專題05讀后續(xù)寫個人成長類話題（測試）解析版目錄【故事情節(jié)構(gòu)建框架】P1【個人成長語料精編】P1【個人成長話題精彩片段】P4【個人成長話題好題調(diào)研】P6[調(diào)研01]（24-25高三上·重慶·階段練習）P6[調(diào)研02]（2024·浙江嘉興·一模）P8[調(diào)研03]（24-25高三下·廣東江門·開學考試）P11[調(diào)研04]（24-25高三上·浙江·階段練習）P14[調(diào)研05]（24-25高三上·山西太原·期末）P16[調(diào)研06]（24-25高二上·廣東·階段練習）P17[調(diào)研07]（24-25高二上·廣東深圳·期末）P19[調(diào)研08]（24-25高三下·山東德州·開學考試）P21【故事情節(jié)構(gòu)建框架】階段情節(jié)發(fā)展情緒刻畫第一階段成長前的苦惱負面情緒塑造第二階段成長中努力+反思+蛻變第三階段成長后的升華感悟+感激+升華【個人成長語料精編】第一步：成長前的苦惱（負面情緒塑造）負面的心理描寫可以揭示人物在成長前的內(nèi)心世界，表達人物的性格、特點、感情等，這為后期成長的過程埋下伏筆。一、緊張1.Shetoldtheteacherthetruth,withherheartpoundinglikeadrum.她把真相告訴了老師,心跳得像打鼓一樣。2.MyheartbeatsoviolentlythatIfeltlikesittingonpinsandneedles.心跳如此劇烈，我感到如坐針氈。3.IwasabouttorespondwhenIfeltmytonguetiedinandpalmssweating.我正要回答時，感到舌頭被綁住了，手掌開始出汗。二、困惑1.Hissuddenchangeinmoodcompletelyconfusedme.他的情緒突然變化完全把我弄糊涂了。2.WhenIstoodonthestageinfrontofthelargeaudience,mymindwentblank.我站在舞臺上面對大批觀眾時，我的頭腦一片空白。3.Myheartskippedabeatanddisbeliefwashedoverme.我的心為之一顫，充滿了懷疑。三、憂慮1.Worriedaboutthejourney,Iwasunsettledforthefirstfewdays.由于擔心這次旅行，頭幾天我心神不寧。2.IwassonervousabouttheEnglishtestthatIlayawakehalfthenight,worrying.我對英語考試感到如此緊張，以至于大半夜都睡不著覺，心神不寧。3.Onhearingthebadnews,shefeltseizedbyaburstofsadnessandcouldn’thelpcryingbitterly.一聽到這個壞消息，她被一股悲傷之情控制，忍不住哭泣。四、孤獨1.Awaveoflonelinesswashedoverme.一陣孤獨感席卷了我的全身。2.Coldwithnohopeforwarmth,Ifeltlikedrowninginacrowdofpeople.我感到又冷又無取暖的希望，感覺就像被人群淹沒一樣。五、絕望1.Hearingthenews,sodesperatewashethathedrownedsadnessinwine.聽到這個消息，他非常絕望，把悲傷淹沒在酒中。2.Hegazedattheconfusionaroundhimandwasoverwhelmedbyafeelingofdespair.他凝視著周圍一片混亂，感到一陣絕望。3.Desperateandhelpless,shekneltdown,withtearsofregretstreamingdownhercheeks.絕望而無助的她跪了下來，悔恨的淚水順著面頰流了下來。六、疲憊1.Exhausted,Islidintobedandfellfastasleep.我精疲力竭地躺在床上，很快就睡著了。2.Shefeltexhaustedandsatbythestreamrestingherachingfeet.她感到精疲力竭，坐在溪邊休息著疼痛的雙腳。七、羞愧1.Soashamedwasshethatshecouldfeelthebloodrushedtoherface.我感到非常羞愧，甚至能感覺到鮮血涌到臉上。2.Shefeltsoashamedofherfoolishbehaviorthatshecouldfeelherfaceburning.她為自己的愚蠢行為感到非常羞愧，以至于感到臉紅了。3.Awaveofguiltsweptoverme

asIadmittedthefactthatgoingtothemovieswastherealreasonwhyIwaslate.當我承認去看電影是我遲到的真正原因時，一陣恐懼向我襲來。第二步：成長中（努力掙扎應對+蛻變）一、驚訝1.Scaredandshocked,shecouldn'tsayaword.他又害怕又震驚，一句話也說不出來。2.Raisinghereyebrowsinsurprise,MrsRossifroze,asifrootedontheground.羅西太太驚訝地揚起眉毛，僵住了，仿佛定格在那里。二、反思1.Ireflectedonmyinitialdoubtsandhesitations.我反思了自己最初的疑慮和猶豫不決。2.“That’snottherightway.Patience,Will,Patience,”avoiceechoedinmyearsaftertheboysleft.“這不是正確的方式。耐心!意愿，耐心，”男孩們離開后，一個聲音在我耳邊回響。三、希望1.Asparkofhopekindledintheirhearts.他們心中燃起了希望的火花。2.Jaycelookeduptohim,hiseyessparklingwithhopeanddetermination.杰茜抬頭看著他，眼睛里閃爍著希望和決心。四、喜悅1.Hearingthat,Kariegrinnedfromeartoear,awaveofhappinessfloodingoverher.聽到這話，Karie笑得合不攏嘴，一股幸福感涌上心頭。2.Hewasinhighspirits,andfeltlikebeingontopoftheworld.他情緒高漲，感覺自己好像站在了世界之巔。3.Shelaughed,hereyestwinklingwithexcitement.她笑了起來，她的眼睛因興奮而閃閃發(fā)光。五、感動1.Withtearsstreamingdownherface,shethankedhimagainandagain.她淚流滿面，再三感謝她。2.Iwasdeeplymovedbywhathehaddone,tearsrollingdownwithoutcontrol.我被他的所作所為深深打動了，淚水情不自禁地奪眶而出。3.Tearsdroppingfromhiseyes,herantoMum’swarmhug,andsaidgently,"Mum,thankyou."他熱淚盈眶，跑到媽媽溫暖的擁抱前，溫柔地說："媽媽，謝謝你。"第三步：成長后的升華（感悟+感激+升華）一、感激1.Hisfaceisglowingwithexcitement.他的臉因激動而容光煥發(fā)。2.Ashiverofexcitementpassedthroughherstomachwhensheheardthenews.聽到這個消息，她激動得胃里直打顫。3.Ilookedather,tearsofloveandgratitudewellingupinmyeyes. 我看著她，愛與感激的淚水奪眶而出。4.“Thankyou.”Ireplied,withamixtureofgratitudeandexcitement.“謝謝你?！蔽?guī)е屑ず团d奮的心情回答道。二、感悟1.IknewforsurethateverytimeIlostpatienceinthefutureIwouldremembermygrandfather’swords.我確信，將來每當我失去耐心時，我都會記住祖父的話。2.ItwasthefirsttimethatIhadtrulyrealizedthemeaningofthegiftpatience.這是我第一次真正體會到這份禮物的意義——耐心。3.ItdawnedonAdamthatoneshouldsticktohisdreamnomatterwhathappens.亞當突然想到無論發(fā)生什么事，都要堅持自己的夢想。4.Adamsaid,“Thanks,MrsRossi,forteachingmehowtomakeacaketorealizemydream.”亞當說：“謝謝羅茜夫人，她教我如何做蛋糕來實現(xiàn)我的夢想?！薄緜€人成長話題精彩片段】學習知識促改變挑戰(zhàn)：It'snevertoolatetolearn.Eachindividualhastherighttoacceptmorechallengesandmakemoreattempts.學習永遠為時不晚。每個人都有權(quán)利去接受更多的挑戰(zhàn)，做更多的嘗試。發(fā)揮天賦促改變勇敢：Actually,everyindividualpossessestalent.Bebravewhenyoufinditandalsomakeefforts.Youcancreatemiraclesintheend.事實上，每個人都有天賦。當你發(fā)現(xiàn)它的時候你要勇敢，也要努力。你最終能創(chuàng)造奇跡。追逐夢想促改變夢想：It'snevertoolatetogoforyourdream.Aslongasyougraspeveryopportunityandtakefulladvantageofit,youwillstandachancetorealizeyourdreams.追夢水遠不晚。只要你抓住每一個機會，充分利用它，你就有可能實現(xiàn)夢想?？朔嚯y促改變堅持：Thejourneytosuccessisnotsmooth.Itisfullofchallengesanddifficulties.Weshouldbebravetofacethem.Aslongaswedon'tgiveuphopeandmakeeveryefforttoovercomeallthedifficulties,wewillsurelyachieveourgoal.通往成功的路不會平坦，充滿挑戰(zhàn)和困難。我們要勇敢面對。只要不放棄希望并竭盡全力克服所有困難，我們最終會實現(xiàn)我們的目標。戰(zhàn)勝恐懼促改變決心：Determinationandoptimismarewhatittakestoconqueryourfearandaccomplishyourgoal.戰(zhàn)勝恐懼和實現(xiàn)目標，需要決心和樂觀。戰(zhàn)勝自卑促改變個性：IsmiledasIeventuallyrealizedtherealsourceofconfidence.Now,IamproudofwhatIlooklikeandmuchhappier,becauseIhaverealizeditisyourpersonalitythatdecideswhoyoutrulyare.我笑了，因為我最終意識到了自信的真正來源?，F(xiàn)在，我為自己的樣子感到驕徽，而且更快樂，因為我已經(jīng)意識到，決定你真正是誰的是你的個性。戰(zhàn)勝消極促改變態(tài)度：Attitudeismoreimportantthanfactsforus.Wecannotchangeourpast,andwecannotchangethefact.However,theonlythingwecandoisholdingapositiveattitude.態(tài)度對我們來說比事實更重要。我們不能改變我們的過去，我們不能改變事實。然而，我們唯一能做的就是保持積極的態(tài)度。性格塑造與品質(zhì)培養(yǎng)

勇敢：Shesummoneduphercourageandsteppedintotheunknown,realizingthatbraveryisnottheabsenceoffearbuttheabilitytoactinspiteofit.她鼓起勇氣踏入未知的領域，意識到勇敢不是沒有恐懼，而是盡管有恐懼仍能采取行動。耐心：Inthelongprocessoflearningthepiano,Ilearnedthatpatienceisthekey.Everynotepracticedwithpatiencebringsmeclosertoperfection.在學習鋼琴的漫長過程中，我明白了耐心是關鍵。每一個耐心練習的音符都讓我更接近完美。

面對挫折與困難

挫折是成長的契機：Thefailureinthecompetitionwasaheavyblowatfirst,butlaterIrealizeditwasagoldenopportunityformetofindmyweaknessesandgrowstronger.比賽的失敗起初是一個沉重的打擊，但后來我意識到這是一個讓我發(fā)現(xiàn)自己的弱點并變得更強大的黃金機會。在困境中堅持：Trappedinthedarkcavefordays,heneverlosthopeandkeptsearchingforawayout.Hisperseveranceinthefaceofdifficultiesledtohissurvivalandgrowth.被困在黑暗的洞穴里好幾天，他從未失去希望，一直在尋找出路。他在困難面前的堅持不懈使他得以生存和成長。

自我認知與發(fā)現(xiàn)

認識自己的潛力：Beforetakingonthatchallengingproject,IneverknewIhadsuchgreatpotential.ItwasthroughthisexperiencethatItrulydiscoveredthehiddenstrengthwithinme.在承擔那個具有挑戰(zhàn)性的項目之前，我從不知道自己有如此巨大的潛力。正是通過這次經(jīng)歷，我才真正發(fā)現(xiàn)了自己內(nèi)心隱藏的力量。接納自己的不完美：Iusedtobeashamedofmyflaws,butasIgrewolder,IlearnedtoacceptmyselfasIam.Becauseitisourimperfectionsthatmakeusuniqueanddriveustogrow.我曾經(jīng)對自己的缺點感到羞愧，但隨著年齡的增長，我學會了接受真實的自己。因為正是我們的不完美讓我們獨一無二并促使我們成長。

人際關系中的成長

從朋友身上學習：Myfriend'spositiveattitudetowardslifehasalwaysinspiredme.Bylearningfromher,Ihavebecomemoreoptimisticandlearnedtoseethegoodineverything.我朋友對生活的積極態(tài)度一直激勵著我。通過向她學習，我變得更加樂觀，學會了看到每件事的好的一面。家庭的支持與成長：WheneverIfaceddifficulties,myfamilywasalwaystheretosupportme.Theirloveandencouragementgavemetheconfidencetoovercomeanyobstacleandgrowintoabetterperson.每當我遇到困難時，我的家人總是在那里支持我。他們的愛和鼓勵給了我克服任何障礙并成長為一個更好的人的信心。

學習與知識積累

知識改變命運：WiththeknowledgeIacquiredfrombooksandclasses,Iwasabletoseetheworldfromadifferentperspectiveandmakewiserdecisionsinlife.Knowledgetrulyisthepowerthatdrivespersonalgrowth.通過從書本和課堂上學到的知識，我能夠從不同的角度看待世界，并在生活中做出更明智的決定。知識確實是推動個人成長的力量。學習新技能：Learningtocodewasachallengingbutrewardingjourneyforme.Itnotonlybroadenedmyhorizonsbutalsotaughtmethevalueofcontinuouslearningandselfimprovement.學習編程對我來說是一段充滿挑戰(zhàn)但又有回報的旅程。它不僅拓寬了我的視野，還讓我明白了持續(xù)學習和自我提升的價值?！緜€人成長話題名校好題調(diào)研】[調(diào)研01]（24-25高三上·重慶·階段練習）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Tuckerstoodbythebackdoor,hiseyesfixedonthewintersky:crystalblueandnotasinglecloud.Hisbreathmadesteamycirclesonthechilledglasswindow.“Idon’tthinktoday’stheday,Tucker.”Hisfatherwalkedupbesidehimandlookedoutside.“Ithastosnowsomething,doesn’tit,Dad?”askedTucker,ahintofregretinhisvoiceashesurveyedthebarrenlandscape.“Sure,boy,”hisfatherstrokedhisfingersthroughTucker’shairandstrodeofftowardthebasementdoor.Tucker’sgazewanderedbeyondthebackyardofhisfamily’snewhome.Justbeyondaclusterofpricklypinetrees,theflatgroundpushedupwardintoasteepandemptyhillside.Dad’spromiseofaperfectsledding(乘雪橇)spotechoedinhisears,paintingvividpicturesofexhilaratingridesdownthehill,fasterandmorethrillingthananythinghe’dexperiencedinthecity.Sledding.Tucker’sbrand-newsledrestedinthecornerofhisroom,sandwichedbetweenhisdresser(梳妝臺)andtraintable.Itwasperfect:brightbluewithredandorangeflamesracingupitssides.Tuckerlovedthefeelofthecool,smoothplasticyellowrope.Hewassureitwouldbesuperfast.Ifonlyitwouldsnow.Determinedtofindsomewaytomakethemostofthissnowlessday,Tuckerwentdowntothebasementwherehefoundhisfatherwaist-deepinaseaofflattenedcardboardboxes.“Canyouplaychesswithme,Dad?”Tuckerpleaded.Hisfatherlookedoverthewallofboxes.“IpromisedyourmomI’dgetalltheseboxesbrokendownandreadyforrecycling.Itwon’ttakelong,Tucker.Inalittlewhile,we’llfindsomethingfuntodo,Ipromise.”ButTucker’seyeshadalreadylitupwithanewfoundidea.Ashecaughtsightoftheducttape(強力防水膠帶)nexttohisfatherandtheramp(斜坡)formedbythecardboardboxesbyaccident,inspirationstruck.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右;2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答?！癉ad,canIhavesomecardboardboxes?”Tuckerasked.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Tuckerheldthesledinplace.

__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【滿分范文】“Dad,canIhavesomecardboardboxes?”Tuckerasked.“Sure,ifyoucleanupwhenyou’redone,”answeredDad.“Andsomeducttape,too?”Tuckercontinued.Hisfathersmiled,grabbedtheducttape,andtossedittoTucker.Despitethecold,hewassweatingfromcarryingamountainofcardboardintothebackyard.Happily,helinedtheflatbrownboxes,oneaftertheother,upthehillside,andtapedtheundersidestogetheruntiltheyhadformedaramp.Itranfromthetiptopofthesleddinghill,pastthepinetrees,anddowntothemiddleofthebackyard.Tuckerheldthesledinplace.Grippingthesteeringrope,andmovinghisfeetintoposition,Tuckertookadeep,frostybreath.Heletoutascreamasthesledraceddowntheslope,fasterandfaster.Itcametoasuddenstopinthecrunchygrass.Tuckerflewthroughtheairandlandedinagigglyheap.Hejumpedtohisfeetandracedbackupthehillwithhissledagainandagain.Whenthelastofthedaylightfinallyfadedaway,helaybackinhissledandgazedupatthedarkeningsky.Thenhestuckouthistonguetocatchthefirstthick,whiteflakeswirlingdownfromabove.Andhesmiled.【導語】本文以人物為線索展開。塔克站在后門旁，望著無云的藍天，渴望下雪。他期待和父親去滑雪橇，但天氣無雪。他轉(zhuǎn)而請求父親陪他下棋，父親忙于整理紙箱。塔克看到膠帶和紙箱堆成的斜坡，心生一計?！驹斀狻?.段落續(xù)寫①由第一段句首內(nèi)容“‘爸爸，能給我一些紙板箱嗎？’塔克問道?！笨芍?，第一段可以描寫塔克用紙板箱制作滑道的過程。②由第二段句首內(nèi)容“塔克把雪橇固定好?！笨芍诙慰梢悦鑼懰嗽谧约褐谱鞯幕郎系幕瑒舆^程和心理活動。2.續(xù)寫線索：要紙板箱—組裝—把雪橇固定好—滑動—快樂—下雪3.詞匯激活行為類①回答：answer/reply②繼續(xù)：continue/keepon③抓?。篻rab/seize情緒類①快樂地：happily/joyfully②咯咯地笑著著陸：landinagigglyheap/giggleandland【點睛】[高分句型1]Happily,helinedtheflatbrownboxes,oneaftertheother,upthehillside,andtapedtheundersidestogetheruntiltheyhadformedaramp.(運用了until引導的時間狀語從句)[高分句型2]Grippingthesteeringrope,andmovinghisfeetintoposition,Tuckertookadeep,frostybreath.(運用了現(xiàn)在分詞Gripping和moving作狀語)[調(diào)研02]（2024·浙江嘉興·一模）憶往昔，求學時冷漠待人今品味，當牛馬孤獨午餐閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。ItwastheseconddayinthenewofficeandMayawasstillonherown.Exceptthemanwhohadtakenherinduction(入職),therewasnooneelsewhohadsaida“hi”totheyoungwoman.Notonlywasitanewoffice,itwasalsoanewcity.Whileshehadsuccessfullyclimbedthecorporateladder(階梯)forabettersalary,shehadn’treallymadeanyfriendsinthenewcityorofficeyet.Lookingatthewholeworkplacefromherseatattheendofthehall,Mayafeltanurgetocry.Butshewasagrownwomanandthatwassimplynotanoption.Shedecidedtoeatherlunch,aslonelyasitmightfeel.Herlunchboxrevealedfriedricewithvegetablesandanoldmemoryhitherfromthedepthofhermind.Itwasfifteenyearsagoandtheirsportsperiodhadjustbeencanceled.Thechildrenhadbroughtsomesnacksfromtheschoolcanteentotheclassroomandwerechewingnoisily.Theclassteachercameinwithayounggirl.“ThisisTina,newtoDelhiandyourschool.Makeherfeelwelcome,youall,”shesaid.Whilethestudentssaidabig“hi”toherinchorus,thatwasalltheydid.TinawasseatedrightnexttoMaya,somethingthelatter(后者)didn’tlike.So,sheturnedtoTinaandsaid,“Mybestfriendsitsnexttome.Youhavebeengiventhisseatbecausesheisabsenttoday.Oncesheisback,youhavetofindyourselfanewseat,OK?”Tinasadlynoddedherhead,butMayadidn’tcare.Asthepopulargirlinclass,Mayahadalotgoingforher—shehadmanyfriends,theteacherslovedherandshewasthequeenofdebating.So,shehardlyspoketothenewgirlwhosatnexttoherforawholeweek.注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右;2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。Paragraph1:Finally,Maya’sbestfriendreturnedtoschoolafterafeverattack._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:SolostinthoughtwasMayathatshedidn’tnoticeawomanstandingbesideher._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【滿分范文】Finally,Maya’sbestfriendreturnedtoschoolafterafeverattack.Asexpected,Maya’sfriendreclaimedherseatnexttoMaya,displacingTinaonceagain.Tina,withtearswellingupinhereyes,quietlypackedherthingsandmovedtoanemptydeskatthebackoftheclassroom.Mayawatchedhergo,feelingapangofguiltbutquicklydismissingit.However,thisincidentleftalastingimpressiononMaya,areminderofhowshehadoncebeeninsensitivetothefeelingsofothers.SolostinthoughtwasMayathatshedidn’tnoticeawomanstandingbesideher.Tinasmiledwarmlyandsaid,“Maya,longtimenosee.Ihopeyourememberme.”Mayawastakenaback,hermindracingbacktothosechildhooddays.EmbarrassmentandshamewashedoverherassherealizedtheimpactheractionshadonTina.Tina,sensingMaya’sdiscomfort,gentlyplacedahandonhershoulderandsaid,“It’sokay,Maya.IjustwantedtoletyouknowthatIforgaveyoualongtimeago.”Mayasmiledback,feelingaweightliftoffhershoulders.Inthatmoment,shevowedtobemoreconsideratetonewfacesinhercurrentworkplace.【導語】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了瑪雅因為在新公司孤獨，想起了讀書時自己的同學蒂娜。蒂娜是新同學選擇坐在瑪雅旁邊，然而瑪雅卻對蒂娜說自己的旁邊坐著自己的好朋友，蒂娜十分傷心。整整一個星期，她幾乎沒有和坐在她旁邊的新來的女孩說話。后來朋友生病回來，蒂娜不得不離開，這件事讓瑪雅十分內(nèi)疚。最后瑪雅發(fā)現(xiàn)蒂娜和自己在同一家公司，對方也已經(jīng)原諒了自己?！驹斀狻?.段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“終于，瑪雅最好的朋友在發(fā)燒后回到了學?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫瑪雅的朋友回來，瑪雅讓蒂娜離開，內(nèi)心感到內(nèi)疚。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“瑪雅陷入了沉思，沒有注意到站在她旁邊的一個女人”可知，第二段可描寫瑪雅在新公司再次遇到蒂娜，對方表示已經(jīng)原諒了瑪雅。2.續(xù)寫線索：好朋友回到學?！倌缺蝗〈倌葌碾x開座位——瑪雅內(nèi)疚——再次遇到蒂娜——得到原諒——瑪雅感悟3.詞匯激活行為類①取代：displace/takeplaceof②意識到：realize/beawareof③感受：sense/feel情緒類①體貼的：considerate/thoughtful②冷漠：insensitive/indifferent【點睛】[高分句型1]Tina,withtearswellingupinhereyes,quietlypackedherthingsandmovedtoanemptydeskatthebackoftheclassroom.(運用了with的復合結(jié)構(gòu))[高分句型2]However,thisincidentleftalastingimpressiononMaya,areminderofhowshehadoncebeeninsensitivetothefeelingsofothers.(運用了how引導賓語從句)【續(xù)寫思路分析】一、類型分析該文章屬于“人物成長與情感升華型”的讀后續(xù)寫。故事重點圍繞主人公(Maya)的心理成長與人際關系的轉(zhuǎn)變，通過回憶和當前情境的交織，推動情感的轉(zhuǎn)變與故事的發(fā)展。二、續(xù)寫構(gòu)思與布局1.構(gòu)思:回憶的呼應與彌補:Maya在回憶中意識到自己曾經(jīng)對Tina的冷漠，從而喚起對現(xiàn)狀的反思，繼而推動她主動改變?，F(xiàn)實情境的升華:在新工作環(huán)境中，Maya的孤獨促使她從過去的錯誤中學習，嘗試與他人建立聯(lián)系。2.布局:第一段:回憶繼續(xù)展開，表現(xiàn)Maya當年對Tina態(tài)度的變化，以及因某事件(例如Tina主動分享食物或幫助Maya)而對Tina產(chǎn)生新的認識。第二段:Maya從回憶中清醒過來，發(fā)現(xiàn)新同事站在身旁并主動向她示好。通過交談，她開始感受到溫暖，決定主動融入新環(huán)境。3.框架提煉:核心情感:從冷漠到反思，從孤獨到主動改變。情節(jié)轉(zhuǎn)折點:Tina對Maya的善意行動，新同事的主動示好。目標:通過對比與呼應，展現(xiàn)Maya從“被動等待”到“主動參與”心理成長。三、續(xù)寫注意事項:1.承接原文:體現(xiàn)回憶的延續(xù)性，用簡短描述銜接Tina的具體行動與Maya的心理變化?，F(xiàn)實時要與Maya孤獨的心理狀態(tài)呼應，展現(xiàn)她的情感轉(zhuǎn)變。2.整體注意事項:情感過渡自然:Maya的轉(zhuǎn)變應合乎邏輯，避免突兀。語言風格統(tǒng)一:保持敘述與原文語調(diào)一致，使用適度正式但不失生動的語言。3.巧妙設計內(nèi)容: 利用對比(過去對Tina的冷漠與現(xiàn)在同事的善意)來突出Maya的成長。借助細膩的動作、心理、環(huán)境描寫渲染氣氛，展現(xiàn)情感的遞進。四、故事山模式:1.起點:Maya的孤獨與內(nèi)心掙扎(現(xiàn)實)。2.攀升:對Tina的回憶展開，表現(xiàn)Maya對Tina的態(tài)度及后續(xù)變化。3.高潮:Tina主動善意的行為讓Maya產(chǎn)生悔意，開始反思。4.解決:Maya在現(xiàn)實中接受同事的善意示好。5.結(jié)尾:Maya決定主動融入新環(huán)境，形成情感升華。銜接點1:位于續(xù)寫第一段段首，流暢銜接前面的記敘文和第續(xù)寫第一段 續(xù)寫第二段一段段首語; 銜接點2:位于續(xù)寫第一段段尾，流暢銜接第二段段首句;銜接點3:位于續(xù)寫第二段段首，續(xù)寫銜接第二段段首語;段首句1段首句2 銜接點4:文章結(jié)尾升華，給予讀者正能量，揭示和強調(diào)主題。五、原文與續(xù)寫的銜接點:1.原文的心情描寫:“Mayafeltanurgetocry.”一表現(xiàn)孤獨無助?！癟inasadlynoddedherhead.”-流露新生的不安與委屈。2.原文的動作描寫:“SheturnedtoTinaandsaid...”一體現(xiàn)Maya對Tina的冷漠與不屑?！癕ayafeltanurgetocry.”-當前情景下的壓抑情感。3.關鍵轉(zhuǎn)折點: 新同事的友好舉動引發(fā)Maya在現(xiàn)實中的改變。 Tina的行為改變了Maya對她的看法(例如分享午餐或提供幫助)六、推薦的動作、心理、環(huán)境描寫例句:動作描寫1.Shehesitatedforamoment,thenknockedsoftlyonthedoor.2.Maya’sfingerstrembledslightlyassheopenedherlunchbox.3.Tinaextendedherhandwithawarmsmile,offeringapieceofhersandwich.心理描寫1.AwaveofregretwashedoverMayaassherecalledherwordstoTina.2.Shefeltaflickerofhopewhenshenoticedthewomanstandingbesideher.3.Lonelinessgnawedatherheart,butsheresolvedtofacethedaywithcourage.環(huán)境描寫1.Theofficebuzzedwithfaintchatter,butMayafeltlikeanoutsiderinadistantworld.2.Theclassroomwasfilledwiththearomaofsnacksandthechatterofchildren.3.Sunlightstreamedthroughthelargewindows,castinglongshadows[調(diào)研03]（24-25高三下·廣東江門·開學考試）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。WhenIwasachild,mymothertoldmysister,whohada10-inchveryobviousscar(傷疤)onherarm,“Nancy,ifyouignorethescar,otherpeoplewillignoreit.Itdoesnotmeantheywillnotnoticeit,butitmeansitwillnotmattertothemifitdoesn’tmattertoyou.”Itneveroccurredtomethatsomethinglikethiswouldhappentomysonyearslater.Sendingachildofftocollegecancertainlybestressfulforconcernedparents.Itwasin2018thatmysonwentofftocollege.Herarelycontactedus.Icouldn’thelpaskingaboutotheraspects,whichsometimesmadehimcomplainthatIdidn’ttreathimasanadult.Tobehonest,mysonisexcellent.Someofmyfriendsalwaystellmethattheyadmiremyson’scharactersandtheyhopetheirsonscouldhavesomeofthem.Unexpectedly,itwas4o’clockinthemorningin2020,whenIreceivedthephonecall.“Thisistheemergencyroomcallingandyoursonwasjustbroughtinwithsevereburnsonhisface,neckandarms.WehavecalledforanaircraftandaregoingtoflyhimtotheburnunitinSeattle.”Seattlewas350milesfromhiscollege,soweknewimmediatelythiswasserious.Thedoctordescribedthereason,whichcausedtheburns.At6am,mysonandhisfriendsdecidedtobarbecuehamburgersinthecourtyardoftheirapartment.Whentheylitthecharcoal,itburstintoflamesbecausetheyhadsprayedtoomuchgasoline.Theflamescaughtmyson’sshirttailandshotfromhiswaisttowelloverhishead.Fortunately,oneoftheboyswhowasquick-mindedgraspedmysonandrolledhimonthegrass.Whileitsavedhislife,itwasnotinshapetosavehimfromsevereburnsandterriblescars.Afterherecoveredfromthetreatments,thedoctorstoldhimtheywouldnotdoplasticsurgeryfor6monthsbecauseittakesthatlongfortheskintostopshrinkingandwrinkling.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。Thedoctorssuggestedhereturntocollegewithscarsofsevereburnstemporarily.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________SoItoldhimaboutNancy’schildhood.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【滿分范文】Thedoctorssuggestedhereturntocollegewithscarsofsevereburnstemporarily.AlthoughIknewthatthereweregoingtobestormsinlife,itwashardformetoimaginethatahandsomeandsunnyboywouldreturntohisclassmateswithscars.Ireallydidn’tknowhowtocomforthim.Afterall,thescarswereonhim.Notallofuscouldbeabletoturnthatparticularpagesuccessfully.ItwasatthistimethatIrememberedwhatmymothersaidtomysister.Itwasthosewordsthatenabledhertoovercomeherpsychologicalbarriersandleadasmoothlife.SoItoldhimaboutNancy’schildhood.Ipassedthewisdomontomyson.Realizingmycomplexfeelings,hesmiledandcomfortedmeinstead.Hetookmyadvicetoheartandreturnedtoschoolwithhisheadheldhigh.Bytheendofthesix-monthwaitingperiod,hedecidedthatthescarsdidnotmatter.Sohemadethedecisiontogiveupanyplasticsurgery.Weallhave“scars”thatwebelievewillkeeppeopleawayfromus.Putyourimperfectionsoutofyourmindandconcentrateonwhatyouvaluewithinyourself,andyourbeautywillshinethrough.【導語】本文是以人物為線索展開，講述了作者小時候聽到母親告訴妹妹南希要以樂觀的態(tài)度去面對自己的傷疤，而作者兒子也經(jīng)歷燒傷事故而留下傷疤，作者把妹妹的經(jīng)歷告訴自己的兒子鼓勵他勇敢面對。從故事中感悟我們學會把不完美拋諸腦后，專注于自己看重的東西，自己的美麗就會散發(fā)光芒。【詳解】①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“醫(yī)生建議他暫時帶著嚴重燒傷的傷疤回到大學。”可知，第一段可描寫作者想到自己的兒子要承受別人異樣眼光的難過的心理活動以及對兒子的鼓勵的做法。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“于是我告訴他南希的童年。”可知，第二段可描寫作者為了幫助兒子告訴他妹妹南希的經(jīng)歷之后，他兒子的轉(zhuǎn)變。2.續(xù)寫線索：難過——考驗——安慰——鼓勵——改變——感悟3.詞匯激活行為類①.想象：imagine/picture/thinkof②.安慰：comfort/quiet/soothe③.克服：overcome/riseabove/getoversth情緒類①.微笑：smile/beamon②.珍惜：value/cherish【點睛】[高分句型1].AlthoughIknewthatthereweregoingtobestormsinlife,itwashardformetoimaginethatahandsomeandsunnyboywouldreturntohisclassmateswithscars.（由連接詞although引導讓步狀語從句）[高分句型2].Putyourimperfectionsoutofyourmindandconcentrateonwhatyouvaluewithinyourself,andyourbeautywillshinethrough.（由祈使句以及what引導的賓語從句）【續(xù)寫思路分析】一、文章大意這篇文章講述了作者的兒子在大學期間因一次燒烤事故遭受嚴重燒傷，留下了明顯的疤痕。醫(yī)生建議他在六個月內(nèi)不做整形手術，暫時帶著疤痕返回校園。面對兒子的猶豫和擔憂，作者向他講述了他阿姨南希童年時如何勇敢面對自己手臂上的疤痕，鼓勵兒子以同樣的態(tài)度面對生活。最終，兒子接受了建議，準備以自信和尊嚴重返校園。二、伏筆與情節(jié)協(xié)同原文伏筆情節(jié)協(xié)同Para1.Itdoesnotmeantheywillnotnoticeit,butitmeansitwillnotmattertothemifitdoesn’tmattertoyou.第二段：可協(xié)同寫：我鼓勵兒子以同樣的態(tài)度面對生活三、續(xù)寫要點1.理解原文主題：面對身體上的疤痕，如何通過心理調(diào)適和社會互動來克服外界的看法。2.確定續(xù)寫方向：根據(jù)原文內(nèi)容，續(xù)寫部分應該圍繞兒子如何接受醫(yī)生的建議，以及他如何克服心理障礙，重返校園生活。3.引入心理轉(zhuǎn)變：在第一段中，描述兒子對醫(yī)生建議的初步反應，以及父母如何鼓勵他接受現(xiàn)實，強調(diào)心理態(tài)度的重要性。4.使用相關故事：在第二段中，引入南希的故事作為一個啟發(fā)，說明如何通過積極的心態(tài)影響他人的看法，以及如何從個人經(jīng)歷中汲取力量。5.強調(diào)自我認同：通過南希的故事，強調(diào)兒子應該認同自己的價值，不因外在的疤痕而影響自我形象。6.展望未來：在結(jié)尾部分，可以簡要展望兒子如何帶著新的認識和決心，準備重返校園，面對可能的挑戰(zhàn)。[調(diào)研04]（24-25高三上·浙江·階段練習）閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Ava,afifth-grader,longedforacellphonelikeherpeersbuthadtowaituntilshewasthirteen.Topersuadeherparents,shepennedanessay,demonstratingshewasmatureenoughforacellphone.Herparents,impressed,gaveheranoldphone.“Ava,”herdadsaidseriously,“acellphoneisn’tjustforfunandgames.It’sasignificantresponsibility.Youmustkeepyourphonesecure.Youmustsilenceitinpublicspaces.Youmust...”Helistedallofthewaysthatshehadtoberesponsiblewithherphone.ButAva,toobusywithchoosingtheperfectwallpaper,downloadingapps,andchattingwithherbestfriendSarah,onlyhalf-listened.Overtheweekend,Sarah’smomtookthegirlstoamovie.NormallyAvaavoidedhorrorfilms,butSarah’spleadingwordswithfunnymemes(表情包)hadsomehowconvincedAvathatthemoviemightactuallybeenjoyable.Beforethemoviestarted,Sarah’smominstructedthegirlstosilencetheirphonesoutofrespectforothers.Asthemovie’stensionbuilt,Avafoundherselfgrowingincreasinglyuncomfortable.“Ineedtogotothebathroom,”AvawhisperedtoSarah.Afterthemovie,whilewaitingforSarah’smomtofetchthecar,Avafeltasinkingfeeling.“Ican’tfindmyphone!”sheshrieked,pattingdownallofherpockets.Panic-stricken,Avasearchedherbag,yetherphoneseemedtohavevanished.Avagotintothecar,herstomachinknots.“Areyougoingtotellyourparents?”SarahwhisperedtoAvaontheirrideback.Avawassilent,hermindracingwiththeconsequences.Shecouldenvisionherparents’disappointedfacesandharshwords.Shefearedthatthisincidentmightlead