易錯點19讀后續(xù)寫

目錄

01易錯陷阱（4大陷阱）

02舉一反三

【易錯點提醒一】詞句（籠統(tǒng)詞與高級詞）易混易錯點

【易錯點提醒二】簡單詞→高級詞（晚詞優(yōu)先原則）易混易錯點

【易錯點提醒三】對于人物心理動作描寫易混易錯點

【易錯點提醒四】with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)易混易錯點

03易錯題通關(guān)

易錯陷阱1：詞句（籠統(tǒng)詞與高級詞）易混易錯點。

【分析】

籠統(tǒng)詞的特點在于意義廣泛、搭配性強，常見的籠統(tǒng)詞包括make、have、take等。但由于籠統(tǒng)詞的

數(shù)量較少，多次使用會導(dǎo)致文章中的單詞重復(fù)率過高，文章枯燥無味。

具體詞的特點在于能精確描寫一個具體事物、具體動作和具體情節(jié)，因此，為了讓描寫的對象生動形

象，考生可以選擇適合語境的具體詞，使文章富有變化，表達更鮮明。

易錯陷阱2：簡單詞→高級詞（晚詞優(yōu)先原則）。

【分析】

從某種程度上講，英語寫作本身是一個展現(xiàn)學(xué)生詞匯量的過程。如果通篇文章都是低階詞匯，評分自

然不會太高。因此，適當(dāng)?shù)厥褂靡恍└唠A詞匯是一個提高寫作含金量的非常有效的做法。對于考生來說，

盡量用高年級階段學(xué)到的詞匯代替低年級階段學(xué)到的詞匯。

易錯陷阱3：對于人物心理動作描寫易混易錯點。

【分析】

心里動作描寫可以對續(xù)寫起到畫龍點睛的作用。一般來傳遞作者的思想感情和感悟，凸顯作者的變化。

易錯陷阱4：with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)易混易錯點。

【分析】

with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)在讀后續(xù)寫中使用較多,但是多數(shù)情況下容易用錯。

【易錯點提醒一】詞句（籠統(tǒng)詞與高級詞）易混易錯點

【例1】一天晚上，一個小偷走進了她家。

【低檔】Onenight,athiefwalkedintoherhouse.

低分分析：選詞過于籠統(tǒng)，缺乏畫面感和生動性。

【升級】Onenight,athieftiptoedintoherhouse.一天晚上，一個小偷躡手躡腳地走進了她家。升級后的句

式tiptoed“躡手躡腳地”更準確地表現(xiàn)出小偷的“鬼鬼祟祟”的動作特點。

【變式1】(2024·新課標Ⅰ卷)Ifinishedmywordswithdifficultyandlookedatthecardinmyhand.

【升級】→Ifinishedmywordswithdifficultyandstaredatthecardinmyhand.

【變式2】(2023·新課標Ⅰ卷)WhenIheardmynamecalled,Isteppedontothestage,tearssteamingdownmy

face.

【升級】→WhenIheardmynameannounced,Isteppedontothestage,tearssteamingdownmyface.

【易錯點提醒二】簡單詞→高級詞（晚詞優(yōu)先原則）。

【例2】①(2024·新課標Ⅰ卷)Whileturningtoglanceatthebus,Isawtheluggagedoorclosing.

易錯分析：saw一詞為初中學(xué)習(xí)的低級詞匯，應(yīng)使用高中的高級詞匯。

【正確】→Whileturningtoglanceatthebus,Iwitnessedtheluggagedoorclosing.

【變式1】②TheadvicetheoldmangaveTomwasveryimportant.

【升級】→TheadvicetheoldmangaveTomwasverysignificant/vital/critical.

【變式2】Ishouldbefreeanytimeafterschoolnextweek.

【升級】→Ishouldbeavailableanytimeafterschoolnextweek.

【易錯點提醒三】對于人物心理動作描寫易混易錯點

【例3】翻譯：他攔下一輛的士，拿著手提箱跳進去沖著司機說，“去”

仿寫1：Hetookataxitothepolicestation.

易錯分析：沒有把文章中要表達的意思翻譯準確。

改寫：Hestoppedataxi,jumpedinwiththesuitcaseandtoldthedriver,“Gotothepolicestation,please.”

【變式1】翻譯：男孩們興奮地跑到湖邊，脫下衣服，跳入湖中玩耍。

Theboysjumpedintothelaketoplay.

改寫：Theboysexcitedlyrushedtothelake,quicklytookofftheirclothesandjumpedintothewatertoplay.

【變式2】翻譯：我早上匆忙穿上大衣，抓起書包，騎著自行車匆忙去上學(xué)了。

Iwenttoschoolinahurrythismorning.

改寫：Ipulledonmycoathurriedly,grabbedmyschoolbagandcycledtoschoolthismorning.

【變式3】翻譯：聽到這個消息，她激動得胃里直打顫。

Shewasexcitedwhensheheardthenews.

改寫：Ashiverofexcitementpassedthroughherstomachwhensheheardthenews.

【易錯點提醒四】with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)易混易錯點

【例4】一天的任務(wù)完成了，她感到一種成就感。

Withtheday'staskscompleting,shefeltasenseofaccomplishment.

易錯分析：with+賓語+過去分詞(動賓關(guān)系)，completing使用錯誤。

改寫：Withtheday'staskscompleted,shefeltasenseofaccomplishment.

【變式1】媽媽彎下腰給了他一個擁抱，幸福的淚水順著她的臉頰滾落下來。

改寫：Shebentdowntogivehimahug,withtearsofhappinessrollingdownhercheeks.

【變式2】隨著最后一縷陽光消失，他凝望著夜空，被暮光柔和的筆觸所描繪。

改寫：Withthelastraysofsunlightfaded,hewatchedtheeveningsky,paintedwiththesoftbrushof

twilight.

【變式3】(2024浙江1月卷讀后續(xù)寫)凝視著高聳的教學(xué)樓，伊娃想出了一個好主意，臉上綻放著笑容。

改寫：Staringatthetoweringteachingbuilding,Evacameupwithagoodidea,withasmilebloomingacrossher

face.

1．（24-25高三上·江西·階段練習(xí)）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇

完整的短文。

Thewinterwindbitthroughmycoatbutdidn’tlessenmycheerfulnessasIcarriedmyfourjarsofhome-

cannedtomatoesintothecommunitycenter.Excitedtoparticipateinfeedingthelessfortunateinourcommunity

onNewYear’sDay,IjoinedmySundayschool’sclassmatesasweboxedthegoodsfordelivery.

Thatyear,wewenttoBobby’shouse.Hewasonegradeaheadofmeinschool,butIneverknewhewas

poor.Whenwetooktheboxinsidethesmallhouse,Isawbedroomshadbeencreatedbyhangingsheetsover

ropes.Bobbycamehomewhilewewerethere.Embarrassed,hequicklyhidbehindthescreen(隔板).

Itmademyheartache.Evenasaseven-year-old,Iunderstoodembarrassment.Afterwereturnedtothe

communitycenter,myteacherpulledmeaside.IthoughtshewasgoingtodiscussBobby’ssituation,butshe

didn’t.

Myteachertoldmethattheyhadcollectedalotoffoodthatyearandsuggestedthat,sinceIhadalarge

family,Ishouldtakeanextraboxhomewithme.Shepickedupthecardboardcontainer,expectingmetoaccept

thefood.

Irefused,sayingthatthefoodwasforpoorpeople.Myteacherrespondedthatallpeopleneededhelpat

times.Iinsistedthatmyfamilydidn’tneedhelp.Iopenedthedoorandwentbackhome.

Ibegantowonderifwewerepoor.Ilookedatourfamilycarefully,concludingthatweweredefinitely

poor.

Mymomnevertoleratesfoolishbehavioranddoesn’tallowcomplaining.Twodayslater,shedemandedto

knowwhyI’dbeendepressed.

Itoldherthatwewerepoor.Whenshedemandedtoknowwhohadsaidthat,Irepliedthatnobodyhadsaid

it,butIhadfigureditout.Icouldn’tlookatherintheeye,feelingthatshehadbeenhidingthisimportanttruth

fromus.

注意：

1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個左右；

2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

SheaskedwhyIthoughtwewerepoor,andIlistedreasons.

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AfterIfinished,mymothersatdownandtoldmewewerenotpoorbutveryrich.

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【答案】參考范文：

SheaskedwhyIthoughtwewerepoor,andIlistedreasons.Istatedmyrealizations.Imentionedthatthe

communitycenterwantedtogiveusfood,thatwedidn’thaveacar,andthatwehadtorideapoorbikewhenwe

wenttoplaces.Ialsonotedthatagrouphadofferedtobuyusshoesfortheschoolyearandthatmostofthe

clothesinmyclosetwerehand-me-downsfromagirlinmyclass.Iexpressedmyconcernthatpeoplemightbe

laughingatmeforwearingherclothes.

AfterIfinished,mymothersatdownandtoldmewewerenotpoorbutveryrich.SheaskedwhetherIhada

healthybodyandwhetherIcouldrunandplaywithoutanyproblem.ShethenaskedwhetherIhadagoodmind,

andwhetherIwasagoodreader.Inodded.SheemphasizedthatIlivedinacountry,whereIwasfreeandcould

goanywhereIwantedandpursueanydreamIcouldimagine.SheinsistedthatIwasnotpoorbutrich.She

expectedmetorememberthateverydayofmylife.

【導(dǎo)語】本文以作者的經(jīng)歷為線索，講述了她在社區(qū)活動中目睹貧困后，內(nèi)心產(chǎn)生疑惑并試圖探尋自家經(jīng)

濟狀況的真實性，然后作者向母親傾訴了自己的困惑和感受。

【詳解】1.段落續(xù)寫：

①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“她問我為什么認為我們家窮，我列出了原因?！笨芍谝欢慰擅鑼懽髡吒嬖V母親，

她覺得自己家很窮的原因。

②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“我講完后，媽媽坐下來告訴我，我們并不窮，而是很富有?！笨芍诙慰擅鑼懩?/p>

親告訴作者，她并不窮，而是很富有的理由。

2.續(xù)寫線索：詢問原因——列舉原因——母親的教誨——母親的期望。

3.詞匯激活

行為類

①注意到：note/notice

②表達：express/convey

③強調(diào)：emphasize/stress

情緒類

①擔(dān)憂：concern/apprehension

②自由的：free/unfettered

【點睛】[高分句型1]Imentionedthatthecommunitycenterwantedtogiveusfood,thatwedidn’thaveacar,

andthatwehadtorideapoorbikewhenwewenttoplaces.(that引導(dǎo)的賓語從句)

[高分句型2]SheaskedwhetherIhadahealthybodyandwhetherIcouldrunandplaywithoutany

problem.(whether引導(dǎo)的賓語從句)

2．（24-25高三上·浙江·階段練習(xí)）讀后續(xù)寫

Ahigh-pitchedscreamstoppedLauraDouglasinhertracks.Spinningaroundonthenarrowdirtpath,she

thoughtthathercousinCassiewasindanger.Instead,Cassiewasknee-deepinflowersthatcoveredthemeadow

(草地)likeaquilt.

“Cassie!Youscaredmetodeath!”Laurascolded,hervoiceechoingthroughthemeadow.“Iamsorry,”

Cassie,absorbedinherphotography,didn’tnoticethethickfogrollingin,consumingthenearbymountains.“Not

again!”Lauracomplained,hereyesshiftingtotheapproachingclouds.“Wegottago!”

Cassie'sfocusremainedonhercamera,capturingtheshort-livedbeautyofthemoment.Lauratiedared

scarfaroundherhair,“Let’sgobacktothecampsite.”Thegirlsquicklyrandownthewindingpath,themeadow

nowcoveredbyathickfogandasteady,coldrain.Theroadturnedslippery,andtheyhadtomoveslowlytoavoid

slidingdown.

“It'sdangerous!Weneedshelternow!”Cassiescreamedafteraloudcrackofthunder,thestorm'sstrength

increasingrapidly.Laura'skeeneyesfoundasmallcaveintherockface,partlyhiddenbyoverhangingbranches.

Itwasn'tmuch,butitofferedachancetoescapetherain.

“Cassie,overhere!”Lauracalledout,hervoicebarelycarryingoverthewind.

Cassie,wetandshaking,stumbledtowardstheplaceofLaura'svoice.Assheapproached,shecouldseethe

shelter.Itwasn'tperfect,butitwasbetterthannothing.

“Smartthinking,Laura,”Cassiesaid,herteethchattering(打顫)withcoldasshepressedherbackpack

closetoherchest.Thebackpack,atoughandwaterproof(防水的)model,hadbeenagiftfromherfather,an

experiencedhikerwhohadinsistedonitsnumerouspocketsandsectionsforemergencysupplies.Littledidthey

know,hisadvicewouldproveinvaluableonthisday.

注意：

1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.請按如下格式在答題紙的相應(yīng)位置作答。

“Checkyourbackpack,”Laurainstructed,hervoicebeinghopeful.

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【答案】Onepossibleversion:

“Checkyourbackpack,”Laurainstructed,hervoicebeinghopeful.“Wemighthavesomethingthatcan

helpusstartafire.”Cassienodded,herfingerstremblingassheunzippedthesidepocketofherbackpack.She

wasrelievedtofindaflashlight,acompactemergencyblanketandasmall,waterproofpouchcontaining

waterproofmatches.“Bingo!”sheexclaimed,hervoicefilledwithamixofsurpriseandrelief.Theyquicklyset

towork,usingthewaterproofmatchestoigniteasmallfirewiththedryleavesandtwigsLaurahadcollected.The

survivalblanketwasspreadout,providingathinlayerofinsulationagainstthecold,dampground.

Asnightfell,thestormfinallybegantodiedown.Thegirls,exhaustedbutdetermined,decidedtomakea

move.Theyknewthetrailwouldberiskyinthedark,butstayingintheshelterwasn'tanoptioneither.Usingthe

flashlight,theycarefullynavigatedtheslipperypath,followingthemarkerstheyhadsetearlier.Thefoghadlifted,

andthemoonprovidedjustenoughlighttoseeby.Hourslater,theyfinallyreachedtheedgeoftheforest.The

lightsofthecampsitewereawelcomesight.Cassiegrinned,herteethnolongerchattering,“Wemadeitback.”

Lauranodded,hereyesmeetingCassie’s.Theiradventurehadbeenterrifying,butithadalsobeenatestamentto

theirbondandtheirsurvivalskills.Andastheysatbythefire,sippinghotchocolate,theyknewtheywouldnever

forgetthedaytheyhadfacedthestormtogether.

【導(dǎo)語】本文以人物為線索展開，故事講述了Laura和Cassie遇到惡劣天氣，在返回營地的途中找到躲雨

的洞穴，利用Cassie父親給她的背包中的物資躲過危險。

【詳解】1.段落續(xù)寫：

①由第一段首句內(nèi)容““檢查你的背包，”勞拉指示道，她的聲音充滿希望。”可知，第一段可描寫Laura和

Cassie利用背包里的物資自救的過程

②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“夜幕降臨，暴風(fēng)雨終于開始平息?！笨芍诙慰擅鑼慙aura和Cassie脫離了危險。

2.續(xù)寫線索：利用背包里的物資進行自救——采取行動——沿著先前設(shè)置的標記——成功到達營地——難

忘的一次冒險

3.詞匯激活

行為類

①點燃：ignite/light

②提供：provide/offer

③到達：reach/arriveat

④決定：decide/determine

情緒類

①疲憊的：exhausted/tired

②害怕的：terrifying/fearful

【點睛】[高分句型1]Andastheysatbythefire,sippinghotchocolate,theyknewtheywouldneverforgetthe

daytheyhadfacedthestormtogether.(運用了as引導(dǎo)時間狀語從句和限制性定語從句)

[高分句型2]Theyknewthetrailwouldberiskyinthedark,butstayingintheshelterwasn'tanoptioneither.(運

用了省略that的賓語從句和動名詞作主語)

3．（24-25高三上·遼寧·階段練習(xí)）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇

完整的短文。

Inmychildhood,influencedbymyparentsandfriends.Iwasencouragedtotryvariouscreativeactivities.

Ofcourse,Ididn’tenjoyallofthemequally,whetheritwasmyfirstattemptorafterrepeatedefforts.However,

lifehasawayofleadingustounexpectedpassions.Youneverknowwhenacreativepursuitmightchangeyour

life.

Thenameofthisactivityis“painting”.Abouttenyearsago,Ididn’treallyseetheappealofsittinginfront

ofacanvas（畫布）forhours,tryingtorecreatescenesorimagesinmymind.Theideaofmixingcolorsand

repeatedlyadjustingbrushesfelttiresometome.Infact,Iusedtothinkofpaintingassomesortof“coloring

insidethelines”activitythatyoungkidsenjoyed,butitwasmuchmoredifficultbecausetherewasnooutlineto

guideyou.

However,allthatchangedwhenIvisitedmygrandparentsduringawinterbreak.Mygrandmother,an

enthusiasticpainter,gentlypersuadedmetojoinherinherartstudiototrymyhandatpainting.Sheencouraged

metosimplyexpressmyselfthroughcolorsandbrushes.Hesitantbutcurious,Iagreedandsatdownwithher,

readytopaint.Beforehandingmethebrushes,sheshowedmehowtomixthecolorsandcreatedifferentshades,

makingtheprocessseemmoreapproachable.

Learningtopaint,especiallyforabeginnerlikeme,canbeadifficulttask.Theactofholdingabrushis

simple,butcreatingsomethingmeaningfulonthecanvasischallenging.That’swhyit’scalledpainting,not

finishing.Butwithpracticeandpatience,itbecomesmoreenjoyableandlessfrighteningovertime.Patienceis

crucialinpainting.Ittakestimetofindtherightcombinationofcolorsandtolettheimageinyourmindslowly

takeformonthecanvas.

注意：

1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Mygrandmotherhadtorepeatedlyremindmetobepatient.

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Wordcamethatapaintingcompetitionwouldbeheldinourschool.

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【答案】Mygrandmotherhadtorepeatedlyremindmetobepatient.Ioftengrewfrustratedwhenthecolorsdidn’t

mixasIhadhoped,orwhenmybrushmovementsfeltawkwardandunsteady.Sheencouragedmetotakeadeep

breathandslowdowntoappreciatetheprocessratherthanrushtowardtheresult,Withhergentleguidance,I

begantounderstandthatpatiencewasnotjustaboutwaitingforamasterpiecetoappear.butaboutembracing

eachstepofthejourneyandlearningfromeverymovement.AsIgraduallyletgoofmyimpatience.Istartedto

immersemyselfmorefullyintheart,discoveringadeepersenseofsatisfactionintheactofcreating.

Wordcamethatapaintingcompetitionwouldbeheldinourschool.Mygrandmotherencouragedmeto

participate.butIwashesitantatfirst.unsureifmyskillsweregoodenough.Despitemydoubts.Idecidedto

challengemyselfandenterthecompetition.Ispentweekspreparing,carefullychoosingmysubjectandpracticing

everyday.AsIworked.Irememberedmygrandmother’slessonsonpatience,andIallowedmyselfthetimeto

improvewithoutrushing.Tomysurprise,notonlydidIenjoytheprocess,butmyhardworkpaidoff—Iendedup

winningaprize.Thisexperienceboostedmyconfidenceanddeepenedmyloveforpainting,strengtheningthe

beliefthatpatiencetrulyisavirtueinallaspectsoflife.

【導(dǎo)語】本文以人物為線索展開。主要圍繞主人公如何通過祖母悉心教導(dǎo)與激勵，不僅學(xué)會了繪畫，還在

學(xué)校比賽中取得了成功。

【詳解】1.段落續(xù)寫：

①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“我的祖母反復(fù)提醒我要有耐心，”可知，第一段敘述了作者在祖母的耐心引導(dǎo)下，逐

漸體會到繪畫的樂趣，并開始享受繪畫的過程。

②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“我全速奔跑，人群沖著我大喊大叫”可知，第二段則描繪了作者參加比賽并且獲獎的

經(jīng)過,以及作者的感悟。

2.續(xù)寫線索：沮喪——祖母鼓勵鼓勵——找到滿足感—耐心準備——獲得回報——感悟

3.詞匯激活

行為類

①鼓勵：encourage/inspire

②決心：decideto/bedeterminedto

③擁抱：embrace/hug

④決定：decide/determine

情緒類

①沮喪的：frustrated/depressed

②尷尬的：awkward/embarrassed

【點睛】[高分句型1]Tomysurprise,notonlydidIenjoytheprocess,butmyhardworkpaidoff—Iendedup

winningaprize.(運用了部分倒裝句)

[高分句型2]AsIgraduallyletgoofmyimpatience.Istartedtoimmersemyselfmorefullyintheart,discovering

adeepersenseofsatisfactionintheactofcreating.(運用了as引導(dǎo)的時間狀語從句)

4．（24-25高三上·山東濰坊·階段練習(xí)）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成

一篇完整的短文。

IfirstmetMichaelinthehallwaywhenIwasteachinginajobtrainingprogramandrecruiting(招收)

studentswhowerepotentialdropouts(輟學(xué)者).AsIgavehimourusualintroductiontotheprogram,myfirst

impressionwas,“Isurewouldn’twanttomeetthisguyagain.”Afterlisteningtomyintroduction,heanswered,

“I’llthinkaboutit.”

Thenextmorninghewasinourofficetotellmehewouldbeinourprogram.SoMichaelwasofficially

admittedinmyclass.ButitbecameimmediatelyobviousthatMichaelcouldn’tbematchedwithasuitablepartner.

Hedistancedhimselfwithhisattitude.Andhesoonbecameboredwiththeskillanddrillgames,buthewould

focusonthetypinglessonsforlongerperiods.OftenIwouldcatchhimofftask,playinggamesonthecomputer

orfollowingmearoundtheroom.Healsotoldmestoriesofhowhehadinjuriesandhospitalizationsthatresulted

fromhisanger.IndesperationIsuggestedthatheshouldputhisinterestingstoriesonthecomputer,whichhe

seemedtothinkwasagoodidea.Mymotiveswerenotprofessional,withoutanyinstructionsatall,butIhadto

gethimoffofmybacksoIcouldkeepeveryoneelseworking.

WhileIwashelpingotherstudents,Michaelwashappilyoccupiedinhiswritingformorethanaweekand

lessofabothertome.Finally,heprintedoutseveralpages,broughtthemtomydeskandaskedmetoreadthem.

Sincethebellwasgoingtoring,ItoldhimthatIwouldtakethemhomeandreadthemlater.

LaterthateveningIpulledhispagesoutandunwillinglybegantoread,expectingmoreofviolentepisodes.

Instead,Ireadapersonalstorywrittenbyasensitiveyoungmanwhoworeacoldandlonelyshield(盾牌).The

storywassimple,moving,andsincere.Althoughhiswritingstylewasraw,hismessagewaspowerfulenoughto

bringtearstomyeyes.

注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個左右；

2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Thenextmorning,heaskedmewhatIthoughtofhispapers.

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Ashiswritingprogressed,therewasanobviouschangeinhim.

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【答案】Thenextmorning,heaskedmewhatIthoughtofhispapers.Ireplied,“Thestorywassimple,andthe

writingstylewasraw…”.Hearingthis,heloweredhisheadwithdisappointment.“Ihaven’tfinishedmywords.

Butthestorywasverymoving,andsincere.Andthemessagewaspowerfulenoughtobringtearstomyeyes.”I

continued.“Really?”Thesmileonhisfaceshonelikeadiamond.“Thereissomeroomforyoutoimproveyour

writing.Aslongasyouworkhard,youwillmakeprogressinwriting.”Iadded.Hepromisedmewith

determinationthathewouldtryhisbesttoimprovehiswriting.Fromthatdayon,hethrewhimselfinwriting.

Ashiswritingprogressed,therewasanobviouschangeinhim.Insteadofdistancinghimselffromothers,

hebegantotalkwithothers,andevenmadefriendswithsomepeople.Thetoothysmileappearedonhisface

usually.Wheneverseeingme,hewouldgreettomewarmly.Hetoldmethathelikeswhatheislikenowanditis

Iandwritingthathavechangedhim.HewasgratefulforwhatIhavedoneforhim.

【導(dǎo)語】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了作者所任教的職業(yè)培訓(xùn)項目中招收了一名輟學(xué)的學(xué)生Michael，

他不喜歡和別人交流，且對技巧和練習(xí)游戲感到厭倦，但他會花更長的時間專注于寫作。無奈之下，作者

建議他把他有趣的故事放到寫在電腦上上，隨后他開始專注于寫作。一天，他將自己的寫作拿給作者看，

作者剛開始以為他的寫作是充滿暴力的，但是在看完后，作者被他寫得故事所感動。

【詳解】1.段落續(xù)寫：

①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“第二天早上，他問我對他的論寫作何看法?！笨芍谝欢慰擅鑼懽髡哒?wù)撟约簩λ?/p>

寫作的看法鼓勵他繼續(xù)努力。

②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“隨著寫作的進展，他的變化也很明顯”可知，第二段可描寫他的寫作改變了他，使得

他不再和別人疏遠。

2.續(xù)寫線索：作者回復(fù)——失望——作者告訴他他的寫作很感人——高興——鼓勵他——全身心投入寫作

——寫作取得進步他也改變了——開始不再和別人疏遠——感謝作者

3.詞匯激活行為類

①低下頭：lowerone’shead/hangone’shead

②提高：improve/enhance

③和某人談話：talkwithsb./haveachatwithsb.

情緒類

①感謝：grateful/thankful

②感人的：moving/touching

【點睛】[高分句型1]Aslongasyouworkhard,youwillmakeprogressinwriting（由aslongas引導(dǎo)的狀語

從句）

[高分句型2]Wheneverseeingme,hewouldgreettomewarmly.（運用了狀語從句的省略）

[高分句型3]HetoldmethathelikeswhatheislikenowanditisIandwritingthathavechangedhim.（that引

導(dǎo)的賓語從句，what引導(dǎo)的賓語從句以及強調(diào)句型）

5．（24-25高三上·重慶·階段練習(xí)）閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇

完整的短文。

AftergraduatingfromUCLAasafilm-makingmajor,Iwasbrimmingwithconfidence,thinkingtomyself

thatIwasboundtomakeasplashinthisindustry.Yetafterbeingdeclinedbycountlessenterprises,Iendedup

findingatemporaryjobasabirthdayclowntomakeendsmeet.Ihadtoadmitthatthepayofplayingtheclown

wasprettydecent,butIstruggledalotwithmynewidentity.Everysleeplessnight,Icouldn’thelpaskingmyself

thesamequestion,“Shouldn’tIbeafilmmakerratherthanajokerdoingaridiculousjob?”

Forcertainparties,Ihadbeenassignedtoplayaspecificcharacter.Usually,thecompanywoulddropoffa

trashbagfilledwithacostumeformethenightbeforetheparty.Itwascruel,sincethesecostumessmelledlike

thebrokendreamsofeveryfailedactorthat’dwormthembeforeme.

Onenight,theyhandedmemytrashbagandsaid,“Tomorrowyou’regoingtobeBatman.”AtthetimeI

hadagiantmustache,andasuperherowithamustachewasn’twhatparentswouldanticipate.ButIwasn’tinthe

moodtoaltermyphysicalappearanceforthatjob,becausethatwouldhavemeantmeadmittingIwasmoreofa

clownthanafilmmaker.SoIdidn’tshave.

Thenextday,Iwenttotheparty.Ihadtoleavemycarparkedfarenoughawaysothatthekidswouldn’t

seeBatmandrivingabrokenSUV.Asaconsequence,Ihadtowalktotheparty.Normallyattheseparties,allyou

havetodoispopinthroughthefrontdoorandsay,“Surprise!Batman’shere!”

Butagroupofkidsplayingatthefrontdoorspottedmeapproaching,like,aquarterofamileaway,which

mademestarttoregretmyoption.Iwasthinking,“Gosh,mystupidmustacheisgoingtoruinthisparty.”Sure

enough,onceIgotcloseenoughforthemtostartidentifyingthefeaturesofmyface,theentirepartyburstinto

laughter.

注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個左右；

2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

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Superawkward,IturnedaroundandwantedtodrivemyBatmobileaway.

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Iranintotheparty,andtheywereallclappingtheirhandsforme.

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【答案】Superawkward,IturnedaroundandwantedtodrivemyBatmobileaway.Atthesightofmystrange

behavior,thelaughterfromthesekidsfadedawayallofasudden.“IsBatmanescaping?”askedachild,hisvoice

filledwithgenuineconcern.Ifoundmyselfrootedtotheground,unabletoinchforward.Someawfulmemories

flashedbackinfrontofmyeyes,makingmefeelmybloodfreeze.Myheartwasbeatingpainfullyfast,andmy

mindwenttotallyblank.Anotherchildbroketheicebyyellingfromthetopofhislungs,“Batmanneverescapes!”

Itwashisinspiringwordsthatbrought