1、,寫作技巧訓練 利用句子的多樣化表達提高作文語言質量,What activity was it?,We arrived at the world park at 9 oclock. We were divided into 5 groups. Then We enjoyed the beautiful scenery. We talked and laughed. We saw some models of buildings. The buildings were famous in other countries. We took some photos. It was a wonderf

2、ul day.,Our trip to the Beijing World Park,新課標中的寫作評價標準: (節(jié)選),The shortcoming of the sample passage:,語法結構和句型單調,簡單句的特點： 強勁有力，干凈利落，意思特別清楚。 常用來提出論點，得出結論，或提出主要事實。,句子的適當擴展不僅可以增大句子的信息量，而且可以收到一定的修飾效果。,Learning Goals,Through exercises, cooperation, questioning and comments, we will be able to: sum up the way

3、s and skills of improving the language expression in writing and feel the benefits that they brings to us in writing. use the skills consciously, properly and correctly to combine sentences and rewrite the sentences, paragraph and passage. feel the happiness of helping others and learn “Practice mak

4、es perfect.”,Making comments on Papers,Excellent group： Group 3andgroup 4 Excellent members：秀瑞雪, 齊愷欣，于可心，高子越，隋振杰 need to improve：，,3. He left out the question.,2. His handwriting should be improved!,1. Part 2 Task 3 審題不清Careless,Yesterday once more,Careful,Clear,Part 1 Self-study-Correcting Mistakes

5、,You could Correct your mistakes by yourself or by cooperating with your partners. （2mins） Tips： 1、Prepare color pens and papers 2、In order to solve the difficulties, you should devote yourselves to the discussion. 3、重點討論task 4,sum up the characteristics of the language in sample 2，仔細看范文2，總結的更全面些，結合

6、例子.,Last week, our class organized a spring outing. To make this memorable activity more wonderful, we discussed the destination carefully and finally decided to go mountain climbing instead of other choices like playing in an amusement park and going boating. With high spirits, we started our sprin

7、g outing on a fine day. While we climbed the mountain, we enjoyed the beautiful views and the warm sunshine. However, we were shocked when we reached the top of the mountain, because waste bottles, used packages and even banana peels were thrown everywhere, which totally ruined the beauty of the nat

8、ure. What a pity it was！Feeling a great pity for the tourists, we picked up the rubbish and carefully divided them into 2 groups: the recycle ones and the non-recycle ones. After that, we put the rubbish into the bin differently. We call on awareness on protecting our environment which is of great i

9、mportance. Though cleaning up the rubbish was a tough task, our hearts were filed with joy and never will we forget this thing.,3. 句式有變換，不單調。,1. 句子邏輯關系清楚，連貫。,2.使用較為豐富的語法結構。,Part 2 Cooperative study- Discuss in groups,Task 1: 2, 6,8 Task 2: 2,3,4 Task 3: 2,7,8 Task 4: 能寫出幾種表達？,Solve your problems in

10、groups. (6mins),Tips： 1、prepare color pens and papers 2、In each group No.1 - No.4 No.2 - No.3 No.1-integrate(統(tǒng)一)the answers No.2-sort the answers 3、No.3-control the volume of discussion,討論完請讀Part 2 中的句子，并爭取背下來。,Presenting Answers & Making Comments,Present your answers clearly.,Make comments on the a

11、nswers loudly. Speak out your opinions freely!,2. I will never forget that day _ I took part in the Green Action. 6. Seeing _ we had done, we all had a sense of achievement. 8. _ we arrived there, we began to work immediately.,Task 1,連詞-邏輯性強，條理清晰，文章連貫,Task 1,The sky was cloudless, and the sun was sh

12、ining brightly. I will never forget that day when/ in which I took part in the Green Action. Some were digging holes, some were carrying and planting trees, while others were watering them. It was hot that day, but none of us stopped our work. Although we were tired, we were very happy. Seeing what

13、we had done, we all had a sense of achievement. Because we were worried about that someone would do harm to the trees, we put up a board to remind them. When/ as soon as we arrived there, we began to work immediately. Before we left, we took a photo to record this activity.,2. Our class went to subu

14、rbs to plant trees on April 12th. We wanted to support Green Action in China. 3. When the work was finished, we smiled in relief. 4. After we had worked for hours, finally we finished our work.,Task 2,doing、having done、done、to do - 內容豐富，表現(xiàn)生動，語言簡練， 句型句子形式變換。,1. Not only did we understand the meaning

15、of labor 2. It was not until 4 oclock in the afternoon 3. We were so excited 4. Only by protecting the trees 5. Exhausted as I was, 6. Never will we 7. We took a photo before the trees we plant 8. What an unforgettable day 9. We looked at the newly-planted trees,but also we helped to protect the env

16、ironment. that we finished our work. that I will never forget that meaningful activity. can our earth be more beautiful. I still felt happy because my work paid off. forget that day with tools in our hands. it was! happy and proud.,Task 3,語言形式多樣,Translate the sentence. 看見李老師躺在床上，腿上裹著綁帶，我們很難過， 希望她早日康

17、復。,Task 4,1. Seeing Miss Li lying in bed with her leg wrapped in bandages, we felt sorry for her and hoped that she would recover soon.,2. Seeing Miss Li lying in bed with bandages around her legs, we felt sorry for her and hoped that she would recover soon.,3. Seeing Miss Li lying in bed whose leg

18、was wrapped in bandages, we felt sorry for her, hoping that she would recover soon.,4. When we saw Miss Li lying in bed with bandages around her legs, we felt so sorry for her that we hoped she would recover soon.,1. Connect the sentences We sat around her bed. We talked much about the interesting t

19、hings in school. We comforted her. We wanted to relieve her pain.,Check,Sitting around her bed, we talked much about the interesting things in school to comfort her and relieve her pain.,2. Express this sentence in another way. Although Miss Li was weak, she insisted on giving us lessons in wheelcha

20、irs. 3. 李老師是多么負責的一位老師?。?4. 我們?yōu)槔蠋煿恼?，眼里充滿淚水。(applaud) 5. 我們如此感動以至于我們永遠忘不了那一天。,Check,2. Express this sentence in another way. Although Miss Li was weak, she insisted on giving us lessons in wheelchairs. 3. 李老師是多么負責的一位老師??！ 4. 我們?yōu)槔蠋煿恼?，眼里充滿淚水。(applaud) 5. 我們如此感動以至于我們永遠忘不了那一天。,Check,Weak as Miss Li, she in

21、sisted on giving us lessons in wheelchairs.,What a responsible teacher Miss Li was!,We applauded for our teacher, with tears in our eyes.,We were so moved that we would never forget that day.,Part 3 Ability Enhancing Connect these phrases to form a complete passage by using the ways of improving the

22、 sentences learnt in this class. (每組的每名同學負責一幅圖，看哪組用得又對又合理),順暢 時態(tài) 清楚 整潔,December 5 was memorable because it was Volunteer Day, and we did some meaningful work. Early in the morning, we went to a nearby bus station, carrying some buckets and our volunteer logo, talking and laughing all the way. As soo

23、n as we arrived there, We began to clean the buses immediately. Some carried water, some wiped the floor of the buses, while the others clean the windows. With the hope that we could provide the drivers and passengers a tidy and clean bus, we worked hard. After one hour, we finished our work. Seeing what we had done, we had a sense of achievement. After that, we tried to lead people to queue for getting on buses. Seeing the old who had trouble in walking , we held their arms to make them get on the bus safely. They thanked us, praising us as LeiFe