高考英語讀后續(xù)寫語篇練習(xí)1——2023·濟(jì)寧一模小男孩忍痛割愛把心愛的玩具送給表弟題目分析讀后續(xù)寫題目再現(xiàn)范文呈現(xiàn)努力方向2Part1題目呈現(xiàn)3續(xù)寫原文TheRightThingMymotherworkedasahousekeeperandshewasoftengivenusedtoysaswellasmanyothergoodiesbyherclients.MyeldersisterandIalwayslovedsharingtherecycledbooksandboardgamesbroughthomebymybelovedmom,whichweconsideredgreatgiftslifepresentedus.Thelong-awaitedChristmasfinallyapproached.OneDecemberday,anoldmodeltoycararrivedintheloadofgoods.Itwasaslongasmyforearmandtookbothhandstolift.Mysisterdidn’twantit,soitwasallmine.Iimmediatelysetdowntowipingitcleanandpolishingittoabrightcandy-applered.Itturnedtobeathingofbeauty,andIbecameoverjoyedatpossessingit.Myeldersisterwasamazedatthenewly-polished,refreshingtoycar,withahintofregretandenvyinhereyes.4續(xù)寫原文Aswasplanned,ourrelativesfromFrancecametovisitusthatChristmas.Itwasatimewhenthefamilybondgotstrengthened.IsharedtheprizedtoycarwithAlex,myyoungFrenchcousin.Eyesgluedtoit,hefellinlovewiththewonderful,shinyredautomobiletheinstanthesawit.Itwasararemomenttoseehimfeelingsorelievedandhappy.He’dbeenunluckysofarinlife,sufferingsevere,life-threateningillnessesasachild,leavinghimmentallyandphysicallystuckandthefamilystarvedofcash.Ofcourse,suchlovelytoyslikemydearmodelcarwereunreachabledreamsforhim.SeeingAlex’sconsumingthrillbroughtbytheredcar,Iwasseizedbyimmensejoyaswell.ButcontrarytoAlex’sexcitement,avoiceinsidemeconstantlyreminded,“Watchout!He’dkeepitforhimself.”,whichgotmefaintlyworried.Ifollowedmycousinforfearofsomething.MymotheralsonoticedAlex’sfondnessforthecar.Approachingme,sheaskedgentlyinalowvoice,“WouldyouliketogiveittoAlex?”5段首句Para1：Givingorkeeping?Istruggledwithmyself.

Para2:Inthemomentofparting,mymodelcarwentwithAlex.

6Part2題目分析7點1：位于續(xù)寫第一段段首，流暢銜接前面的記敘文和第一段段首語；點2：位于續(xù)寫第一段段尾，流暢銜接第二段段首句；點3：位于續(xù)寫第二段段首，續(xù)寫銜接第二段段首語；點4：文章結(jié)尾升華，給予讀者正能量，揭示和強調(diào)主題。情節(jié)構(gòu)建的重點8續(xù)寫原文分析9本文以故事發(fā)展的線索展開，講述了作者在圣誕節(jié)臨近的一天，收到了一輛老式二手玩具車，作者把他打磨的光亮，姐姐都很羨慕，在圣誕節(jié)，作者法國的親戚來拜訪作者一家，作者的表弟似乎是喜歡上了這輛紅色的汽車玩具，作者有點擔(dān)心。續(xù)寫思路分析Para1：Givingorkeeping?Istruggledwithmyself.由第一段首句內(nèi)容“給他還是自己留著，我很掙扎”可知，第一段可描寫作者內(nèi)心所想，以及作者聽到母親的問題后的反應(yīng)。結(jié)合第二段的首句“在離別的那一刻，我的模型車和亞歷克斯一起去了”可知，該段要提到作者最后決定把車給了表弟。10續(xù)寫思路分析Para2：Inthemomentofparting,mymodelcarwentwithAlex.由第二段首句內(nèi)容“在離別的那一刻，我的玩具車和亞歷克斯一起去了”可知，第二段可描寫作者在送給表弟玩具車后的心理動態(tài)，以及分享玩具會給作者帶來什么。11續(xù)寫思路分析續(xù)寫線索送與不送的掙扎——送給表弟玩具的痛苦——想到表弟對玩具渴望后的決定——表弟帶玩具離開——分享帶給作者的快樂——感悟12續(xù)寫素材可用詞匯：行為類①.哭泣：sob/weep/burstintotears/burstoutcrying②.抓住：clutch/grab/seize/grab/grip③.振奮：uplift/refresh情緒類①.堅定：determinedly/firmly②.快樂：joy/delight/bewildwithjoy13續(xù)寫素材可用句型：[高分句型1].Afterall,itwasmymostprecioustreasure,whichIhadbeenproudof.（運用了which引導(dǎo)非限制性定語從句）[高分句型2].Seeingthethumbs-upfrommymotherandsister,Ididswellwithrelief,prideandjoy,forIknewitwasnotagift;tosomeextent,itwasourconcernandloveforhim.（運用了現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語以及for連接的因果關(guān)系的并列句）[高分句型3].Plus,sharingthemodelcaralsostrengthenedourbond,which,Iwasfullyconvinced,wouldalwaysuplifthim.（運用了動名詞短語作主語以及which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語從句）14Part3范文呈現(xiàn)15范文呈現(xiàn)Givingorkeeping?Istruggledwithmyself.Givingit?HardlycouldIimagine（倒裝句）lifewithoutthemodelcar!Afterall,itwasmymostprecioustreasure,whichIhadbeenproudof.Myheartkeptaching（心理描寫）attheprospectofgivingitaway.Nope!Ishookmyheaddeterminedly（動物描寫）.Glancingatmymother‘sexpectanteyes（現(xiàn)在分詞作伴隨狀語）,Icouldn’thelpsobbing.Keepingit?Definitely,itwouldotherwiseupsetAlex.Tornbetweenthetwotoughchoices（過去分詞作伴隨狀語）,Iwastotallyataloss.Nevertheless,deepdown,IcouldfeelmyaffectiontoAlex.Yep!Iresolvedtodotherightthing.16范文呈現(xiàn)Inthemomentofparting,mymodelcarwentwithAlex.ThoughIwascrushedtoseeitgo,myheartsang（心理描寫）whenIsawhisbeamingfaceashetightlyclutchedit.Seeingthethumbs-upfrommymotherandsister（現(xiàn)在分詞作伴隨狀語）,Ididswellwithrelief,prideandjoy,forIknewitwasnotagift;tosomeextent,itwasourconcernandloveforhim.Plus,sharingthemodelcaralsostrengthenedourbond,which,Iwasfullyconvinced,wouldalwaysuplifthim.Aneffortmadeforthehappinessofothersliftedusaboveourselvesaswell（結(jié)尾升華）.17范文譯文給予還是保留？我與自己掙扎。給它？我?guī)缀鯚o法想象沒有模型車的生活！畢竟，這是我最珍貴的財富，也是我引以為豪的。我的心一直在為放棄它的前景而疼痛。不！我堅定地?fù)u了搖頭。瞥了一眼媽媽期待的眼神，我忍不住抽泣起來。保留它？當(dāng)然，否則它會讓亞歷克斯不高興。在兩個艱難的選擇之間左右為難，我完全不知所措。然而，在內(nèi)心深處，我能感受到我對亞歷克斯的感情。是的！我決心做正確的事。18范文譯文在離別的那一刻，我的模型車和亞歷克斯一起去了。雖然我被壓垮了，但當(dāng)我看到他緊緊抓住它時，我的心在歌唱。看到母親和姐姐豎起大拇指，我確實如釋重負(fù)、自豪和喜悅，因為我知道