2020高中英語新高考讀后續(xù)寫升華：刪繁簡三秋樹，領(lǐng)標(biāo)新二月花引言。：Beastory;Beyondastory.謂Be是把故事完整即，不一定要突出一的道理，類似于景劇老友記》，娛一；而Beyondastory

是基于一定的主旨theme)去掘人物的心感，所有情節(jié)的拓展都是服務(wù)于主旨。的一定的主旨，粹的Beastory如2016年的妻子賭氣丈夫旅游中分開，然后。續(xù)寫是最后兩又好。包括今年的兒上學(xué)，父母給家里的又添一個伙伴，然后子回家。這里的故事就單純地圍繞人物展開把故事講完了就束了。我認(rèn)為無論是beastory還是beyondastory，只要把人物形象刻畫出來了，并且續(xù)寫部分的想象合情理，是達(dá)到了高的寫作要求。人說beyondastory

學(xué)生來說，太難了。其實這誤解至beastory對學(xué)生的遣造句求更高。因為完全靠情節(jié)勝出，就要在用詞上卯足勁，否則篇文就干巴巴的。不僅沒有思想，且語平庸，味同嚼蠟。而a，雖然語言平庸一點，但是思想非常動人，這就補了言表達(dá)的匱乏以浙江來，妻子賭氣跑了。然后突發(fā)現(xiàn)迷路了此時到頭上的，估計是找她，但無讓它到。續(xù)寫部分的文是：天黑，子找了寫果實吃了后睡去；亮，又和丈夫重。我的想法：是有限，選材都沒有一的思想深度，即使完形填空比差一。為考生果要從思想拔高就要如此考慮于文章主要寫妻子活動，人物此時就個：妻。所以我把主題定為：妻子自立。因為子長期都是依丈夫，很少有自己的主見那么真正的困臨時，尤其是直升飛也沒發(fā)現(xiàn)她，她只自。不斷嘗試中，她發(fā)現(xiàn)自己的潛力，更加自信，并且靠著以往的生常識，出了森林。同時可以穿插她想到夫平對她的囑托，加識到丈夫的不易。然考生也以從其它角度，譬突出家庭相處。不過，基于人物此時一個不太好寫。，寫作要考慮如何打人。那么必須給者產(chǎn)生面感。這也是我提出新觀認(rèn)為的記文定讓人產(chǎn)生種立體感，天地人形成副偉的藝術(shù)畫像。朱自的《背》情節(jié)簡單吧，但是我們想到畫面足以讓我們回一子。一月亮，昆蟲聲音。這個面突出：對丈夫的思念，對自己的省。反省，丈夫和妻子抱在起喜極而泣子對丈夫Ireallyhopewenevergrowapartbutgrowtogether.這句話就是睛了也是2017年的高考完填空的一句是：Whiletoomanycouplesgrowapart,weweregrowingtogether.說到這里，要重說一下，章的思為什么重要？這里所說的“思想”，可能是一個“道理一種認(rèn)；一個“一發(fā)現(xiàn)”甚至能是對“定論”或“共識”闡發(fā)對未知世事物的探尋問它們的共同特點，就是能讓人增知識，長識，認(rèn)識?！八枷胝禄c核“言無文，之遠(yuǎn)”播不遠(yuǎn)實文字正能流傳廣遠(yuǎn)的思想采不過是晨的露珠，太陽出來就蒸發(fā)。唯有識與思想，是文字流傳久的頭活水和不竭動力。梁恕儉先生《一之言：我作文的解與闡釋》一中出：作。從學(xué)生角來說，寫好文，應(yīng)該著重訓(xùn)練把文章章的思想。思想是核心這種所謂一定都是創(chuàng)，但是卻有新中的者是一種刺激喚醒思想”悄然附著在行間，不見蹤跡，讀的時候卻時時可感覺得到。，智。他的文章充滿激情滿智慧充滿辨章中無處不在思想，最讓人難忘。技巧是”是陸機(jī)《文賦》文不逮王之《姜齋更有“無論詩歌與長行文，俱以意為主。意猶，無帥兵謂之烏?！眰兯f意”，我理解就是“思想”。陸機(jī)心的是思想能正反映事物，語言能否完全表達(dá)思想；王夫更把思想”放在“統(tǒng)帥地位，為文章沒思想，如同軍隊沒有帥。烏合之眾只能一散沙。吳冠先生“筆墨等于零”認(rèn)為：脫離了具體畫的孤立的筆墨值等于零。這句含兩個層、白、五彩，渲染窮氣氛，立的色無謂優(yōu)劣，品評孤立筆墨同樣是沒有意義。，墨只是奴才，它對奴役于者思情緒的表達(dá)，情思發(fā)展，作為

才的筆墨手法永遠(yuǎn)跟著變換形態(tài)。所以，脫離了具體面的孤立的墨，其價值于，正如未塑造形的泥巴，其價值，不是這樣？！巧只一種手段，表或想才是目的。文格調(diào)要健康，要表高尚脫俗的道情操積極向上的情致意，不能隨心所欲地展自己低級趣味、消極情緒?！耙庹?，思想。所謂思想不健康，筆再也是不合格的識見的文章的特級教師羅曾提出學(xué)生文要任務(wù)“練識“練”是“練習(xí)、提煉、錘的意思，“識”是指認(rèn)識、見識，也就是文章的“意”即想以說羅先抓住了中學(xué)生作文作的關(guān)鍵。所謂意在言先，不論是敘類文體中通人物、事件寫所體現(xiàn)來的主旨要義還是論類文體呈現(xiàn)的明的觀點和態(tài)度識”、“意”，“觀、“為先。和思想的正確鮮明否，直接決定著文章高度、力度、度和深度識識是文章的靈魂，接影結(jié)語“刪繁就簡秋樹，領(lǐng)異新二月。古人、今人告訴我們，寫文章要練、、練想。就像王先生所詞“有高格”樣，孤傲立的思想，像“秋樹”和“二月花，生長在文字的山岡原野，為文章長精，氣質(zhì)。原創(chuàng)模作文練習(xí)一MyMomOnlyHadOneEyeMymomhadoneeye.Ihatedher.Shewassuchanembarrassment.Sheranashopatafleamarketandcollectedoldclothesandotherthingstosellfortheweneeded.Onceduringelementaryschool,wasfieldday,andmymomcame.Iwassoembarrassedandwonderedhowcouldshedothistome?Ithrewherahatefullookandranout.nextdayatschool,myschoolmatesaskedme,“Yourmomonlyhasoneeye?!”andtauntedme.Iwassoangrywithmymomandwishedthatshejustdisappearfromthisworld.SoIsaidtomymom,“Whydonyouhavetheothereye?!Ifyou’reonlygonnamealaughingstock!Mymomdidnotrespond,IguessIfeltbad,butatthesametime,IfeltsogoodtohavehadsaidwhatIwantedtosay.Maybeitwasbecausemymomhadn’tpunishedme,Ididn’tthinkthatIhadhurtherfeelingsverybadly.ForthewordsIhadsaidherearlier,therewassomethingpinchingatmeincornerofmyheart.Evenso,Ihatedmyone-eyedmomanddesperatepoverty.ItoldmyselfthatIwouldbecomesuccessfulinthenearfuture,sostudiedveryhard.LaterIgotacceptedbytheSeoulUniversity,ImymotherandcametoSeoultostudy.ThenIgotmarriedthere.5Iboughtahouseofmyown.ThenIhadkids,too.NowIamlivinghappilyasasuccessfulman.IenjoylifeinSeoulbecauseit’saplacethatdoesnremindmeofmymomandmypast.Thishappinesswasgettingbiggerandbigger,untilonedaysomeoneknockedatmydoor.Itwasmom!Andwithheroneeye!Itasthewholeskywasfallingapartonme.Mylittlegirlranaway,scaredofmymom6Iscreamedher,“WhoIdonknowHowdareyoucomemyhouseandscaremydaughter!”Tothis,mymomquietlyanswered,“Oh,I’msosorry.Ihavegottenthewrongaddress,”andshedisappearedoutsight.Notes:1embarrassment難，2fleamarket跳蚤市場。3taunt嘲弄，譏諷。4laughingstock笑柄5pinching引起6shack棚屋，小室。curiosity好奇，好奇心。所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左；至少使用5個文標(biāo)有下劃線的詞語；續(xù)寫部分分兩段，每段的開頭已為你寫好；續(xù)寫完成后，請下劃線標(biāo)出所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語；Paragraph1Oneday,aletterregardingaschoolreunioncametomyhouse.Paragraph2Thenapieceofpaper,aletter,Ithought,inherhandintomyeyes.Key:1day,aletterregardingaschoolreunioncametomyhouse.LyingtomywifethatIwasgoingonabusinessIwentbacktoparticipateinthereunion.Afterthereunion,Iwentdowntotheoldshack,whichIusedtocallahouse,justoutofcuriosity.ThereImymomfallenonthecoldground.didnotshedasingletear.2Thenapieceofpaper,aletter,Ithought,inherhandcameintoeyes.Myson,Ithinklifehasbeenlongenoughnow,andIwon’tvisitSeoulanymore.ButwoulditbetoomuchtoaskifIwantedyouvisitmeonceawhile?Imisssomuch.AndIwassogladwhenIheardyouwerecomingthereunion.ButIdecidednottogototheschoolforyou.I’msorrythatIonlyoneandIwasanembarrassmentforyou.Yousee,whenyouweregotintoanaccidentandlosteye.Asamom,Icouldn’tstandwatchingyouhavinggrowupwithonlyoneeye.SoIgaveyoumine.IwassoproudofmysontoseeawholeworldmewiththatIwasneverupsetatyouforanythingyoudid.Duringthecoupleoftimesthatyouwereangrywithme,Ithoughttomyself,it’shelovesme.Mysonoh,my…Don’tcryformebecauseofmydeath.Iloveyousomuch.二Thecountryschoolhousewasheatedbyanold-fashionedpot-belliedcoalstove.boyhadthejobofcomingschoolearlyeachdaytostartfireandroombeforehisteacherandclassmatesarrived.Onemorningtheyarrivedtofindtheschoolhouseengulfedinflames.Theydraggedtheunconsciousboyoutofthefamingbuildingmoredeadthanalive.Hehadmajorburnsoverthelowerhalfofhisbodyandwastakentoanearbycountyhospital.Fromhisbedthesemi-consciousboyfaintlyheardthedoctortalkingtohismother.Thedoctortoldhismotherthatsonwouldsurelybedead,fortheterriblefirehaddevastatedthelowerhalfofhisbody.Butthebraveboydidn'twantdie.madeuphismindthathewouldsurvive.Somehow,totheamazementofthephysician,hedidsurvive.Whenthemortaldangerwaspast,heagainheardthedoctorandhismotherspeakingquietly.Themotherwastoldthatsincethefirehaddestroyedsomuchfleshinthelowerpartofhisbodythathewastoalifetimecripple.Oncemorethebraveboymadehismind.wouldnotbeacripple.Hewouldwalk.Butunluckilyfromthewaistdown,hehadmotorability.Histhinlegsjustdangledthere,allbutlifeless.Ultimately,hewasreleasedfromhospital.Everyhismotherwouldmassagehislittlelegs,buttherewaseffect.waseitherinbedorconfinedtoawheelchair.Yethisdeterminationhewalkwasasstrongasever.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左；續(xù)寫部分分兩段，每段的開頭已為你寫好；Paragraph1Onesunnyhismotherwheeledhimoutintotheyardtofreshair.Paragraph2Hestartedtodothiseverydayuntilheworesmoothpatharoundtheyardbesidethefence.答案：Onesunnydayhismotherwheeledhimintoyardtogetfreshair.Thisday,insteadofthere,hethrewhimselffromthechair.pulledhimselfacrossthegrass,dragginghislegsbehindhim.Heworkedhistothewhitepicketfenceborderingtheirlot.Withgreateffort,heraisedhimselfuponthefence.Then,stakebystake,hebegandragginghimselfalongthefence,resolvedwouldwalk.Hestartedtodothiseverydayuntilheworeasmoothpatharoundtheyardbesidefence.Ultimately,throughhisdailymassages,hispersistenceandhisresolutedetermination,hediddeveloptheabilitystandup,tohaltingly,thentowalkbyhimselfandthentorun.Hebegantotoschool,toruntoschool,torunforthesheerjoyofrunning.Laterincollegehetheteam.StilllaterinMadisonSquareGardenyoungmanwhowasexpectedtosurvive,surelyneverwalk,couldneverhoperun—Dr.GlennCunningham,rantheworld'sfastestmile！三WhenspringcametothecityofCleveland,Ohio,itdidnotchangeGatesAvenue.peoplelivedtheprettystreetsnearGatesAvenueweremakinggardens,paintingtheirhousesandgettingtheirreadythesummer.ButGatesAvenuecontinuedtodirtyandugly.GatesAvenuewasashortstreet.Butitseemedlongbecauseitwassougly,mostofthefamilieswholivedtherehadverylittlemoney.Theyexpectedtohavemore.Sometimesthemenhadjobsandsometimestheydidn't.Theirhouseshadbeenpaintedinyearsanddidnotevenhaverunningwater.TheGatesAvenuefamiliescarriedwaterfromthehydrantsonthestreetcorners.Thestreetitselfwasugly,too.Ithadnopavementandnostreetlight.TherailwayatoneendofGatesAvenueaddednoiseanddirt.MostofthegirlsintheschoolnearGatesAvenueworeprettynewclothesthatspring.ButthelittlegirlGatesAvenueworethedirtydressthatshehadwornallwinter.Itwasprobablytheonlyowned.Herteachersighed.ThelittlegirlwassoniceShealwaysworkedhardinschool；shewasalwayspoliteandfriendly.Butherfacewasdirtyandherhairwasuntidy.Onedaytheteachersaid,“Willyouwashyourbeforeyoucometoschooltomorrowmorning?PleasedothatforteachercouldseethatgirlwasprettyundertheThenextmorningchild'sprettyhadbeenwashed.Herhairwascleanandtidy,too.Beforethelittlegirlwentthatafternoon,theteachersaid“Now,dear,pleaseyourmothertowashyourdress.”Butthelittlegirlcontinuedtowearthedirtydress.motherisprobablynotinterestedinher，”theteacherthought.sheboughtabrightbluedressandgaveittogirl.Thechildtookthepresentandhurriedhomeasfastasshecould.Thenextmorningshetoschoolthedress,andshewascleanandtidy.Shetoldtheteacher,“Mymotherwassurprisedwhenshesawmethismorninginmydress.Myfatherwasn'tatho