1、加強訓(xùn)練，提高高中學(xué)生書面表達能力,廈門五緣實驗學(xué)校 石 錫 伍 特級教師 教育學(xué)碩士,2009年福建卷書面表達試題,一、試題回顧,某英語報社擬成立“微笑俱樂部”，現(xiàn)向全球征募會員，要求申請者提交一篇題為“I Want to Smile”的英語短文。請你以申請者的身份，根據(jù)以下思路圖的提示用英語寫一篇短文。,二、試題分析,1、提示形式：,根據(jù)思路圖，寫一篇題為“I want to smile”的英語作文，詞數(shù)120個左右,2、題材：,I want to smile.,3、體裁：,說明文；記敘文 + 說明文,圍繞“微笑的好處”、“對父母微笑或?qū)ε笥盐⑿驅(qū)蠋熚⑿Α?、“向自己微笑”以及總結(jié)等四個

2、要點展開；其中“對父母微笑或?qū)ε笥盐⑿驅(qū)蠋熚⑿Α薄ⅰ跋蜃约何⑿Α眱蓚€方面，應(yīng)體現(xiàn)出why。,4、人稱：,以第一人稱為主,5、時態(tài)：,現(xiàn)在時；過去時 + 現(xiàn)在時,三、內(nèi)容要點及語言結(jié)構(gòu),1、說明“微笑的好處”，可以寫上一點或兩點或兩點以上。,1）“微笑”有助于縮短距離。 Smiling can cut down the distance between you and the other people.,2）“微笑”使人心情愉悅 / 永保青春。 Smiling can make us cheerful. Smiling can keep us young.,3）“笑”除誤會/困難。 Smil

3、ing will clear up misunderstanding / difficulty.,三、內(nèi)容要點及語言結(jié)構(gòu),1、說明“微笑的好處”，可以寫上一點或兩點或兩點以上。,4）“笑”除疲勞。 Smiling will help us to relax.,5）“笑”除煩惱。 Smiling can help us forget our worries and enjoy ourselves.,6）“微笑”減輕壓力。 Smiling can help us to escape the pressure of our study.,三、內(nèi)容要點及語言結(jié)構(gòu),1、說明“微笑的好處”，可以寫上一點或

4、兩點或兩點 以上。,2、“對父母微笑”，用實際事例說明why要“對父母 微笑”，以表感恩之情，回報父母的艱辛付出。,3、“對自己微笑”，用實際事例說明why要“對自己 微笑”。,4、總結(jié)。一句話總結(jié)即可。 In a word, smile doesnt need to learn. We can smile everywhere and whenever. In a word, we can smile as much as possible to make our life colourful.,一、評分原則,1、本題總分為25分，按5個檔次給分；,2、評分時，先根據(jù)文章的內(nèi)容和語言初步確定

5、其所屬檔次，然后以該檔次的要求來衡量，確定或調(diào)整檔次，最后給分；,3、詞數(shù)少于100和多于150的，從總分中減去2分；,4、評分時應(yīng)注意的主要內(nèi)容為：內(nèi)容要點、應(yīng)用詞匯和語法結(jié)構(gòu)的數(shù)量和準(zhǔn)確性及上下文的連貫性；,5、拼寫與標(biāo)點符號是語言準(zhǔn)確性的一個方面。評分時，應(yīng)視其對交際的影響程度予以考慮。英、美拼寫及詞匯用法均可接受；,6、如書寫較差以至影響交際，將分數(shù)降低一個檔次。,二、各檔次的給分范圍和要求,二、各檔次的給分范圍和要求,二、各檔次的給分范圍和要求,二、各檔次的給分范圍和要求,二、各檔次的給分范圍和要求,二、各檔次的給分范圍和要求,三、若干啟示,第五部分 利用教材資源, 開展寫作訓(xùn)練,一

6、、寫作教學(xué)的目標(biāo),寫作教學(xué)的目標(biāo),寫作教學(xué)的目標(biāo),寫作教學(xué)的目標(biāo),1.寫作內(nèi)容；,2.語言基本要求；,3.文體、篇章結(jié)構(gòu)的基本要求。,寫作教學(xué)的目標(biāo),陳述事實、敘述事件過程、表達個人觀點、表達個人情感、表明個人態(tài)度、對人對事展開評論。,寫作教學(xué)的目標(biāo),填寫表格、制作問候卡、寫便條、寫簡單信函、給朋友寫信、看圖寫話、描述人物與事件、轉(zhuǎn)述或改寫所讀文章、寫摘要、依據(jù)文字及圖表寫短文、寫報告。,寫作教學(xué)的目標(biāo),heading,1st paragraph: leading information,2nd paragraph: detailed information,3rd paragraph: le

7、ss important information。,寫作教學(xué)的目標(biāo),Paragraph 2: His/ her hard work and achievements;,Paragraph 1: personal information;,Paragraph 3: His / Her good quality;,Paragraph 4: the writers opinion。,寫作訓(xùn)練內(nèi)容,1） treatment of content:,the ability to think creatively and develop thoughts, excluding all irrelevant

8、 information;,2） stylistic skills:,the ability to manipulate sentences and paragraphs, and use language effectively;,寫作訓(xùn)練內(nèi)容,3）judgement skills:,the ability to write in an appropriate manner for a particular purpose with a particular audience in mind, together with an ability to select, organize and

9、order relevant information.,4）language use:,the ability to write correct and appropriate sentences;,寫作訓(xùn)練內(nèi)容,5） mechanical skills:,the ability to use correctly those conventions peculiar to the written language -e.g. punctuation, spelling;,二、分年級寫作教學(xué)建議,1模塊寫作教學(xué)目標(biāo),高一年級寫作教學(xué)建議,造句擴展句子連句連句成段,高一年寫作教學(xué)建議,用括號中的連

10、詞擴展句子 1. My brothers is going to the Olympic Games. I am going to the Olympic Games. (both and ) Both my brother and I are going to the Olympic Games. ,高一年寫作教學(xué)建議,回答下列問題后，用適當(dāng)?shù)脑~將答案組成一個段落，段落不超過70個詞。 1. When will the Olympic Games be held in our country? 2. What will the government do for the Olympic Ga

11、mes 3. Who has designed the buildings? 4. When will the workers have completed the new stadium? ,高二年寫作教學(xué)建議,基礎(chǔ)性寫作練習(xí) 程序?qū)懽?功能性寫作 或 自由寫作,高二年寫作教學(xué)建議,第一單元 Write a short letter asking Copernicus to publish his ideas so that everyone can read them Beginning: Tell Copernicus who you are and why you want him t

12、o publish his ideas Paragraph 1: Reason 1 and evidence Paragraph 2: Reason 2 and evidence Summary: Ask him to think again about publishing his ideas,三、利用單元教材資源，開展寫作訓(xùn)練,1明確單元寫作教學(xué)目標(biāo),1. help the students to understand the listening text; 2. help the students to take notes; 3. help the students to captio

13、n first aid instructions for sprained ankle, burning clothes, a nose bleed and choking; 4. help the students to write a news report, describing how to offer the first aid when choking, sprained ankle, a nose bleed happens. 5. help the students to use the following expressions properly in their instr

14、uctional writing: first, second, then, finally, or first of all, after that, then, at last; immediately, etc.,二、利用單元教材資源，開展寫作訓(xùn)練,優(yōu)化過程，加強指導(dǎo),1）Pre-writing,2）While writing,When someone get hurt on his ankle,we should,put him down put some ice on his ankle put his foot on a chair bandage his ankle up firmly,When someone gets burned, we ,1.Stop him running around. 2.Tell him to drop to the ground. 3.Wrap him up tightly in some heavy cloth. 4.Roll him along the ground until the fire goes out. 5.Treat him for burns.,When someone gets a nose bleed, we ,1.Sit her down and