gre北美范文滿分范文下面是一篇GRE官方給出滿分的ARGUMENT范文，我們來一起賞析,看看它為何能scoredsix（先讀文章，再看我的點評）Thefollowingappearedaspartofanarticleinadailynewspaper:"Mostcompanieswouldagreethatastheriskofphysicalinjuryoccurringonthejobincreases,thewagespaidtoemployeesshouldalsoincrease.Henceitmakesfinancialsenseforemployerstomaketheworkplacesafer:theycouldthusreducetheirpayrollexpensesandsavemoney."Discusshowwellreasonedyoufindthisargument.Inyourdiscussionbesuretoanalyzethelineofreasoningandtheuseofevidenceintheargument.Forexample,youmayneedtoconsiderwhatquestionableassumptionsunderliethethinkingandwhatalternativeexplanationsorcounterexamplesmightweakentheconclusion.Youcanalsodiscusswhatsortofevidencewouldstrengthenorrefutetheargument,whatchangesintheargumentwouldmakeitmorelogicallysound,andwhat,ifanything,wouldhelpyoubetterevaluateitsconclusion.北美GRE范文首段Thisargumentstatesthatitmakesfinancialsenseforemployerstomaketheworkplacesaferbecausebymakingtheworkplacesaferthenlowerwagescouldbepaidtoemployees.Thisconclusionisbasedonthepremisethatasthelistofphysicalinjuryincreases,thewagespaidtoemployeesshouldalsoincrease.Howeveer,thereareseveralassumptionsthatmaynotnecessarilyapplytothisargument.Forexample,thecostsassociatedwithmakingtheworkplacesafemustoutweightheincreasedpayrollexpensesduetohazardousconditions.Also,onemustlookattheplausabilityofimprovingtheworkenvironment.Andfinally,becausemostcompaniesagreethatastheriskofinjuryincreasessowillwagesdoesn\'tnecessarilymeanthattheallcompanieswhichhavehazardousworkenvironmentsagree.北美GRE作文范文中間段1Thefirstissuetobeaddressediswhetherincreasedlaborcostsjustifylargecapitalexpenditurestoimprovetheworkenvironment.Clearlyonecouldarguethatifmakingtheworkplacesafewouldcostanexorbitantamountofmoneyincomparisontoleavingtheworkplaceasisandpayingslightlyincreasedwagesthanitwouldnotmakesensetoimprovetheworkenvironment.Forexample,ifmakingtheworkplacesafewouldcost$100millionversusadditionalpayrollexpensesofonly$5,000peryear,itwouldmakefinancialsensetosimplypaytheincreasedwages.Nobusinessorbusinessownerwithanysensewouldpayallthatextramoneyjusttosaveacoupledollarsandimproveemployeehealthandrelations.Toconsiderthis,acostbenefitanalysismustbemade.Ialsofeelthatalthoughacostbenefitanalysisshouldbethedeterminingfactorwithregardtothesedecisionsmakingfinancialsense,itmaynotbethedeterminingfactorwithregardtomakingsocial,moralandethicalsense.北美GRE范文中間段2Thisargumentalsoreliesontheideathatcompaniessolelyusefinancialsenseinanalysingimprovingtheworkenvironment.Thisisnotthecase.Companieslookatotherconsiderationssuchasthenegativesocialramificationsofhighon-jobinjuries.Forexample,Toyotaspendslargeamountsofmoneyimprovingitsenvironmentbecausewhileitsgoalistobeprofitable,italsopridesitselfonhighemployeemoraleandanalmostperfectlysafeworkenvironment.However,Toyotafindsthatitcandoboth,asbyimprovingemployeehealthandemployeerelationstheyareguaranteedamoremotivatedstaff,andhenceamoreefficientstaff;thisguaranteesmoremoneyforthebusinessaswellasmoresafetyfortheemployees.北美GRE寫作范文中間段3Finallyonemustunderstandthatnotallworkenvironmentscanbemadesafer.Forexample,inthecaseofcoalmining,acompanyonlyhaslimitedwaysofmakingtheworkenvironmentsafe.Whilecompaniesmaybeabletoensuresomesafetyprecautions,theymaynotbeabletoprovideallthesafetymeasuresnecessary.Inotherwords,aminingcompanyhaslimitedabilitytocontroltheairqualitywithinacoalmineandthereforeitcannotcontroltheriskofemployeesgettingblacklung.Inotherwords,regardlessoftheintentofthecompany,somejobsaresimplydangerousinnature.北美GRE范文末端Inconclusion,whileatfirstitmayseemtomakefinancialsensetoimprovethesafetyoftheworkenvironmentsometimesittrulydoesnotmakefinancialsense.Furthermore,financialsensemaynotbetheonlyissueacompanyfaces.Othertypesofanalysesmustbemadesuchasthesocialramificationsofanunsafeworkenvironmentandtheoverallabilityofacompanytoimprovethatenvironment（i.e。，coalmine）。Beforeanydecisionismade,allthisthingsmustbeconsidered,notsimplythereductionofpayrollexpenses.GRE這篇官方欽定滿分的范文，其最明顯的優(yōu)點在于：字?jǐn)?shù)高達(dá)599words,GRE充分體現(xiàn)了字?jǐn)?shù)為王的判分傾向。標(biāo)準(zhǔn)的五段制，首段、GRE末端，中間三段，看上去很美。沒有陳詞濫調(diào)、GRE滿篇廢話的模板式語言。只有以上三點離滿分還是很遠(yuǎn)的，GRE之所以SIX,我看更重要的在于，每段各盡其責(zé)，既獨立又統(tǒng)一，形成了完整的ARGUMENT，specifically:首段再現(xiàn)了原TOPIC的推理過程，GRE并指出其assumptions多有不適;尤其令閱卷人高興的是：首段在最后簡化羅列了推理中的三個問題。要知道美國人就喜歡的作文---總分式，在首段就把三個ideas羅列出來，然后在中間三段分別展開，先總后分，一目了然。中一的TS—“Thefirstissuetobeaddressediswhetherincreasedlaborcostsjustifylargecapitalexpenditurestoimprovetheworkenvironment.”可謂是一針見血，一劍封喉。對于這樣嚴(yán)重的推理漏洞，如果不首先指出，其argument必然軟弱乏力。此所謂Topic中的“必削點”，不可不察。中二的TS-“Thisargumentalsoreliesontheideathatcompaniessolelyusefinancialsenseinanalysingimprovingtheworkenvironment.”這可謂是劍走偏鋒，獨辟蹊徑，出人所料。文章竟然批評了Topic以錢為本經(jīng)營理念，提出了要以人為本，這樣寫是有一定風(fēng)險，畢竟這不是Issue。那本文是如何化險為夷的呢?且看本段最后一句“thisguaranteesmoremoneyforthebusinessaswellasmoresafetyfortheemployees.”我不由得長舒一口，人家再次回歸了，又回到了Topic中以“Money”為本的推理。中三的TS