基礎(chǔ)（詞句文）03如何表達(dá)興奮情感（讀后續(xù)寫講義）讀后續(xù)寫微技能定位讀后續(xù)寫微技能定位一、興奮情緒情感基本概念1.定位讀后續(xù)寫中，興奮情感的表達(dá)是人物內(nèi)在非?？鞓?、高興甚至狂喜情緒的外在投射，是推動(dòng)情節(jié)升溫、強(qiáng)化場(chǎng)景感染力的關(guān)鍵手段。它通過具象化的動(dòng)作、神情及感官聯(lián)動(dòng)，讓讀者直觀感知角色的亢奮狀態(tài)（如狂喜時(shí)的雀躍），避免直白表述（如"Hewasexcited"），使續(xù)寫情節(jié)與前文人設(shè)保持一致，同時(shí)借助生動(dòng)的細(xì)節(jié)讓情感傳遞更具穿透力，增強(qiáng)故事的沉浸感。2.區(qū)分興奮情感的基礎(chǔ)描寫：以簡(jiǎn)潔直白的動(dòng)作或神情直述情緒，修飾成分較少（例：Shejumped.Hiseyeslitup.）。興奮情感的進(jìn)階描寫：通過連貫動(dòng)作鏈、多感官融合、修辭強(qiáng)化（比喻、夸張等）及環(huán)境呼應(yīng)，展現(xiàn)情感的層次與爆發(fā)力（例：Hejumpedoverthefence,bootsthuddingagainstthegrass,whilehiswhoops（歡呼聲，吶喊聲）slicedthroughtheair—sunlightglintingoffhisraisedfist,asifeventheskyleanedintosharehisjoy.）。3.技巧講解：讓興奮情緒更具穿透力技巧維度例句Translation1.

動(dòng)作爆發(fā)（瞬間張力）他猛地跳起來，雙手握拳舉過頭頂，笑著轉(zhuǎn)圈。Hejumpedupsuddenly,fistsclenchedoverhishead,spinningwithasmile.2.神情綻放（面部細(xì)節(jié)流轉(zhuǎn)變化）她眼睛瞪得圓圓的，嘴角翹得老高，突然拍手笑起來。Hereyeswidened,lipscurledhigh,andshesuddenlyclappedandlaughed.3.

感官交織（多維度共振）指尖觸到獎(jiǎng)杯的冰涼時(shí)，他喉嚨發(fā)緊，耳邊是模糊的歡呼，眼前卻炸開一片金星，仿佛有無(wú)數(shù)煙花在視網(wǎng)膜上綻放。Ashisfingertipstouchedthecoldtrophy,histhroattightened.Vaguecheersbuzzedinhisears,whilestarsburstbeforehiseyes,asifcountlessfireworkswereexplodingacrosshisretina.4.環(huán)境共振（情緒外溢）她撲進(jìn)花海，裙擺掃起漫天蒲公英，白色絨毛粘在她揚(yáng)起的發(fā)梢。Shedoveintotheflowerfield,herskirtsendingdandelionfluffswirling.Whitedownstucktoherliftedhair.二、晨讀素材必背單詞1.enjoyv.喜愛2.cheerfuladj.快樂的3.excitedadj.興奮的4.joyfuladj.歡樂的5.delightn.快樂、高興；v.使愉快、使高興6.pleasuren.愉快7.befondofmusic愛好音樂8.asatisfiedlook滿意的表情9.bewildwithdelight欣喜若狂10.beinhighspirits情緒高漲11.beexcitedwithjoyatthesuccess為成功而欣喜12.beonthetopoftheworld心滿意足，非常幸福13.thrilledadj.極為激動(dòng)的14.ecstaticadj.狂喜的15.elatedadj.興高采烈的16.overjoyedadj.萬(wàn)分高興的17.jubilantadj.喜氣洋洋的18.exuberantadj.熱情洋溢、興高采烈的19.gleefuladj.歡快的20.rapturousadj.歡天喜地的三、晨讀素材佳句賞析（選自各版本課本內(nèi)容）1.Hereyeslitupwithexcitementwhensheheardthegoodnews.（聽到這個(gè)好消息時(shí)，她的眼睛因興奮而發(fā)亮。）2.Hejumpedtohisfeet,cheeringwithjoyatthevictory.（他跳起身，為勝利歡呼雀躍。）3.Awide,excitedsmilespreadacrossherfaceinstantly.（一個(gè)燦爛又興奮的笑容立刻在她臉上綻開。）4.Overewithexcitement,shecouldn'thelpclappingherhandsrepeatedly.（她激動(dòng)得忍不住反復(fù)拍手。）5.Hisheartracedwithexcitementasheopenedthemysteriousgift.（當(dāng)他打開神秘禮物時(shí)，心因興奮而狂跳。）6.Shewassoexcitedthatwordsfailedher,juststandingtherewithathrilledlook.（她激動(dòng)得說不出話，只是帶著興奮的神情站在那里。）7.Thechildrenwerewildwithexcitement,rushingtotheplaygroundforthegame.（孩子們欣喜若狂，沖向操場(chǎng)去參加游戲。）8.Afeelingofexcitementwelledupinsidehim,makinghishandstrembleslightly.（一種興奮感在他內(nèi)心涌起，讓他的手微微顫抖。）9.Heletoutacryofexcitement,unabletohidehisjoyanylonger.（他發(fā)出一聲興奮的叫喊，再也掩飾不住自己的喜悅。）10.Seeingherlonglostfriend,shefeltasurgeofexcitementandranoveratonce.（看到失散多年的朋友，她心中涌起一陣興奮，立刻跑了過去。）11.Thenewsfilledherwithsuchexcitementthatshedancedaroundtheroom.（這個(gè)消息讓她興奮不已，她在房間里跳起舞來。）12.Withexcitementwrittenalloverhisface,hesharedthegoodnewswitheveryone.（他滿臉都是興奮的神情，把這個(gè)好消息分享給了每個(gè)人。）13.Thesmileonherfaceshonelikeadiamond.（她臉上的笑容像鉆石一樣閃閃發(fā)光。）14.Sheworeashiningsmileonherface.（她臉上帶著燦爛的笑容。）15.Hercheerfulspiritsandheartylaughterinfectedthewholeclass.（她那歡樂的情緒和爽朗的笑聲感染了全班同學(xué)。）測(cè)試反饋：分級(jí)測(cè)試步步為贏測(cè)試反饋：分級(jí)測(cè)試步步為贏一、晚練高頻語(yǔ)塊漢譯英1.v.喜愛2.adj.快樂的3.adj.興奮的4.adj.歡樂的5.n.快樂、高興；v.使愉快、使高興6.n.愉快7.愛好音樂8.滿意的表情9.欣喜若狂10.情緒高漲11.為成功而欣喜12.心滿意足，非常幸福13.adj.極為激動(dòng)的14.adj.狂喜的15.adj.興高采烈的16.adj.萬(wàn)分高興的17.adj.喜氣洋洋的18.adj.熱情洋溢、興高采烈的19.adj.歡快的20.adj.歡天喜地的【參考答案】1.enjoyv.喜愛2.cheerfuladj.快樂的3.excitedadj.興奮的4.joyfuladj.歡樂的5.delightn.快樂、高興；v.使愉快、使高興6.pleasuren.愉快7.befondofmusic愛好音樂8.asatisfiedlook滿意的表情9.bewildwithdelight欣喜若狂10.beinhighspirits情緒高漲11.beexcitedwithjoyatthesuccess為成功而欣喜12.beonthetopoftheworld心滿意足，非常幸福13.thrilledadj.極為激動(dòng)的14.ecstaticadj.狂喜的15.elatedadj.興高采烈的16.overjoyedadj.萬(wàn)分高興的17.jubilantadj.喜氣洋洋的18.exuberantadj.熱情洋溢、興高采烈的19.gleefuladj.歡快的20.rapturousadj.歡天喜地的二、晚練佳句賞析漢譯英1.

她激動(dòng)得跳了起來，眼里閃爍著興奮的光芒。（leap;sparkle）2.聽到獲獎(jiǎng)的消息，他興奮地大喊起來。（shout;excitement）3.一種強(qiáng)烈的興奮感涌上她的心頭，讓她笑個(gè)不停。（surge;giggle）4.他興奮地?fù)]舞著手臂，向人群展示那份榮譽(yù)證書。（wave;certificate）5.看到自己的作品被展示，她興奮得臉頰通紅。（exhibit;flush）6.小明興奮地搓著手，迫不及待地想要開始新的冒險(xiǎn)。（rub;adventure）7.興奮的歡呼聲響徹整個(gè)禮堂，每個(gè)人都在為勝利喝彩。（cheer;auditorium）8.她興奮地蹦蹦跳跳，像個(gè)孩子一樣沖向那扇神秘的門。（hop;mysterious）9.拿到心儀的禮物，妹妹興奮地在原地轉(zhuǎn)起了圈。（spin;gift）10.知道要去游樂園，孩子們興奮得幾乎睡不著覺。（amusementpark;barely）【參考答案】1.

她激動(dòng)得跳了起來，眼里閃爍著興奮的光芒。（leap;sparkle）Sheleapedwithexcitement,hereyessparklingwithexcitement.2.聽到獲獎(jiǎng)的消息，他興奮地大喊起來。（shout;excitement）Hearingthenewsofwinningtheaward,heshoutedwithexcitement.3.一種強(qiáng)烈的興奮感涌上她的心頭，讓她笑個(gè)不停。（surge;giggle）Astrongsenseofexcitementsurgedthroughherheart,makinghergigglecontinuously.4.他興奮地?fù)]舞著手臂，向人群展示那份榮譽(yù)證書。（wave;certificate）Hewavedhisarmswithexcitement,showingthehonorarycertificatetothecrowd.5.看到自己的作品被展示，她興奮得臉頰通紅。（exhibit;flush）Seeingherworkexhibited,hercheeksflushedwithexcitement.6.小明興奮地搓著手，迫不及待地想要開始新的冒險(xiǎn)。（rub;adventure）XiaoMingrubbedhishandswithexcitementandcouldn'twaittostartanewadventure.7.興奮的歡呼聲響徹整個(gè)禮堂，每個(gè)人都在為勝利喝彩。（cheer;auditorium）Cheersofexcitementrangthroughtheauditorium,andeveryonewascheeringforthevictory.8.她興奮地蹦蹦跳跳，像個(gè)孩子一樣沖向那扇神秘的門。（hop;mysterious）Shehoppedwithexcitement,rushingtowardsthemysteriousdoorlikeachild.9.拿到心儀的禮物，妹妹興奮地在原地轉(zhuǎn)起了圈。（spin;gift）Afterreceivingthedesiredgift,mysisterspunaroundonthespotwithexcitement.10.知道要去游樂園，孩子們興奮得幾乎睡不著覺。（amusementpark;barely）Knowingthattheyweregoingtotheamusementpark,thechildrencouldbarelysleepwithexcitement.仿寫實(shí)戰(zhàn)：模仿借鑒學(xué)以致用仿寫實(shí)戰(zhàn)：模仿借鑒學(xué)以致用一、讀后續(xù)寫情景運(yùn)用—單句1.幸福的淚水順著蘇珊的臉頰流下來。______poureddownSusan’scheeks.2.那位婦人為找回被盜的珠寶感到高興。Thewoman______therecoveryofherstolenjewels.3.她的笑容照亮了整個(gè)房間。Hersmile______.4.聽到好消息時(shí)，他興奮的笑聲在走廊里回蕩。His______echoedinthehallwaywhenhearingthegoodnews.5.孩子們因即將到來的假期而興奮得跳起來。Thechildren______theingholiday.【參考答案】1.幸福的淚水順著蘇珊的臉頰流下來。TearsofhappinesspoureddownSusan’scheeks.2.那位婦人為找回被盜的珠寶感到高興。Thewomanwasdelightedattherecoveryofherstolenjewels.3.她的笑容照亮了整個(gè)房間。Hersmilelitupthewholeroom.4.聽到好消息時(shí)，他興奮的笑聲在走廊里回蕩。Hisexcitedlaughterechoedinthehallwaywhenhearingthegoodnews.5.孩子們因即將到來的假期而興奮得跳起來。Thechildrenjumpedwithexcitementfortheingholiday.二、讀后續(xù)寫情景運(yùn)用—小情景小段落閱讀所給首句，在了解首句所設(shè)定的情境后，用一句話進(jìn)行與動(dòng)作與神情描寫相關(guān)的主題續(xù)寫。1.[校園賽事?激動(dòng)歡呼]Whenthefinalwhistleblewandtheirclasswonthebasketballchampionship,Jackstoodthereforamoment.2.[家庭驚喜?雀躍不已]AsLilyopenedthegiftboxandsawtheconcertticketsshehadlongedfor,hereyeswidened.3.[旅行啟程?興奮難抑]Withthesuitcasepackedandthetrainticketsinhand,Tomsteppedontotheplatform,hisheartpounding.4.[久別重逢?狂喜瞬間]Whenshespottedherbestfriendfromchildhoodattheairportarrivalgate,Sarahfrozeforasecond.5.[生日驚喜?歡呼雀躍]Astheblindfoldwasremovedandshesawthedecoratedroomfulloffriends,Emma’smouthdroppedopen.6.[獲獎(jiǎng)時(shí)刻?激動(dòng)萬(wàn)分]Whentheprincipalannouncedhernameasthewinnerofthesciencepetition,Lucystaredatthestageindisbelief.【參考答案】1.[校園賽事?激動(dòng)歡呼]moment.Thennalwhistleblewandtheirclasswonthebasketballchampionship,Jackstoodthereforamoment.Thenhejumpedupanddown,cheeringwildlywithhisfaceglowingwithexcitement.2.[家庭驚喜?雀躍不已]AsLilyopenedthegiftboxandsawtheconcertticketsshehadlongedfor,hereyeswidened.

sheletoutascreamofjoyandclappedherhandsexcitedly,unabletohideherthrill.3.[旅行啟程?興奮難抑]pounding.heitcasepackedandthetrainticketsinhand,Tomsteppedontotheplatform,hisheartpounding.hebrokeintoawidesmile,wavinghisticketintheairandbouncingonhistoeswithexcitement.4.[久別重逢?狂喜瞬間]second.Thenottedherbestfriendfromchildhoodattheairportarrivalgate,Sarahfrozeforasecond.Thensherushedoverandhuggedherfriendtightly,tearsofjoywellingupinhereyesandabrightsmilespreadingacrossherface.5.[生日驚喜?歡呼雀躍]open.Thenindfoldwasremovedandshesawthedecoratedroomfulloffriends,Emma’smouthdroppedopen.Thensheletoutajoyfullaugh,coveringhermouthwithherhandsforamomentbeforejoiningthecheerswithherfriends.6.[獲獎(jiǎng)時(shí)刻?激動(dòng)萬(wàn)分]disbelief.shencipalannouncedhernameasthewinnerofthesciencepetition,Lucystaredatthestageindisbelief.shestoodupshakily,hereyesbrimmingwithtearsofexcitementasshewalkedtowardthestage,herhandstremblingslightly.三、讀后續(xù)寫情景運(yùn)用—語(yǔ)篇1.閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。OnSunday,MikeandhismotherRosewenttoGrandmaAlondra'shouseforlunch.AlondrahadpreparedMike’sfavoritemeal.

“Mike’sschoolprom（舞會(huì)）isapproaching,

Mum,”

RosetoldAlondra.

“Doyoustillhavethattailor’scontactwhoownedthatoldshopintown?IwanttogetasuittailoredforMike.”

“Oh!Ido!”

Alondralaughed.

“So,Mike,who’sgoingtobeyourdate?”

sheasked.

“Nobody.Ihaven’tfoundanyone.So,

Imightnotgo,”

Mikesaid,hiseyesfixedonhisphone.Alondrasaid,

“Youkidsaresoluckytohavethepromandeverything.I’venevergonetoone!”

“Really,

Mum?”Roseaskedwithasurprisedlook.

“Well,yes.Butthat’sanold,oldstory!Let’snotgothere,”

Alondrasaid.

“Thethingis,Mike,youshoulddefinitelygoandhaveagoodtime.”ItwasthenthatRosehadanidea.SheaskedMiketotakeAlondraashisdatetotheprom.Mikedislikedtheidea.Asateenager,andasthemostpopularboyatschool,hedidn’twanttotakehisgrandmothertotheprom.Hewasafraidtheotherstudentswouldlaughathim.However,hecouldn’tfindareasontoturnthisdown.Notasingleone.Mostimportantly,helovedAlondra.true...theafternoonofpromday,MikeandRosedrovetoAlondra’shouse.WhentheolderwomanopenedherdoortoMikeinasuit,shesmiled.

“Oh!Lookhowbeautifulyoulook,darling!”

shesaid.Rosenudged

（用肘輕推）Mike.

“Thankthanks,

Gran,”

hesaidwithasigh（嘆氣）.

“Willyou,

um,

bemydatetonight?

Iwanttomakeyourdreametrue...

Iwanttotakeyoutotheprom.”Alondrawasbothsurprisedandexcited.Whileshedidn’twanttogo,Rosehadpersuadedherthatitwouldbeagreatbonding（聯(lián)絡(luò)感情的）timeforherandMike.So，

AlondraputonherfinestdressandwenttothepromwithMike.注意：1．續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2．請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。AsMikewalkedintotheschoolhallwithhisgrandmother,thewholeplacefellsilent__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

SeeingAlondrawasweled,Mikewasrelieved,andsoonthepartygotstarted.

______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【考查目標(biāo)】主題語(yǔ)境為“人與社會(huì)”，涉及“高中生自尊自信”、“祖孫關(guān)系”等內(nèi)涵意義。要求考生在閱讀的基礎(chǔ)上，發(fā)揮合理想象，續(xù)寫兩段文字，以使故事完整、情節(jié)合理、銜接有序和語(yǔ)言生動(dòng)。【文本主旨】故事通過

Mike

克服自己的顧慮，帶奶奶參加舞會(huì)，實(shí)現(xiàn)奶奶的愿望，展現(xiàn)了祖孫之間深厚的愛。這種愛讓

Mike

能夠放下自己的擔(dān)憂，也讓奶奶度過了非常愉快的一天?！驹~匯積累】行為類①走進(jìn)：walkinto②鎖定（目光）：lockonto③面露喜色：beamwithjoy④帶領(lǐng)：lead⑤實(shí)現(xiàn)：etrue情緒類①難以置信：indisbelief②吃驚的：takenaback③如釋重負(fù)的：relieved④（眼神）閃著喜悅：sparklingwithjoy⑤興奮的：excited【點(diǎn)睛】高分句型[高分句型1]Seeingherbrightsmile,Mikerealizedtakinghisgrandmothertothepromwasactuallythebestdecisionhehadevermade.（現(xiàn)在分詞

Seeing

作狀語(yǔ)）[高分句型2]Mikerealizedtakinghisgrandmothertothepromwasactuallythebestdecisionhehadevermade.（省略

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的賓語(yǔ)從句）[高分句型3]ItwasnotonlymakingAlondra'sdreametruebutalsocreatedamemorytheywouldbothcherishforever.（only...butonly...butalso...

結(jié)構(gòu)連接并列動(dòng)作）?【續(xù)寫分析】?核心矛盾：Mike起初因擔(dān)心被同學(xué)嘲笑，不情愿帶祖母Alondra參加舞會(huì)，但出于對(duì)祖母的愛答應(yīng)了；Alondra對(duì)參加舞會(huì)既驚訝又興奮，內(nèi)心帶著對(duì)圓夢(mèng)的期待。?人物情緒：Alondra的“興奮”是核心情感線索，需通過動(dòng)作、神情等細(xì)節(jié)體現(xiàn)；Mike的情緒從“顧慮”向“釋然”“愉悅”轉(zhuǎn)變。Para1圍繞“全場(chǎng)安靜”展開，需體現(xiàn)眾人對(duì)祖孫倆的反應(yīng)；Para2以“祖母受歡迎、Mike釋然”為起點(diǎn)，聚焦舞會(huì)中的互動(dòng)與情緒升溫?！纠m(xù)寫線索】Para1眾人反應(yīng)：先描寫全場(chǎng)沉默后的細(xì)節(jié)（如有人小聲議論、有人露出驚訝表情），隨后轉(zhuǎn)向善意回應(yīng)（如鼓掌、微笑），體現(xiàn)對(duì)Alondra的接納——Alondra的興奮表現(xiàn)：通過“眼睛發(fā)亮、嘴角上揚(yáng)、不自覺整理裙擺”等動(dòng)作，或“輕聲驚呼‘真熱鬧呀’”等語(yǔ)言，外化其激動(dòng)心情——Mike的心理變化：從緊張地攥緊拳頭，到看到眾人善意后肩膀微松，內(nèi)心顧慮稍減。Para2舞會(huì)互動(dòng)：Alondra被同學(xué)邀請(qǐng)?zhí)?，她雖有些羞澀但難掩興奮，舞步輕快；Mike在旁觀看時(shí)，被祖母的笑容感染，主動(dòng)加入——情緒升華：Alondra向Mike分享自己的