高三英語春季模擬檢測

第二節(jié)(滿分25分)

67.閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇

完整的短文。

WhenIwasinsecondgrade,IhadateachernamedMr.Applebaum.Hewas

atallmanwithakindsmile,thesortofteacherwhoalwaysseemtonoticethe

littlethingsabouthisstudents.Hepaidattentionnotjusttowhatwedid,butto

whowewere.Ididn'tknowitthen,butthatyearhesurelychangedthecourseof

mylife.

Iwasn'tparticularlygoodatmathorspelling.Myhandwritingwasmessy,and

Iwasterribleatstayinginthelineswhenwedidcolorpainting.ButIlovedto

draw.Whetheritwasthebreak,snacklimeorduringlessons,Iwasalways

doodling.Mynotebookswerefilledwithanimals,smilingsunsandsuperheroes

withoddlyshapedcapes.Ididn'tthinkmuchofitatthetime;drawingwasjust

somethingI'dlovetodo.

Oneafternoonaswewerepackinguptogohome.Mr.Applebaumcalledine

overtohisdesk.Irememberfeelingapangofnervousness—hadIdone

somethingwrong?ButwhenIgotthere,hewasntholdingastackofunfinished

mathworksheetsorpointingtotheclassroomrules.Insteadheheldoutablue

three-ringbinderfilledwithblankloose-leafpaper.

“Thisisfbryou,“hesaid,placingitinmyhands.Istaredatit,puzzled.

noticedyouliketodraw,“hecontinued.Ithoughtyoumightneedaplacetokeep

allyourworks.

Ididn'tthinkIfullyunderstoodwhathewasgivingmeatthatmoment.It

weren'tjustpaperandabinder.Itwastheideathatmypassionfordrawingwasn't

justthepastimebutsomethingworthencouraging.Toaneight-year-old,itfelt

likemagic?likebeinghandedakeytoasecretdoor.

注意：

1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為15()個左右；

2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Paragraph1:Fromthatdayon,thebluebinderwasbymysideatalltimes.

Paragraph2:Noticingmyprogress,Mr.Applebaumencouragedmetotake

partinacompetition.

高三英語春季模擬檢測

第二節(jié)（滿分25分）

67.閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇

完整的短文。

I卬assecond?朧從“IhadateachernamedMr.Applebaum.He

wasatallmanwithakindsmile,thesortofteacher,同位語（性說，明老蟀的美型）whoalways

seemtonoticethelittlethingsabouthisstudents.Hepaidattentionnotjustto

whatwedid,butfo,并列逐進(jìn)式）whowewere.Ididn'tknowitthen,butthatyearhe

surelychangedthecourseofmylife.

Iwasn7particularlygoodatmathorspelling.Myhandwritingwasmessy,

andIwasterribleatstayinginthelineswhe"wedidcolorpaiminE球心.ButI

lovedtodraw.Whether〃waythebreak,snacktimeordurhig（并列）,Iwas

alwaysdoodling.Mynotebookswerefilledwithanimals,smilingsunsandsuper

heroeswithoddlyshapedcapes（并列卜Ididn'tthinkmuchofitatthetime;drawing

wasjustsomethingI'dlovetodo.

Oneafternoon-swepackin&uploRC〃。用自狀從）.Mr.Applebaumcalled

meovertohisdesk.1rememberfeelingapangofnervousness-hadIdone

somethingwrong?ButwhenIgotthere必皿.hewasn'tholdingastackof

unfinishedmathworksheetsorpointingtotheclassroomrules.Instead,heheld

outabluethree-ringbinderfilledwithblankloose-leafpaperi過去分詞短語做后工定語）.

“Thisisforyou,“hesaid,placinR〃in〃zr現(xiàn)在分叫做件隨動件）.Istaredatit,

pi/zz/edadj做主語外語，第m情曲.”Inoticedyouliketodraw''hecontinued.Ithoughtyou

mightneedaplacelokeepallyourworks.

Ididn'tthinkIfullyunderstoodwhathewasgivingmeatthatmoment.It

weren'tjustpaperandabinder,〃wastheideathatpassionfordrawimg

was“'tjustthepastimebutsomethin父worthencouraging.（遞送句式）Toaneight-year

-old,itfeltlikemagic-likebeinghandedakeytoasecretdoor.

注意：

1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為15（）個左右；

2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Paragraph1:Fromthatdayon,thebluebinderwasbymysideatalltimes.

Paragraph2:Noticingmyprogress,Mr.Applebaumencouragedmetotake

partinacompetition.

1.文章分類與續(xù)寫思路分析

文章類型：本文屬于成長與啟發(fā)類的讀后續(xù)寫。文章通過講述主人公在老師Mr.

Applebaum的鼓勵下，逐漸認(rèn)識到自己對繪畫的熱愛，并從中獲得自信的故事，

展現(xiàn)了成長過程中關(guān)鍵人物的影響。

續(xù)寫思路：

構(gòu)思：續(xù)寫應(yīng)圍繞主人公如何通過老師的鼓勵，進(jìn)一步發(fā)掘自己的繪畫天

賦，并最終在某個比賽中獲得認(rèn)可或成長。

布局：笫一段可以描述主人公如何珍惜并使用籃色活頁夾，逐漸提升繪畫

技巧；第二段可以寫Mr.Applebaum如何鼓勵主人公參加比賽，并最終取

得成績。

提煉框架：成長（主人公的繪畫進(jìn)步）—鼓勵（老師的支持）一挑戰(zhàn)（參

加比賽）一結(jié)果（成功或感悟）。

實施：通過細(xì)膩的心理描寫和動作描寫，展現(xiàn)主人公的成長過程，突出老

師的引導(dǎo)作用。

承接原文：續(xù)寫需承接原文中Mr.Applebaum對主人公的鼓勵，以及主人

公對繪畫的熱愛。

巧妙設(shè)計：可以通過主人公在比賽中的心理變化（如緊張、自信）來增強(qiáng)

故事的戲劇性，并通過環(huán)境描寫烘托氛圍。

2.故事山模式與原文分析

分析角度內(nèi)容原文反應(yīng)句

分析角度內(nèi)容原文反應(yīng)句

應(yīng)。

“Oneafternoonaswewerepackingup

環(huán)境描寫教室的環(huán)境，放學(xué)前的氛圍。

togohome.”

成長與鼓勵，關(guān)鍵人物的影

“Hesurelychangedthecourseofmy

隱含主題

life.”

響。

從緊張到感動，再到充滿希

“Irememberfeelingapangof

情感轉(zhuǎn)折

nervousness...Itfeltlikemagic.”

望。

從教室到主人公的內(nèi)心世

“Iwasalwaysdoodling...Istaredatit,

空間轉(zhuǎn)換

puzzled.n

界。

從放學(xué)前的場景到主人公未“Oneafternoon...Fromthatdayon,the

時間過渡bluebinderwasbymysideatall

來的成長。times/'

伏筆與沖突點：

伏筆：Mr.Applebaum注意到主人公喜歡繪畫，并送給她活頁夾，暗示未

來會鼓勵她進(jìn)一步發(fā)展。

沖突點：主人公缺乏自信，需要克服對比賽的恐懼。

隱含線索：活頁夾象征著主人公的潛力，老師的鼓勵是她成長的催化劑。

解決方案：通過參加比賽，主人公獲得自信，并認(rèn)識到自己的價值。

3.續(xù)寫語料推薦

動作描寫例句：

liegentlyplaced(hebinderonthedesk,hiseyesfilledwithencouragement.

Herhandstrembledassheopenedthebinder,revealingtheblankpages.

Shecarefullysketchedtheoutlineofabird,herpencilmovingsmoothly

acrossthepaper.

Withadeepbreath,shesteppedontothestage,clutchingherartwork.

Hepattedhershoulder,asilentgestureofsupport.

Sheglancedattheclock,herheartracingasthecompetitiondrewcloser.

Herfingerstracedtheedgesofthepaper,feelingthetexturebeneathher

touch.

Shestoodup,herlegsshakingslightly,andwalkedtowardsthejudges.

心理描寫例句：

Awaveofnervousnesswashedoverherasshefacedtheblankpage.

ShefeltasurgeofconfidenceassherememberedMr.Applebaum'swords.

Doubtcreptintohermind,butshepusheditaway,focusingonherpassion.

Herheartswelledwithprideasshelookedatherfinisheddrawing.

Shecouldn'thelpbutsmile,feelingasenseofaccomplishment.

Anxietygnawedalher,butsheremindedherselfofhowfarshehadcome.

Shefeltamixofexcitementandfearasshehandedherartworktothejudge.

Asenseofcalmsettledoverherassherealizedshehaddoneherbest.

環(huán)境描寫例句：

Theclassroomwasquiet,theonlysoundbeingthescratchingofpencilson

paper.

Sunlightstreamedthroughthewindows,castingawarmglowonherdesk.

Thecompetitionhallbuzzedwithexcitement,filledwithyoungartistsand

theircreations.

Thewallswereadornedwithcolorfulpaintings,eachtellingauniquestory.

Agentlebreezerustledthepagesofherbinderassheworkedoutside.

Theclocktickedloudly,markingtheminutesuntilthecompetitionbegan.

Theroomwasfilledwiththescentoffreshpaintandpaper.

Thejudges'tablewasneatlyarranged,withnametagsandscoresheetsready.

高級替換詞：

EncouragetMotivate,Inspire,Spur,Urge,Foster

Nervous—>Anxious,Apprehensive,Jittery,Edgy,Tense

Draw-Sketch,Illustrate,Doodle,Depict,Render

Progress—>Advancement,Development,Growth,Improvement,

Breakthrough

Competition—Contest,Challenge,Tournament,Showcase,Event

4.語法現(xiàn)象與語料積累

常見搭配：

Payattentionto:關(guān)注

伊|句：Hepaidattentionnotjusttowhatwedid,buttowhowewere.

Feelapangof:感到一陣

例句:Irememberfeelingapangofnervousness.

Holdout:遞出

伊I句:Heheldoutabluethree-ringbinder.

Thinkmuchof:重視

例句:Ididn'tthinkmuchofitatthetime.

生詞短語：

Doodle(v.):涂鴉

近義詞：Scribble,Sketch

反義詞：Erase,Delete

伊J句：Shelovedtodoodleduringclass./Hisnotebookwasfilledwith

doodles.

Binder(n.):活頁夾

近義詞：Folder,Portfolio

反義詞：Loosesheets

伊J句:Hegaveherabluebinder./Shekeptherdrawingsinthebinder.

Pastime（n.）:消遣

近義詞:Hobby,Recreation

反義詞：Work,Duty

例句：Drawingwasherfavoritepastime./Readingisacommon

pastimeformany.

Encourage（v.）:鼓勵

近義詞：Motivate,Inspire

反義詞:Discourage,Deter

例句：Mr.Applebaumencouragedhertodraw./Herparents

encouragedhertopursueherdreams.

5.PossibleAnswers

Version1

Paragraph1:

Fromthatdayon,thebluebinderwasbymysideatalltimes.Everyspare

momentIhad,Iwouldopenitandletmyimaginationrunwild.Theblankpages

becameacanvasformydream*人物filledwithvibrantcolorsandintricate

desi女〃s（過去分陰做后JL定語）.Mr.Applehaunt飛gifthadignitedasparkwithin,與朦文的命換）,

andIfoundmyselfdrawingnotjustforfun,butwithasenseofpurpose并列遺迨句I

begantoexperimentwithdifferentstyles,fromrealisticportraitstoabstract

介短做樸語）,eachreflcciingapieceofmvRrowingconfidence國備人物）.The

binderwasnolongerjustagift;itwasasymbolofmyjo”7?〃分?并列逐出.

Paragraph2:

Noticingmyprogress,Mr.Applebaumencouragedmetotakepartina

competition.Atfirst,Ihesitated,mymindfloodedwith心理拈引.Whatifmy

workwasn'tgoodenough?WhatifIembarrassedmyself?ButMr,Applebaumfs

reassuringsmileremindedmeofthe〃［砍ciIfeltwhenIfirstheldthebinder狄g.

Withhisencouragement,Isubmittedmybestpiece-acolorfuldepictionofa

sunriseoyo/a同位語解理說明）.lV7?e〃theresiUtswere狀從）,Iwas

stunnedtohearmynamecalledasthewi〃〃e」過去分詞做后工定語）.Thatmoment,Irealized

thatmypassionfordrawingwasmorethaniustapastime;itwasapartofwhoI

was”逼進(jìn)句式）

加分點與替換詞:

Imaginationrunwild（想象力奔放）—>Creativityflowfreely,Mindwander

freely

伊J句:Herimaginationranwildasshepainted./Hiscreativityflowed

freelyduringtheproject.

Ignitedaspark（點燃火花）一Inspired,Awakened,Fueled

傷”句：Hiswordsignitedasparkinherheart./Thebookinspiredherto

write.

Experimentwith（嘗試）—>Explore,Tryout,Test

例句：Sheexperimentedwithdifferentartstyles./Heexploredvarious

techniquesinhiswork.

情緒描寫亮點：

Floodedwithdoubts（充滿疑慮）—Overwhelmedbyuncertainty,Filledwith

hesitation

Reassuringsmile（安慰的微笑）—>Comfortinggrin,Encouraginglook

動作描寫亮點：

Letmyimaginationrunwild（讓想象力奔放）—Unleashcreativity,Dive

intofantasy

Submittedmybestpiece（提交最好的作品）—?Presentedmymasterpiece,

Handedinmycreation

Version2

Paragraph1:

Fromthatdayon,thebluehinderwasbymysideatalltimes.〃became〃邛

constant卻姒人,刻感人物），asilentwitnesstomygrowthasanartist.\filledits

pageswithsketchesofeverythingIsaw-birdsEthesty、flowersinthegarden,

ewthefacesoffriend*并列）.Eachdrawingwasaforward,asmall而以。ry

over〃吐self?doubt.Mr.Applebaum"swordsechoedinmymind.44Yourpassionis

worthencouraging.^^Thosewordspushedmetokeepgoing,even卬Ifeltlike

giving狀從）.Thebinderwaslonweriustagift;itwasatestameiittomy

Dersevercmce.Mug式）

Paragraph2:

Noticingmyprogress,Mr.Applebaumencouragedmetotakepartina

competition.Theideaterrifiedr〃8無靈主語句用畫人物情曲,butIknewIhadtofacemyfears.

Ispentweekspreparing,〃?！?，?加乃〃八，heartintoeterystrokeofthe〃。刀現(xiàn)在分詞場沿做停

隨動作）.Onthedayofthecompetition,handstremhladas1Drosented/〃v川?！耙弧?/p>

detaileddrawingof//we<軟從）,itsbranchesreachingtowardthe伙立主格）.the

ji4d父esDraised〃rywork狀從）,IfeltasurgeofprideIhadneverknownbefore.Mr.

Applebaum'sencouragementhadnotonlyhelpedmediscovermytalentbutalso

taughtmethevalueofbelievinginmyself.

加分點與替換詞：

Silentwitness（無聲的見證者）—>Quietobserver,Unseencompanion

例句:Theoldtreewasasilentwitnesstotheirchildhood./Thediary

becameherquietobserver.

Echoedinmymind（在腦海中回響）一Resonated,Lingered,Repeated

例句：Hiswordsechoedinhermindfordays./Themelodyresonated

deeplywithher.

Pourmyheartinto（傾注心血）一Devotemyselfto,Investdeeplyin

例句:Shepouredherheartintotheproject./Hedevotedhimselftohis

studies.

情緒描寫亮點：

Terrified（害怕）—Petrified,Frightened,Anxious

Surgeofpride（自豪感）—>Waveofconfidence,Burstofjoy

動作描寫亮點:

Handstrembled（手顫抖）—>Fingersshook,Palmssweated

Presentedmypiece（展示作品）-Showcasedmywork,Displayedmyart

Version3

Paragraph1:

Fromthatdayon,thebluebinderwasbymysideatalltimes.Itbecamemy

sanctuary,aplacewhereIcouldescapefromtheworldandexpressmyselffreely.I

startedtoseetheworlddifferently,noticingdetailsi現(xiàn)在分訶短語做伴隨動作）Ihadneverpaid

attentiontobeforethewaylightdancedonwater,thetextureoftreebark、the

expressionson并列）.Eachobservationfounditswayintomy

drawings（無靈主語句i,uiakin出themmorevividandalive.Mr.Applebaum'sgifthad

openedmyeyestothebeautyaroundme,andIwasdeterminedtocaptureitall.

Paragraph2:

Noticingmyprogress,Mr.Applebaumencouragedmetotakepartina

competition.Theihou史htofmademe幾ervous,butIremindedmyselfof

howfarIhadcomea,idhowfortunateIwasfoundingtheIsegiftinmylife（曳公分詞蚯

話做件陵動作Ichosetodrawascenefrommyfavoritepark,aplacethatheldcountless

memories.AsIworked應(yīng)從、Ifeltasenseofcalm,asiftheworldhadfadedawayand

onlymyartremained^^,I卬thirdplace、1wasoverjoyed.〃“justa

口亡￡；itproo￡運選句kthatmypassionhad加g同位從）.M『.'sbelief

inmehadtmedasimplehobbyintoalifelongjou門lev（與朦文的樹接，升華主題）.

加分點與替換詞:

Sanctuary