讀后續(xù)寫真題2016年10月浙江卷:吵架出走迷路1試題再現(xiàn)2試題分析3寫作思路4范文賞析目錄CONTENTS2016試題再現(xiàn)歷年高考英語讀后續(xù)寫真題分析01

閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。(2016年10月浙江高考試題)

OneweekendinJuly,Janeandherhusband,Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbyalakeintheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom,“I’mgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp”andwalkedaway.

Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace,sheturned

示例around,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcappedmountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.“Tom!”shecried.“Help!”Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.

Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling(滴落)somewhereatadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow,Janebegantowalkalongthestreamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.

Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janeheardahelicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffheryellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.注意：1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應為150左右；2.應使用5個以上短文中標有下劃線的關鍵詞；3.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；4.續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關鍵詞語。Paragraph1：

Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.____________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2：

ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.__________________________________________________________

2021試題分析歷年高考英語讀后續(xù)寫真題分析02 OneweekendinJuly,Janeandherhusband,Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbyalakeintheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom,“I’mgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp”andwalkedaway. Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace,sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcappedmountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.原文分析夫妻吵架，可能跟尋找野營地點意見不一致有關。Jane吵架出走，迷路了。 “Tom!”shecried.“Help!” Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.原文分析情緒描寫心里描寫 Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling(滴落)somewhereatadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow,Janebegantowalkalongthestreamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.原文分析Jane的自救Jane想尋找回去的辦法。 Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janeheardahelicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffheryellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.原文分析直升機出現(xiàn)Jane想到有可能吸引直升機的辦法。2021寫作思路歷年高考英語讀后續(xù)寫真題分析03句子潤色1.一片漆黑立刻籠罩了整個森林。Immediately,anabsolutedarknessruledtheforest.ruledtheforest句子潤色2.簡，精疲力竭，害怕，躺在一塊石頭旁邊，想念她遙遠的家人。Jane,exhaustedandscared,laydownnearastone,missingherfamilyatadistance.exhaustedandscared注意非謂語動詞的用法句子潤色3.所有美好的回憶涌上心頭，她忍不住哭了起來：“如果不是我和湯姆吵架，走開，爬到高處，我就不會被困在這個可怕的地方，面對死亡的危險?！盇llthefantasticmemorycrowdedinandshecouldn’thelpcrying,“ifIhadn’tquarreledwithTom,walkedawayandclimbedtothehighplace,Iwouldn’tbetrappedinthisawfulplace,confrontedwiththedangerofdying.”Allthefantasticmemorycrowdedinandshecouldn’thelpcrying,“Hadn’tIquarreledwithTom,walkedawayandclimbedtothehighplace,Iwouldn’tbetrappedinthisawfulplace,confrontedwiththedangerofdying.”memorycrowdedinconfrontedwiththedangerofdying虛擬語氣的倒裝句子潤色4.她后悔萬分，醒著，眼睛里噙著晶瑩的淚水。Sheregrettedwithendlessanxiety,andthenbecameasleepwithshiningtearsinhereyes.regrettedwithendlessanxietywithshiningtearsinhereyes句子潤色5.盡管她很虛弱，她還是掙扎著站起來，繼續(xù)尋求幫助。Although

shewasweak,shecontinuedtosearchforassistance.Weakasshewas,shestruggledtoherfeet,continuingsearchingforassistance.struggledtoherfeetsearchforassistance句式升級句子潤色6.令她非常高興的是，一架直升飛機一次又一次地從頭頂飛過。Tohergreatjoy,ahelicopterwasflyingoverheadagainandagain.TohergreatjoyFlyoverhead課前檢測：1.On_________(see)me,hegavesuchastartofsurprisethathedroppedallthethingsinhishand.2.Hewassosurprised____hestoodthere____hismouthopen.3.Maybe_______(ashame)ofwhathehaddone,hewasabouttoturnaway_____Iseizedhisarmquickly.4.Istared____himforseveralsecondsandbrokethesilence,_________(say)“Roy,trustme.Iamwillingtohelpyou.”5._______________(regret)whathehaddone,hecouldn’tholdbackhistears,bentdownandburstout________(cry)withhisheadburiedinhishands.seeingthatwithashamedwhenatsayingHavingregrettedcrying6._________(feel)asenseofrelief,Roycan’twait__________(apologize)toourteacherforhisbehavior.7.Infrontoftheoffice,hehesitated____________(knock)atthedoor.8.__________(encourage)byme,heeventuallymadeit.9.Roypulledoutthemoneyandhandedittotheteacher,____________(apologize)forhisbehavior.10.Onceyouroutgoingpersonalityleftadeepimpression_____us.11.Youareblessed_____suchagoodfriend.12._________(step)outoftheoffice,wefeltasenseofreliefwiththesun___________(shine)downoverus.FeelingtoapologizetoknockEncouragedapologizingonwithSteppingshiningRead步驟？ThinkWrite1)5W1H2)organization3)language關鍵詞開頭語Predicttheplotproperly1)Actions動作2)Feelings情感3)Surroundings環(huán)境Getthemainidea讀線索5W1Hcontentwhowhenwhere

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JanewaslosttheyquarreledJane,TomoneweekendinJuly

intheforestmainidea?OnweekendinJuly,JanewaslostintheforestbecauseshehadquarreledwithTom.Inwhatorderisthematerialdeveloped?OneweekendinJuly,……Asnightwasbeginningtofall,……Janeroseatthebreakoftheday,……But……anditwasgettingdarkagain.ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Time讀結(jié)構(gòu)Withnopathtofollow,Jane……with復合結(jié)構(gòu)……,sheturnedaround,hopingto……分詞作狀語Janetookoffheryellowblouse,thinkingthat……Janerose……,hungryandthirsty.形容詞作狀語Ifonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephone……固定句式Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.倒裝讀語言BeginningClimaxEndingquarrel

angrysawhelicopterswasrescued?processlostconfused，tired構(gòu)思Para.1:But

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續(xù)寫部分:簡當時的感受？簡是如何過夜的？

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up.續(xù)寫部分：簡獲救了嗎？誰救了簡？

怎么救的？

她當時的感受？Paragraph1：

Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain._______________________________________________________________________Paragraph2：

ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup._______________________________________________________________________原文分析根據(jù)下面的推斷，本段應該是Jane肚子在森林里度過，根據(jù)前文，本段側(cè)重于Jane的內(nèi)心描寫。表明上一段Jane在森林里又獨自度過了一天。本段應該是Jane如何被救，根據(jù)前文，可能直升機又來了。Paragraph1Paragraph1：

Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Janelaydownnearastone.Sheremindedherhusband’sgooddeed.ShemissedTom.SheregratedtoquarrelwithTom.Paragraph2Paragraph2：

ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.helicopterwasflyingoverheadagain.sheflaggedheryellowblouse.shewaseventuallynoticed.Itwasherhusband,theyagreednevertoquarrelagain.A:actions動作的豐富性F:feelings情感表達的多樣性S:surroundings恰當運用環(huán)境描寫Write2016范文賞析歷年高考英語讀后續(xù)寫真題分析04續(xù)寫賞析Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Immediately,anabsolutedarknessruledtheforest.Jane,exhaustedandscared,laydow