讀后續(xù)寫示例與寫作訓練9【寫作示例】【原文呈現(xiàn)】閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構成一個完整的故事。Thepassengersonthebuswatchedsympatheticallyastheattractiveyoungwomanwithawhitewalkingstickmadeherwaycarefullyupthesteps.Shepaidthedriverand,foundtheseathe’dtoldherwasempty.Thenshesettledinandrestedherstickagainstherleg.IthadbeenayearsinceSusanbecameblind.Duetoamedicalmisdiagnosis(誤診),shewassuddenlythrownintoaworldofdarknessandfrustration.Andallshehadtodependonwasherhusband,Mark.MarkwasanAirForceofficer.Whenshefirstlosthersight,hewatchedhersinkintohopelessnessandwasdeterminedtohelphegaintheconfidence.Finally,Susanfeltreadytoreturntoherjob,buthowwouldshegetthere?Shewasnowtoofrightenedtogetaroundthecitybyherself.So,Markdrovehertoworkeachday,eventhoughtheyworkedatoppositeendsofthecity.Atfirst,thiscomfortedSusan.Soon,however,MarkrealizedthenecessityforSusantobecomeindependentandwantedhertostarttakingthebusagain.Justasexpected,Susanwasafraidofthisidea.ButMakepromisedSusanthathewouldridethebuswithheruntilshegotthehangofit.Fortwoweeks,Mark,inmilitaryuniformaccompaniedSusantoandfromworkeachday.Hetaughtherhowtorelyonherothersenses,specificallyherhearing,totellwhereshewasandhowtoadapttohernewsurroundings.Atlast,Susandecidedthatshewasreadytotryonherown.Mondaymorningarrived,andbeforesheleft,shehuggedMark.Hereyeswasfilledwithtearsofgratitudeforhispatienceandlove.Shesaidgood-bye,andforthefirsttime,theywenttheirseparateways.Eachdaywentperfectly,andSusanhadneverfeltbetter.Shemadeit.OnFridaymorning,Susantookthebustoworkasusual.Asshewaspayingforthebusfare,thedriversaid,“Lady,Isuredoenvyyou.”(340words)注意：所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應為150左右；應使用5個以上短文標有下劃線的關鍵詞語；續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語以為你寫好；續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關鍵詞。Paragraph1:Curious,sheaskedthedriver,“Whydoyousaythatyouenvyme?”_______________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:TearsofhappinesspoureddownSusan’scheeks._______________________________________________________________________________【思維路徑】[核心內容]文本主要內容為：一位女士因失明而感到沮喪與絕望，丈夫陪伴她重建自信。在她害怕獨自出門時，她丈夫每天開車接送她上下班。為了讓她重新獨立起來，她丈夫說服她重新坐公交車上班。一開始，他陪她一同坐公交車，教她學會用其他的感官去判斷位置。兩周后，女士決定獨自出行，一切都很順利。在第五天早上上車之后，司機表達了對她的羨慕。[寫作思路](1)明確故事人物關系(characters)。故事中主要人物為失明的女士Susan，她的丈夫Mark以及公交車司機。(2)理清故事主要事件(events)。丈夫陪失明的妻子每天坐公交車上下班兩周后，妻子開始自己坐公交車。在她獨自出行的第五天，公交車司機表達了對她的羨慕。(3)根據(jù)已知人物、事件及續(xù)寫段落首句預測故事發(fā)展(development)。故事總體的發(fā)展應該是司機告訴Susan羨慕她的原因。因為司機敘述的這個原因，Susan流下了幸福的眼淚?？梢越Y合前文表達的Mark對Susan的耐心與愛，預測這個原因可能是因為Mark每天都在暗中跟著Susan上下班，為了保證她的安全。續(xù)寫第一段：Susan問司機為何羨慕她，司機告訴她羨慕她的原因是因為她有一個非常愛她的人。他看到她丈夫每天都看著她坐公交車安全到達辦公室才離開，表達了對她濃濃的愛意。續(xù)寫第二段：Susan聽完之后流下了幸福的眼淚。或許她回憶起Mark一直以來對她的愛和照顧，并因此而感到幸福與感動；或許她開始想象回想這一周上班的經歷，回憶著Mark在周圍暗中關注她的跡象；也有可能她回家后表達了對Mark所做的一切的感動，表達了她的幸運與對丈夫的愛。(4)結合下劃線詞羅列寫作要點(points)。結合下劃線詞和文本內容，展開盡可能豐富的想象，羅列出盡可能多的故事發(fā)展情節(jié)。例如，第一段可以通過問以下問題來獲取寫作要點“WhydidthedriverenvySusan?Whatwouldbethepossibleanswer?Whatwouldthedriversay?DidithaveanythingtodowithSusan’shusband,Mark?等”；第二段可以問以下問題來獲取寫作要點：WhatwouldSusanthink?Whatmightbeherfutherreaction?Whatwouldshedo?等”。[參考范文]Curious,sheaskedthedriver,“Whydoyousaythatyouenvyme?”Thedriverresponded,“Itmustfeelgoodtobetakencareofandprotectedlikeyouare.”Confused,Susanaskedagain,“Whatdoyoumean?”Thedriverexplained,“Well,youknow,everymorningforthepastweek,afinelookinggentlemaninamilitaryuniformhasbeenstandingacrossthecornerwatchingyouasyougetoffthebus.Hemakessureyoucrossthestreetsafelyandhewatchesuntilyouenteryourofficebuilding.Thenheblowsyouakissandwalksaway.Youarealuckylady.”TearsofhappinesspoureddownSusan’scheeks.Althoughshecouldn’tseehimwithhereyes,shehadalwaysfeltthatMarkwasjustthere.Shewassuchaluckyandhappylady,forherhusbandhadgivenheragiftmorepowerfulthansight,agiftthatshecouldfeelanddidn’tneedtosee—thegiftoflovethatcanbringlightwherethereisdarkness.(150words)[范文解析]范文圍繞文章的內容進行了合情合理的拓展。給出的兩段開頭分別為Susan好奇地問司機為何羨慕她，以及Susan留下幸福的眼淚。因此第一段主要寫司機對Susan的這一問題進行回答，而這一原因是Susan的丈夫為確保安全而每天暗暗陪伴她上班，因而讓Susan流下了幸福的眼淚。第二段寫Susan知道之后的心理活動，包括回顧這幾天坐公交車有被陪伴的感覺，以及對丈夫的這種無微不至的愛的感動。范文最后一句寫了這份愛“照亮”了Susan黑暗的世界，既與她失明這一事實想結合，又升華了主題。[提煉歸納]1.合理拓展情節(jié)讀后續(xù)寫首先要讀通給定文本，把握故事的人物和事件。在此基礎上根據(jù)提示對故事的發(fā)展作出合情合理又合乎邏輯的預測。為了將預測過程顯性化，可以通過設問的方式，將預測重點以問題的方式顯示出來，以利后續(xù)寫作時的心理整理和語言組織。在該練習中，我們通過7個問題來拓展并整理自己的寫作思路，這7個問題以“司機羨慕Susan的原因”以及“Susan由此做出的反應”為主體，之間有一定的邏輯關系，符合故事發(fā)展的合理結局。2.有效運用銜接手段在具體的寫作過程中我們要對羅列的要點進行篩選和整合，還要考慮寫作要點之間連接手段(connectives)的有效運用，例如在范文中，我們用了“until”，“although”，“for”等連詞，使得小句間的邏輯關系更清晰明了，文章更加連貫。同時，我們也使用了“waching…”和“confused”這樣的非謂語動詞結構作伴隨狀語和原因狀語，使得行文更加流暢，語言更加地道。【寫作演練】1.閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構成一個完整的故事。AtDana’syardsale,Timchoseabaseballfromthetoysspreadonthecardtableandaskedabouttheprice.DanatoldhimeverythingwasaquarterexceptNezumi,acottontoyrat.Itwasgreywithsomecottonstickingoutfromtheholewhereanearhadbeentornoff.“Nezumiisextraspecial,soheistendollars.Heneedsasafenewhome.”Danasighed.Timlaughedsayinghedidn’thavetendollars.DanalaughedtooandgaveNezumitoTimasafreegiftbecausehewasherfriend.WhenTimwhispereditwassortofold,Danasaidoldtoyswerethebest.ShetheninvitedTimtoherbirthdaypartythenextevening,addingthatherparentsweregivingherarealratforherbirthday.Timwasamazedandaskedifitwasaliverat.“Ofcourse.”Danasaid.Athome,Tim’smothershowedhimthegiftshehadboughtforDana.Itwasaknittingspool(針織線軸)shapedlikeamushroom.MomsaidDanacouldknitascarfforherdoll.TimsighedthatDanawasn’taknittingkindofpersonbutaratkindofperson.Momlaughedafterknowingwhathadhappened.Togethertheydrovetothepetstore,whereTimsearchedandsearchedandselectedaclearplasticball,oneinwhichtheratcouldrunaroundonthefloorsafefromcatsanddogs.TimthoughtofNezumi’searanddecidedDana’snewratwouldneedthisball.Thenextday,Danabroughtcupcakestoclass.WhenshehandedacupcaketoTim,sheaskedifTimbroughtNezumitoschoolasNezumilikedtorideinbackpacks.TimwasatalossbecauseNezumiwasathomeonhisbed.ThenDanaaskedwhatgifthewasgivingher.Timreplieditwasasurprise.InsilencetheysatforawhilebeforeheheardDanasayherparentsweregivingheranewbikeforherbirthdayinsteadofaliveratbecausetheythoughtratswouldbitethings.注意:1.所續(xù)寫的短文詞數(shù)應為150左右;2.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段,每段的開頭語已為你寫好;Para1:Athomethatafternoon,Timstaredattheplasticratball.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Para2:Allofasudden,hehadanidea.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2.閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構成一個完整的故事。Everynightafterdinner,mygrandparentswouldturnonTVforthe6o'clocknews.NomatterhowhardItriedtoactthegrown-upandwatchwiththem,Iwouldinevitably(不可避免地)getdistracteduntil6:30whenWheelofFortunecameon.Mygrandmawouldplayalong,tryingtoguesstheanswersbeforetheplayers.Hershoutsofexcitementwhenshesucceededcouldbeheardacrossthehouse.AsIgrewolder,myloveofreadingandwritingblossomed,andIwouldjoinmygrandmainyellingoutletters.Soon,Iwasexperiencingthethrillofsolvingthepuzzlesfasterthanthecontestants(選手)andevenmygrandma.Iwashooked.Duetoconstantmovingaroundwithmymomandfather,Istartedtospendlesstimewithmygrandparents,butourbondremainedstrong.Mygrandparentsprovidedmewiththestability,loveandsupportthatIdesperatelyneededwhenIgrewup.WhenIwasinabadmood,Iwouldrememberthosesweetnights.Afewyearslater,IwaslivingwithmygrandpainChicago.Whilewatchinganepisode(集)ofWheelofFortune,wehadawaveofnostalgia(懷舊).Withapplication,Ididn'tthinkmuchofituntilIreceivedamailmonthslater,announcingthattheWheelofFortunecastingteamwouldcometoChicago.Inordertobeconsideredforanin-personaudition(試演),applicantswouldneedtosubmitasixty-secondvideoexplainingwhytheywantedtobeacontestant.Allmychildhoodmemoriesofwatchingtheshowcamefloodingback,andIknewIwasmeanttospin(旋轉)thewheelforreal.Immediately,Irecordedavideoandsubmittedit.Acoupleofweekslater,Ireceivedane-mailinvitingmetoauditioninperson.Iwasverynervousontheauditionday.Icouldn'tbelieveIwastryingoutfor''America'sGame''!Aftertworoundsofintenseauditioning,withhalfofthehopefulslettinggoafterthefirstround,itwasover.Allofusapplicantsweretoldwewouldreceivealetterinthemailwithintwoweeksifwewereselected.注意：所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應為150左右;2.至少使用5個短文中標有下劃線的關鍵詞語;3.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好;4.續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關鍵詞語Paragraph1:Irantothemailboxeverydaybuttherewasnothing.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2：Thenonemorningwhilegettingreadyforwork,Icheckedmymailandletouttheloudestscreamever.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3.閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構成一個完整的故事。Whenshelookedaroundherhouse,BettyMargaretsawlotsofelectronics.Alongwiththeusualthingslikeherlaptopandsmartphone,therewereallofherkids’electronicdevices:cellphones,videogamedevicesandmore!Thereseemedtobemorethanenoughwaysforherandherthreechildrentobeonlineallday,everyday.Ms.MargaretworriedthatherkidswerebecomingtoodependentontheInternetandelectronics.Thenshebegantorereadoneofherfavoritebooks,HenryThoreau’sWalden,whichgaveMs.Margaretanidea.Thoreauspent2yearsinasimplecabinwithoutrunningwater,andhavingtogrowhisownfood.Maybesheandherfamilycouldlivewithoutsuchluxuriesascomputersandelectronicdevicesforawhile.Ms.Margarettalkedwithherkidsandexplainedthatshewantedthefamilytotrylivingfor6monthswithouttheInternet,cellphones,TV,andvideogames.Ms.MargaretwritesarticlesforanewspaperinAustralia,andhadwrittenseveralbooksaswell.Shetoldherchildrenthatiftheyagreed,shewouldwriteabookabouttheirexperienceandtheycouldgoonatripabroadwiththemoneyfromsalesofthebook.Herthreechildrenagreed,and“theexperiment,”asMs.Margaretcalled,began.Overthecourseoftheexperiment,theMargaretchildrenhaddifferentreactionstolifewithoutelectronics.Beforetheexperimentbegan,Anni,theeldestofthechildren,readbooksmorethanheryoungerbrotherandsister.Shethereforehadarelativelyeasyadjustmenttothefamily’snewlifestyle.Annicouldalsousethelibrary’scomputerforherhomework.Bill,wholovedtoplayvideogamesbeforetheexperimentbegan,hadtofindawaytospendallofhisnewfreetime.Hestartedtospendmoretimepracticinghissaxophone(薩克斯管).Susan,theyoungestchildinthefamily,hadthehardesttimeadjustingtolifewithoutelectronics.Shefeltrestlessforthefirstweeksandlater,influencedbyhereldersister,graduallybegantofindinterestinthenovelexperiencesbroughtbyvariousbooks.注意：1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應為150左右；2.應使用5個以上短文中標有下劃線的關鍵詞語；3.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；4.續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關鍵詞語。Paragraph1：Thefamilycarriedonwiththeexperimentforthe6monthswithouttechnologycontrollingtheirlives.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Ms.Margaretwrotethebookshehadplanned.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________4.閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。續(xù)寫的詞數(shù)應為150左右。Iwaslackingineverythingneededtostartanewfriendship.Myparentsmovedtothetownwhentheydecidedtolookfornewjobsbuttheydidn’trealizeIwasreallyhurtwhenIsaidgoodbyetomyoldfriends.Itfeltawfultobeanewstudentintheschoolandwhenmyclassmateswerechatting,whatIcoulddowastobecaughtupinmythoughtswatchingthecloudsoutsidethewindow.Iwasnotgoodatmathorhistory;norwasIgoodatdrawingordancing.Iwasshyandtimid.IhadafewfriendsbackatmyhometownanditseemedthattheyweretheonlyoneswhoIcouldbefriendswithformywholelife.IfeltIhadachievedapointofsaturationwithregardtohavingfriendsandIcouldmakenofurtheradditiontomyfriendlist.Iwasashamedofmyself,soIbelievedIdeservednonoticefromothersuntilEmilycametomyworld.Emilywasfearless,outspokenandeasytogo.ShewaseverythingIwasnotandIwastooshytocomeoutofmyshell.ImetEmilyinschoolalmosteverydayandyetInevertalkedtoher.Wewereinthesameclassbutwewerelikepolesapart.HowIwishedIcouldbelikeheroratleastbeafriendofhers!Itwasanotherordinaryday.Iwanderedtothebusstopinthemorningandwaitedfortheschoolbus.BirdsweresingingsongswiththeirfriendsbutwhocouldIsingsongswith?Igotonthebusandwentstraighttomyusualseat,complaininginalowvoiceaboutgettingupearlyandgoingtoschoollikeeveryotherday,andabouthowthingsweregoingtobethesamealloveragain.LittledidIrealizesomethingdifferentwouldhappenthatday.Para.1:WhenIgotuptogetdownthebus,myschoolbagwasstuckinthearmrest.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Para.2:IgotnoticedbyEmily,whobroughtmecouragetostartanewfriendship!__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________5.閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構成一篇完整的短文。TheMeredithfamilylivedinasmallcommunity.Astheeconomywasindecline,somepeopleinthetownhadlosttheirjobs.Manyoftheirfamilieswerestrugglingtomakeendsmeet.Peopleweretryingtohelpeachothermeetthechallenges.Mrs.Meredithwasamostkindandthoughtfulwoman.Shespentagreatdealoftimevisitingthepoor.Sheknewtheyhadproblems,andtheyneededallkindsofhelp.Whenshehadtime,shewouldbringfoodandmedicinetothem.Onemorningshetoldherchildrenaboutafamilyshehadvisitedthedaybefore.Therewasamansickinbed,hiswife,whotookcareofhimandcouldnotgoouttowork,andtheirlittleboy.Thelittleboy-hisnamewasBernard-hadinterestedherverymuch.“Iwishyoucouldseehim,”shesaidtoherownchildren,John,Harry,andClara.“Heissuchahelptohismother.Hewantsverymuchtoearnsomemoney,butIdon'tseewhathecando.”Aftertheirmotherlefttheroom,thechildrensatthinkingaboutBernard.“Iwishwecouldhelphimtoearnmoney,”saidClara.“Hisfamilyissufferingsomuch.”“SodoI,”saidHarry.“Wereallyshoulddosomethingtoassistthem.”Forsomemoments,Johnsaidnothing,but,suddenly,hesprangtohisfeetandcried,“Ihaveagreatidea!Ihaveasolutionthatwecanallhelpaccomplish(完成).”Theotherchildrenalsojumpedupallattention.WhenJohnhadanidea,itwassuretobeagoodone.“Itellyouwhatwecando,”saidJohn.“YouknowthatbigboxofcornUncleJohnsentus?Well,wecanmakepopcorn(爆米花),andputitintopaperbags,andBernardcantakeitaroundtothehousesandsellit.”注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右:2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。Para.1:WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Para.2:Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________答案與解析1.【參考范文】Athomethatafternoon,Timstaredattheplasticratball.WonderingabouttheuseoftheclearplasticballifDanahadnorat,hestartedwalkingupanddowntheroomwithafrownonhisface.Momwassurprisedandaskedhimwhatwashappening.TimtoldherDanawasn’tgettingaliveratfromherparentsbutabike.Astheywererackingtheirbrains(絞腦汁)tocomeupwithanappropriategift,TimturnaroundandsawNezumionhisbed.Allofasudden,hehadanidea.HeliftedNezumiandsqueezingNezumiintotheplasticballwithgreatcautionsothatNezumiwouldbesafefromcatsanddogs.Seeingthis,MomaskedTimwhetherhewasgivingDanaanoldcottonratwithoneearasagift,Timnoddedwithasmilesayingshewoulddefinitelylikeit.LookingatMom’sconfusedexpression,TimaddedthatDanawasaNezumikindofpersonwhothoughtoldtoysweretheBEST.【解析】通過閱讀所給文章可知，Tim從Dana的庭院舊貨出售會得到了有一只耳朵被扯掉了的玩具老鼠Nezumi，Tim很喜歡。Dana的生日快到了，Tim去商店里為Dana喜歡的老鼠買了一個透明的塑料球，可以讓它在里面跑，不會被貓和狗咬傷。第二天Tim聽到Dana說她的父母給她的生日禮物是一輛新自行車，而不是一只活老鼠，因為他們認為老鼠會咬東西。續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，第一段開頭是：那天下午在家里，Tim盯著塑料老鼠球。所以后文應該是講述Tim得知Dana不會受到老鼠作為生日禮物后的心理活動，他覺得買的這個塑料老鼠球沒有用了，于是他皺著眉頭開始在房間里走來走去。媽媽很驚訝，問他發(fā)生了什么事。Tim告訴她Dana從她父母那里得到的不是一只活老鼠，而是一輛自行車。當他們絞盡腦汁想出合適的禮物時，Tim轉過身，看見Nezumi躺在床上；第二段開頭是：突然，他有了一個主意。本段應該寫Tim為Dana準備生日禮物的過程，Tim要送Dana一只長著一只耳朵的老鼠。最后還要注意所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應為150左右。按要求完成寫作任務。【范文點評】本文描寫詳略得當，使用了高級詞匯和高級句子。如：walkupanddown,not…but…,withgreatcaution等高級詞匯；WonderingabouttheuseoftheclearplasticballifDanahadnorat,hestartedwalkingupanddowntheroomwithafrownonhisface.非謂語動詞的運用和if引導的條件狀語從句；Seeingthis,MomaskedTimwhetherhewasgivingDanaanoldcottonratwithoneearasagift,Timnoddedwithasmilesayingshewoulddefinitelylikeit.運用了whether引導的賓語從句等高級句式。2.【參考范文】Paragraph1:Irantothemailboxeverydaybuttherewasnothing.Afteroneweek,Ibecameveryfrustratedandeventhoughtthemailhadbeendeliveredtothewrongdepartment.Mygrandmacameandcomfortedme,''Laura,waitpatiently.''Feelingdefeated,Ireplied,''Iwasn'tgoodenough.Theydidn'twantme.''Shesaidwithaconfidenttone,''Youwillbeselectedandreceivethemail.Trustme.''ThoughIdidn'tbelieveIwouldreceivethemail,Iwasnotsoanxious.Icalmeddownandlivedmylifeasbefore.Paragraph2:Thenonemorningwhilegettingreadyforwork,Icheckedmymailandletouttheloudestscreamever.Thereitwas:amailfromWheelofFortunestatingthattheyhadatapedateforme.IhadtoreaditseveraltimesbeforeItrulybelievedit.IwasgoingtobeacontestantonWheelofFortune!Iendedupfilmingmyepisodeafewmonthslater,andtheentireexperiencewasamazing.FrommeetingPatandVanna,tospinningthewheeland,mostimportantly,sayingthosemagicalwords,''I'dliketosolvethepuzzle.''ItwasadayIwillneverforget.【解析】這是一篇讀后續(xù)寫。文章講述了作者在爺爺奶奶的影響下喜歡上一檔名叫WheelofFortune的節(jié)目。多年后，當回到芝加哥和爺爺一起居住時，作者收到一封信，邀請他參加這個節(jié)目的試演。出于對這個節(jié)目的喜愛，作者決定錄制一個短片嘗試。兩輪比賽后，節(jié)目組請作者回家等通知。續(xù)寫分為兩段。根據(jù)第一段的開頭“我每天都去郵筒看，但什么都沒有”可以接著寫：一周后還是沒有信件，作者感到沮喪，估計自己可能被淘汰了。但是祖父母安慰她，給她信心，并且讓她耐心等待。作者調整心態(tài)，回歸正常生活。根據(jù)第二段的開頭“那天早上我正準備好去上班，檢查郵筒時，我大聲尖叫起來”可以接著寫：作者不敢相信自己收到節(jié)目組的來信，并給她安排了錄制時間。作者把自己的喜悅同祖父母分享。非常感謝曾經那段陪著他們一起觀看節(jié)目的日子，讓她不僅得到了歡樂還學到了很多知識，得以參加這個全美國人民都喜歡的節(jié)目。用5個以上的關鍵詞加大了寫作難度?？忌鷳煜りP鍵詞，以便在適當時候加以運用。寫作完成后，要將關鍵詞下劃線?！痉段狞c評】范文內容完整，要點全面，語言規(guī)范，語篇連貫，詞數(shù)適當，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關系。作者在范文中使用了一些主從復合句，例如：ThoughIdidn'tbelieveIwouldreceivethemail,Iwasnotsoanxious.中though引導讓步狀語從句；Thereitwas:amailfromWheelofFortunestatingthattheyhadatapedateforme.中that引導賓語從句。3.【參考范文】Thefamilycarriedonwiththeexperimentforthe6monthswithouttechnologycontrollingtheirlives.Ms.Margaretbelievestheyallcameoutbetterfortheexperience.Thechildrenhadalotmoreinteractionwitheachotherandwiththeirmother.Nowthattheycouldnottextothers,theyhadtoactuallyseeeachotherandtalk.Meanwhile,thefamilyplayedboardgamestogether,cookedmealstogetherandreadthenewspapertogether.Billendedupdevelopingaseriousinterestinmusic,andinSusan’scase,sheimprovedhergradesinschool.Ms.Margaretwrotethebookshehadplanned.Thebookbecameanimmediatehitandarousedgreatinterestamongmanyparents.Inherbookandininterviewsaboutthebook,Ms.Margaretdescribesthepleasantchangesthathappenedinherfamilyandtheprogressherchildrenhavemade.Sheencouragesfamiliestosetasidespecial“screen-freedays”wherefamiliesunplugthemselvesandspendtimetogether,whichisexactlywhatherfamilyhaveagreedtodoafterreturningfromanenjoyablefamilytripabroad.【解析】本篇書面表達是讀后續(xù)寫。通過閱讀所給文章可知，貝蒂·瑪格麗是一位母親，她有3個孩子。因為擔心她的孩子們變得過于依賴互聯(lián)網和電子產品，于是她向她的孩子們提出說她想讓這個家庭試著在沒有互聯(lián)網、手機、電視和電子游戲的情況下生活6個月的計劃。如果他們同意，她將寫一本關于他們的經歷的書，他們可以用賣書的錢去國外旅行。孩子們同意并開始了這種生活?！痉段狞c評】續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，第一段開頭是：這個家庭在沒有科技控制他們生活的情況下進行了6個月的實驗。所以本段應該寫這次經歷給她的孩子們帶來的變化(好的方面)。第二段開頭是：瑪格麗特寫了這本她計劃好的書。本段應該寫這本書出版后引起了人們的興趣，以及貝蒂·瑪格麗就這種生活方式向家長提出建議。續(xù)寫時要求使用5個以上短文中標有下劃線的關鍵詞語增加了寫作難度，我們要熟悉所給劃線詞語，恰當?shù)臅r候加以運用。最后還要注意所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應為150左右；續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關鍵詞語。按要求完成寫作任務。4.【參考范文】Para.1:WhenIgotuptogetoffthebus,myschoolbagwasstuckinthearmrest.Ididn’tnoticeitandstoodupwithallmystrength.Unfortunately,myschoolbagwastornapartandallthecontentsfellontheground.Ikneltdowntopickthemup.Suddenly,Isawahandpassingmesomeofthebooks.IlookedupandfounditwasEmilywhowashelpingme.Withherhelp,Iputallthecontentsbacktomyschoolbag.Ibegantotalkwithherandwassurprisedtofindthatwehadmuchincommon.Para.2:IgotnoticedbyEmily,whobroughtmecouragetostartanewfriendship!OnedaywhenItoldherthatIadmiredherandhowIwishedtobeafriendofhers,shesaid,“Wehavealreadybeenfrie