吸引讀者的注意力。

2.深化角色刻畫：通過特寫人物的面部表情、眼神、手勢(shì)等，深入挖掘角色的內(nèi)心世界，展

現(xiàn)其情感變化，讓角色形象更加豐滿立體。

3.強(qiáng)化氛圍與情緒渲染：在營造特定氛圍或傳遞強(qiáng)烈情緒時(shí)，如恐怖、浪漫等場景，特寫鏡

頭能夠增強(qiáng)讀者的感受，使其更深入地融入故事之中。

4.增強(qiáng)情節(jié)沖擊力：在故事的高潮或關(guān)鍵時(shí)刻運(yùn)用特寫，能夠加大情節(jié)的張力，引發(fā)讀者更

強(qiáng)烈的情感共鳴，使故事更具吸引力。

5.推動(dòng)情節(jié)發(fā)展：在需要細(xì)膩推進(jìn)情節(jié)時(shí)，特寫可以展現(xiàn)情節(jié)發(fā)展過程中的微妙變化，讓故

事的邏輯性更強(qiáng)、更連貫。

6.創(chuàng)造視覺效果：借助特寫鏡頭，能讓讀者在腦海中構(gòu)建出清晰的畫面，提升文字的視覺表

現(xiàn)力，使故事如同一幅生動(dòng)的畫卷在讀者眼前展開。

二'特寫鏡頭的使用場景[FEDS]

l.F-Feelings（情感）：特寫鏡頭可用于深入刻畫和傳遞角色的情感細(xì)節(jié)，幫助讀者更好地

理解角色的內(nèi)心感受。

2.E-Events（事件）：在關(guān)鍵事件中，特寫能夠突出重要細(xì)節(jié)，讓讀者更清晰地把握事件的

關(guān)鍵之處。

3.D-Decisions/Logic（決策/邏輯）：展示角色的思考過程、決策依據(jù)或邏輯推理，使讀者更

深入地了解角色行為背后的原因。

4.S-Setting/Scene（設(shè)置/場景）：用于細(xì)致描繪環(huán)境，營造特定的場景氛圍，增強(qiáng)故事的代

入感。

三、特寫鏡頭的運(yùn)用技巧【“細(xì)感情”】

1.細(xì)節(jié)聚焦：

-面部描寫：著重關(guān)注眼神、嘴角的微笑或皺紋等面部細(xì)節(jié)，通過這些細(xì)微之處傳達(dá)角色的

情感和性格特點(diǎn)。

-動(dòng)作描寫：留意角色的手勢(shì)、姿態(tài)及其他身體動(dòng)作，以此展現(xiàn)角色的心理狀態(tài)，推動(dòng)故事

發(fā)展。

-環(huán)境描寫：從場景中挑選重要元素，像桌上的一束花、墻上的一幅畫等，通過對(duì)這些元素

的描寫營造出特定的氛圍。

2.感官體驗(yàn)：運(yùn)用視覺、聽覺、嗅覺、觸覺和味覺等多種感官進(jìn)行描述，讓讀者仿佛身臨其

境，“看到”“聽到'"'感受至廣故事中的細(xì)節(jié)。

3.情感傳達(dá)：明確表達(dá)具體的情緒，并將情緒與動(dòng)作相結(jié)合，為后續(xù)的動(dòng)作和行為做好鋪墊，

使故事的發(fā)展更加自然流暢。

四、特寫鏡頭案例展示

1.表情描寫案例：

-案例一：

-細(xì)節(jié)：眼睛瞪得很大，淚水在眼眶里打轉(zhuǎn)，嘴巴微微張開。

-感官：看到角色驚訝和痛苦的神情。

-情感：傳遞出驚訝與痛苦的情緒。

-描述：中文：他的眼睛瞪得大大的，淚水在眼眶中打轉(zhuǎn)，最終無聲地滑落。他的嘴巴微微

張開，露出驚訝和痛苦的神情。英文：Hiseyeswerewideopen,withtearsswirlinginhissocketsbefore

silentlyslidingdown.Hismouthwasslightlyajar,revealinganexpressionofsurpriseandpain.

-案例二:

-細(xì)節(jié)：眼神犀利、目光集中、瞳孔縮小，嘴微微張開，耳朵豎起，肌肉緊繃。

-感受：能感受到角色處于饑餓狀態(tài)。

-情緒：緊張、激動(dòng)且堅(jiān)定。

-描述：中文：這只貓的眼神犀利且集中，瞳孔緊縮成一條細(xì)線，仿佛專注地盯著獵物。它

的嘴微微張開，露出尖銳的牙齒。耳朵豎立，捕捉著周圍的每一個(gè)聲音。它的肌肉緊繃，像弓一

樣拉緊，準(zhǔn)備隨時(shí)發(fā)力。英文：Thecathadasharp,focusedgaze,withitspupilsnarrowedtothinslits,

asifintentlywatchingitsprey.Itsmouthwasslightlyopen,revealingsharpteeth.Itsearsstooderect,

capturingeverysoundaround.Itsmusclesweretaut,likeabowstringpulledtight,readytospringinto

action.

2.動(dòng)作描寫案例：

-細(xì)節(jié)：手指在鍵盤上輕柔滑動(dòng)，彈奏緩慢而精確，指尖輕壓按鍵再慢慢抬起。

-感官：能“聽至ij”輕柔的音樂。

-情感：讓聽眾感受到舒緩、優(yōu)美。

-描述：中文：手指輕柔地在鍵盤上滑動(dòng)，每一次觸碰都那么緩慢而精確。指尖輕輕壓下每

個(gè)鍵，慢慢地抬起，仿佛在空氣中揮舞著一支無形的指揮棒。英文：Fingersgentlyglidedacrossthe

keyboard,eachtouchslowandprecise.Thetipspresseddowneachkeysoftly,liftingslowlyasifwaving

aninvisiblebatonintheair.

3.環(huán)境描寫案例：

-細(xì)節(jié)：草葉上掛著露珠，露珠晶瑩剔透。

-感官：視覺上，露珠在陽光下熠熠生輝，像珍珠鑲嵌在綠色絨毯上。

-情感：傳遞出清新、美好的感受。

-描述：中文：春雨剛過，每一株草葉都掛著晶瑩的露珠。這些小小的水珠在柔和的陽光下

熠熠生輝，像珍珠般鑲嵌在綠色的絨毯上。露珠的形狀完美無瑕，透明清澈，仿佛大自然的珍寶。

英文：Afterthespringrain,everybladeofgrasswasadornedwithsparklingdewdrops.Thesetiny

dropletsshonebrilliantlyunderthegentlesunlight,likepearlsembeddedinagreenvelvetcarpet.The

dewdropswereflawlesslyshaped,crystalclear,resemblingnature'streasures.

模擬演練

Onthefirstdayofschool,Istaredinaweatthehugebuildings.Thishighschoolwasdefinitely

biggerthantheoneIhadpreviouslyattended.

Thiswasmysecondyearofhighschool,butmyfirstyearofschoolinSt.Louis.Ihaddecidedthe

nightbeforethatIwouldbemuchhappierinanewschoolifImadefriendsthatwereso-called

“popular”.Gettinginwiththerightgroupofpeoplewouldmakemylifeawholelotbetter.Ievenbought

anewoutfitandhadmyhairstyledjustsothefirstdaywouldbeperfect.

Scared,yetanxioustobeginmynewlife,Iwalkedupthestairstothefrontdoor.Thehallswere

packedwithkidsyellingandlaughingandtellingstoriesoftheirsummeradventures.Myfirstclasswas

geometry,butwherewasthat?

Iwasstandinginthehalllookingconfused,whenashort,blondgirlwearingglassescameupand

asked,"Areyounew?Youlooklost.Doyouneedhelp?MynameisDiane.Whafsyours?”Eventhough

sheseemedabitstrange,definitelynotthekindofpersonIwantedtobeassociatedwith,Idecidedto

answerheranyway.Iwas,afterall,lost.

Afterexchangingnames.Ifollowedherupthestairsanddownahallwayontheright,making

politeconversationthewholeway.Whenwereachedmyroomshesaid,"Well,hereyouare.Welcome

toJFK,andIhopeyourdaygoesallright.”

Isaidthanksandwavedgood-bye.Onceinsidetheclassroom,Isawonebiggroupofpeople

huddledaroundsomeonewhoseemedtobetellingsomesortofstory.Iwalkedoverandgotclose

enoughtooverhear.Alleyesweregluedtotheguyinthemiddleofthecirclewhowaswearingaletter

jacketcoveredwithpatches.Idecidedthatthisguywaspopular,soImanagedtogetaseatrightnextto

him.Isaid,“Hi,mynameisLisaandI'mnewhere.^^Hesaid,"Johnny.”

注意：1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右：

2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置答題。

Attheendoftheclass,Iturnedtohimandasked,'Tmnotsurewheremynextclassis,couldyou

helpme?”

Justatthattime,someonecameupandtappedmeontheshoulder.

1.OnePossibleVersion:

Attheendoftheclass,Iturnedtohimandasked,"I'mnotsurewheremynextclassis,couldyouhelp

me?”Withafrown,helookedatmeandthensaidaquickno,turnedbacktohisfriends,andwalkedout

oftheclassroom.AstheywerewalkingoutIheardhimsay,“Didyouguysseethatnewgirltryingtoget

intoourgroup?Thatoutfitwastoostrange.^^Theyalllaughedandsomeofthemturnedaroundand

staredatme.Myfacehotwithshame,Istoodstock-still,notbelievingwhathadjusthappened.

Justatthattime,someonecameupandtappedmeontheshoulder.ItwasDiane.Likearayof

sunshine,thebigsmileonherfacesweptawaymygloom.Istruggledtoholdmyfeelingsbackandtold

herwhatIhadencountered.Agleamofconcerninhereyes,shesaidshewassorryandofferedtofind

mynextclass.AtthatmomentIrealizedhowwrongIwasinwantingtoonlybefriendswithpopular

people.MaybeIshouldn'tdecidewhetherapersonisworthbeingmyfriendornotbytheirreputation,

butbywhotheyare.

【導(dǎo)語】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了作者高中第二年是在圣路易斯的第一年，作者在學(xué)

校認(rèn)識(shí)了Diane,Diane給作者指路。結(jié)果作者因?yàn)榇┲话嗌系耐瑢W(xué)嘲笑，Diane也對(duì)作者表示

了關(guān)心，作者也感悟到不應(yīng)該只和受歡迎的人交朋友。

【詳解】1.段落續(xù)寫：

①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“下課的時(shí)候，我轉(zhuǎn)向他問：，我不知道下節(jié)課在哪里，你能幫我嗎？

可知，第一段可描寫對(duì)方的反應(yīng)以及作者被嘲笑的經(jīng)過。

②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“就在那時(shí)，有人走過來拍了拍我的肩膀”可知，第二段可描寫Diane幫

助作者以及作者的感悟。

2.續(xù)寫線索：詢問——拒絕——嘲笑一幫助——感悟

3.詞匯激活

行為類

①走出：walkoutof/stepoutof

②融入：getinto/fitinto

③抑制：holdback/restrain

情緒類

①奇怪的：strange/odd

②擔(dān)心：concern/worry

【點(diǎn)睛】[高分句型1]Myfacehotwithshame,Istoodstock-still,notbelievingwhathadjust

happened.（運(yùn)用了what引導(dǎo)的賓語從句）

[高分句型2]MaybeIshouldn'tdecidewhetherapersonisworthbeingmyfriendornotbytheir

reputation,butbywhotheyare.（運(yùn)用了whether引導(dǎo)賓語從句）

模擬演練

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

Ihadbeenactinginschoolforafewyears.WhenIgotaroughroleinaplay,I,onlyajuniorinmy

highschool,wasexcitedthatmyinspiringdramateacheranddirectorhadtrustedmewiththepart.

WehadlittletimetoprepareandIwouldneverforgetreadingthelinesforthefirsttime.Atfirstthe

dialoguewaslively,butthenitbecamequitelongandboring.Tomysurprise,mycharacterhadone

disrespectfullinethatcomplainedabouthisbadluck.Ihadneversaidsomethinglikethatonstage

before.UncomfortableasIfeltaboutit,Ihadneverthoughtofmakingmyselfheardtomakeachange.I

wasweak,wentsilent,andacceptedthelineasitwas.

Atourfirstrehearsal（彩排），Iwhispered,thelineandhopedwithsomanydistractionsonstagethat

thedirectorwouldn,tnotice.Luckily,shedidn't.Overthreewildweeksofrehearsals,Iconvinced

myselfthatIcouldkeepfakingit.Then,whenthecurtainfinallyrosewithanaudience,maybeIwould

feelfineaboutsayingthelinejustonceasloudlyasIcould.

Onthenightoftheopendressrehearsal,Iwasnervoustoseeanoldcouple,theEhlers,seatedin

thehall.TheywereclosefriendsofourfamilyandIhadnoideatheywouldbethere.Whenthebig

momentarrived,withnervousnessracingthroughmybody,Iwentforit.Irememberthemomentquite

clearly.WhereIstood.Howitsounded.HowIfelt.

Aftertheshow,theEhlersmetmewithcheers,awarmhug,andsomebriefdialogueoftheirown.

Whiletalkingwiththem,Iwasoverwhelmedbymixedfeelingsofregretandshame.

注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

“Jason,thatwasquitesomelanguage.Yousurprisedus,"Mrs.Ehlerslookedatme.

Isaidgoodbyetothecoupleandwaitedinthedramaroomuntilourdirectorappeared.

“Jason,thatwasquitesomelanguage.Yousurprisedus,"Mrs.Ehlerslookedatme.ItoldMrs.

EhlersfranklythatIhadbeenunwillingtosayit.Mrs.Ehlerspattedmeontheshoulderconsolingly,

suggestingthatIshouldhavetoldthedirectortochangeit.Inoddedmyhead,butstilldoubtedwhether

thedirectorwouldletme.Mrs.Ehlersseemedtohavereadmymindandsaidwithasoftsmile,

""Whateveryougetisagain.Wehavetostandupandgiveitatrysometimes,don'twe?”

Isaidgoodbyetothecoupleandwaitedinthedramaroomuntilourdirectorappeared.Withmy

heartracing,IstoodnearherdeskandcasuallyaskedifImightpossiblychangethedisrespectfullinein

theplaytoamoredecentone.Shesankintosilenceforamomentandreplied,"Yourreplacementis

indeedmoreappropriate.Thankyou!^^Agreeablysurprisedbyherresponse,Ileftwithamixtureof

gratitude,humility,respectandshame.Fromthatmomenton,Ifeltincreasinglyconfidentandproudto

sharemyviewswithothers.

【導(dǎo)語】本文以故事的發(fā)展線索展開，講述了作者在中學(xué)時(shí)，老師和導(dǎo)演給了他一個(gè)角色讓

他出演，在第一次讀臺(tái)詞時(shí)發(fā)現(xiàn)里面有一句不禮貌的臺(tái)詞。盡管作者自己讀到的時(shí)候感覺不舒服，

但還是在一次一次的排練時(shí)用了那句臺(tái)詞，在公開彩排的時(shí)候，作者家的好朋友也來了，聽到了

作者使用的那句臺(tái)詞后，與作者進(jìn)行了交流。

【詳解】1.段落續(xù)寫：

①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“"Jason,你說的話真太厲害了。你讓我們大吃一驚，"Rhlers太太看著

我?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫作者與Rhlers太太交流了那句臺(tái)詞的事情，給作者提出什么建議。

②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“我告別了這對(duì)夫婦，在戲劇室里等著，直到我們的導(dǎo)演出現(xiàn)?！笨芍?，

第二段可描寫作者與導(dǎo)演交流了些什么，問題有沒有得到解決。

2.續(xù)寫線索:Ehlers太太的問候——作者坦白心情——Ehlers太太提出建議——等到導(dǎo)演——

說出臺(tái)詞問題一解決問題一感想

3.詞匯激活

行為類

①.拍肩膀：patsb.ontheshoulder/tabsbontheshoulder

②.理解某人：readone'smind/understand/grasp/catchsb.

③.陷入：sinkinto/belostin

情緒類

①使.驚訝：surprise/amaze/astonish

②.有信心的：confident/secure

【點(diǎn)睛】［高分句型1］.Ehlerspattedmeontheshoulderconsolingly,suggestingthatIshouldhave

toldthedirectortochangeit.（運(yùn)用了現(xiàn)在分詞做狀語以及that引導(dǎo)的賓語從句）

［高分句型2］.Withmyheartracing,IstoodnearherdeskandcasuallyaskedifImightpossibly

changethedisrespectfullineintheplaytoamoredecentone.（運(yùn)用了with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)和if弓［導(dǎo)的賓語

從句）

［高分句型3］.Agreeablysurprisedbyherresponse,Ileftwithamixtureofgratitude,humility,

respectandshame.（運(yùn)用了過去分詞作狀語）

模擬演練

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

Ourcarranoverthesandandrocks,leavingacloudofdust.Itwasabeautifulspringday.Thesun

wasbrightandtheskywasclear-perfectconditionsforoff-roading（越野）.Backthen,in1984,mywife

SueandIwerelivinginsoutheasternCalifornia.Theviewswerewonderful,butwithdangers.The

temperaturescouldriseabove50℃,anditwasnoplacefortouriststogooff-roadingwithoutenough

preparation.

SueandIalwaystookabagwithus,packedwithsnacks,water,andafirstaidkit.Wealsohadacar

speciallychangedfordrivinginthedesert.Withit,wecouldgoanywhereajeepcouldgo.

Thatday,wedroveabout20milesintothepark.Aroundmidday,westoppedtohavearest.Asusual,

wecouldseethedesertbeforeus.Whenthespiritofadventuremovedus,wewentbackintothecar.But

whenIturnedthekeynothinghappened.Itriedagainandagain.Nothinghappened.IcouldseeSuewas

thinkingthesamething——theenginewouldn'tstart.

Ourcarhadonestrangeproblem.Aboutonceayear,itwouldrefusetostart.Ifleftovernight,the

enginewouldrunjustfinethenextmorning.Butnoonecouldfindanythingwrongwithourcar.

Becauseithappenedsorarely,we5djustlearnedtolivewithit.Butithadneverhappenedsuddenly.

“Whatshouldwedo?”Ifeltalittleanxious.Ihadn'tseenapersononourdriveouthere,andwe

hadnowaytocallforhelp."Wecouldwalkbacktotown,“Suesaid.Eagernottowasteanymore

daylight,wequicklypackedourthings.WewereabouttosetoffwhenSuecalledmyname."Look!”she

cried.Sureenough,therewassomething,gettingcloser.

注意：

1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Itwasn'tlongbeforeIcouldmakeoutwhatitwas——ajeep!

Hecheckedtheengineandsaid,44Iknowwhafswrong.^^

Itwasn'tlongbeforeIcouldmakeoutwhatitwas-ajeep!Anditwasheadingstraightforthe

placewestayed!Therewasamaninthedriver'sseat.Notalocal.Ourcommunitywassmall,andI

didn'trecognizehimatall."Youneedhelp?”heasked."Canyougiveusaridebackintotown?^^Iasked

cautiously.9,Ourcarwon'tstartagainuntilitsitsovemight/'Hethoughtforawhileandaskedtotakea

lookatourcar.Iknewitwashopeless,butIdidn'twanttoberudetoastrangertryingtohelp.

Hecheckedtheengineandsaid,“Iknowwhafswrong.^^Themancontinuedtosay,"Luckyforyou.

Ihavethattoolwithme."Hewenttofetchthetoolandgottorepairourstrangecar,andafterseveral

minutes,theenginebegantoworkagain.Ifeltsosurprised,andhetoldusnottostopagainuntilwegot

thecarhome.WehadnowordstoexpressourgratitudeandSuewantedtopayhimsomemoney,buthe

shookhisheadandclimbedintohisjeep,continuinghisway.SueandIbelievedhewasanangelwho

happenedtobepassingby.

【導(dǎo)語】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了作者和妻子驅(qū)車20英里離開城市去公園欣賞沙漠的

美景，可中午休息后，發(fā)現(xiàn)車發(fā)動(dòng)機(jī)無法啟動(dòng)了。當(dāng)他們正準(zhǔn)備步行回城時(shí)突然看到有東西朝他

們?cè)絹碓浇?/p>

【詳解】1.段落續(xù)寫：

①由續(xù)寫第一段首句“沒過多久，我就弄清楚它是什么——一輛吉普車！”可以預(yù)測(cè)續(xù)寫第一

段主要內(nèi)容：吉普車朝作者開過來，作者要求車主搭載他們回城，吉普車主主動(dòng)提出幫他們看下

車的問題。

②由第二段首句“他檢查了發(fā)動(dòng)機(jī)，說：，我知道出了什么問題。’”可以預(yù)測(cè)續(xù)寫第二段主要內(nèi)

容：吉普車主發(fā)現(xiàn)車的問題并修好，作者準(zhǔn)備支付錢作為報(bào)答，吉普車主拒絕了，這讓作者感到

自己遇到天使一般。

2.續(xù)寫線索：作者發(fā)現(xiàn)吉普車開過來一請(qǐng)求車主搭載他們回城一吉普車主要求幫他們檢

查下車——吉普車主發(fā)現(xiàn)車的問題并修好——作者提出現(xiàn)金報(bào)答——吉普車主拒絕任何報(bào)酬

3.詞匯激活

行為類

①.檢查：examine/check/inspect/lookcloselyat

②.修理：mend/fix/repair

③.表達(dá)我們的感謝：showourthanks/expressourgratitude/expressourappreciation

情緒類

①.謹(jǐn)慎地：cautiously/prudently/carefully

②.絕望的：hopeless/desperate/indespair

③.驚訝的：surprised/astonished/amazed/insurprise

【點(diǎn)睛】[高分句型1].WehadnowordstoexpressourgratitudeandSuewantedtopayhimsome

money,butheshookhisheadandclimbedintohisjeep,continuinghisway.（運(yùn)用了現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語）

[高分句型2].SueandIbelievedhewasanangelwhohappenedtobepassingby.（運(yùn)用了who弓I

導(dǎo)的定語從句）

模擬演練

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

“Whatacrabby-lookinglady（怨婦）Jthecashieratmylocalconveniencestorewhisperedtoher

coworker.Iwasgrabbingsomethingofftheshelf.Ihadahalfdozenkidswaitingformeoutsideinthe

van,andhere'sthething:theywereallmyownchildren.Notimeforpolite.Nocasualconversationwith

thecheckoutlady,nonodofapprovaltowardthestockboy,nobreathing.Justgetthetoiletpaper,two

gallonsofmilkandsomeFrostedFlakesandgetbacktomychildren!

Butmyinterestwasarousedbythecrabby-lookinglady.Whichonewasshe?Takingafamilypack

oftoiletpaperundermyarm,Iscannedthetinystoreforthecrabbylady.Lefssee,there5sa

middle-agedguycheckingonpork,anoldergentlemanatthecheckoutpurchasinganeggsalad

sandwichandacoffee,and...justthenIsawher,thecrabby-lookinglady.

Hereyesweresmall;herbrownhairwaspulledbackinaponytailsotightthatitlookedlikeher

foreheadwoulddrop.Hermouthwasshutserious.Thisladylookedlikeshehadsmelledsomething

reallybad.Then,Iturnedawayfrommyownreflectionintheconvexsecuritymirror（安全反射鏡）at

thebackofthestore.Thecrabby-lookinglady...wasme!

Thatnight,Icried.Iwasthecrabby-lookinglady!Me!Thegirloncevotednicestsmilebyherhigh

schoolclass!Thingsmustgetchanged!RightthenandthereIresolvedtodoonethingoverthenextyear.

Onesimpleresolution:tosmile.Ididn'tneedtowaitforJanuary1st——Iwouldstartrightnow.

Iresolvedtosmileatanyoneandanything,eventhoughtheywouldletmedown.AndIalso

resolvedtomakeaconsciousefforttosmile,atleasttentimesaday.

注意：

1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Thefirstdayof"'MissionSmile^^Ipracticedsmilingasplanned.

Afterpracticingamonth,unexpectedly,somethingdifferenthappened.

Onepossibleversion:

ThefirstdayofMissionSmileIpracticedsmilingasplanned.Ismiledatastrangedogwhopeed

onmydaughter'snewschoolshoeswhileshewasinthem,thesalesmantothedoor,threeofmysix

children,alibrarianwhoaskedmeifIwasawareoftheglobaloverpopulationproblem,andmybathtub.

Ievensmiledatmyhusbandoverthephonewhenhecalledtosayhe'dbelatefromwork.AndIsmiled

atmyselfinthemirrortwice,justtoremindmyselfwhatasmilelookedlike.

Afterpracticingamonth,unexpectedly,somethingdijferenthappened.Ididn'teventrytofindthings

tosmileatandFdstillnoticesmiletakeovermyface.Whenmydaughterloadedthedishwasherwith

hersocks,Ismiled.Whenwewerereallylateforchurch,Ismiled.OnedayIwasmeetingacoupleof

friendsatalocalcoffeeshop.Ioverheardthecashierremarktoherco-worker,t4Whatahappy-looking

lady!”AndIdidn'tevenhavetolookaroundtoknowwhoshewastalkingabout.Itwasme!

【導(dǎo)語】本文以人物線索展開，講述了作者在超市匆忙買東西時(shí)無意間聽到收銀員們?cè)u(píng)論一

位女士脾氣暴躁，作者想知道這名女士到底是誰，結(jié)果從安全鏡中發(fā)現(xiàn)竟然是自己，晚上作者傷

心地哭了，當(dāng)下決定要做一件事情：學(xué)會(huì)微笑。

【詳解】1.段落續(xù)寫：

①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“‘使命微笑’的第一天，我按計(jì)劃練習(xí)微笑?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫作者在

具體不同的場景下開始練習(xí)微笑。

②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“練習(xí)了一個(gè)月后，出乎意料的是，不同的事情發(fā)生了?！笨芍?，本段應(yīng)

該寫練習(xí)微笑一個(gè)月給作者帶來的影響和變化。

2.續(xù)寫線索：計(jì)劃練習(xí)微笑一在不同場景下學(xué)會(huì)微笑一練習(xí)微笑一個(gè)月后的變化一收

銀員對(duì)作者的新評(píng)價(jià)

3.詞匯激活

行為類

①練習(xí)：practice/train

②穿：bein/wear/puton

③意識(shí)至!J：beawareof/beconsciousof

情緒類

①出乎意料地：unexpectedly/surprisingly

【點(diǎn)睛】[高分句型1].Ismiledatastrangedogwhopeedonmydaughter'snewschoolshoes

whileshewasinthem,thesalesmantothedoor,threeofmysixchildren,alibrarianwhoaskedmeifI

wasawareoftheglobaloverpopulationproblem,andmybathtub.（運(yùn)用了who引導(dǎo)的限制性定語從

句、while引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語從句和if引導(dǎo)的賓語從句）

[高分句型2].AndIsmiledatmyselfinthemirrortwice,justtoremindmyselfwhatasmile

lookedlike.（運(yùn)用了不定式短語作目的狀語和what引導(dǎo)的賓語從句）

[高分句型3].AndIdidn'tevenhavetolookaroundtoknowwhoshewastalkingabout.（運(yùn)用了

who引導(dǎo)的賓語從句）

模擬演練

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

WhenChristmasrolledaround,Ialwaysgotthetreeup.AndChristmasEvefoundmeplacingan

envelopeonthetree.

Itwasjustasmall,whiteenvelopewithanoteofwhatIhaddone,stuckamongthebranchesofour

Christmastree.ItallbeganbecausemyhusbandMikehatedChristmas.Oh,notthetruemeaningof

Christmas,butthecommercialaspectsofit,overspending,thegiftsgivenindesperationbecauseyou

couldn'tthinkofanythingelse.

Knowinghefeltthisway,Idecidedoneyeartobypass（避開）theusualshirts,sweaters,tiesandso

on.ItriedtofindaspecialpresentjustforMike.Theinspirationcameinanunusualway.

Ourson,Kevin,whowas12thatyear,waswrestlingatthejuniorlevelattheschoolheattended,

andshortlybeforeChristmas,therewasanon-leaguematchagainstateamSponsoredbyaninner-city

church.

Theseyoungsters,dressedinsneakerssoragged（襤褸的）thatshoesseemedtobetheonlything

holdingthemtogether,presentedasharpcontrasttoourboysinthespiffyblueandgolduniformsand

sparklingnewwrestlinghoes.AsthematchbeganIwasalarmedtoseethattheotherteamwaswrestling

withoutheadgear,akindoflighthelmetdesignedtoprotectawrestler'scars.Itwasaluxurytheragged

teamobviouslycouldnotafford.Well,weendedupdefeatingthem.Wetookeveryweightclass.

Mike,seatedbesideme,shookhisheadsadly,4tIwishoneofthemcouldhavewon,^^hesaid.They

havealotofpotential,butlosinglikethiscouldtaketheheartrightoutofthem."Mikelovedkids,all

kids,andheknewthem,havingcoachedlittleleaguefootball,baseballandlacrosse.

注意：

1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

ThatwaswhentheideaofhisChristmaspresentcame.

Feelingtheirdad'shappiness,mychildrenjoinedme.

Thafswhentheideaforhispresentcame.Thatafternoon,Iwenttoalocalsportinggoodsstoreand

boughtanassortmentofwrestlingheadgearandshoesandsentthemanonymouslytotheinner-city

church.OnChristmasEve,Iplacedtheenvelopeonthetree,thenoteinsidetellingMikewhatIhad

doneandthatthiswashisgiftfromme.HissmilewasthebrightestthingaboutChristmasthatyearand

insucceedingyears.

Feelingtheirdad'shappiness,mychildrenjoinedme.Eachofourchildren,unbeknownsttothe

others,hadplacedanenvelopeonthetreefortheirdad.Thetraditionhasgrownandsomedaywill

expandevenfurtherwithourgrandchildrenstandingaroundthetreewithwide-eyedanticipation

watchingastheirfatherstakedowntheenvelope.Mike'sspirit,liketheChristmasspirit,willalwaysbe

withus.

【導(dǎo)語】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了作者的丈夫并不喜歡圣誕節(jié)，于是作者想到了給她

丈夫送一份特殊的圣誕禮物，一個(gè)信封，里面講述了作者所做的一切，為了使他的丈夫在圣誕感

到快樂。

【詳解】1.段落續(xù)寫

①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“就在這時(shí)，想到了給他送什么圣誕禮物。”可知，第一段主要寫送了什

么圣誕禮物給Mike,并使他感到高興。

②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“感受到父親的幸福，我的孩子們也加入了我的行列?！笨芍诙慰?/p>

寫，我的孩子們也趁大家不注意的時(shí)候，在圣誕樹上放了一封寫給爸爸的信。并且把這個(gè)傳統(tǒng)延

續(xù)下去。

2.續(xù)寫線索：mike不喜歡圣誕一想到禮物一mike看到禮物感到高興一孩子們加入進(jìn)

來——傳統(tǒng)延續(xù)。

3.詞匯激活

行為類

①購買：buy/purchase

②放置：place/put/layup

③擴(kuò)大：expand/enlarge/develop

情緒類

①幸福：happiness/gladness/contentment

②預(yù)期：anticipation/expectation

【點(diǎn)睛】[高分句型L]OnChristmasEve,Iplacedtheenvelopeonthetree,thenoteinsidetelling

MikewhatIhaddoneandthatthiswashisgiftfromme.（what和that弓|導(dǎo)的賓語從句）

[高分句型2.]Thetraditionhasgrownandsomedaywillexpandevenfurtherwithourgrandchildren

standingaroundthetreewithwide-eyedanticipationwatchingastheirfatherstakedownthe

envelope.（as引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語從句）

高中英語讀后續(xù)寫素材大全

第一部分.時(shí)間描寫（二）

時(shí)間描寫14

“磨蹭/花費(fèi)/節(jié)約/擠（騰）出/消磨/耗盡/浪費(fèi)/彌補(bǔ)/利用/珍惜/分享時(shí)間”

*mark/take/spend/save/spare(make)/kill/runoutof/waste/makeupfor/recover/makeuse

of/treasure/cherish/sharetime

l.Theofficermadethesoldiersmarktimeasapunishment.

那位軍官讓士兵們?cè)靥げ揭允緫土P.

2.Whydoyoujustmarktime?Youshouldbequicker.

你為什么磨磨蹭蹭？你應(yīng)該更快一些.

3.Pmjustmarkingtimeinthisjob-I'mhopingtogetintojournalism.

我干這份工作只是在等待時(shí)機(jī)，我希望能從事新聞工作.

4.Taketimetodosomekindness.Andgoacrossthesecondmile.

花點(diǎn)時(shí)間去做善事，走過第二個(gè)里程.

5.Takeyourtimeoverthejob,anddoitwell.

這事得慢慢來做,可得做好啊.

6.Takeyourtim|,don'tcutcornersandfollowinstructionstotheletter.

慢慢來，不要圖省事，要嚴(yán)格按照說明去做.

7.Youcertainlytookyourtimegettinghere!

你真是姍姍來遲?。?/p>

8.Eventhoughitcantakeadditionaltimetodoyourhomework,you'llbesurprisedhowmuchyouwill

shinecomparedtothosewhodidn'tputintheextraeffort.

盡管完成作業(yè)可能需要你拿出額外的時(shí)間，但當(dāng)你與那些沒有付出額外努力的人坐在一起的時(shí)候，你

會(huì)發(fā)現(xiàn)自己的表現(xiàn)是多么搶眼，連你自己都會(huì)感到吃驚.

9.IttookmesometimetodigestwhatIhadheard.

我花了一些時(shí)間才把聽到的東西弄明白.

10.1havetospendtimegettingawayfromthecrowd!

我得花時(shí)間從人群中脫身??！

11.Youshouldspendtimeonbasictraining,notonthoseflourishes.

要練好基本功，別盡學(xué)花架子.

12.Spendtimewiththepeopleyouloveintheplacethatyoulove.

和你愛的人在你喜愛的環(huán)境里共度時(shí)光.

13.We'dsavetimeonourjourneyifwewentbytrain.

如果我們乘火車去的話,我們會(huì)在旅程上節(jié)約時(shí)間.

14.1fwegothiswayitwillsaveustwohoursonthetrip.

如果走這條路，可以縮短兩個(gè)小時(shí)的行程.

15.Youshouldreadalotofbooksandexercisealot.Evenifyourcourseloadisveryheavy,youshouldstill

sparesometimetodootherthings,becauseinterestcontainslimitlesspower.

要多讀書多鍛煉，無論你的課程多重，也應(yīng)該擠出時(shí)間做些別的，因?yàn)榕d趣隱藏著無限力量.

16.Whateveryourdreamsare-maketimeforthem,andtreatthemseriously.

不論你的夢(mèng)想是什么，都要為它騰出時(shí)間，認(rèn)真對(duì)待.

17.Maketimetosocializewithfriends-andalsomaketimeforyourself.

抽時(shí)間進(jìn)行社交一一跟朋友聚聚，也是為自己抽出時(shí)間.

18.Weshouldn*tkilltimebywatchingTVorlisteningtomusic.

我們不應(yīng)當(dāng)用看電視或是聽音樂來消磨時(shí)間.

19.We'verunoutoftime,butwe'llgoonwiththisexercisenexttime.

今天時(shí)間用完了,我們下次繼續(xù)做這個(gè)練習(xí).

20.Don'tlosetimeindoingyourhomework.

抓緊時(shí)間做作業(yè)吧.

21.Wefellbehind,wemissedbigtrends,andwelosttime.

我們落后了,我們錯(cuò)過了主要潮流，我們喪失了時(shí)間優(yōu)勢(shì).

22.1'mnotonetowastetimeonjustanyone.

我可不是個(gè)隨便浪費(fèi)時(shí)間在任何人身上的人.

23.1wastedalotoftimeplayingonlinegames.

我浪費(fèi)了很多時(shí)間玩網(wǎng)絡(luò)游戲.

24.1mustworkhardtomakeupforlosttime.

我必須努力工作來彌補(bǔ)失去的時(shí)間.

25.1muststudyhardtorecoverthelosttime.

我一定要努力學(xué)習(xí)來補(bǔ)上失去的時(shí)間.

26.IfIwereyou,Iwouldmakebetteruseoftimeatschool.

如果我是你，我會(huì)更好地利用在學(xué)校的時(shí)間.

27.Beingastudent,resultswouldonlyadvanceoncetheyvaluetimeandlettimebetheirbasesofresult

increasing,especiallyatthetimeofdealingwithexamination.

作為學(xué)生,只有惜時(shí)如金，把時(shí)間作為提高學(xué)習(xí)成績的堅(jiān)實(shí)基礎(chǔ)，才有可能提升學(xué)習(xí)成績,尤其是應(yīng)試階

段.

28.Cherishlifeandtreasuretime!Fortimeisthematerialtomoldlife.

愛惜生命，珍惜時(shí)間！因?yàn)?時(shí)間就是塑造生命的材料.

29.Treasuretimeanddon'tletitstrayagain.

珍惜時(shí)間，別讓它再溜走.

30.Peopleshouldnotmoonaway,andshouldcherishthetimetolearn!

人們不應(yīng)該虛度時(shí)光，而應(yīng)該珍惜光陰好好學(xué)習(xí)！

31.Wealsocherishthetimeweshareinaforeignlandandwishtobeeachother*ssupportandhelp.

我們也很珍惜能在異國他鄉(xiāng)一起生活的機(jī)會(huì)，希望成為彼此的支持與幫助.

時(shí)間描寫15

“該……的時(shí)候了;時(shí)機(jī)已經(jīng)/尚未成熟”

*Itis(high/about)timethat...did...

*Thetimeis(not)ripe(for/todo...)

*Thereisnotimelikethepresent...

*...bewell/badlytimed.

*Youcouldn'thavetimeditbetter.

1.1thinkitishightimethatyoumadeupyourmind.

我認(rèn)為到了你作出決定的時(shí)候了.

2.1tishightimethatalltheChinesepeoplerealizedtheharmofpiracy.

是到了全中國人民意識(shí)到盜版危害的時(shí)候.

3.Don'tyouthinkitishightimethatour