基于語篇的寫作語言質量提升授課教師：周忱學校：中關村中學知春分校高三英語海淀區(qū)高中學生在線學習課程1常見錯誤2升級詞匯3優(yōu)化句式目錄CONTENTS常見錯誤012020年北京市適應性考試應用文回顧第一節(jié)（15

分）假設你是紅星中學高三學生李華。你的英國好友Jim

在你們學校網(wǎng)站上看到了學生參加學農活動的照片，很感興趣，發(fā)來郵件詢問。請你給他回復郵件，內容包括：學農活動的相關信息（時間、內容……）；你參加學農活動的感受。注意：1．詞數(shù)不少于50；

2．開頭和結尾已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。提示詞：學農learn

from

farmers典型作文分析學生評分：

9-10分老師點評：要點齊全、

有交際意識，但是語法錯誤過多。7分Dear

Jim,How

is

it

going?

I

am

very

happy

to

know

youare

interested

in

our

activity

learn

from

farmers.So,

I'd

like

to

introduced

it

to

you.Last

Friday,

we

joined

learn

from

organizedby

our

school.

First,

we

helped

the

owner

ofafarm

plant

trees,

the

second

we

also

feed

theanimals

food,

it

felt

very

interesting.By

planting

trees,

I

realized

to

protect

theenvironment.

I

think

it's

very

meaningful

andlearn

from

farmers

so

happy.I

hope

my

introduction

is

helpful

to

you,

if

youhave

any

other

questions,

please

let

me

know.I’m

looking

forward

to

your

reply.常見錯誤1：詞性誤用(Misuse

of

Parts

ofSpeech)觀察：Last

Friday,

we

joined

learn

from

(farmers)

organized

by

our

school.I

think

it's

very

meaningfuland

learn

from

farmers

is

so

happy.誤以為learnfrom

farmers

學農是名詞短語牛津learn

verb~

(sth.)

(from

sb./sth.)學；學習；學到；學會learn

from

farmers

學農實際為動賓短語參考修改：Last

Friday,

we

joined

in

the

activity-

learning

fromfarmers,

which

was

organized

byour

school.I

think

learning

fromfarmers

is

very

meaningful

anditalso

makes

mesohappy.常見錯誤1：詞性誤用(Misuse

of

Parts

ofSpeech)觀察：After

this

activity,

I

backed

home

and

felt

exhausted.Backing

home, I

awared

the

hardship

of

farmers.back n.

/adj.

/adv.

/v.back

v.后退，倒退to

move

or

make

sth.move

backwardHe

backed

against

the

wall,terrified.幫助，支持to

give

help

or

support

to

sb./sth. Her

parents

backed

her

in

her

choice

of

career.其它意思：伴奏，下注，在后面back并無“回來”的動詞用法back

adv.回原處He'll

be

back

on

Monday.他星期一會回來。I

can't

wait

to

get

backhome.我急不可待想趕回家?；丶襣et/go

back

home;return

home常見錯誤1：詞性誤用(Misuse

of

Parts

ofSpeech)觀察：After

this

activity,

I

backed

home

and

felt

exhausted.Backing

home, I

awared

the

hardship

of

farmers.aware

adj.

并無動詞詞性be

aware

of

sth.be

aware

that

...參考修改：After

this

activity,

I

went

back

home

and

felt

exhausted.After

returning

home, I

was

aware

of

the

hardship

of

farmers.寫作中常見的詞性誤用序號含義(1)成功succeed

v.success

n.(2)鼓掌applaud

v.applause

n.(3)影響affect

v.effect

n.(4)渴望eager

adj.

(常誤用為動詞)(5)違反，反對against

prep.(常誤用為動詞)Our

plan

succeeded.Confidence

is

thekeyto

success.He

started

to

applaud

and

the

others

joined

in. The

audience

broke

into

thunderous

applause.Your

decision

will

not

affect

my

decision.I'm

suffering

fromthe

effectof

too

little

sleep.She

is

eager

for

her

parents'

approval.All

my

classmates

are

eager

to

learn.What

hehas

doneis

against

the

law. She

is

against

seeing

him.正確用法示例：常見錯誤2：時態(tài)混用（Tense

Disagreement）觀察First,

we

helped

the

owner

of

a

farm

plant

trees.

Second,

we

feed

the

animals.Besides,

farmers

also

introduce

some

knowledge

about

agriculture

to

us.

Throughthis

activity,

I

harvested

a

lot.題目回顧：你的英國好友Jim

在你們學校網(wǎng)站上看到了學生參加學農活動的照片，很感興趣，發(fā)來郵件詢問。參考修改：First,

we

helped

the

owner

of

a

farm

plant

trees. Second,

we

fed

the

animals.Besides,

farmers

also

introduced

some

knowledge

about

agriculture

to

us.Through

this

activity,

I

harvested

a

lot.常見錯誤3：不間斷句子(Run-on

Sentences）觀察：First,

we

helped

the

owner

of

a

farm

plant

trees, second

we

also

fed

theanimals

,

we

felt

these

were

very

interesting.They

told

us

how

to

use

tools,

how

to

sow

seed,

it

was

difficult

for

us

to

dothese

well.參考修改：First,

we

helped

the

owner

of

a

farm

plant

trees.

Second,

we

fed

the

animals.We

felt

these

were

very

interesting.They

told

us

how

to

use

tools

and

how

to

sow

seeds,

but

it

was

difficult

for

us

todo

these

well.常見錯誤4：懸垂分詞（Dangling

Participle）觀察：Living

in

the

big

city,

my

knowledge

about

agriculture

was

quiteinadequate.Sowing

the

seeds

with

the

back

bent

once

and

once

again,

my

sweat

wasdripping

from

the

forehead.參考修改：Living

in

the

big

city,

I

didn’t

have

adequate

knowledge

about

agriculture.Sowing

the

seeds

with

the

back

bent

once

and

once

again,

I

felt

the

sweat

wasdripping

from

my

forehead.修改后對比原始版Dear

Jim,How

is

it

going?

I

am

very

happy

to

knowyou

are

interested

in

our

activity

learn

fromfarmers.

So,

I'd

like

to

introduced

it

toyou.Last

Friday,

we

joined

learn

from

organizedby

our

school.

First,

we

helped

the

owner

of

afarm

plant

trees,

the

second

we

also

feed

theanimals

food,itfeltvery

interesting.By

planting

trees,

I

realized

to

protect

theenvironment.

I

think

it's

very

meaningful

andlearn

from

farmers

sohappy.I

hope

my

introduction

is

helpful

to

you,

ifyou

have

any

other

questions,

please

let

meknow.

I’m

looking

forward

to

your

reply.基礎修改版Dear

Jim,How

is

it

going?

I

am

very

happy

to

know

youare

interested

in

our

activity

called

learning

fromfarmers.

So,

I'd

like

to

introduce

itto

you.Last

Friday,we

joinedinthe

activityorganizedby

our

school.

First,

we

helped

the

owner

of

afarm

plant

trees.

Second,

we

fed

the

animals.

Wefelt

these

were

very

interesting.By

planting

trees,

I

realized

the

importance

ofenvironmental

protection.

I

thought

it

was

verymeaningful.

Besides,

this

activity

brought

me

lotsof

fun.I

hope

my

introduction

is

helpful

to

you.

If

youhave

any

other

questions,

please

let

me

know.

I’mlookingforward

to

your

reply.片段對比分析版本1：By

planting

trees,

I

realizedthe

importance

of

environmentalprotection.

I

thought

it

was

verymeaningful.

Besides,

this

activitybrought

me

lots

of

fun.版本2：It

was

b