讀后續(xù)寫普遍問題：1.人稱不清；男女不分2.卷面臟亂，書寫潦草3.無話可寫，下筆漏洞百出。不能用自己的頑固考驗老師的閱讀力和忍耐力。多次下筆，與模板產(chǎn)生更強的感應(yīng)，只要寫，就有分，每一分都很重要。Part1.讀懂文本，獲取關(guān)鍵信息行業(yè)PPT模板http:///hangye/Takehitowasdaydreamingwhenheheardavoice.“Andwhatperformancewillyoupresentatthetalentshow,Takehito?”Takehito'sfifth-gradeteacher,Mrs.Klein,hadspokenandwasglaringdownathimnow.TakehitohadbeenstaringoutthewindowfromhisdeskwhileMrs.Kleinpacedupanddowntherowsofdeskstoaskeachstudentwhattalentheorshewouldperformfortheshow.TherestoftheclassandTakehito'steacherwerenowstaringandwaitingforhisanswer.Takehito'sfacepoppedbeet-red.Hedidn'tknowwhattosay.Luckilyforhim,thebellrang,signalingtheendoftheschoolday.Takehitoquicklygatheredhisbooksandgotuptoleave,butMrs.Kleinstoppedhim.Actually,Mrs.KleinworriedaboutTakehito.Lastyear,heandhismotherimmigratedfromJapantoChicago.Hehadnotmadefriendseasily.Someofthestudentsinhisoldclassmadefunofthewayhelookedandthewayhespoke.Therefore,ashisteacherthisyear,Mrs.KleinwasdeterminedtogetTakehitotoperforminthetalentshow,knowingthatifhedid,hewouldestablishsomefriendshipsbeforeenteringjuniorhigh.“Whatareyougoodat?”askedMrs.Klein.Takehito,thoughtforamoment.“Idon'tknow.”“Whatdoyoumcan?”Mrs.Kleincontinued.“Canyoudraw?Canyouplayasport?Canyouplayamusicalinstrument?Canyousing?..."”Mrs.Kleincontinuedlistingtalents,butTakehitostoppedlisteningashisgazingwanderedtoaposteronthewall.Thepostershowedapersondoingbreakdance（霹靂舞）.“Dancing.Iwillbreakdance!"Takehitointerrupted.Mrs.Klein'seyeslitupwithencouragement."That'sfantastic,Takehito!Breakdancingisagreatchoice.I'msureyou'lldoanamazingjob.”Hersmilewasreassuring,andsheadded,“Thetalentshowisthreemonthsaway,soyouhaveplentyoftimetoprepare.I'llbeheretohelpyouprepareifyouneedit.”1.讀原文，把握故事who：誰（續(xù)寫不加新人）when：什么時候（以一般過去時為主，對話里可用現(xiàn)在時）Where:發(fā)生在哪里（地點轉(zhuǎn)換以原文為主，故事背景不能天馬行空）Why:為什么（故事原因）What:發(fā)生了什么（合理發(fā)展；有效對話；推動情節(jié)發(fā)展）How:怎么樣（主人公如何解決問題，故事結(jié)果是什么，整個故事線應(yīng)該流暢完整）AstorywhowhenwherewhatwhyhowTakehito;mother;Mrs.KleinThatevening;Threemonthslaterschool;homePerformatthetalentshowEncouragementfromMrs.KleinbreakdancePart2.弄清故事情節(jié)行業(yè)PPT模板http:///hangye/BeginningEndingTeacheraskedotherstudentsindifferentTeacheraskedTakehitoembarrassedThebellrangrelievedTeacherstoppedhimanxious;bewilderedClimax(高潮)breakdanceexcited;nervousSatatthedinnertablewithhismotherTheshowcameamazing?Feeling?Part3.十句定五句行業(yè)PPT模板http:///hangye/Para.1：Thatevening,Takehitosatatthedinnertablewithhismother.就地取材，文字接龍（Para1首句）2.3.4.就地取材，反向文字接龍（Para2首句)Para.2：Thethreemonthsslippedbyinaflash,andthedayofthetalentshowwasfinallyhere.就地取材，文字接龍（Para2首句）

故事結(jié)局10.感悟升華十句定五句與母親說明情況，尋求幫助母親鼓勵他，并提供建議下定決心，練習(xí)跳舞中間有曲折艱辛想起母親和老師的鼓勵，堅持很緊張被鼓勵上臺表演表演很成功Part4.佳作欣賞&大家一起來找茬行業(yè)PPT模板http:///hangye/Thatevening,Takehitosatatthedinnertablewithhismother.Hesitantatfirst,hefinallyshared,“Mom,Mrs.KleinaskedwhatI'dperformatthetalentshow,andIsaidI'dbreakdance.ButI'veneverdancedbefore.”Hismotherlookedathimwithamixtureofsurpriseandpride.“Breakdancing,huh?Thatsoundsexciting!Let'sfindyouadanceclass.You'llgetbetterwithpractice.”Thefollowingweek,Takehitobeganattendingdanceclasses.Thesessionsweretough;hismusclesached,andheoftenstumbledoverthemoves.ButherememberedMrs.Klein'sencouragementandhismother'sfaithinhim.Hekeptpushingthrough,dedicatinghimselftomasteringeachstep.ThefollowingweekswitnessedTakehito’sdeterminationandefforts.（無靈主語）上臺表演套路一：緊張—鼓勵—開始表演—成功—升華緊張WhenTakehitostepedontostage,hethoughthavesomebutterfliesinhisstomache.Whenhesteppedontothebigstage,heheardhisheartpoundingwidely.WhenTakehitowalkeduptothestage,astrongsenseofnervesssweptoverhim.AmixtureofexcitementandnervousnesssurgingthrougTakehito’sheart,hestoodonthestage.1.Takehitosankintoaninnerconflictbetweenthedesiretoperformandthefearofdancinginpublic.2.Thoughhavingmadeadequatepreparations,Takehitowasstilloverwhelmedbygreatnervousness,hisheartbeatviolentlyashedraggedhimselfuptothestage.被鼓勵Buthelookhermom’seyes.Herembrassedwasreplaceconfidence.Justinthatmoment,Takehitosawhismomandteacher,whowascheeringforhim.Worriedandnerviousgivewaytoconfidence.1.NosoonerhadhecaughtsightofMrs.Klein’ssmilingfaceandencouraginglookthanhisnervousnessandworryfadedaway,replacedbycouragetohaveatry.（倒裝句）2.Anxietyhadalmostdrovehimcrazywhensuddenly,hecaughtsightofMrs.Klein’ssmile,comfortingandinspiring.1.Envelopedintheglowofthelights,Takehitotookadeepbreath,calmedhimselfdownanddancedtothemusic.（done,S+V1,V2andV3）2.Asthemusicstarted,helettherhythmguidehim,hismovementsflowingwithconfidence.Hisenergeticperformancewasaburstofspins,flips,andpowerfulfreezes,captivatingeveryoneintheaudience.上臺表演Takehitolookedathisfirmeyes,gatheredhiscouragesteppedonthestage,beganhisshow.ItwasatthattimethathenoticedMrs.Klein’ssight,whoworeareassuringsmile.Heforcedhimselfcalmingdownandbegantodance.1.Theperformanceturnedouttobeasuccess,thunderousapplauseechoingaroundthehall.（獨立主格）2.Tohissurprise,hedancedwithheartandsoul,standingoutfromalltheparticipants.表演成功Whenhefinishedthefinalpause,athunderousofapplausewasfilledwiththeclassroom.Withasmoothactionendinguptheshow,hewassurroundedbyheatedclaps.1.ItwasatthatmomentthatTakehitocametorealizethatexperiencewasatestament(證明)ofpatience,perseveranceandpassion.(強調(diào)句)2.Actually,everyindividualpossessestalent.Whenwefindit,bebrave,confidentandmakeefforts,andwewillcreatemiraclesintheend.自然結(jié)局1.Asimaging,heestablishedsomefriendshipsandbecomeapositiveperson.2.Withouthesitate,hewalkeduptohismomandteachers,expressinghisheartfeltgratetothemandembaracin