學生：老師，我請假。老師：why?學生：我暈課，尤其是寫作課，上作文課我就頭疼。Badsample卷面不整潔;涂改較多;語言錯誤多;層次不清;得10分samplesofstudentworkprogresswell∧widenedare詞匯有錯誤;卷面有涂改;得19分.samplesofstudentworkroadsMyhometownisbecomingmoreandmore詞匯,句型,語法多樣化

1.覆蓋了所有的要點2.應用高級的語法結構和詞匯3.有效地使用句子間的連接成分，使結構緊湊4.書面干凈整潔要點全連接詞如何算是一篇好文章？

技巧2.使用較高級的詞匯4.使用恰當?shù)倪B接詞詞匯是衡量英語水平的一個重要標志。生動活潑，語言簡潔能使文章上下銜接自然、緊湊。增強書面表達效果的技巧3.使用較豐富的句式1.漂亮的書寫形象面子工程的作用漂亮的書寫是寫作得分的亮點影響給分的因素之一：作文的卷面Whichcompositionfeelsmoreattractive,why?影響給分的因素之二：

文中所采用的語言材料人靠衣裝，文靠詞裝A.詞匯的選擇靈活新穎，出奇制勝；1.Becausetheweatherwasgood,ourjourneywascomfortable.(幸虧…)2.Ithinkyou’dbetteraskwhatyoudon’tunderstand.

3.Luxunisnotonlyawriter,butalsoathinker.

Thankstothegoodweather,

ourjourneywascomfortable.I.怎樣使用較高級的詞匯AsfarasI’mconcerned,

you’dbetteraskwhatyoudon’tunderstand.Thereisnodoubtthat

Luxunisnotonlyawriter,butalsoathinker.感情細膩，表現(xiàn)恰當B.句型結構運用靈活多變,增加文章的魅力Inordertomyparents,Ishouldmakefulluseofeveryminutetostudywhatmyteachertaught.2)我很樂意和你分享我是怎樣學英語的I’mgladtosharewithyouhowIlearnEnglish.I’mgladtosharewithyoutheway_______IlearnEnglish*語法，句法高分tipsinwhich

定語從句Inordertomakemyparentshappy

賓語從句E.恰當使用特殊句式，增強語句表現(xiàn)力ＩＴ句，強調句，倒裝句型，省略句，感嘆句等將下列句子轉換：1.Ididn’trealizethemistakeuntilIgrowup.(強調句）2.Wecanmakegreatachievementsonlybyworkinghard.（倒裝句）3.Lastbutnotleast,enjoyingsomeEnglishwebsitesishelpfultous.(it)Itwas

notuntilIgrowup

thatIrealizedthemistake．OnlybyworkinghardcanwemakegreatachievementsLastbutnotleast,itishelpfultoenjoysomeEnglishwebsites.影響給分的因素之三：行文的流暢上下貫通、一氣呵成正確而巧妙地使用好連接詞and,also,besides,morever,what'smorefurthermore,inaddition…1.表遞進２.表轉折３.表因果４.表目的５.表總結but,however,onthecontrary,ontheotherhand,inspiteof,despite…because,since,therefore,so,thus,

asaresult/consequence,onaccountof...inorderthat,sothat,forthepurposeof...inbrief,inshort,inaword,inconclusion,onthewhole...AsfarasI’mconcerned,Ifyouaretheteacher

假定你是李華,你的英國朋友Peter來信詢問你的英語學習情況并希望你簡單介紹自己家鄉(xiāng)，請你根據(jù)下列要點寫回信。要點:

1.我學英語已經(jīng)六年了，在老師和同學們的幫助下取得了一些進步；2.但是總覺得英語難學，尤其是英語中的一些習慣用法；3.今后一定要努力學習這門有用的外語，爭取能用流利的英語和你寫信；4.我的家鄉(xiāng)發(fā)生很大的變化，蓋起了許多高樓，拓寬了道路，變得越來越漂亮和現(xiàn)代化；5.如果有時間可以到中國來，我會帶領你參觀我的家鄉(xiāng)。最近在武安市高三年級學生中就市政府“拆違”展開了一場討論，請你就下表提供的信息給市長寫一封信，客觀地介紹討論情況。約70％的學生認為：1．應該拆除違法搭建；2．違法建筑占用綠化帶并常堵塞交通；3．大多數(shù)違法建筑陳舊過時，既破壞城市的美，又存在安全隱患。約30％的學生認為：1．不宜全部拆除；2．許多違法建筑系下崗職工所建，以便經(jīng)營一些小生意以養(yǎng)家糊口；3．拆違會使一部分人失去謀生手段。WritingHomework注意：1．詞數(shù)：100左右(不包括已給出部分)；2．文章應包括題中所給的主要信息。可適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫；3．開頭與結尾已為你寫好。參考詞匯：綠化帶：greenbelt安全隱患：hiddendangerDearMayor,I'mastudentofSeniorThree.I'mwritingtotellyouaboutthediscussionwe’vehadaboutwhetherthecitygovernmentshoulddemolishillegalbuildings.Opinionsbetweenusaredivided.______________________________________________________________________________________________BestwishestheillegalbuildingstakenupblockedthetrafficoutofdatebreaksthebeautyofthecityexistssomehiddendangersBrainstormingSupport:Notsupport:outofjobrunsomesmallbusinessMakealiving/supportone’sfamilypulldownthesebuildings影響書面表達得分的因素：“大錯誤”包括時態(tài)錯誤、句子結構錯誤、中式英語等，如：Myhometownhadbigchange,buildmanyhouses,……Myhometownhasgreatchanges.

◆語言表達出現(xiàn)“大錯誤”及“小錯誤”

→Greatchangeshadtakenplaceinmyhometownthere.Forexample,manynewhouseshadbeenbuiltandroadshadbeenwidened.3.IfyougettoChinathathavetime,mewithyoulookmyhometown.

4.Iwillwelcometoyou.

◆“小錯誤”主要是反應在個別單詞拼寫錯誤、冠詞介詞使用不準確等方面,如：

Undermyteacherandclassmatesallhelptome,…….

→Ihopeyou’llgetachancetocometoChinaandI’llshowyouaroundmyhometownifyouarefree.→WelcometoChina.→Withthehelpofmyteachersandclassmates,……◆沒有使用高級詞匯和復雜句1.Iwillvisitmyhometownwithyou.2.Ifyouhavetime,Iwilltakeyoutotravelaroundmyhometown.→Iwillshowyouaroundmyhometownifyouarefree.◆書寫是否工整清晰也會影響答卷得分。卷面不整潔，涂改多；大小寫;標點符號;書寫不清，得分會很低！◆審題不認真，要點有所遺漏1.徹底理解題意，看準答題要求（包括字數(shù)要求）。2.把內容要點在稿紙上列成提綱。3.連詞成句，連句成文。4.成文后認真檢查，確信無一遺漏。注意：★完全完成了試題規(guī)定的任務，覆蓋所有內容要點。

★應用了較多的語法結構和詞匯。

★

語法結構和詞匯方面有些錯誤，但為盡力使用較復雜結構或較高級詞匯所致；具備較強的語言運用能力。

★有效地使用了語句間的連接成分，使全文結構緊湊。

書面表達評分最高標準（第五檔21---25分）Onepossibleversion:

June8,2008

DearPeter,

I'mverygladtoreceiveyourletter.IwilltellyousomethingaboutmyEnglishstudyandhometown.

ItissixyearssinceIbegantolearnEnglish.Withthehelpofmyteachersandclassmates,IhavemadesomeprogressinEnglish.HoweverIstillfindEnglishhardtolearn,suchassomedifficultidiomswhichmademeconfused.Nomatterhowharditis,Ihavemadeupmymindtomasterthisusefullanguagebymyhardwork.NotlongagoIreturnedtomyhometownandfoundgreatchangeshadtakenplacethere.Manynewhouseshadbeenbuiltandroadshadbeenwidened.Myhometownisgettingmodernandmoreandmorebeautiful.IhopeifyouhaveachancetocometoChinaandI’llshowyouaroundmyhometownwhenyouareonleave.

Bestwishes,

LiHuaMySuggestions:1.percomplexsentences5.writingmodelsSixstepsforwriting(寫作六步驟）

1.

Cross-question(審題)※

Mainidea※Style※

Verbtense※Person2.Seizethemajorpoints/keywords(抓要點)3.Arrangement(布局)！4.Sentencesconnection(連句)Words/phrasesSentences6.

Errorcorrecting(查錯改錯)5.Expressyouropinion

(發(fā)表觀點）Conjunctions/conjunctiveadverbssentencespassageDearSmithLiHuaYours22

Iwassopleasedtohearfromyouandamwritingtotellyousomethingaboutmyschool.You’reright.Quiteafewchangeshavetakenplaceinourschool.Ononesideoftheroadisanewteachingbuilding;

Ontheotherside,where

theplaygroundusedtobe,

standsanothernewbuilding-ourlibrary.Theplaygroundisnowinfrontoftheschool.Wehavealsoplantedalotoftreesinandroundtheschool.Ihopethatyouwillbeabletoreturnandseethechangesforyourselfsomeday.Bestwishes,

注意：

1.詞數(shù)100左右；

2.可適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫；

3.開頭語已為你寫好。

June8,2008

DearPeter,

I'mverygladtoreceiveyourletter.IwilltellyousomethingaboutmyEnglishstudyandhometown.………….字數(shù)不夠或未能傳達讀者任何信息，不得分。

samplesofstudentworkreadandwritefindithard

fluentEnglishtowriteGreatchanges

roads

hadtakenplaceinmyhometownbuildingswidenedItwillbewonderfulwhen

youcometoChinaifyouarefreeshowyouaroundIwillbegladto語言不地道;中文式思維;語言錯誤較多，得分13分samplesofstudentworklearnoftheteachersandmyprogressreadandwriteithardtolearnhardwork.writelettersinfluentEnglishfoundhadbecomeWelcometoChinaifyouhavetimeshowyouaround語言素質較好;基本功不差;語句仍有毛?。坏?5分.samplesofstudentworkPracticeFindsomesimilarwordsorphrasesofthefollowingsgood2.think3.cleverperfect

excellentoutstandingpleasantwonderfulfavorablemagnificent

inone'sopinion/viewholdtheviewthat…itiswidelysharedthat…

wisebrightsmartintelligentcuteIII.常用的連接詞1.

表示遞進;在同一話題上補充內容

另外，還有：2.表示轉折關系

但是，然而，相反：

what’smore;besides;also;moreover;inaddition

but;however;yet;instead;ontheotherhand;

onthecontrary.3.表示因果關系

因為，因此，所以:4.表示條件關系

如果，只要:

除非:

否則:since;as;because(of);so;thus;therefore;asaresult;if;oncondition(that);aslongasunless

orelse

5.表示時間關系當…的時候:

when;while

在…之后:

after

在…之前:

before

直到:

until

直到…才…:

not……until……

一…就…:

assoonas

后來，然后:

later;

afterwards

不久:

soon

近來:

lately;

recently

自從…:since

從那時起:

fromthenon6.表示特定的順序關系

首先:firstly

最主要的:

aboveall

其次:

secondly

然后:

then;next

最后:

finally;intheend7.換一種方法表述

換句話說:

inotherwords;thatistosay;

8.進行舉例說明

例如，比如:9.用于陳述事實

forinstance;forexample;like;suchasthatistosay,namely,actually,andsoon,believeitornot,totellyouthetruth,forthisreason實際上:

infact;actually;asamatteroffact跟你說實話:

totellyouthetruth10.

對一個話題進行總結

總而言之，總的來說:

onthewhole;inshort;allinall;ingeneral;inaword,finally,inconclusion,generallyspeaking,asyouknow,intheend,其它常用到的副詞

therefore;otherwise;finally;

furthermore;thus;namely;although;afterwards;personally;12.

表示結果：

thus,therefore,so,asaresult,seeingthat,luckily,unfortunately

13.表示強調：

aboveall,indeed,surely,certainly,ofcourse,afterall,withoutanydelay,atleast,atmost,mostimportant,undoubtedly6.表示特定的順序關系

首先:firstly

最主要的:

aboveall

其次:

secondly

然后:

then;next

最后:

finally;intheend7.換一種方法表述

換句話說:

inotherwords;thatistosay;

II.豐富的句式：(常用到的句型結構）利用不同的句型來表達同一個意思，能增加文章的文采。

HowhappyIwaswhenIreceivedyourletter!

Itwasthisyoungboywho

helpedtheoldgranny.

Onlyinthiswaycanyousolvethisproblem.

Theyreadwhilewalkingor

ridingonabus.

1.感嘆句2.強調句3.倒裝句4.省略句

Isawayoungladywalkingslowlyinthestreetwithahandbaginherhand.

Let’scometothemainteachingbuilding,atthebackofwhichstandstheschoollibrary.

That’swhatIshoulddo.

Timepassedquicklybeforeweknewit.

5、with短語6、定語從句7、各種名詞性從句8、各種狀語從句

聯(lián)合國教科文組織某考察團正在我國某鄉(xiāng)村參觀考察。假定你是接待人員,請根據(jù)下列提示以發(fā)言稿的形式簡要介紹這個村的情況：1)大小：近100戶人家，約500口人。2)變化：過去很窮，78年后變化很大。人們生活比以前好多了。現(xiàn)已舊貌換新顏。3)教育：原來的學校很小，現(xiàn)已經(jīng)過改建。新建的教學樓有4層，是村里最美的建筑物。村所有學齡兒童在此免費就讀。注意：1）要點齊全，前后連貫。2）詞數(shù)：100-120之間。PracticeLadiesandgentlemen,Welcometoourschool.Thisvillageisverysmall.Ithasnearly100familiesandabout500people.Itusedtobeverypoor.Ithaschangedalotsince1978.Peopleherearericherthanbefore.Nowitistakingonanewlook.Theschoolherewasverysmall.Nowithasbeenrebuilt.Thenewlybuiltteachingbuildinghas4storeys.Itisthemostbeautifulbuildinginthevillage.Alltheschool-agechildrencanstudyhere.Theyenjoyfreeeducationinit.Thankyou.Ladiesandgentlemen,

Welcometoourschool!Ladiesan