TheKite讀后續(xù)寫范文句式解析練習(xí)（二）主題：人與社會(huì)——善意傳遞OnabeautifulThursdaythisApril,AmyandAlanGreentooktheirdaughterAbbeyoutforawalkintheneighborhood.Ontheirwayback,AmypickedupakiteforAbbeyfromtheDollarTree,bluewithrainbows—therewerealotofrainbowsdecoratinghomesaroundtheregionthosedays,whichhelpedmakelifelessdullduringthecoronaviruspandemic(冠狀病毒流行病).Intheafternoon,Abbeytookthekiteoutforitsfirstflight.Atfirst,thewindwasperfect.Ittookthekitehighinthesky.However,suddenly,thewindbecamemuchstrongerandpulledthekiteoutofAbbey’shandsinamoment.Itflewfartherandfartherandfinallygotstuckonthepowerlinesnexttoabigtree,wrappingitselfoverandoveragainaroundthewires.原文:Sincethekitewastoohighforthemtoreach,theGreenscoulddonothingaboutit.Worryinglessaboutthekitethanthedangeritmightpresenttothelines,AmycalledNationalGrid(國(guó)家電網(wǎng))toreporttheincident.Aboutonehourlater,Mike,aworkerfromthepowercompanyarrived.Hecarefullyremovedthekitelinefromthewires.Afterabout10minutes’effort,hesuccessfullyfreedit.Butunfortunately,asthekitewaswrappedsotightly,therewassomeunpreventabledamage.Still,hegaveitbacktoAlanGreen.AsMikewasleaving,henoticedAbbeytakingthekitetothebackyard.Outofcuriosity,hestoodthereforawhiletoseehowthegirlwoulddealwithit.Surprisingly,shedugaholeandburiedthekiteinashoebox.Eventhoughhecouldnotseethegirl’sfaceclearly,heknewexactlyhowsadAbbeywas.Hereallyfeltbadforher.Anditwasatthatmomentthathedecidedtodosomething.Para.1:

Thenextday,Alanwentouttogetthemailasusualandfoundabox.Para.2:

Deeplymovedbythisactofkindness,AlanpostedthewholestoryontheInternet.標(biāo)記人物并注明人物關(guān)系：___________________________________用自己的話概括情節(jié)：______________________________________________________________________________________________________________Para.1:

Thenextday,Alanwentouttogetthemailasusualandfoundabox.Para.2:

Deeplymovedbythisactofkindness,AlanpostedthewholestoryontheInternet.標(biāo)記人物并注明人物關(guān)系：___________________________________用自己的話概括情節(jié)：______________________________________________________________________________________________________________標(biāo)記人物并注明人物關(guān)系：___________________________________標(biāo)記人物并注明人物關(guān)系：___________________________________用自己的話概括情節(jié)：______________________________________________________________________________________________________________Para.1:

Thenextday,Alanwentouttogetthemailasusualandfoundabox.Para.2:

Deeplymovedbythisactofkindness,AlanpostedthewholestoryontheInternet.題目場(chǎng)景六維度Thekite獲得驚喜Heopenedtheboxgingerlyandlookedinside.Tohissurprise,therewas...動(dòng)作：拆包裹感情：驚訝，開心揭示真相(小紙條）

禮物alongwithanotewritten...“”Thenotewasunsigned,butAlanwasconvincedthatthelovablegiftwasfromtheworkerwhocametohelpyesterday.

感情：消除疑慮互動(dòng)分享（給禮物——開心）Hetookthekiteinsideandgaveit

toAbbey.Whenshesawthekite,hereyesgleamedwithexcitement.心情：溫暖感動(dòng)開心網(wǎng)上發(fā)帖子，必定有回響（行為曝光——影響傳播）wordgotbackto消息傳到...Hedidn’texpecttoberecognized,butAlan’spostledtohisidentitybeingrevealed,whichresultedinthestorybeingsharedandlikedbymillionsofpeopleacrosstheInternet.銜接評(píng)述：影響傳播Evensmallactsofkindnesscanmakeabigdifference.Loveisonethingthatreallydeservestobepassedonfromonetoanother.愛(ài)的升華范文1.獲得驚喜2.揭示真相（小紙條）3.銜接句——給包裹4.開心網(wǎng)上發(fā)帖子，必定有回響1.消息傳到公司2.公司找到好人3.好人講述原因4.好人得到回報(bào)5.愛(ài)的升華Para.1翻譯：他小心翼翼地打開盒子，往里面看。原文：Heopenedtheboxgingerlyandlookedinside.句式：動(dòng)作副詞（gingerly）+并列謂語(yǔ)（opened,looked）即：sbdidsth副詞，anddidsth功能：用副詞細(xì)膩刻畫動(dòng)作，體現(xiàn)人物對(duì)盒子的謹(jǐn)慎態(tài)度，增強(qiáng)場(chǎng)景真實(shí)感。練習(xí)：仿寫“某人...地做...，并做...”仿寫：她輕輕地翻開相冊(cè)，仔細(xì)端詳著每一張照片。（例：Sheopenedthephotoalbumgentlyandlookedateachpicturecarefully.）翻譯：令他驚訝的是，里面有一只新風(fēng)箏——一只可愛(ài)的知更鳥風(fēng)箏，羽毛漂亮，還有一張寫在國(guó)家電網(wǎng)便簽紙上的紙條。原文：Tohissurprise,therewasanewkite—acuterobinwithbeautifulfeathersalongwithanotewrittenontheNationalGrid’snotepaper.句式：插入語(yǔ)（Tohissurprise）+therebe句型+同位語(yǔ)（acuterobin...）+伴隨狀語(yǔ)（with...alongwith...）即：Toone’ssurprise,therewasA—BwithCalongwithD功能：先通過(guò)插入語(yǔ)營(yíng)造意外氛圍，再用同位語(yǔ)和伴隨狀語(yǔ)詳細(xì)描述物品，為后續(xù)情節(jié)埋下伏筆。練習(xí)：仿寫“令某人...的是，有...——...帶著...還有...”仿寫：令他驚喜的是，有一個(gè)包裹——一本精美的畫冊(cè)，插圖絢麗，還有一張寫在雅致信箋上的留言。（例：Tohissurprise,therewasapackage—abeautifulpicturealbumwithvividillustrationsalongwithanotewrittenonanelegantletterpaper.）翻譯：“我為你女兒感到難過(guò)，所以希望這只新風(fēng)箏能讓她微笑，”紙條上寫著?！白⒁獍踩３纸】?！”原文：“Ifeltbadforyourdaughter,soIhopethisnewkitewillmakehersmile,”itread.“Staysafeandhealthy!”句式：直接引語(yǔ)（原因+目的）+動(dòng)作（itread）+簡(jiǎn)短祝福即：“原因+目的”（直接引語(yǔ)）,itread.“簡(jiǎn)短祝福”功能：借助紙條內(nèi)容直接展現(xiàn)送禮者的善意，使情節(jié)邏輯清晰，傳遞溫暖情感。練習(xí)：仿寫“紙條/卡片寫著‘...（原因），所以...（目的）’，還寫‘...（簡(jiǎn)短祝福/鼓勵(lì)）’”仿寫：“我知道你熱愛(ài)繪畫，所以畫了這幅畫送給你，”卡片上寫著?！袄^續(xù)綻放你的藝術(shù)光芒！”（例：“Iknowyoulovepainting,soIdrewthispictureforyou,”itread.“Keepshiningwithyourart!”）翻譯：紙條沒(méi)有署名，但艾倫確信這份可愛(ài)的禮物來(lái)自昨天來(lái)幫忙的工人。原文：Thenotewasunsigned,butAlanwasconvincedthatthelovablegiftwasfromtheworkerwhocametohelpyesterday.句式：轉(zhuǎn)折連詞（but）+賓語(yǔ)從句（wasconvincedthat...）+定語(yǔ)從句（whocame...）即：Awas...,butsbwasconvincedthatBwasfromCwhodidD功能：“無(wú)署名”制造懸念，“but”轉(zhuǎn)折引出人物的合理推測(cè)，呼應(yīng)前文情節(jié)，推動(dòng)故事發(fā)展。練習(xí)：仿寫“...是...，但某人確信...來(lái)自...（人+做過(guò)的事）”仿寫：信件沒(méi)有落款，但她確信這些溫馨的話語(yǔ)來(lái)自上周幫助她的鄰居。（例：Theletterwasunsigned,butshewasconvincedthatthewarmwordswerefromtheneighborwhohelpedherlastweek.）翻譯：他把風(fēng)箏拿進(jìn)屋，遞給艾比。當(dāng)她看到風(fēng)箏時(shí)，眼睛里閃爍著興奮的光芒。原文：HetookthekiteinsideandgaveittoAbbey.Whenshesawthekite,hereyesgleamedwithexcitement.句式：并列謂語(yǔ)（took,gave）+時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句（When...）+情感描寫（gleamedwithexcitement）即：sbdidAanddidB.WhensbdidC,情感動(dòng)作描寫功能：先描述動(dòng)作，再通過(guò)時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句展現(xiàn)人物的情感反應(yīng)，使場(chǎng)景更具感染力。練習(xí)：仿寫“某人做...并做...。當(dāng)某人做...，...（情感動(dòng)作）”仿寫：他拿起禮物，遞給妹妹。當(dāng)妹妹看到禮物時(shí)，臉上洋溢著幸福的笑容。（例：Hepickedupthegiftandgaveittohissister.Whenshesawthegift,herfacewasfilledwithhappiness.）Para.2翻譯：被這一善舉深深打動(dòng)，艾倫把整個(gè)故事發(fā)布到了網(wǎng)上。原文：Deeplymovedbythisactofkindness,AlanpostedthewholestoryontheInternet.句式：過(guò)去分詞短語(yǔ)作原因狀語(yǔ)（Deeplymovedby...）+動(dòng)作（posted）即：Deeplymovedby...,sbdidsth功能：用過(guò)去分詞短語(yǔ)簡(jiǎn)潔表達(dá)人物的情感狀態(tài)，自然引出后續(xù)行為，推動(dòng)情節(jié)發(fā)展。練習(xí)：仿寫“被...深深打動(dòng)，某人做...”仿寫：被那個(gè)感人的視頻深深觸動(dòng)，他在網(wǎng)上分享了自己的感受。（例：Deeplytouchedbythatmovingvideo,hesharedhisfeelingsontheInternet.）翻譯：很快，消息傳回了國(guó)家電網(wǎng)，公司很快確認(rèn)了邁克就是那位工人。原文：Soon,wordgotbacktoNationalGrid,andthecompanyquicklyidentifiedMikeastheworker.句式：時(shí)間副詞（Soon）+并列事件（wordgotback,identified...as...）即：Soon,Ahappened,andBdidsth功能：通過(guò)時(shí)間副詞“soon”加速情節(jié)節(jié)奏，體現(xiàn)信息的快速傳播，揭曉關(guān)鍵人物身份。練習(xí)：仿寫“很快，...發(fā)生，...確認(rèn)...”仿寫：很快，消息傳到了公司，經(jīng)理們很快確認(rèn)了杰克就是那個(gè)立功者。（例：Soon,newsreachedthecompany,andthemanagersquicklyidentifiedJackasthecontributor.）翻譯：當(dāng)被問(wèn)及此事時(shí)，邁克解釋說(shuō)，當(dāng)他看到艾比在埋風(fēng)箏時(shí)，他完全明白女孩的感受，這促使他為她做點(diǎn)什么。原文：Wheninterviewedaboutit,MikeexplainedthatashesawAbbeyburyingakite,heknewexactlyhowthegirlfelt,whichpushedhimtodosomethingforher.句式：時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句（Wheninterviewed...）+賓語(yǔ)從句（explainedthat...）+嵌套時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句（ashesaw...）+非限定性定語(yǔ)從句（whichpushed...）即：Whendone...,sbexplainedthatassbdidsth,sbknew...,whichpushedsbtodosth功能：多層從句嵌套，詳細(xì)闡述人物的行為動(dòng)機(jī)，使人物形象更加豐滿，情節(jié)更加合理。練習(xí)：仿寫“當(dāng)被...時(shí)，某人解釋說(shuō)當(dāng)...，明白...，這促使...做...”仿寫：當(dāng)被問(wèn)及捐贈(zèng)原因時(shí)，瑪麗解釋說(shuō)當(dāng)她看到孩子們的渴望眼神時(shí)，她知道他們需要幫助，這促使她伸出援手。（例：Whenaskedaboutthedonationreason,Maryexplainedthatasshesawthechildren’seagereyes,sheknewtheyneededhelp,whichpushedhertoofferahand.）翻譯：離開格林家后，他順路去一家商店買了新風(fēng)箏，然后悄悄地把盒子放在他們家門口。原文：AfterleavingtheGreens’house,hestoppedbyashoptobuythenewkiteandthenlaidtheboxquietlyattheirdoor.句式：時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)（Afterleaving...）+并列謂語(yǔ)（stoppedby,laid）+副詞（quietly）即：Afterdoingsth,sbdidAanddidB副詞功能：用時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)串聯(lián)動(dòng)作，副詞“quietly”突出人物默默行善的品質(zhì)，強(qiáng)化人物形象。練習(xí)：仿寫“在...后，某人做...并...（副詞）做...”仿寫：放學(xué)后，她順路去書店買了本書，然后靜靜地把書放在同桌的桌上（例：Afterschool,shestoppedbyabookstoretobuyabookandthenplaceditquietlyonherdeskmate’sdesk.）翻譯：他沒(méi)想到會(huì)被認(rèn)出來(lái)，但艾倫的