高考英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作訓(xùn)練5月3日汕頭二模文章續(xù)寫(xiě)：正—負(fù)—正Theaveragepresentmerelysatisfiesatemporarydesire;thegreatonebecomesmorepreciouswithtimegoingby.回憶WhenIwasaboyoffourteen,Ineededtohave80hoursofcommunityserviceperyearandIusedtotakecareofMrs.Long’sgarden,whichwasnearthePresbyterianChurch.Asajuniorhighschoolstudent,Idevotedmyselftoit,sweepingthefallenleavesandmowingthelawn(修剪草坪).ThereIlearnthowtocutawaydrybranchesandevenhelpedtoplantasapling(小樹(shù)苗).TiredasIwaseverytimeIfinishedmywork,Ididenjoythetimethereforlearningsomethingnew.IclearlyrememberedthatMrs.Long,aniceandcaringelder,alwaystreatedmetodeliciousmealsanddrinks.Shealsolovedtakingphotos,alwayswithanoldcamerainhand.Itwassaidthatthecamerawaspasseddownfromherfatherandshecherisheditalot.主線：做社區(qū)服務(wù)—照顧花園—她給我吃喝—我開(kāi)心支線/伏筆/鋪墊：拍照/照相機(jī)SeveraldaysbeforeChristmas,shewhisperedtome,“WhenChristmascomes,Ishallhaveapresentforyou.”Ispentmuchtimewonderingwhatitwouldbe.TheboysIplayedwithhadbaseballgloves,iceskatesandbicycles,andIwassoeagertoacquireanyoneofthesethatIconvincedmyselfthatsheintendedtochoosefromamongthem.Butatthesametime,Ihadsomedoubtswhethershewouldbuymesuchthingsbecauseshewasnotthatwell-off.ThedaybeforeChristmas,Iwentthereasbefore.Withtheworkdone,Iwasgoingtoleavewhenshepulledmeaside.“Kid,waitforaminute,”shesaid,leadingmeintoherlivingroom.Sheseatedmeonachair,wenttoanotherroom,andinamomentstoodbeforemeholdingasmallpackagethatundernocircumstancescouldholdabicycleorapairofskatesorevenabaseballglove.Itweighedalmostnothing.隨時(shí)間經(jīng)歷更寶貴+拍照/照相機(jī)+小盒子+沒(méi)重量=照片+信/文字—主題Itookthepackagewithdisappointment.我心理：展開(kāi)失望、掩飾失望、愧疚、自責(zé)我動(dòng)作：感謝、回家、開(kāi)始打開(kāi)她心理：看出來(lái)我的失望、不介意、微笑她動(dòng)作：讓我回家打開(kāi)一個(gè)人的場(chǎng)景比兩個(gè)人的場(chǎng)景好寫(xiě)Openingthepackage,Iwastotallyastonished.環(huán)境/事物：什么照片、為什么驚訝動(dòng)作：握著禮物心理：感動(dòng)、流淚、感激主題：隨時(shí)間推移更加寶貴心理活動(dòng)描述65-AStill,Ibowedtotheelderwithappreciation.Ialsoexpressedmygreatestgratitudetowardshercaringtreattome.Mrs.Longgavemeawarmsmile,whichmademefeelabitguiltyatthethoughtofacquiringexpensivegiftfromher.Webitfarewelltoeachotherwith“MerryChristmas”.ThenIgothomeandcouldn’twaittounwrapthepackage.10-AStill,IsincerelyexpressedmyappreciationforMrs.Long,thoughhowdesperateIwishedmyrewardonChristmasdaywouldbemydreampresent!Mrs.Longsmiled.Asmygratefulwordwasheard,hereyesshinedwithjoy,seemingreallyexpectedtograspmydelightwhenIopenedthepresent.Inthatmoment,ashamefulfeelingsuddenlyappearedinmyheart.“Thatisherloveforme.”Ithought.101-PWavinggoodbyetohermechanically,Ileftforhome,casuallyshovingthepackageintomypocket.Wasn’tawholeyear’slaborforherworthjustabaseballglove?Whatwasitfortospend80hoursperyearinthatruddygardenonlytoreceivesomethingweightless?Butcometothinkofthat,Ididgainpleasureworkinginthegarden.Andalthoughthepackageweighednothing,itdidn’tindicatewhat’sinsideworthsnothing.Onceagaincurioustoknowwhat’sinside,Isatdown,broughtthepackageoutofmypocket.88-YItwassuchasmallpackagethatcouldn'tcontainanymydreampresent.SoIattemptedtomaskmydepression,andconveyedmywishesonChristmastoher.Apparently,Ileftaheadofscheduleandturningforfunwithmyfriends,ignoringtheexistenceofthepresent.Tomydisappointment,allmyfriendswereshowingoffthepresentstheyhadreceived,whichmademefeltalittleenvious,drivingmerushedtothecornertoseewhatwouldinsidethepackageonearth.65-AItwastheproceededscenethatIwouldrememberlifelong.Insidethepackagewereaseriesofphotos,whichweretakenduringmycommunityservice–thedayIlearnthowtocutdrybranchesandmowthelaw.EventhememorabledaythatIplantedmyfirstsaplingwascapturedbyMrs.Long!Ihuggedthesephotographstightlyonmychest,tearsrollingdownmycheeks,fortheyloggedmygrowth.AsImaturedintoanadultandstudiedabroad,Icherishedthispreciousgiftwhichrootedinmymemoryforeverandever.10-AInthepackage,somephotoslaidinit,whichwerememoriesofthesummerandfall.Lookingmypastefforts,suchasplantingthesaplingorcuttingawaydrybranches,Icouldfeelmysatisfactiondancingallthewayintomyheart.Mrs.Longusedheroldcameragraspingmanymeaningfulmomentsthisyear.“Awonderfulgift,Mrs.Long.”Iexpressedmyappreciationagain.Shesmiledandaskedkindly,“Iwanttobakethecakeintheafternoon.Wouldyoulikeanytaste?Mychild?”101-PInitweredelicatefallenleavescollectedfromeachsaplingIhelpplanting.Togetherwithseveralphotosofme,theoldestdatingbacktofouryearsagowhenIstartedtheservice.AnotewithMrs.Long’sneathandwriteread:“Thegiftforyourtimespentformecanbenobetterthantimeitself.Iwishthesecankeepforeverthejoyfultimewe’vespenttogetherinourgarden.MerryChristmas!”Readingthenotes,myeyesmisted.Indeed,timeweighsnothing,butitiswortheverything.內(nèi)容設(shè)計(jì)—環(huán)境88-YThereareseveralphotosinit,recordingmanysceneswhenIwasworkingforthegarden.Mrs.Longalwaysfocusedonme,expressingherlovetomethroughthesemeaningfulphotos!Lookingbacktomyself,Ijustkeptthinkingofsometemporarydesires,overlookingsuchasincereloveintheneardis