一、讀：梳理文本核心信息1.主題圍繞“成長中的自我突破與師生情誼”展開，講述英語為第二語言、原本畏懼寫作的“我”，在社會課老師的鼓勵下參加寫作比賽，從抵觸到投入，在反復修改中體會到寫作樂趣，最終實現(xiàn)自我突破的故事，核心凸顯“他人鼓勵的力量”與“從‘怕失敗’到‘享過程’的成長轉(zhuǎn)變”。2.基本要素要素具體內(nèi)容When中學時期（老師邀請“我”參加寫作比賽時、“我”構(gòu)思與反復修改作文時、比賽結(jié)果公布時、頒獎后“我”見老師時）Where學校（社會課課堂，老師提出參賽邀請的場景）、“我”的學習空間（查閱資料、修改作文的場景）、學校頒獎場地（比賽結(jié)果公布與頒獎的場景）、老師辦公室（頒獎后“我”與老師交流的場景）Why1.“我”因英語是第二語言，畏懼寫作，最初拒絕參賽；2.老師欣賞“我”的故事，用鼓勵給予“我”信心，促使“我”決定嘗試；3.“我”選擇以“保羅?里維爾的馬”為主題，既獨特又能融入自我感受，降低寫作壓力；4.反復修改過程中，“我”的關(guān)注點從“能否獲獎”轉(zhuǎn)向“寫作本身的樂趣”，完成心態(tài)轉(zhuǎn)變How老師邀請參賽→“我”因畏懼拒絕→老師鼓勵→“我”決定嘗試→選定獨特主題→查閱資料、反復修改（請姐姐改語法、多次重寫）→提交作文→心態(tài)從“在意結(jié)果”轉(zhuǎn)為“享受過程”→得知比賽結(jié)果→頒獎后向老師致謝What“我”作為英語非母語者，在老師鼓勵下克服對寫作的恐懼，參加寫作比賽，通過反復修改作文體會到寫作樂趣，最終不僅可能收獲比賽成果，更實現(xiàn)了自我突破，感受到師生情誼的溫暖二、思：利用問題鏈梳理續(xù)寫段落要點1.續(xù)寫Para1（開頭：Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.）要點類型關(guān)鍵詞與問題鏈情緒聽到比賽消息時，“我”的核心情緒是什么？（意外、茫然，因已淡忘比賽而毫無心理準備）→得知自己獲獎（或取得好成績）時，情緒如何變化？（從茫然轉(zhuǎn)為驚喜，夾雜難以置信，想起修改過程的辛苦）→前往頒獎場地的路上，情緒又有怎樣的波動？（驚喜中生出緊張，同時因“享受過程”的心態(tài)而少了對結(jié)果的焦慮）動作聽到消息后，“我”有哪些本能動作？（停下手中動作、瞪大雙眼、追問消息來源確認真實性）→確認獲獎后，會有哪些細節(jié)動作？（手不自覺攥緊衣角、快速翻看之前修改的作文草稿、深呼吸平復心情）→前往頒獎場地時，有什么標志性動作？（腳步輕快卻略帶遲疑、不時整理衣角、雙手輕輕捧著作文草稿）銜接如何銜接前文“已淡忘比賽、享受寫作過程”的情節(jié)？（開頭可加入“正在整理書桌，看到作文草稿才想起曾參加比賽”的細節(jié)）→如何為后文“頒獎后見老師”做鋪墊？（結(jié)尾可描寫“我”在頒獎前看向老師，老師朝“我”微笑點頭”的互動）2.續(xù)寫Para2（開頭：Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.）要點類型關(guān)鍵詞與問題鏈情緒走進老師辦公室時，“我”的情緒是什么？（感激、緊張，既想表達感謝又不知如何開口）→與老師交談過程中，情緒如何變化？（從緊張轉(zhuǎn)為放松，因老師溫和的態(tài)度而敞開心扉）→離開辦公室時，情緒又有怎樣的轉(zhuǎn)變？（感激中生出堅定，下定決心繼續(xù)嘗試寫作）動作進入辦公室后，“我”有哪些禮貌動作？（輕輕敲門、雙手捧著獎狀、身體微微前傾）→表達感謝時，會有哪些輔助動作？（手指摩挲獎狀邊緣、眼神真誠看向老師、偶爾低頭回憶修改過程）→離開時，有什么收尾動作？（向老師深深鞠躬、接過老師遞的寫作書籍、揮手道別時腳步緩慢）升華如何通過對話體現(xiàn)“師生情誼與鼓勵的力量”主題？（如老師說“我一直相信你能在寫作中找到自己的聲音”）→如何通過“我”的內(nèi)心感受升華“寫作意義”？（如“我”意識到寫作不再是“困難的任務(wù)”，而是“表達自我的窗口”，老師的鼓勵讓“我”敢于突破自我）三、寫：利用高級句型翻譯要點句與補充銜接詞獲得完整優(yōu)質(zhì)范文1.續(xù)寫Para1（Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.）高級句型翻譯When引導的時間狀語從句：當我正整理書桌，無意間翻到那疊滿是修改痕跡的作文草稿時，班長突然跑過來告訴我，我在寫作比賽中獲得了二等獎。WhenIwastidyingupmydeskandaccidentallyfoundthestackofessaydraftsfullofrevisionmarks,mymonitorsuddenlyranoverandtoldmethatIhadwonthesecondprizeinthewritingcontest.With的復合結(jié)構(gòu)：雙手微微顫抖，我接過班長遞來的獲獎通知，上面的字跡清晰醒目，瞬間讓我想起無數(shù)個熬夜修改作文的夜晚。Withmyhandstremblingslightly,Itooktheawardnoticefrommymonitor;thehandwritingonitwasclearandstriking,instantlyremindingmeofthecountlessnightsIspentrevisingtheessay.非謂語動詞：想起最初因畏懼寫作而拒絕參賽的自己，再對比此刻心中的驚喜，我不禁嘴角上揚，快步走向教室外的頒獎場地。Thinkingofmyselfwhohadinitiallyrefusedtoenterthecontestbecauseoffearofwriting,andparingitwiththesurpriseinmyheartatthismoment,Icouldn’thelpbutcurlmylipsandwalkquicklytowardstheawardvenueoutsidetheclassroom.強調(diào)句：正是老師一次次“再寫一遍”的要求，讓我在反復修改中逐漸愛上寫作，而非僅僅在意比賽結(jié)果。Itwastheteacher’srepeatedrequestof“writeitagain”thatmademegraduallyfallinlovewithwritingduringtherepeatedrevisions,insteadofjustcaringaboutthecontestresult.形容詞作狀語：驚喜又忐忑，我在頒獎場地門口停下腳步，深吸一口氣后推開大門，一眼就看到了坐在前排朝我微笑的老師。Surprisedandnervous,Istoppedatthedooroftheawardvenue,tookadeepbreath,pushedthedooropen,andsawtheteachersittinginthefrontrowsmilingatmeataglance.補充銜接詞形成完整范文Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.WhenIwastidyingupmydeskandaccidentallyfoundthestackofessaydraftsfullofrevisionmarks,mymonitorsuddenlyranoverandtoldmethatIhadwonthesecondprizeinthewritingcontest.Ifrozeforasecond,thenblurtedout,“Areyousure?IthoughtI’djustbeluckytofinishit!”Withmyhandstremblingslightly,Itooktheawardnoticefrommymonitor;thehandwritingonitwasclearandstriking,instantlyremindingmeofthecountlessnightsIspentrevisingtheessay—checkingspellingwithdictionaries,askingmysistertocorrectgrammar,andevenrereadingbooksaboutPaulRevere.Thinkingofmyselfwhohadinitiallyrefusedtoenterthecontestbecauseoffearofwriting,andparingitwiththesurpriseinmyheartatthismoment,Icouldn’thelpbutcurlmylipsandwalkquicklytowardstheawardvenueoutsidetheclassroom.Itwastheteacher’srepeatedrequestof“writeitagain”thatmademegraduallyfallinlovewithwritingduringtherepeatedrevisions,insteadofjustcaringaboutthecontestresult.Surprisedandnervous,Istoppedatthedooroftheawardvenue,tookadeepbreath,pushedthedooropen,andsawtheteachersittinginthefrontrowsmilingatmeataglance.Hissmilegavemethefinalcouragetostepontothestage.2.續(xù)寫Para2（Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.）高級句型翻譯定語從句：我輕輕敲了敲老師辦公室的門，手里緊握著那張還帶著油墨香氣的獎狀，這張獎狀承載著我無數(shù)次的修改與堅持。Iknockedgentlyonthedooroftheteacher’soffice,holdingtightlyinmyhandthecertificatestillwiththesmellofink—acertificatethatcarriedmycountlessrevisionsandpersistence.主語從句+表語從句：讓我沒想到的是，老師不僅為我感到高興，還從抽屜里拿出一本關(guān)于創(chuàng)意寫作的書，說想送給我作為額外的獎勵。Whatsurprisedmewasthattheteacherwasnotonlyhappyforme,butalsotookabookaboutcreativewritingfromthedrawerandsaidhewantedtogiveittomeasanextrareward.三聯(lián)動：我雙手接過書，深深鞠了一躬，真誠地向老師道謝，整個過程中，眼眶不自覺地有些濕潤。Itookthebookwithbothhands,boweddeeply,andsincerelythankedtheteacher—andduringthewholeprocess,myeyesunconsciouslybecamealittlemoist.無靈主語：溫暖的陽光透過辦公室的窗戶灑進來，照亮了書封面上“勇敢表達”的字樣，也照亮了我對寫作的信心。Warmsunlightstreamedthroughtheofficewindow,illuminatingthewords“expressbravely”onthebookcoverandalsolightingupmyconfidenceinwriting.非謂語動詞：老師拍了拍我的肩膀，鼓勵我繼續(xù)堅持寫作，說每個獨特的故事都值得被講述，這番話讓我在離開時腳步格外堅定。Theteacherpattedmyshoulderandencouragedmetokeepwriting,sayingthateveryuniquestorydeservedtobetold—wordsthatmademystepsparticularlyfirmwhenIleft.補充銜接詞形成完整范文Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.Iknockedgentlyonthedooroftheteacher’soffice,holdingtightlyinmyhandthecertificatestillwiththesmellofink—acertificatethatcarriedmycountlessrevisionsandpersistence.“ein,”theteacher’sfamiliarvoicecamefrominside.WhenIwalkedin,helookedupfromhisdeskandsmiled:“Iknewyourstorywouldstandout.”Whatsurprisedmewasthattheteacherwasnotonlyhappyforme,butalsotookabookaboutcreativewritingfromthedrawerandsaidhewantedtogiveittomeasanextrareward.Itookthebookwithbothhands,boweddeeply,andsincerelythankedtheteacher—andduringthewholeprocess,my