【杭州學(xué)軍中學(xué)等】25屆天域全國(guó)名校協(xié)作體高三5月聯(lián)考英語(yǔ)試題

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

Emma,abiologysludenlwithadeeploveanimalsandnature文代人物畬丁力息＞.was

alwaysfascinatedbythemysteriousecosystemsoffbrestsi*訴休政,發(fā)生的地點(diǎn)，.Hercuriosity

andattentiontodetailmadehenanexcelledobserver.JacR,herchildhoodtiiend,was

anexperiencedhiker交代人物2錚*館a.Hispracticalskillsandcalmdemeanormadehimthe

perfectcompanionforsuchadventures.

Itwasasunnyafternoon用網(wǎng)恬^^hentheydecidedtoexplorethethickforest

neartheirhometown.Armedwitha分“靴力川扶加，acompasl,andofcourse,a

first-aidkit,theyhikeddeepintothewoods.Thesin或，1女ofbirdsandtherustli，1主

ofleavesfilledtheair,creating,現(xiàn)在分瓷改林*aharmoniousatmosphere.However,as

theywalkedfurther,thepathbecamelessclear,andtheforestveewdarker,the

toweringtreesseemedtocloseinaroundthem,andthesunliMitbarelyfiltered

throughthethickshade，用嘉環(huán)境.

Suddenly,theyheardaweaksound,aImosilikeacry.Emmasloppedinher

tracksandturnedtoJack."Didyouhearthat?"sheasked,hervoicebarelyabovea

也囹口被立上格KA人物,Jacknodded,hiseyesscanningthethickunderbrush必立工格,?4人.，.

“Itsoundslikeananimalintrouble."hereplied.

FollowingtheSOUIK1EA分河版訴做笄應(yīng)動(dòng)作，,theypushedthroughthebushesandfounda

smalldeertrappedinabush俄*分用做后里定語(yǔ)＞.itslegcaughtinvines，放一史格為4狀&）.The

deer*seyeswerewidewithfear,anditstruggledhelplessly,itstenderbody

tremblingwitheverymovement軟立座格wa人物，.Emmakneltdownslowly,herhands

outstretched?A＞."It'sokay,littleone,°shewhisperedinasoftvoice."We'rehereto

help”

Jackpulledouthispocketknifeandcarefilllybegantocutthevines,“Holdits

headgently/*heinstructedEmma.'"Wedon'twantittopanic.MEmmanodded,her

handssteady除土上絡(luò)用痣人物）assheheldIhedeer'shead,whispering（在分“如沿做伴*動(dòng)

^comfortingwords.Thedeer'sbreathingwasrapid,anditsbodytrembled,butit

seemedtosensethattheyweretheretohelp.

注意：1.續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Paragraph1:"Wait''Einnasaid,“itslegwasinjured.,,

Paragraph2:Afterafewtenseminutes,Jackfinallymanagedtofreethedeer'sleg.

【杭州學(xué)軍中學(xué)等】25屆天域全國(guó)名校協(xié)作體高三5月聯(lián)考英語(yǔ)試題

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

Emma,abiologystudentwithadeeploveforanimalsandnature,wasalways

fascinatedbythemysteriousecosystemsofforests.Hercuriosityandattentionto

detailmadeheranexcellentobserver.Jack,herchildhoodfriend,wasanexperienced

hiker.Hispracticalskillsandcalmdemeanormadehimtheperfectcompanionfor

suchadventures.

Itwasasunnyafternoonwhentheydecidedtoexplorethethickforestneartheir

hometown.Armedwithamap,acompass,andofcourse,afirst-aidkit,theyhiked

deepintothewoods,Thesingingofbirdsandtherustlingofleavesfilledtheair,

creatingaharmoniousatmosphere.However,astheywalkedfurther,thepathbecame

lessclear,andtheforestgrewdarkerthetoweringtreesseemedtocloseinaround

them,andthesunlightbarelyfiltered（透過(guò)）throughthethickshade.

Suddenly,theyheardaweaksound,almostlikeacry,Emmastoppedinher

tracksandturnedtoJack,“Didyouhearthat?"sheasked,hervoicebarelyabovea

whisper,Jacknodded,hiseyesscanningthethickunderbrush."Itsoundslikean

animal!introuble."hereplied.

Followingthesound,theypushedthroughthebushesandfoundasmalldeer

trappedinabush,itslegcaughtinvines.Thedeer'seyeswerewidewithfear,andit

struggledhelplessly,itstenderbodytremblingwitheverymovement.Emmaknelt

downslowly,herhandsoutstretched."It'sokay,littleone,"shewhisperedinasoft

voice."We'reheretohelp”

Jackpulledouthispocketknifeandcarefullybegantocutthevines,<€Holditshead

gently,"heinstructedEmma."Wedon'twantittopanic."Emmanodded,herhands

steadyassheheldthedeer'shead,whisperingcomfortingwords.Thedeer'sbreathing

wasrapid,anditsbodytrembled,butitseemedtosensethattheyweretheretohelp

注意:1.續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

ParagraphI:"Wait''Emmasaid,“itslegwasiqjurcd.''

Paragraph2:Afterafewtenseininutes,Jackfinallymanagedtofreethedeer'sleg.

1.讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)類(lèi)型分析

該讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)屬于“冒險(xiǎn)救援型”故事，主題圍繞“人與自然和諧共處”和“友誼與

協(xié)作

構(gòu)思思路與布局

步驟具體內(nèi)容

承接原文需延續(xù)“救援小鹿”的核心情節(jié)，保持動(dòng)作和心理描寫(xiě)的連貫性。

第一段：處理小鹿的傷腿（細(xì)節(jié)描寫(xiě)）；第二段：成功解救并反思

框架提煉

（情感升華）。

利用原文的伏筆（如Emma的觀察力、Jack的冷靜）和沖突（小鹿

關(guān)鍵銜接

的傷腿、森林環(huán)境）。

加入環(huán)境變化（如天色漸暗）增加緊迫感，或通過(guò)小鹿的反應(yīng)體現(xiàn)

巧妙設(shè)計(jì)

人與動(dòng)物的信任。

續(xù)寫(xiě)注意事項(xiàng)

承接原文：

保持人物性格一致（Emma細(xì)心、Jack沉穩(wěn)）。

延續(xù)“弱小的動(dòng)物聲音、顫抖的小鹿'’等細(xì)節(jié)。

整體注意：

避免新增無(wú)關(guān)沖突（如野獸襲擊），緊扣“救援”主線(xiàn)。

結(jié)尾可升華主題（如“保護(hù)自然”或“團(tuán)隊(duì)合作”）O

2.故事山模式與原文分析

故事山結(jié)構(gòu)

階段原文內(nèi)容

開(kāi)端Emma和Jack進(jìn)入森林探險(xiǎn)。

發(fā)展聽(tīng)到動(dòng)物呼救聲，發(fā)現(xiàn)被困小鹿。

高潮救援過(guò)程中發(fā)現(xiàn)小鹿腿傷（續(xù)寫(xiě)段落1）。

回落成功解救小鹿（續(xù)寫(xiě)段落2）o

結(jié)局小鹿回歸自然，人物情感升華（需續(xù)寫(xiě)補(bǔ)充）。

伏筆與沖突

分析角度內(nèi)容原文反應(yīng)句

的觀察力、的刀具

EmmaJack“Emira...anexcellentobserver.”

伏筆處

技能?！癑ackpulledouthispocketknife...

“itslegcaughtinvines…trembling.”

沖突點(diǎn)小鹿腿傷、森林環(huán)境變暗。

4theforestgrewdarker…”

小鹿的顫抖和眼神暗示恐懼

“itseyeswerewidewithfear...seemed

隱含線(xiàn)索

與信任的轉(zhuǎn)變。tosensetheyweretheretohelp.^^

協(xié)作救援（安撫，

EmmaJack“Holditsheadgently...wliispcring

解決方案

切割藤蔓）Ocomfortingwords.”

3.原文細(xì)節(jié)分析表

分析角度內(nèi)容原文反應(yīng)句

善良細(xì)心;冷靜

Emma:Jack:“Hercuriosity...observer.^^“His

人物刻畫(huà)

可靠。practicalskills...calmdemeanor?'

4fascinatedby...forests^—'Voice

情感層次從好奇一緊張一同情一決心。barelyaboveawhisper”—>

Avhispered...help”

“heardaweaksound...deer

關(guān)鍵情節(jié)點(diǎn)發(fā)現(xiàn)小鹿、腿傷、救援。

trapped...legcaughtinvines.^^

“singingofbirds...nistlingleaves...

語(yǔ)言特色多用感官描寫(xiě)（聲音、動(dòng)作）。

trembling.

“Emmastopped...'Didyouhear

心理描寫(xiě)通過(guò)動(dòng)作和語(yǔ)言間接體現(xiàn)。

that?'"

“knelldown...outstretched...cut

動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)細(xì)致連貫，推動(dòng)情節(jié)。

thevines..?*

4"forestgrewdarker...sunlight

環(huán)境描寫(xiě)渲染氛圍，暗示危險(xiǎn)。

barelyfiltered.,,

隱含主題人與自然和諧共處?！?We'reheretohelp.”

“eyeswidewithfear...seemedto

情感轉(zhuǎn)折小鹿從恐懼到信任。

sensehelp.”

空間轉(zhuǎn)換森林深處一灌木叢。“pushedthroughthebushes...”

午后一天色漸暗（需續(xù)寫(xiě)補(bǔ)無(wú)直接描述，但'"forestgrew

時(shí)間過(guò)渡

充）。darker”暗示。

3.推薦英文例句與高級(jí)替換詞

動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)（ActionDescriptions）

1.ThedeerflinchedasEmmatoucheditswound.（小鹿在Emma碰到傷口時(shí)退

縮了一下。）

2.Jackcarefullyslicedthroughthetangledvineswithhisknife.（Jack用刀小心

地割開(kāi)纏繞的藤蔓。）

3.TheanimaPschestroseandfellrapidlywithfear.（小鹿的胸口因恐懼而急促

起伏。）

4.Emma'sfingerstrembledslightlyassheappliedthebandage.（Emma的手指

在包扎時(shí)微微顫抖。）

5.Thedeerstruggledweakly,itshoovesscrapingagainsttheground.（小鹿虛弱

地掙扎著，蹄子在地上刮擦。）

6.Jacksteadiedthedeer'sheadwithafirmbutgentlegrip.（Jack用堅(jiān)定而輕柔

的手穩(wěn)住小鹿的頭。）

7.Thevinescreakedastheywerecut,releasingtheirhold.（鐮蔓被割斷時(shí)發(fā)出

咯吱聲，松開(kāi)了束縛。）

8.Emmawhisperedsootiiingwords,hervoicebarelyaudible.（Emma低聲安撫，

聲音幾乎聽(tīng)不見(jiàn)。）

9.Thedeer'searstwitchedatthesoundofrustlingleaves.（小鹿的耳朵因樹(shù)葉

沙沙聲而抽動(dòng)。）

10.Withafinaltug,thelastvinesnappedfree.（最后用力一拉，最后一根藤蔓

斷開(kāi)了。）

心理描寫(xiě)（PsychologicalDescriptions）

1.Asuq?eofdeterminationfilledEmniaassheexaminedtheinjury.（Emma檢

查傷口時(shí)，一股決心涌上心頭。）

2.Jack'smindraced,calculatingthesafestwaytofreethedeer.（Jack的思緒飛

速運(yùn)轉(zhuǎn)，思考著最安全的解救方法。）

3.Fearflickeredinthedeer'seyes,buttrustslowlyreplacedit.（小鹿眼中閃過(guò)

一絲恐懼，但漸漸被信任取代。）

4.Emma'sheartpoundedassherealizedhowdeepthewoundwas.（Emma發(fā)現(xiàn)

傷口很深時(shí)，心跳加速。）

5.Awaveofreliefwushedoverthemasthedeerstoodup.（小鹿站起來(lái)時(shí)，他們

感到一陣輕松。）

6.Jacksuppressedhisownanxietytostaycalmfortheanimal.（Jack壓下自己

的焦慮，為了小鹿保持冷靜。）

7.Emma'shandssteadiedasshefocusedonthetask.（Emma專(zhuān)注于任務(wù)時(shí),雙

手變得穩(wěn)定。）

8.Thedeer'srapidbreathingmirroredtheirownnervousness.（小鹿急促的呼

吸反映了他們的緊張。）

9.Asilentunderstandingpassedbetweenthem—theycouldn'tgiveup.（他彳門(mén)之

間無(wú)聲地達(dá)成共識(shí)——不能放棄。）

10.Theforestseemedtoholditsbreathastheyworked.（森林仿佛屏住呼吸，

看著他們施救。）

環(huán)境描寫(xiě)（EnvironmentalDescriptions）

Thefadingsunlightcastlongshadowsacrosstheforestfloor（漸暗的陽(yáng)光在森林

地面上投下長(zhǎng)長(zhǎng)的影子。）

Acoolbreezerustledtheleaves,breakingthetensesilence.（一陣涼風(fēng)吹動(dòng)樹(shù)葉,

打破了緊張的寂靜。）

Theairgrewheavierasduskapproached.（黃昏臨近，空氣變得更加沉悶°）

Thedistanthootofanowladdedtotheeerieatmosphere.（遠(yuǎn)處貓頭鷹的鳴叫增

添了詭異的氣氛。）

Thescentofdampearthandpinefilledtheair.:潮濕的泥土和松樹(shù)的氣味彌漫

在空氣中。）

Shadowsstretchedlikegraspingfingersamongthetrees.（樹(shù)影如伸出的手指般

蔓延。）

Theforestseemedtocloseinaroundthem,itssilenceoppressive.（森林仿佛向他

們逼近，寂靜令人窒息。）

Thelastgoldenraysofsunlightfilteredweaklythroughthecanopy.（最后幾縷微

弱的陽(yáng)光透過(guò)樹(shù)冠灑落。）

Theunderbrushcrackledundertheircautiousfootsteps.（灌木叢在他們謹(jǐn)慎的

腳步下發(fā)出沙沙聲。）

Achorusofcricketsbeganasnightfallcreptclosen（夜幕降臨，蟋蟀的合唱開(kāi)始

了。）

4.固定搭配、詞法解析與語(yǔ)料積累

固定搭配（Collocations）

Pushthroughthebushes（撥開(kāi)灌木叢）

例句:Theypushedthroughthebushestoreachthetrappeddeer.

Holdone'sbreath（屏住呼吸）

例句：EmmaheldherbreathasJackcutthefinalvine.

Steadyone'shands（穩(wěn)住雙手）

例句:Despiteherfear,Emmasteadiedherhandstobandagethewound.

Scanthesurroundings（掃視四周）

例句：Jack'seyesscannedthesurroimdingsforanyftirthcrdanger.

Whispercomfortingwords（低聲安慰）

例句：Emmawhisperedcomfortingwordstocalmthetremblingdeer.

單詞解析：

Tremble（v.）（顫抖）

近義詞：Shake,quiver

反義詞：Steady,stabilize

例句：

Thedccr'sbodytrembledwithfcar.

Hervoicetrembledasshespoke.

Flinch（v.）（退縮）

近義詞：Recoilwince

反義詞：Standfirm,endure

例句：

Thedeerflinchedatthesuddenmovement.

Hedidn'tflinchdespitethepain.

Underbrush(n.)(灌木叢)

近義詞：Undergrowth,thicket

反義詞：Clearing,openspace

例句：

Theystruggledthroughthedenseunderbrush.

Theunderbrushmstlcdasthedeerfled.

Gaze(v./n.)(凝視)

近義詞：Stare,look

反義詞:Glance,avert

例句：

Thedeergazedatthemwithtrustingeyes.

HergazelingeredonIhehorizon.

Dusk(n.)(黃昏)

近義詞:Twilight,sunset

反義詞:Dawn.daybreak

例句：

Theforestgrewdarkerasduskfell.

Theyhurriedbackbeforefulldusk.

可積累的生詞短語(yǔ)

Filterthrough(v.)(透過(guò))

例句：Sunlightbarelyfilteredtliroughthethickcanopy.

Staggertoone'sfeet(v.)(踉蹌著站起來(lái))

例句:Thcdeerstaggeredtoitsfeetafterbeingfreed.

Snapfree(v.)(突然松開(kāi))

例句：ThevinesfinallysnappedfreeunderJack'sknife.

Holdone'sground(v.)(堅(jiān)守立場(chǎng))

例句:Despitethedanger,Emmaheldhergromd.

Fadeintotheshadows(v.)(消失在陰影中)

例句:Thedeerfadedintotheshadowsoftheforest.

5.PossibleVersions（4）

Version1

Paragraph1:''Wait」Emmasaid,“itslegwasinjured."Realizing總在分列效*整緲的

theseverityoftheinjury,shegentlyplacedherhandnearthewound,trying虱&分Y.仲隨制

件toassessthedamagewithoutalaimingthedeerftirthcr.Hervoieswaestillsoft,

filledwithconcern."Weneedtostopthebleedingfirst,"sheadded,tearingastrip

fromherscarf況4分”嫩體雙動(dòng)作，.Jacknoddedandhandedherthefirst-aidkitfromhis

backpack.Thedeerwincedslightlybutdidn'tresist,asiftruslinqiheirintenlion.

Emmaquicklycleanedthewoundwithmedicineandwrappedthemakeshift

bandagearounditsleg.Jackremainedwatchful,hiseyessaaiminwtheforestfor

anypotentialdanger8立士格Timeseemedtos/ewastheyworkedtoaethen壞瓏.耳，,

theirbreathssyncinqwiththedccr'sshallowRasps*.i.4.Theforest,once

threatening,now對(duì)比.“）feltlikeasanctuaryhoklinqitsbreath更在分㈣4體M動(dòng),forthetwo

friendsandthelittlecreature.

Paragraph2:Afterafewtenseminutes,Jackfinallymanagedtofreethe

deer'sleg.Themomentthelastvinewasthedeerstaggered,thenstood

unsteadily,^nmatookacautiousstepback,stillmurmuringsoftly,觀共分詞4件處動(dòng)作1The

deerblinkedatthem,itneyescalmernow收91,浙,andafterahesitantpause,itlimped

slowlyintothetrees.Emmaexhaleddeeply,awaveofreliefwashingover主格、

Jackofleredaquietsmile."Youwereamazing/'hesaid.'"Youcalmedit."Theystood

insilenceforamoment,theforestresumiiiRitsgeetlewhispers也立文棒■.Theincident

leftamarkonbothofthem-asenseofconnectionnotjustwitheachother,but

withthelifearoundtheinw^，.Withonelastglanceatthepaththedeerhadtaken,

theyturnedback,readytTfindtheirwayhome，叫然必彼后里,論）.

Version2

Paragraph1:''\PaitJEmmasaid,“itsle/wasinjured."Shereachedforthe

medicalkitwithtremblingfinqeis,herworryevidentm立士格、“Wccan'tletitrunoff

likethis.Itcouldmakethingsworse?'Jackcrouchedbesideher,noddingin

agreement及分“世體壓動(dòng)作）.AsEmniaappliedsomeantisnDticspray,thedeerflinchedbut

didn,tfight.Shetoreacleanpieceofgauzeandwrappedthelegtightly,捷梭動(dòng)作），

whisperingi在身”做林微動(dòng)作）tosoothetheanimal's佗ar.Thegentlerustlingoftheforest

seemedfo/h//，*猊.與asif「esDectin?themomenl.Jackadniii'cdEmma'scalm

precisionandenpathy-itwasclearherloveforanimalswasn'tjusttheoretical.A_

smallbreezepassedthroughtheclearbi?,stirringleavesaroundthem也在分售做伴隨0作，,

butthedeerremainedstill,itseyesluckedonEmma's出土士格.

Paragraph2:Afterafewtensemimites,Jackfinallymanagedtofreethe

deer'sleg.Thevinesfell〃，〃yasoftsnap、andthedeerhesitatedbefore

risingshakilytoitsfeet.EmniaandJackstayedstill,watchingittestitsweightnn

theinjuredlew冤在分仞做件時(shí)制件±Then,slowly,thedeerturnedanddisappearedintothe

shadewscfthefnrest.Emninbnishedaleaffix)mhersleeveandsmiled.”【thinkit'll

beokayJshemurmured.Jackgaveherapatontheback."Thankstoyou."The

passionfoded,replacedb、apeacefulquiet理&分Theypackedtheirthings,

theirstepslighterthanbefore(獨(dú)立上格■Theforesthadtestedthem-andrewarded

theircare對(duì)thamomentneitherwouldforget.

Version3

Paragraph1:''Wait,“Emmasaid,“itslegwasiniured.''Hereyesscanned

thewoundclosely,andhervoiceloweredwithurgency.,rWehavetokeepitstill."

Shecareliillycuppedherhandsaroundthedeer'sleg,motioning總在分省世體口動(dòng)作)Jacklo

holdthebody.Reachingintothefirst-aidkit，。.4,分包管體M幼用，shecleanedthewoundand

wrappeditsecurelywithabandage."Animalscansensefcar,Mshewhispered,

strokingitsheadRentl%現(xiàn)今》詞假體“功告以Jackwatchedher,impressedb、過(guò)*分訐做后工文語(yǔ),how

herhandsmovedwithbothskillandcompassion.'Youreallyweremadeforthis,“

hemuttered.Emmagaveafaintsmilebutkeptherfocus.Thedeerblinkedslowly.

visiblylessafraid,刈做樸語(yǔ)>,andthetrembleinitsbodyeased&立士?).Eventhebirds

seemedtopause,asifwitnessingsomelhinqsacred.

Paragraph2:Afterafewtensemimitrs,Jackfinallymanagedtofreethe

deer'sleg.Itstumbledforwardandpaused,Rlancinqbackatthembriefly，現(xiàn)衣介詞做體改通件,

befbrevanishingintothegreen.Emmasatl)ackonherheels,herheartfull^A±*..

'Thatwas...unforgettable,“shesaid.Jackgaveanod,bmshingdirtfromhis

hands猊在分班館舛彼功作，.'Yeah.Naturereallyissomethingelse.^^Theystoodinsilence,

thenbeganretracingtheirsteps.TheforestnoIon史erseemedasdark;sunlight

filteredthroughmorewarmly,orperhapstheirheartshadchanged*情于.、Emma

glancedatJackandsmikd.Ithadbeenadayoffear.care,andquiettriumph&Mu

列1~onethatwouldliveintheirmemorieslongafter[hefbreslwasbehindthem.

表達(dá)亮點(diǎn)積累

表達(dá)情緒/動(dòng)作祎寫(xiě)

地道搭配&短語(yǔ)高階替換例句

類(lèi)型亮點(diǎn)

awaveofrelief

情緒feltreassured,ShefeltawaveofheartfiiU,visibly

visiblylessafraid,

emotionallyreliefasthedeerlessafiaid,

描寫(xiě)filledwithconcem,

overwhelmedran.munwredsoftly

herheartftill

toreastrip,appliedShetoreastrip

動(dòng)作boundthewound,reachedforkit,

antiseptic,wrappedfromherscarf

knekdown,crouchedbeside,

描寫(xiě)tightly,cuppedhandsandboundthe

brushedoffdirtstrokeditshead

aroundwoundgently.