1、,如何提高書面表達句子的檔次,Welcome to our school,你的英國朋友正在做一個課題；世界各地的生日慶祝方式。他請你介紹中國學(xué)生過生日的方式。請你根據(jù)以下要點寫一篇短文： 一、通常方式 1生日聚會 2生日禮物 3生日祝福 二、我認為更有意義的慶祝方式和理由 *詞數(shù)100-120 （2005 浙江卷）,Now students in China celebrate their birthdays in many ways. Usually, a party is held. Best friends and relatives will come to the party. Th

2、ey usually buy a gift. They show their best wishes. Sometimes, people send short messages too and it is becoming very popular. But I think that its better to help other people. We know that its important to learn to help other people. Helping other people can do us a lot of good. People will help yo

3、u because youve helped them and youll be happy,學(xué)生作品（1）,Nowadays students in China celebrate their birthdays in various ways. Usually, a party is held so that people can get together. Best friends, as well as relatives, are going to be invited. Its polite to buy a small gift which stands for ones bes

4、t wishes. Whats more, sending short messages on ones birthday is becoming more and more popular, as a result of its convenience. However, as far as Im concerned, its more meaningful to care about others than about oneself. As is known to all, to give is better than to receive. Birthdays mean not onl

5、y being older but more helpful and useful to the world. Therefore, its of importance to learn to help others. Helping others on ones birthday can do you a lot of good. For one thing, people will help you in return in the future; for another, youll be happy. As a result, I think it better to help oth

6、ers to spend ones birthday.,學(xué)生作品（2）,Nowadays students in China celebrate their birthdays in various ways. Usually, a party is held so that people can get together. Best friends, as well as relatives, are going to be invited. Its polite to buy a small gift which stands for ones best wishes. Whats mor

7、e, sending short messages on ones birthday is becoming more and more popular, as a result of its convenience. However, as far as Im concerned, its more meaningful to care about others than about oneself. As is known to all, to give is better than to receive. Birthdays mean not only being older but m

8、ore helpful and useful to the world. Therefore, its of importance to learn to help others. Helping others on ones birthday can do you a lot of good. For one thing, people will help you in return in the future; for another, youll be happy. As a result, I think it better to help others to spend ones b

9、irthday.,學(xué)生作品（2）,1. 要點齊全 2. 較多的語法結(jié)構(gòu)和高級詞匯 3. 全文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊,高檔書面表達的要求：,1. 時間：昨天下午放學(xué)后 請根據(jù)下述情況寫一篇80-120個單詞的英語新聞 廣播稿，準備在你校廣播臺播出。 2. 地點：回家路上 3. 人物：高一（2）班兩名男生田力和段凱 4. 事件：邊騎車邊談笑，后追逐一輛公交車，覺得好 玩。公交車遇紅燈停下，兩人來不及剎車，摔倒在 地。一人左手臂摔斷，一人腿部受傷。 5. 警示：嚴格遵守交通規(guī)則，切忌在馬路上嬉笑玩耍。,There was an accident happened to two students in our sc

10、hool yesterday afternoon. (典型病句）,There was an accident that happened to two students in our school yesterday afternoon. (定語從句）,An accident occurred to two students in our school yesterday afternoon.（高級詞匯）,An accident happened to two students in our school yesterday afternoon.,Tian Li and Duan Kai we

11、re riding bikes side by side on the way home after school. They were talking and laughing loudly. (陳蟬),Tian Li and Duan Kai were riding bikes side by side on the way home after school, talking and laughing loudly. （用分詞合并）,The traffic lights turned red. They found it was too late to stop the bikes.,T

12、he lights turned red, but they found it was too late to stop their bikes. (黃穎) （用連接詞連接）,Seeing the red traffic lights, they tried to stop but it was too late. （用分詞合并）,Ones left arm was hurt and the others leg was hurt too. (戴靚),Ones left arm was broken while the others leg got hurt. (邊昶) (避免用相同結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯

13、）（高級連詞）,One had his left arm broken while the other got his leg hurt. /the other was badly hurt in the leg.) (高級結(jié)構(gòu)）,They were knocked off their bikes, one with the left arm broken, and the other with one leg hurt. (高級介詞短語/獨立主格結(jié)構(gòu)） (昭昭),5. If we dont obey traffic rules, we might die.,a. If we go again

14、st traffic rules, we might lose our lives. b. If we go against traffic rules, we might end up in hospital. c. Going against traffic rules might cost us our lives. d. Dont risk our lives going against traffic rules. (多種表達）,6. He got up at 7 oclock.（使用多種句式 ）,It was not until 7 oclock that he got up.,N

15、ot until 7 oclock did he get up.,(強調(diào)句）,（倒裝句）,He didnt get up until 7 oclock.,1. I had a good idea.,a. A good idea occurred to me.,b. I came up with a good idea.,2. Dont worry . Well try to help you.,make every effort to, make great efforts to spare no efforts to, try every means to do all we can to,

16、 do what we can to,多種表達 for another, youll get happiness out of that.,Nowadays students in China celebrate their birthdays in various ways. Usually, a party is held where best friends as well as relatives can get together and have fun. They usually buy a small gift with which to express their best wishes. Sometimes, people send short messages too, which is becoming very popular . However, as far as Im concerned, its better to do something for others. As is known to all, its of importance to help others.