Unit1Wishyouwerehere單元寫作深度指導(dǎo)（譯林版2020）

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浙江1月卷幫助寵物狗重獲快樂收獲新伙伴

話題詞塊

l.atreacherousodyssey（充滿危險(xiǎn)的漫長冒險(xiǎn)）

2.fraughtwithunforeseenperils（充滿意想不到的危險(xiǎn)）

3.alabyrinthofchallenges（充滿挑戰(zhàn)的迷宮）

4.（esiedourmettle（考驗(yàn)我們的勇氣）

5.arollercoasterofexcitementanddangei?（刺激與危險(xiǎn)并存的過山車）

6.aseriesofhairraisingincidents（一系列令人毛骨悚然的事件）

7.acrucibleofendurance（耐力的考驗(yàn)場）

8.thcinkydarkness（漆黑一片）

9.arealmofmysteryanddanger（神秘而危險(xiǎn)的領(lǐng)域）

10.atheateroftheunexpected（意外事件的舞臺）

話題佳句

Thejourneywasatreacherousodyssey,fraughtwithunforeseenperilslurkingateveryturn.（這次旅程是一場充滿

危險(xiǎn)的漫長冒險(xiǎn)，每個轉(zhuǎn)角都潛伏著意想不到的危險(xiǎn)。）

Asweventureddeeperintotheunknown,thepathbecamealabyrinthofchallengesthattestedourmettle.（當(dāng)我們

深入未知領(lǐng)域時，道路變成了充滿挑戰(zhàn)的迷宮，考驗(yàn)著我們的勇氣。）

Theexpeditiontookanominousturnwhenasuddenstormdescended,blottingouttheskyandengulfingusin

chaos.（當(dāng)一場突如其來的風(fēng)暴降臨，使天空變得漆黑并將我們卷入混亂時，這次探險(xiǎn)出現(xiàn)了不祥的轉(zhuǎn)折。）

Traversingthroughtheruggedterrain,wewereconstantlyonedge,anticipatingthenexthazardthatmightbefallus.

（穿越崎嶇的地形時，我們一直處于緊張狀態(tài)，預(yù)料著可能降臨的下一個危險(xiǎn)。）

Ourjourneywasarollercoasterofexcitementanddanger,witheachnewdaybringingafreshsetoftrials.（我們的

旅程猶如刺激與危險(xiǎn)并存的過山車，每一天都帶來一系列新的考驗(yàn)。）

Amidstthewilderness,weencounteredaseriesofhairraisingincidentsthatsentshiversdownourspines.（在荒里了

之中，我們遭遇了一系列令人毛骨悚然的事件，讓我們脊背發(fā)涼。）

Thelongandarduousjourneywasacrucibleofendurance,whereonlythestrongestwilledcouldsurvive.（漫長而

艱難的旅程是耐力的考驗(yàn)場，只有意志最堅(jiān)強(qiáng)的人才能幸存。）

Whennightfellduringourjourney,:heinkydarknessseemedtoswallowuswhole,intensifyingoursenseof

vulnerability.（在旅途中夜幕降臨時，漆黑的黑暗似乎將我們整個吞噬，加劇了我們的脆弱感。）

Thejourneyledusintoarealmofmysteryanddanger,wherethelawsofnatureseemedtohaveamindoftheir

own.（旅程將我們帶入了一個神秘而危險(xiǎn)的領(lǐng)域，在那里自然法則似乎有了自己的意志。）

Aswenavigatedtheunchartedwatersofouradventure,weweretossedaboutbythewavesofuncertainty.（當(dāng)我們

在冒險(xiǎn)的未知水域航行時，被不確定性的浪潮所顛簸。）

Thepathlesswildernesswejourneyedthroughwasatheateroftheunexpected,stagingoneastonishingeventafter

another.（我們穿越的無路荒野是意外事件的舞臺，接連上演著令人驚嘆的事件。）

Ourtrekwasagauntletofhardships,fromtreacherouscliffstoragingriversthatstoodinourway.（我們的長途跋

涉是艱難困苦的考驗(yàn)，從險(xiǎn)峻的懸崖到阻擋我們道路的洶涌河流。）

Inthemidstofourjourney,astrangephenomenonoccuiTed,castinganeeriepalloverouralreadyprecarious

silualion.（在旅程中途，一種奇怪的現(xiàn)象發(fā)生了，給我們本就岌岌可危的處境蒙上了一層詭異的陰影。）

Thearduousvoyagetestednotonlyourphysicalstaminabutalsoourmentalfortitudetothelimit.（艱難的航行不

僅將我們的體力，也將我們的精神堅(jiān)韌度考驗(yàn)到了極限。）

Witheachpassingmileofthejourney,thesenseofadventurewastingedwithagrowinguneaseaboutwhatlay

ahead.（隨著旅程每一英里的過去，冒險(xiǎn)的感覺中夾雜著對前方未知事物日益增長的不安。）

Thejourneythroughtheancientforestwaslikesteppingintoatimecapsuleofdangerandwonder.（穿越古老森林

的旅程就像是踏入了一個充滿危險(xiǎn)與奇妙的時間膠囊。）

Aswejourneyedon,（heelementsseemedtoconspireagainstus,makingprogressagruelingbattle.（隨著我們繼續(xù)

旅程，各種自然因素似乎聯(lián)合起來與我們作對，使得前進(jìn)成為一場艱苦的戰(zhàn)斗。）

Theexpeditionintotheremotemountainswasabaptismoffire,exposingustotheharshestofconditions.（i采入（扁

遠(yuǎn)山區(qū)的探險(xiǎn)是一場嚴(yán)峻的考驗(yàn)，讓我們暴露在最惡劣的環(huán)境中。）

Ourjourneyalongtheperiloustrailwasadancewithdeath,whereorewrongstepcouldspelldisaster.（我們沿著

危險(xiǎn)小徑的旅程是與死亡共舞，一步走錯就可能意味著災(zāi)難。）

Theadventurefilledjourneywasakaleidoscopeofthrillsandterrors,constantlyshiftingandevolving.（充滿冒險(xiǎn)

的旅程是刺激與恐怖的萬花筒，不斷變化和發(fā)展。）

第一步：獲救之前（惡劣環(huán)境+負(fù)面情緒）

①惡劣環(huán)境來鋪墊

1.Theskyisdarkenedwithgloomyclouds.Lightningflashedacrossthesky,followedbyaclapofthunder.Minutes

later,therecameadownpour.

2.Thecoloroftheskywaschanging,firstlightgrey,thendarkgrey,andfinallydarkanddense.

3.Withadeafeningcrack,lightingsplitthesky,illuminatingthedarkclouds.

4.Withraincloudslooming/hangingoverhead,theatmospherebecameheavyannouncing/threateningthe

approachingstorm.

5.Theangrywavescrashedagainstthesideoftheboat,withwatersplashinghereandthere.

6.Splashingraindropshitthewindshieldfranticallyandtheskieswereoverhungwithablanketofgrey.

7.Thenightenvelopedtheworldinablanketofdarkness,ahaunting/unsettlingsilence/stillnesswassuffocating.

8.Themountainwaslikeafuriousghost/monstcr,roaringitsanger,thusmakingmemoreanxious.

②驚險(xiǎn)場面描寫

1.Thewatertwistedandturnedhim,scrapinghimagainsttherocks.Watergushedintohismouthanduphisnose.

2.Thebigwindroaredthroughourearsandwewerepushedawayfromtheshorefartherandfarther.

3.Suddenly,hewasstuckinthemudandcouldn'tgetout.HestruggledhardbuthewasstilltrappedHescreamed

8.Exhaustedandcold,thethoughtthatwemightdiehereflashedacrossmymind,whichmademequiverwithan

uncontrollabletcrror/flight.

9.Lnokingatthevastsea,Ifeltasenseoffearsurgingthroughmywholebody.

10.1fellIwasdeprivedofbreath,onlytoseethebubblesswirlingaroundmeandmyvisionbegantoblur,finally

fadingintounconsciousdarkness.

11.Itwasgettingdark/Nightwasapproaching,wewerestuckinthemiddleofnowhere.

12.Afteraseriesoffruitlessattemptstofindawayout,wefelthungiyandtired.

13.Astimetickedby,fearcreptuponmyheartandIcouldhardlytellhowlong1couldploughon.

14.Thcthoughtofhopelessnesssentshiversdownmyspine.

15.Awaveofpanicsurgedthroughmyveinsandmymindswentblankwithfear.

16.Tearsoffrustrationandhorrorgushingfrommyeyes,IfeltIhadsunkintohopelessness.

17.Anominousthoughtcrossedhismind:I'mgoingtodieuphere.Griefesinwaves.

18.Afterwhatseemedacentury,Ifeltextremelyfatiguedwhileswimminghardtokeepmyselfafloat.

i9.Exhaustedaswewere,wedidn'lslop.Grittingourteeth,wekep(swimming.

20.“Weneedtothinkoutaway!”Imuttered,scratchingmyhead.

第二步：獲救之中(出現(xiàn)轉(zhuǎn)機(jī)+救援動作)

出現(xiàn)轉(zhuǎn)機(jī)

l.Shccouldhearwatertricklingsomewhereatadistance.

2.Atthatmoment,ashrillwhistlerippedtheair.

3.Insheerdesperation,Ifinallycaughtsightofsomeboatswithlifeguardsonthemleadingtowardsusinthe

distance.

4.Asifclutchingatstraws,Idialedthenumberagainandagain.

5.Afteralongtime,alightspotappearedinthedistance!Wewavedourhandsandyelledoutfbrhelp.

6.Whenwewereatalosswhattodonext,therewereshoutsrisingfromthedistance.

7.Laokingupquickly,wefoundtheseclearmarkseasily.Itwaswiththehelpofthesemarksthatwequicklyfound

theexit.

救援脫險(xiǎn)動作

(1)火災(zāi)救援

l.Afcwminuteslater,thefirefightersarrivedandthefirewassoonbroughtundercontrol.Themotherwasrelieved.

2.Hegrabbedtheladder,positioneditnearthewindowandclimbedtowardtheboy.Whenhereachedthewindow,

hepushedthescreenintotheroomandcoaxedCodyout.

3.Hecrawledtowardthesound,feelingaroundforanysignofthegirl.Finallyhetouchedsomething.Ashoe,Chen

anankle.HepulledTiaratowardshim.Hehuggedherintoarmsandsiood.

4.Hefelttheheatoftheflamesonhischeeks.Turning,hefoughtthroughIhesmokeandranblindlyirtothe

blackness.SurrellputTiaradownontheporch.

5.HestartedCPRthefirsttimehe'deverdoneso.Soonsheopenedhereyesandlookabreathonherown.

(2)落水救援

1.Themomentwepulledourselvesoutofthewater,thecarwaswashedaway.Whatanarrowescape!

2.1struggledclumsilyinthewater.Afterafewupsanddowns,Ireachedtheedgeofthepond.

3.Thewaterwasuptohislap,butAlastairwasverystrongandstruggledthoughwaveswithmeonhisback,

binally,wemanagedtoreturntothelandsafely.

4.SeeingRonnywasalmostdrowned,Henrytookoffhisclothesimmediatelyandjumpedintothewaterwithout

anyhesitation.

5.Withoutthinkingtwice,hespranginandcaughthimandquicklycarriedhimtothebank.Onthebank,Williewas

givenfirstaidandhecametolifeafterawhile.

(3)受傷救援

1.Pattingtheirfacestowakethemup,Icontinuouslytoldthemtobestrong.

2.Sheappliedacleantoweltothewoundandpressedfirmlyonittostopthebleeding.

3.RescuerstookPaulatoacaronastretcherandtookhertoahospitalforemergencytreatment.

(4)雪中救援

1.Thefirstthinghedidwastoseekshelterfromthefreezingwindandsnow.

2.Usinghisskies,Nicholasbuiltasnowcave.Hegatheredahugemassofsnowanddugoutaholeinthemiddle.

3.Thenhepiledbranchesontopofhimself,likeablanket,tostayaswarmashecould.

4.However,theyknewtheclockwastickingandNicholasstoodabetterchanceofsurvivaltheearlierthey(bund

him.

(5)迷路救援

1.Frightenedaswewere,westillmadeupourmindtosearchforHarry.

2.Hardlycanweseeanythinginthepletelydarksituation,sowehadtofeelourwaytosearchHarry.

(6)冰上救援

l.Hepushedthebranchtowardme.Igrabbeditimmediatelyandwaseventuallydraggedoutoftheicywaterby

Harry!Whatanarrowescape!

2.Amyhadagoodidea.Shetookoffherscarfandcoattomakearope.Shethrewittotheboy.Everyonepulledthe

iope.Theypulledtheboyoutof(hepond.

3.Afterthat,Mumdressedmeinawarmcoat,wrappedmeinablanketandpouredmeacupofhotmilk.

⑺事故救援

l.Hebalancedhimselfonthetruck,leanedbackandthrew(herockal(hewindow.Finally,(heglassbrokeand

Stevekickedintheremainingpiecesofglass.

2.Inthatsplitsecond,Ilungedforward,extendingmyarms,readytocatchhimandpreventanyharmfrominghis

way.TheweightofhislittlebodylandingsafelyinmyarmswasafeelingIwillneverforget.Theemergency

servicesarrivedpromptlyandtookover,ensuringthatthebabyreceivedthenecessarymedicalattention.

3.Withoutthinkingtwice,Igrabbedtheburgerandtosseditintheoppositedirectionwithallmymight,hopingto

distractthedog.

(8)洞穴救援

Nosoonerhadwearrivedwherethekidwastrappedthanthemanstartedtoscanthesurroundings.Thenheinched

towardtheholeandstretchedouttoseizethechild'shands,pullinghimoutwithoutreserve.

第三步：獲救之后(寬慰，感激+升華)

(1)寬慰&感激

1.1breathedasighofrelief,throwingmyarmsaroundhimandhuggedhimtightly.

2.Smilinginrelief.Ifeltarushofgratitude.

3.011hearingthegoodnews,TomandIsighedingreatrelief,grinningmerrilyateachother.

4.“IfIhadnotbeengivenfirstaid.Iwouldhavebeendead,“SiminonssaidtoNorwoodgratefully."Itwasyou

whocametomyaidandsavedmylife.M

5.Afterspending27hoursaloneinthewildness,peancried,“I'msafe."pcan'sstoryprobablywouldhaveended

verydifferentlyhadatotalstrangerwithstrongsatelliteskillsandasharpeyefordetailnottakenaction.

6.Thebaby'sparentsrushedover,(earsstreamingdowntheirfacesandtheirgratitudepouringoutinheartfelt

words.

(2)升華

歷險(xiǎn)者

1.Coldastherainwas,greatwarmthfilledhisheartlikeneverbefore.

2.Fromthenon,hemadeuphismindnevertotakeanyrisksunlesshecouldensuretightsafety.

3.Thatdaywassounforgettablethatitwouldstayinmymemory.

4.0nlythendidIrealizethatitwasbraverythatcanconquerwhateverdifficultycameintheway.

5.From(hisexperience,whatweleamtwasthatilwasdangerous(oexploretheunknownworldwithoutafully

detailedplan.

6.Grantfeltthatwhattheclimbhadtaughthimwashowfragileandpreciouslifeis.

7.Thisfrighteningexperienceleftadeepimpressiononthem,whichmadethemrealizethattheyshouldcherish

everymoment.

8.Itisuniqueexperiencethatmadeincunderstandwhateverdifficultieswearcfacedwith,aslongaswestayunited,

wecanconquerit.

救援者

1.1wouldneverforget(hegoodfeelingofhelpingsomeoneinneed.

2.Itoccurredtomethathelpingotherswaspricelessandeveryoneshouldbealifeguard.

3.Thestoryshowsthathavingagoodmandoffirstaidcanmakearealdifference.

4.Reflectingontheevent,Icouldn'thelpbutfeeladeepsensesatisfactionandfulfillment.Itshowedmethat

sometimes,theabilitieswepossesscanhaveaprofoundimpactonthelivesofothers.Theincidentservesasa

reirindertoalwaysbepreparedtolendahelpinghand,asyouneverknowwhenyouruniqueskillsmightmake

differenceinsomeone,slife.

（2024?山西太原?一模）

閱讀卜面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

Amy'syoungestchild,2yearoldJenna,wouldn'tgotosleepuntilAmyreadherastorywhilerockingher.

Rockingandreadingbecametheirfavoritenighttimeroutine.

Jennaawokeonenightscreaminginpain.Hospitaltestslaterrevealedthatshehadcancer,butluckilyshe

hadasuccessfuloperation.

DuringJenna'sfirstweekinthehospital,Amystayedwithherdayandnight.Thenursesputarockingchair

inherroomsotheycouldcontinueLheirnighttimeroutine.AfterJennawasasleep,Amygotsomerestinthehard

amchairbyJenna'sbed.Jennawasdoingwell,andAmybegansparinglimetohelpherhusbandJoetakecareof

theirlittleboys.Shewouldgohomeintheevening,havedinnerwiththeboys,andthenreturntothehospitaluntil

Jennawasasleep.ThenAmywouldehomefortheremainderofthenight.

ItwaspouringrainoneeveningasAmyhurriedhometomakedinner.Bythetimethemealwasdone,the

roadsweredangerous.Joestoodnearbyasshelookedoutofthekitchenwindow.HefirmlystoppedAmyfrom

goingoutinsuchweather.

“Joe,"Amycried,“IhavetoreadJennaastoryandrockher.Shewon'tbeabletosleepifIdon't.”“Honey,“

hesaid,“bereasonable.Whatifyouhaveabadcaraccident?Theroadswillbebettertomorrow.Then,youcan

g?！?/p>

AmyfinallynoddedandcalledSally,amiddleagednursewhoworkedatwelvehourshiftfrom8amto8pm.

IntearsshetoldSallythatitwasthefirsttimesinceJennawasbornthatshehadn'trockedheratbedtime.

SallyfortedAmyinacalmvoice.ShepromisedthatshewouldgointoseeJennabeforesheleftandtellher

thatwhenshewokeupherinoininywouldbewithher."Thankyou,Sally,nAmysaid.

Whenitwastimetogotobed,Jennacouldn'tfindhermomandgotpanic.

注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個左右；

2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Justwhenhertearswelledup.Sallycamein.

ThenextmorningAmyopenedthedoor,findingJennawassleepingpeaceftillyinSally'sarms.

【答案】范文

Juslwhenher【earswelledUD,Sallycamein.KnowingJennawaswaitingforMomanxiously,shecarriedthe

girlinthearmsandgentlytoldher(hathermumwouldeabitlateduetotheheavyrainoutside.However,on

hearingthat,Jennaburstoutcrying.JustatthismomentthenighttimeroutineAmymentionedcametoSally'smind.

ShetookoutabookandreadittoJennawhilerockingher.Itreallyworked!Jennafellasleepsoon!ButSally

didn'tleaveheralone,fbrfearthatshewouldwakeupduringthenight.

ThencximorningAmyopenedthedoor,findingJennawassleepingpeacefullyinSally'sImmediately,

scaldingtearsstreamedoutandherhanginghearteventuallysettleddown.Thenoiseofthedoorawokethenurse,

whocarefullygotoutofthebed.Amycameupandtookherhandtightly,saying,4iThankyou.Youdidn'tknow

howworriedIwaslastnight."Sallysmiledandsaid,"It'snothing.ButTvelearnedtofbrtbabiesfromyou-the

nighttimeroutine.^^Withthewords,aknowingsmileappearedonthefacesoftwowomen.

【導(dǎo)語】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了艾米最小的孩子，2歲的珍娜，要艾米一邊搖她一邊給她講故事，

她才會入睡。搖擺和閱讀成了他們最喜歡的夜間活動。一天晚上，珍娜痛苦地尖叫著醒來。后來醫(yī)院檢查

顯示她得了癌癥，但幸運(yùn)的是，她做了一次成功的手術(shù)。某天下大雨，媽媽沒辦法去給珍娜講故事，幸好

一位護(hù)士安慰了珍娜，讓她睡著了。

【詳解】1.段落續(xù)寫：

①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“正當(dāng)她的眼淚奪眶而出時，莎莉走了進(jìn)來“可知，第一段可描寫護(hù)士莎莉照顧珍娜入睡

的經(jīng)過。

②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“第二天早上，艾米打開門，發(fā)現(xiàn)珍娜正安詳?shù)厮谏虻膽牙铩笨芍?，第二段可描寫?/p>

米懸著的心終于平靜了下.來，并對護(hù)士表示感謝。

2.埃寫線索：莎莉安慰珍娜——給珍娜講故事——珍娜入睡——艾米感謝護(hù)士——兩人會心微笑

3.詞匯激活

行為類

①起作用：work/function

②抓住，握住某人的手：takeone'shand/holdone'shand

awake/wake...awake/wake...up

情緒類

①突然人哭：burstouicrying/bursiintotears

②擔(dān)心：worried/concemed

【，出睛]【高分句型1]KnowingJennawaswaitingforMomanxiously,shecarriedthegirlinthearmsandgently

tolcherthathermumwouldeabitlateduetotheheavyrainoutside.（運(yùn)用了現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語以及that引導(dǎo)賓語

從句）

[高分句型2]Thenoiseofthedoorawokethenurse,whocarefullygotoutofthebed.（運(yùn)用了who弓I導(dǎo)非限制

性定語從句）

實(shí)戰(zhàn)演練

1.（2024?吉林長春?一模）

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

Itwasabrightandsunnyday,butinsidetheclassroom,Tomwasfeelinganythingbutcheerful.Hehadjust

receivedhistestresults,andtheywerefarfromwhathehadhopedfor.Hisheartsankashestaredatthe

disappointingmarks.

Tomhadalwaysbeenadiligentstudent,andthisfailurecameasahugeblow.Hecouldirturderstandhow

hehadperformedsopoorlywhenhehadpulinsomucheffort.Hefeltdefeatedandwonderedifhewasjustnot

goodenough.

Ashewalkedhome,hecouldn'thelpbutthinkaboutwhathadgonewrong.Hereplayedthemoments

leadinguptothetest,tryingtofigureoutwherehehadmademistakes.Maybehehadn'tstudiedtherightway?Or

perhapshehadbeentoonervousduringtheexam?

Whenhegothome,Tomdecidedtotalktohiselderbrother.Jack.Jackwasalwayswiseandhadawayof

makingthingsseembelter.Tompouredouthisheart,tellingJackabouthisfailureandhowdiscouragedhefelt.

Jacklistenedpatientlyandthensaid,“Tom,failureisnottheend.It'sanopportunitytolearnandgrow.

Everygreatsuccessstoryisfilledwithfailuresalongtheway.Figureoutwhatyouneedtododifferentlynexttime.

Analyzeyourmistakesandusetheirassteppingstonestoimprove.M

Tomtookhisbrother'swordstoheart.Hespentthenextfewdaysgoingoverhistest,identifyinghisweak

areasandmakingaplantoaddressthem.Hestartedstudyingwithanewapproach,askingforhelpwhenheneeded

itandpracticingmore.

Afewweekslater,anothertestwasannounced.Tomwasnervousbutalsodetermined.Ashesatdownto

takethetest,hetookadeepbreathandremindedhimselfofwhathehadlearnedfromhispreviousfailure.Justas

Tonwasfinishingupthetest,theteacherannouncedthattimewasup.

注意：

(1)續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個左右；

(2)請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Tomhandedinhistestpaperwithamixtureofnervousnessandhope.

Dayslater,whentheresultswereannounced.Tomcouldn'tbelievehiseyes.

【答案】Tomhandedinhistestpaperwithamixtureofnervousnessandhope.Ashewalkedoutofthe

classroom,hismindwasconsumedbythoughtsabouthowhehadperformed.Hadhetrulylearnedenoughfromhis

previousfailure?Hadheunknowinglymadethesamemistakesonceagain?Thewaitingperiodwasextremelylong.

Hemadeanefforttokeephimselfoccupiedwithotheractivities,yethismindinvariablywanderedbacktothetest.

Timeandagain,hefoundhimselfconstantlycheckingthecalendar,anxiouslyawaitingthedaywhentheresults

wouldfinallybeannounced.

Dayslater,whentheresultswereannounced,Tomcouldn'tbelievehiseyes.IItsnamewasatthetopofthelist

withamuchimprovedscore.Ahugesmilespreadacrosshisface.Hsfellasenseofprideandacplishmentthathe

hadneverfellbefore.Herealizedthathisfailurehadbeenavaluablelesson.1(hadtaughthimperseverance,(he

importanceoflearningfrommistakes,andthepowerofhardwork.Herushedhometotellhisbrotherthegood

news.Jackwasproudofhimandremindedhimthatthiswasjustthebeginning.Fromnowon,Tomknewthat

wheneverhefacedasetback,hewouldlookonitasanopportunitytolearnandgrow.

【導(dǎo)語】文章以人物為線索展開，講述了主人公Tom在一次考試成績不理想后，經(jīng)歷從失望、反思到重新

振作并改進(jìn)學(xué)習(xí)方法的過程。Tom原本是個勤奮的學(xué)生，但考試成績卻遠(yuǎn)低于預(yù)期，這讓他深受打擊。在

回家的路上，他不斷反思自己可能犯錯的地方?；丶液螅蚋绺鏙ack傾訴了自己的困境和挫敗感。Jack

鼓勵他看待失敗為學(xué)習(xí)和成長的機(jī)會，并建議他分析錯誤，將其作為進(jìn)步的墊腳石。Tom聽取了哥哥的建

議，認(rèn)真分析了自己的弱點(diǎn)，并制定了改進(jìn)計(jì)劃。他改變了學(xué)習(xí)方法，積極尋求幫助并加強(qiáng)練習(xí)。兒周后，

當(dāng)又一次考試來臨時，Tom雖然緊張但充滿決心。他深吸一口氣，提醒自己從上次失敗中學(xué)到的教訓(xùn)，并

順利完成了考試。

【詳解】I.段落續(xù)寫

①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“Tom交上試卷時，心中既緊張又充滿希望。”可知，第一段可描寫考試結(jié)束后，Tom

焦急等待成績的過程。

②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“幾天后，成績公布了，Tom簡直不敢相信自己的眼睛。”可知，第二段可描寫Tom知

道自己成績后的表現(xiàn)以及感悟。

2.續(xù)寫線索：反思——等待成績公布——分?jǐn)?shù)大幅提高——驕傲——感悟

3.詞匯激活

行為類

查看：check/lookover

宣布：announce/declare

意識至U：realize/beawareof

情緒類

焦慮地：anxiously/worricdly

以...為驕傲：beproudof7takepridein

【點(diǎn)睛】[高分句型1]

Timeandagain,hefoundhimselfconstantlycheckingthecalendar,anxiouslyawaitingthedaywhentheresults

wouldfinallybeannounced.（運(yùn)用\when引導(dǎo)時間狀語從句）

[高分句型2]

Herealizedthathisfailurehadbeenavaluablelesson.（運(yùn)用\that引導(dǎo)賓語從句）

2.（2024?廣西柳州-一模）

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

“Wecantotallydothis!”myfriendSarahshoutedexcitedly,thesmileonherfaceshininglikeadiamondas

westeppedoutoftheartstudio.^Definitely,we'vegotthisinthebag!”Irepliedenthusiastically,jumpinghappily

onthepavementasthedoorswungshutbehindus.BothofushadjustsubmittedourworksfortheAnnualAn

Showcase,animportanteventthateveryartistdreamedofbeingpartof.

ThatSaturdayevening,SarahandIstayedinmylivingroom,refiningoursubmissions.Wcaimedto

demonstrateourcreativity,techniqueandpassionforart.Ifocusedonmylatestpainting—acolorfullandscape

whileSarahshowcasedhervividsculptures.Weweredeterminedloimpressthejudges,ourconfidencerisinghigh.

Afterafewdaysofanxiouswailing,aletterarrivedinthemail.Heartracing,Itoreitopen.ButasIscanned

thepage,desperationcrashedovermelikeahugewave.Mynamewasn'tonthelistofselectedartists.

Momentslater,IspottedSarahapproaching,laughingandwavingabrightlycoloredenvelope.Ifeltaburst

ofpainatthesight.Shewasclearlythrilledandreadytosharehergoodnews.Unabletofaceherjoy,Iturnedaway

sharply.Ijustcouldn'tbearit:shemadeit,and1didn't.Whywaslifesounfair?Angerandd