考向40讀后續(xù)寫之動作、心理與對話描寫

在英語讀后續(xù)寫中，利用恰當(dāng)?shù)膭釉~進(jìn)行符合特定情境的動作描寫，真實準(zhǔn)確地描述動作過程，以“動”傳神，

可以增強(qiáng)續(xù)寫語篇的靈動性。與此同時可以適當(dāng)利用契合人物性格特點的心理描寫和對話描寫，使續(xù)寫部分更

為生動。

第一部分動作描寫

一、動作描寫的3個原則

①要準(zhǔn)確：表現(xiàn)一個動作可以利用許多動詞，但應(yīng)恰當(dāng)利用最準(zhǔn)確的動詞，刻畫對應(yīng)的動作。

②有過程：展示人物個性的動作時，應(yīng)通過細(xì)節(jié)描寫展示出動作的過程，在續(xù)寫時，應(yīng)按動作的先后順序敘

述整個過程。

③用修飾：在描寫動作時，可利用各種狀語，說明時間、地點、原因、伴隨等情況，使動作描寫更豐富。

二、動作描寫常用的高分素材

與肢體語言相關(guān)的動作描寫素材

⑴head

①Sheturnedandheadedforthedoor.

她轉(zhuǎn)身朝門走去。

②Heburied/put/heldhisheadinhands,greatlyannoyed.

他雙手抱頭，非常生氣。

③Manypeopleintheaudiencenoddedinagreement.

許多觀眾點頭表示贊同。

@Ifellasleepassoonasmyheadhitthepillow.

頭一碰枕頭我就睡著了。

@Hchung/dropped/lowered/l)ent/bowedhisheadinshame.

他羞愧地低下了頭。

(2)face

?Herfacepaledwithfright.

她嚇得臉都白了。

②Abrightsmileappearedon/spreadacross/crossedhisface.

他的臉上露出了燦爛的笑容。

@Hcrfacelitup/brightened/glowedwhenIgaveherthepresent.

我給她禮物時，她的臉上煥發(fā)出了光彩。

(3)cheek

①Colorrushecl/flooded/rosctohercheekswhensherealizedshewasbeingwatched.

意識到有人在看她，她頓時漲紅了臉。

②Hefelthischeeksburningwithshame.

他因為羞愧而感到臉頰發(fā)燒。

③Hercheekswerewetwithtears.

她淚流滿面。

(4)eye

①Heturnedhiseyestothedoorwhenheheardthehandleturning.

聽到門把轉(zhuǎn)動的聲音，他向門那邊看去。

②Tinasqueezedhereyesshutandbitherlip.

蒂娜閉上雙眼，咬了咬嘴唇。

③Shelookedatherfatherstraightintheeyeandansweredhisquestiontruthfully.

她直視父親的眼睛，誠實地回答了他的問題。

④Shetriedtositup,hereyesfixedonJoan'sface.

她試圖坐起來，雙眼緊盯著瓊的臉。

⑤Ifelttearswellupinmyeyes.

我感到淚水在眼里涌出來。

(5)mouth

①Ourmouthsdroppedopeninsurprise.

我們驚奇地張大了嘴。

②MymouthstartedwateringwhenIsmelledthefood.

聞到食物的香味，我開始流口水了。

③MyheartwasinmymouthwhenIwalkedintoheroffice.

我走進(jìn)她的辦公室時，緊張得心都提到嗓子眼了。

(6)hand

①Shetookthechild'shandandhelpedhimclimbthesteps.

她拉住孩子的手牽著他爬上臺階。

②Hereachedforherhandandheldittightly.

他伸手抓住她的手并緊緊握住。

@Sheshruggedandspreadherhands."That'sallIcantellyou.”

她聳聳肩，攤開雙手說：“我只能告訴你這么多了?！?/p>

@Shcshivered,rubbingherhandstogetherfiercely.

她一邊顫抖，一邊使勁搓著雙手。

@Herhandsshook/trembledassheliftedtheglasstoherlips.

她的手顫抖著把杯子送到唇邊。

(7)arm

①Hewasrunningforward,wavinghisarms.

他揮舞著胳膊向前跑著。

@Hestoodtherewithcrossedarms,lookingangry.

他交叉著雙臂站在那里，看上去怒氣沖沖。

③Shefoldedherarmsandstaredathim.

她交叉著雙臂注視著他。

第二部分心理描寫

一、心理描寫的2種方法

心理描寫可以揭示人物的內(nèi)心世界，表達(dá)人物的性格、特點、感情和思想等。心理描寫可以運用直接描寫和

間接描寫兩種方法。

①直接描寫：直接寫主人公的想法、感受、打算等，在具體寫作時，可用力同「"shethought”“hewould”等句

式。

②間接描寫：人物的性格不同，情緒不同，其所表現(xiàn)出的動作和神態(tài)也就不同，因此可以利用人物的動隹和

神態(tài)體現(xiàn)其心理,也可以利用語言措寫表現(xiàn)人物心理。

二、心理描寫的高分素材

(1)表“害怕”的心理

?Mythroattightenedandmykneesfeltweak.

我喉嚨發(fā)緊，雙膝發(fā)軟。

@1frozewithterror,tooscaredtomoveaninch.

我嚇呆了，一動也不動。

(2)表“憤怒”的心理

?Herfacecloudedwithanger.

她滿臉怒氣。

@Hisvoicetrembledwithanger.

他氣得聲音發(fā)抖。

@Heletoutcriesofanger.

他發(fā)出憤怒的喊聲。

(3)表“悲傷和絕望”的心理

①Hisheartsankatthenews.

聽到這個消息，他的心一沉。

@Overewithbitterdisappointment,helockedhimselfupinhisroom.

由于極度失望，他把自己鎖在房間里。

③Hewasabruptlythrownintoaworldofdarknessandsankintohopelessness.

他突然被拋進(jìn)一個黑暗的世界，陷入絕望。

(4)表“尷尬、緊張”的心理

Sweatwaspouringdownmyface.

汗水從我臉上滾落下來。

(5)表“震驚”的心理

①Shefrozewithshock,asifrootedtothespot.

她吃驚得呆住了，就像在原地生了根似的。

②Hereyeswidenedfurtherandhismouthopened.

她的眼睛睜得更大了，他的嘴張開了。

第三部分對話描寫

Paragraph1

Dadopenedtheboxandasweetlittledogappeared.

Paragraph2

Afewweekslater,theboyarrivedhomefromtheuniversity.

【描寫刻畫】

1.細(xì)讀原文，明確敘述意圖

原文敘述要去上大學(xué)的男孩和父母和小狗Poppy依依不舍地告別。Poppy自小主人走后便悶悶不樂，對自

己愛吃的食物也不感興趣。男孩的父母決定找一個小狗陪伴Poppy=不難推斷出文章旨在描述Poppy是否又開心

起來。

2.根據(jù)段落開頭語，圍繞原文主旨，確定續(xù)寫情節(jié)

確定敘述意圖后，定位續(xù)寫段落開頭語關(guān)鍵信息分別是“asweetlittledogappeared”和“Afewweekslater,the

boyarrivedhome”可推斷第一段續(xù)寫部分應(yīng)敘述Poppy看到小狗后的反應(yīng)和她的心情變化一是否轉(zhuǎn)憂為喜？

而續(xù)寫部分第二段應(yīng)敘述男孩回到家時渴望見到Poppy的心情和動作，以及見到小狗后的反應(yīng)。

3.體會原文動作、心理和對話描寫

①具體的動作描寫：原文在前三段中利用了大量的動作描寫（具體動作在原文中已加灰底）描寫一家人道別時

的依依不舍，同時利用多次出現(xiàn)的hugged和smiled暗示這一家人濃濃的親情。原文最后一段中的一系列動作（加

灰底單詞）生動地描述Poppy見到小狗前的反應(yīng)。

②心理描寫：原文前三段中的“tryingnottolethisemotions（情緒）getthebetterofhim"和"notquiteabletokeep

theirsundercontrol"及“mistyeyes''體現(xiàn)男孩和他的父母在離別之際的依依不舍。第4?5段中的形容詞quiet,

interested,sad,worried具體地描述出男孩不在家時這家人對男孩的思念以及男孩父母對Poppy的關(guān)心。

③對話描寫：原文出現(xiàn)四處對話描寫，前三段在男孩離開之前的對話描寫，體現(xiàn)了男孩舍不得離開父母和

Poppy的心情。原文最后三段中的對話描寫表現(xiàn)了男孩的父母想方設(shè)法想讓Poppy高興起來的迫切心理。

4.沿用原文語言特點，完成讀后續(xù)寫

原文在動作、心理和對話描寫方面不吝筆墨，因此續(xù)寫部分也應(yīng)著重使用動作、心理和對話描寫。

【參考范文】

Paragraph1

Dadopenedtheboxandasweetlittledogappeared.Poppyjumpedwithjoyal(hesightofthelittledog.She

loweredherheadtowatchitcuriously.Thenshebecamesoexcitedthatsheaccidentallyknockedovertheboxinan

attempttogelcloser.Withtheboxtippingover,outcamethelittleone,whowasnotshyandinstantlygotfamiliarwith

Poppy.Itdidn'ttakelongbeforethetwoplayedaroundthehouse,cheerfullyrunningaftereachother.

Paragraph2

Afewweekslatertheboyarrivedhomefromtheuniversity.Hehadbeenmissinghisparentsandthedogsinceit

wasthefirsttimethathehadbeenawayfromhomeforsuchalongtime.When(heboycaughtsightofPoppy,hewent

rushingtowardthedogandbentdowntogiveherabighug.Suddenly,theboynoticedthelittledog."Ohmygod,who

isthis?”Hisparentslaughedatthelookofsurpriseonhisface.uIt'sPoppy'snewpanion."saidMom.

【檢測訓(xùn)練】

1.閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

Anelderlymanhadcollapsedwhilecrossingthestreet,andanambulancesenthimtothehospitalimmediately.

Whenthemancametohimselfnowandagain,herepeatedlycalledforhisson.

Fromawornletterfoundinhispocket,anemergencyroomnurselearnedthathissonwasasoldier.Thenurse

calledtheRedCrossofficeinBrooklynandmadearequestforthesoldiertoberushedtothehospital.Soon,theyoung

manwasfoundandrushedtotheairportintimetoreachhisdyingfather.

Ilwasmideveningwhentheyoungmanwalkedintothehospital.Anurseledtheanxiousmantothebedofthe

cldcilyman.4tYuuisunishcic,“shevvliispcicdlulliccklcilypatient.TheoldpalicnlScycbupcncJunlyaflcishe

repeatedthewordsseveraltimes.Theoldmanwaslooweaksoitwasreallyhardforhimtostayawakeandhecould

vague'yseetheyoungmanstandingbesidehim.

Theoldmanreachedouthishandwithallhisstrengthandtheyoungmanrealizeditandimmediatelyheldit.

Thenursebroughtachairfortheyoungmantositbesidethebed.Theyoungmansatholdingtheoldman'shand

offeringhimwordsofloveandhope,allthroughthenight.Thedyingoldmansaidnothing.Thenursesuggestedthatthe

youngmanmoveawayandrestforawhile,butherefused.Nowandthen,sheheardhimsayafewgentlewords.The

dyingmansaidnothing,onlyholdinghisson'shandtightlythroughoutthenight.

Asdawnapproached,theoldmanpeacefullydied.Theyoungmanplacedhislifelesshandon(hebedandinformed

thenurse.Whilethenursedidwhatwasnecessary,theyoungmanwaited.Whenshefinishedhertask,thenursebeganto

saywordsofsympathy(heyoungmanneeded.

注意：

1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150詞左右；

2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Buttheyounfimanshookhishead.

Hereplied,"/knewrightawayhewasnotmyfather.

2.閱讀卜?面材料?，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

Ilallbeganwhenmyyoungerbrother,Chris,andIwentovertoAuntBarbaraandUncleHoward'sfbr

Thanksgiving.MyauntanduncleliveonafarmandChrisandIlovegoingthere.Oneday,UncleHowardhandedme

twoturkeyeggs.

“YoukidsputthoseunderasettinghenJhesaid,“andintwentyfivedays,you'Hhaveacoupleoffineturkeys!”

Chriswassoexcitedthathenearlydroppedhiseggonthewaytothehouse.Webothstuffedourselvesatdinner

andthencouldn'twaittogohomeandtendtooureggs.

Twentyfivedaysseemedlikeforever.Finally,onthetwentysixthday,ChrisandIwalkedintothecoopafterschool

andspottedtwoballsoftlufTfallingovertheirfeetandlookingsortofconfused.Itwasn'tlongbeforethechickslost

theirfuzzandbegangrowingfeathers.ChrisnamedoneBill,andInamedtheotherTimothy.

Idon'tknowwhathappened,butonedaywcfoundBilldeadbesidethecoop.Chrisfeltterrible.Itoldhimthat

fromnowon,Timothybelongedtohim,too.

MomkepttellingusnottogettooattachedtoTimothy,becauseweweregoingtohavehimforThanksgiving.But

weneverpaidtoomuchattentiontowhatthatreallymeant.

Then,onedaytoward(heendofOctober,DadpennedTimothyupandgaveChrisandmeinstructions.

”[wantyoutostartgivinghimcornalongwithhisregularfeed/*hesaid."Wewantanice,fatbirdfor

Thanksgiving."AfterDadturnedandwalkedaway,Chrisbegantocry.

"Don'tworry,Chris,“Isaidfbrtingly."WellsaveTimothy,somehow.”

“Whydon'twegivehimaway?”Chrissuggested.

“No,"Isaid."Ifwedo,he'lljustenduponsomeoneelse'sThanksgivingtable.^^

“Whatifwetakehimoutinthewoods?"

“Healwaysesbackatnight,MIsaid.Webothsighed.

注意：

1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.請按照如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Paragraph1:

Suddenly/hadanidea.

Paragraph2:

Toourastonishment,Timothywasgone!

3.閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

U.SikcmostU.Snationalparks,Evergladesnationalpark,locatedinsouthFlorida,wascreatedtoprotectafragile

ecosystem（生態(tài)系統(tǒng)）insteadofsafeguardingauniquegeographicfeature.Ilisaheavenforawiderangeofwildlife,

suchasturtles,snakes,lizards,theGrassfrog.Wadingbirdsandsoon,amongwhicharefierceAmericanalligators（鱷

魚）.Ilissaid（hatsomeofthealligatorsoftenappearintheareaswherepeoplelive,causingmuchdamage.

Aterribleincidenthappenedonahoisummerday.1（wassohotadaythatnearlyeveryonefeltlikejumpinginio

thecoolwater.Alittleboysimplycouldn'tputupwiththeheat,decidingtogoforaswimintheoldswimminghole

behindhishouse.

“Mum,itbeingsohot,Iwanttohaveaswim."theboytoldhismotherwhilewalkingout.

“No,Honey,therehasbeenawarningthatanalligatorfromtheparkhasappearedinthesurroundingarea.Itis

dangerous!?,saidhismotherinaloudvoice.Butthelittleboyrushedoutofthebackdoorlikeagustofwindbeforehis

mothercouldstophim.

Hewasinsuchahurrytodiveintothecoolwaterthatheleftbehindshoes,socks,andshirtasheleft.

Heflewintothewaterandenjoyedthefbrtablcfeelingthatthecoolwaterbroughthim,notrealizingthatashe

swaintowardthemiddleofthelake,analligatorwasswimmingtowardhim.Hismotherwaspreparingdinnerinthe

kitchenwhensuddenlyshecaughtthetwogettingcloserandclosertoeachotherasshewaslookingoutofthewindow.

“Oh,MyGod!”shecouldn'thelpcryingloudly,gettingintoagreatpanic.Andtheningreatfear,sherantowardthe

water,shoutingtohersonasloudlyasshecouldalltheway,“Alligator,Alligator!”

Hearinghervoice,thelittleboybecamealarmedandmadeaUturntoswimtohismother.However,itwasloolate.

Somethinghorriblewashappening.

注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為15()左右；

2.請按如下格式在在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Justasheapproachedher,thealligatorreachedhim.

Remarkably,afterweeksinthehospiuf,thelittleboysurvived.

4.閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。

WhenIwas19,IspentpartofmysuinmcralanadveiiiurecainpunVancouverIsland,supervising(照料)agroup

of1Oycaroldgirls.Towardstheendofthefirstweek,Itookthemonacamping.Bysixintheevening,we'dclimbeda

smallmountain.Thepeakhadtreesononesideandbaldrockontheother.IletthegirlsplayinthewoodedareawhileI

arrangedthingsfordinner.

Whenthescreamingstarted,Iwasn'ttooalannedlcouldseemygrouptearingthroughthebushandthoughtthey'd

justdisturbedabees'nest.Asthefirstgirlappeared,Iaskedwhatwasgoingon."Wildcat!”shegasped.Theimageinmy

headwasofahousecatgonewild,butwithhernextbreathsheadded,"It'saiiackingAlyson.^^Itoldthegirlstoclimbon

totherocksandthenrantowherethey'dbeenplaying.Alysonwaslyingbybush.Shewasonherback,eyeswide,

staringatahugecatbesideher.Thecatwaswatchingme.

Anyonefamiliarwithwesternswillhaveseenacougar（美洲爐師）一themountainlionthatspringsfromtherock

faceontothepasserby.We'dbeentoldhowtodealwithbears:"Keepstill,backup,makeyourselflookbig."Butwe

hadn'tcoveredcougars.Igrabbedastickandswungitintotheanimal'sface.Startled,ittookoffintothebushes.

SeeingthatAlysonwashurt,Isetoffforthefirstaidbox,buthadn'tgonefourstepswhenIheardamoan.Turning

back,Isawthecougarcrouched（蹲伏jbyAlyson'shead.Itappearedtobeeatingher.Thistime1usedabiggerstick,hit

harderandheldon.Onceagain,itdisappeared,andIkneltbyAlyson.

“There'snowaysomeonecanlivethroughthis,“Ithought.Thecathadtorndeepintoherneck.Shehadlongcuts

onherface.uAmIgoingtodie?”sheasked.Herheartbeatwasracingbutweak,thesignofahearttremblingfrom

shock.

注意：

I.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右：

2.至少使用5個短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語；

3.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；

4.續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語7

ParagraphI:

“You'renotgoingtodie,"Isaid.

Paragraph2:

FrommybranchIcouldseesomepeoplemovingonanearbymountain.

5.閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

Oneday,apoorboywhowastryingtopayhiswaythroughschoolbysellinggoodsdoortodoorfoundthatheonly

hadonedimeleft.Hewashungrysohedecidedtobegforamealatthenexthouse.

However,helosthisnervewhenalovelyyoungwomanopenedthedoor.Insteadofamealheaskedforadrinkof

water.Shethoughthelookedhungrysoshebroughthimalargeglassofmilk.Hedrankitslowly,andthenasked,“How

muchdoIoweyou?^^

“Youdon'towemeanything,Mshereplied.44Motherhastaughtmenevertoacceptpayfbrakindness."Hesaid,

“ThenIthankyoutrointhebottomofmyheart.44AsHowardKellyleftthathouse,henotonlyfeltstrongerphysically,

butitalsoincreasedhisfaithinkindnessandthehumanrace.Hewasabouttogiveupandquitbeforethispoint.

Yearslatertheyoungwomanbecamecriticallyill.Thelocaldoctorswerebaffled.Theyfinallysenthertothebig

city,wherespecialistscanbecalledintostudyherraredisease.Dr.HowardKelly,nowfamous,wascalledinforthe

consultation.Whenheheardthenameofthetownshecamefrom,astrangelightfilledhiseyes.Immediately,herose

andwentdownthroughthehospitalhallintoherroom.

注意：I.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150詞左右；

2.請按如下格式作答。

Dressedinhisdoctorsgownhewentintoseeher.

Thebillwassenttoherroom.

6.閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

LifeisGoodClothingisa10()milliondollarpanyrunbybrothersBertandJohnJacobs.Likeanyotherbusinessmen,

theywentthroughalotoffailures.However,theidea

“Liftisgood''fromtheirmotherkeptthemgoingandinspiredthemtobuildaclothingpanythatisnowvery

successful.

In1988,BeilandJacobstookasevenweekroadtripfromCaliforniatoBoston.Thebrotherssaidthistripchanged

theirlivesforeverastheylookedbackontheirchildhood.AccordingtotheJacobs,theirchildhoodwas

perfectlyimperfect.Theirhousedidnothaveheatingbuttheyweretaughttoalwayssee(hegoodinthings.

Theyrememberedplayingoutsidealldayandwhenitwasdinnerlime,(heywouldgatheraroundthedinnertable.

Theirmotherwouldsaytothem,“Tellmesomethinggoodthathappenedtoday.^^Theirfatherhadanear—death

accidentwhichcausedseveredamagetohisrighthand.Theaccidentmadetheirfatherdevelopaterribletemper(脾/(,)>

buttheirmotherwouldalwayssingtothemandreadthemchildren'sstories."Thatoptimismwassomethingourfamily

alwayshad,evenwhenwehadlittleelse,^^thebrotherssaid.

Duringthetrip,theytriedtofigureoutwhattheywantedtodowiththeirlivesanddecidedtorunaclothing

business.TheystartedsellingTshirtdesignsinstreetfairsaroundBoston.Theirdesignwasjustasimpledrawingofa

stickfigurewiththephrase44Lifeisgood.”

Theirsmallbusinessdidn'ttunioutsowell,butthetwobrothersdidnotgiveup.Thentheychangedtheirtarget

audience.Thistime,(heytriedtoselltheirTshirtstocollegestudents,goingtodifferentschoolseverynight.Againitdid

notwork.Tofigureoutwhattheyhadbeendoingwrong.BertandJohnheldbeerparties,wheretheyaskedtheirfriends

fortheirhonestopinions.Inreturn,theycouldenjoyfreebeerandamusingstoriesfromthebrothers.Againthisdidnot

seemtoworkandtheywererunningoutofmoney.

注意：

1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

However,(heylooktheriskandheldanotherpanywhichtheythoughtwastheIasi.

Finally,someonenoticedtheirdesignandshowedsincereappreciation.

7.閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

Onthefirstdayofschool,Victorwashandedapacketofpapersandaputercar