ContinuationWritingActionchain%Actionscene5W1H;篇章結(jié)構(gòu)，情感變化Read合理預測情節(jié)，確定續(xù)寫內(nèi)容Think動作描寫，情感描寫，環(huán)境描寫Write續(xù)寫步驟RevisionWatchavideoandanswersomequestions.1.Whereisthisvideotakenfrom?2.Whatdidthisprose(散文)wanttoconvey?3.HowdidZhuZiqingexpresshisfather’slove?ThesightofFather’sbackbyZhuZiqing.Father’slovetohisson.Hedidn’trevealthedeeplovewithdirectwords,insteadlettingactionsspeaklouder.

Showthereaderseverything,

tellthemnothing.--ErnestHemingway

Toshow,nottotellWhatis“toshow”?ToTell:giveusinformation.ToShow:helpus

formpicturesinourmindthroughdetails.1ActionchainS+V1,V2andV3Doing，S+V2andV3Havingdone,S+V動作描寫之具象化--將結(jié)果性動作細節(jié)到過程性動作。ActionchainPre-action

（先前動作）Trans-action(過渡動作)Post-action(后續(xù)動作)Action具體的動作描寫攔下車上車告知目的地Hestoppedthetaxi,jumpedwiththesuitcaseandtoldthedriver,“Gotothepolicestation,please.””高考范例：描述“上出租車去警察局”的動作。S+V1,V2andV3S+V1,V2andV3

actionchain場景：Thomas發(fā)表演講Thomasglancedattheaudience,tookadeepbreathandbeganhisspeech.掃視觀眾深呼吸開始演講發(fā)表演講Pre-action

（先前動作）Trans-action(過渡動作)Post-action(后續(xù)動作)V1V2V3ActionchainS+V1,V2andV3

actionchain1.他放下書包，掏出課本，開始朗讀。2.小貓?zhí)献雷?，叼起魚干，跑回了窩。3.男孩握緊拳頭，咬緊牙關(guān)，沖向了終點線。S+V1,V2andV3

Heputdownhisschoolbag,pulledouthistextbook,andstartedreading.Thekittenjumpedontothetable,pickedupthedriedfish,andranbacktoitsnest.Theboyclenchedhisfists,grittedhisteeth,anddashedtowardthefinishline.Actionchainactionchain剛睡醒=Rubbinghiseyessleepily,睡眼惺忪地揉眼睛+把腿移到床外+摸索著找拖鞋heswunghislegsoverthebedandgropedforhisslippers.場景：剛睡醒ActionchainDoing，S+V2andV3

doingV2V3actionchain李白站在月下=

+思念家鄉(xiāng)站在月下+看著月亮Standingunderthemoon,andmissedhisfamily.Libaigazedatthemoon

場景：“舉頭望明月，低頭思故鄉(xiāng)”ActionchainDoing，S+V2andV3

doingV2V3actionchain場景：餐廳等位一小時還沒等到位思考：這個動作前后可能還有哪些動作？Havingwaitedforanhour,theydecidedtoleavetherestaurant.等了一小時+他們決定離開ActionchainHavingdone,S+V

havingdoneVactionchain場景：完成作業(yè)思考：這個動作前后可能還有哪些動作？Havingfinishedhishomework,heturnedoffthedesklamp完成作業(yè)+關(guān)掉臺燈+上床睡覺了andwenttobed.ActionchainHavingdone,S+V

havingdoneV2V3actionchain1.這位老人坐在地鐵里，看著手機，皺著（knit）眉頭。2.輕輕吹著口哨，她打開窗戶，探身出去感受微風。3.把信讀了兩遍后，她小心地折起來，放進了口袋。Sittingonthesubway,theoldmanstaredathisphoneandknitted

hisbrows.Whistlingatunesoftly,sheopenedthewindowandleanedouttofeelthebreeze.Havingreadthelettertwice,shefoldeditcarefullyandputitintoherpocket.Actionchain2ActionsceneEmotionsFeelingsSurroundingsDialoguesactionsceneWalkingpastthegarden,shesmelledtherosesandfeltasuddenliftinherspirits.走過花園時，她駐足輕嗅花香，心情瞬間明朗起來。ActionsceneDoing，S+V2andV3

surroundingsactionsfeelingactionscene“Don’tworry,I’llfixit,”Dadsmiled,tappingthebrokenbikegently.“別擔心，我會修好的，”爸爸微笑著，輕輕敲了敲那輛壞了的自行車。Actionscene“…..,”Ssaid,doing…

dialoguefeelingactionactionchainHavingwaitedforanhour,theydecidedtoleavetherestaurant.

Havingwaitedforanhour,theydecidedtoleavetherestaurant,withtheirstomachgrowling./withtheirpatiencewearingthin.

Actionscenewithsth.+介詞短語

Standingunderthemoon,Libaigazedatthemoonandmissedhisfamily.

Withthesilenceofnight,standingundertheroundmoon,Libaigazedatthemoonlonelyandmissedhisfamilywithsadnessonhisface.Actionsceneadj./adv.

3EmphasisThreeprinciples具體動詞＞籠統(tǒng)動詞使用肢體神態(tài)等描寫詳略得當強調(diào)重點動作描寫三原則tiptoe踮起腳尖走limp一瘸一拐地走paceupanddown來回踱步wander漫步j(luò)og慢跑race飛奔rush沖向dash猛沖laugh大笑smile微笑grin露齒笑chuckle咯咯的笑stare盯著glance掃視；瞥glare怒目而視peer偷看4ApplicationScene:運動會跑步比賽。Tomparticipatedintherunningraceatthesportsmeeting.描述場景（60詞左右）

Withhiseyesfixedfirmlyonthefinishline,hetookadeepbreath,tightenedhisshoelacesonelasttime,andcrouchedintoposition.Th