江蘇省南京市六合龍袍中學(xué)八年級(jí)語(yǔ)文上冊(cè)教學(xué)課件：《阿長(zhǎng)與山海經(jīng)》(共45張)第一頁(yè)，共32頁(yè)。WritingAssessment

第二頁(yè)，共32頁(yè)。Bytheendofthelesson,you’llbeabletomakeasummaryofashortpassage；learnthestepsoforganizingyouressayeffectively；knowhowtoassessyouressay.第三頁(yè)，共32頁(yè)。Whatmakesagoodessay?Questionfordiscussion第四頁(yè)，共32頁(yè)。Content

Structure

LanguageCleanandclearhandwritingAllpointsincluded&tothepointGoodbeginning&endingWellorganizedparagraphsProperlinkingwordsNogrammaticalmistakesAppropriatewordsVariedsentencepatterns

AGoodEssay第五頁(yè)，共32頁(yè)。Structure

OpeningBody

ConclusionTopicsentenceSupportingsentencesConcludingsentence第六頁(yè)，共32頁(yè)。Sixstepstoorganizeanessay第七頁(yè)，共32頁(yè)。Step1ReadinstructionsStep2MakeanoutlineStep3

Listkeypoints

Step4Linkwordsintocohesive(連貫) sentencesStep5Organizesentencesintoparagraphs

Step6

Polishupyourwriting第八頁(yè)，共32頁(yè)。Step1Readinstructions

30;120;atleasttwopoints;nooriginalsentences

Theme:handleobstaclesinlife

3paragraphs第九頁(yè)，共32頁(yè)。Step2:MakeanoutlineP1SummaryP3WaystodealwithpersonalobstaclesThestorytellsof…P2GeneralinspirationsWhatinspiresme…Iwasdeeplyimpressedby…Personally,FromwhereIstand,第十頁(yè)，共32頁(yè)。Steps3-6

Step3:Makealistofkeypointsofeach paragraphStep4:Combineeachpointsintocohesive sentencesStep5:Combinesentencesintoawell structuredparagraphStep6:Polishupyourwriting第十一頁(yè)，共32頁(yè)。Paragraph1:Makeasummary

Q:Howtomakeasummaryofanarrative(敘述)writing?BasedonthebasicelementsWhoWhat(events)How(effects)

Why(reasons)第十二頁(yè)，共32頁(yè)。theelementsinvolvedWho

What(event)How(ways/effects)Ellick,a7yearoldgirl;hasnohandswonahandwritingcompetitionmadeherparentsproud;madepeopleamazed第十三頁(yè)，共32頁(yè)。Whichoneisbetter?

Overcomingherdisability,Ellickwonahandwritingcompetitionforthedisabledkids,withoutevenusingprosthetics.Hercourageanddeterminationareinspiringandimpressive.

Aseven-year-oldgirlwasbornwithouthand.Butshehadagreattendencytobeindependentsinceshewasababy.Finallyshewonanationalawardforhandwritingforspecial-needstudentsevenwithoutprosthetics.第十四頁(yè)，共32頁(yè)。

Paragraph2

inspirations

(2Pointsatleast)

3stepstofollow第十五頁(yè)，共32頁(yè)。1)Writedownthekeypointsbyaskingyourselfthefollowingquestions:Q1Whatinspiresyoumost?(What)Q2Whyareyouinspired?(Why)Q3Howdotheseaspectsinfluenceourlife?(How)

第十六頁(yè)，共32頁(yè)。Q1What?positiveattitudeoptimism;courage;braverydetermination;perseverance;persistenceconstanteffort;…第十七頁(yè)，共32頁(yè)。Q2Why?positiveattitude;constanteffortInfrontofobstacles,toomanypeoplechoosetoshrinkbecauseoffearsintheirheartandpessimismtowardslife.Althoughthelittlegirlisdisabled,sheisbraveenoughtofaceuptothebiggestobstacleinherlife.

第十八頁(yè)，共32頁(yè)。Q3How?

Whenweareinthedark,positiveattitude____________________________________________________________________.Constantefforttogetherwithpositiveattitudewill____________________.servesasthelightwecanusetofindourcorrectpathandsecureabetterdestinationbringussuccess

第十九頁(yè)，共32頁(yè)。2)Combineallthepointsintocohesive(連貫)sentencesbyusinglinkingphrases第二十頁(yè)，共32頁(yè)。Justforreference:

WhattouchesmemostisAnya’spositiveattitudeaswellasherconstanteffortfacingobstacles.(1)________(現(xiàn)實(shí)中),toomanypeoplechoosetoshrinkbecauseoffearsintheirheartandpessimismtowardslife,(2)______thelittlegirl,(3)______thefactthatsheisdisabled,isbraveenoughtofaceuptothebiggestobstacleinherlife.(4)_____herachievementshowsusthatwhenweareinthedark,positiveattitudeservesasthelighttofindourcorrectpathandsecureabetterdestination.(5)_________,togetherwithpositiveattitudes,constanteffortswillbringussuresuccess.InrealitywhiledespiteAndMeanwhile第二十一頁(yè)，共32頁(yè)。3)Polishupyourwriting Trytousesomeadvancedwordsandvariedsentencepatterns:第二十二頁(yè)，共32頁(yè)。

____①________(讓我觸動(dòng)最深的是)isAnya’spositiveattitudeaswellasherconstanteffort______②__________（當(dāng)遭遇困難時(shí)）.Inreality,toomanypeoplechooseto

____③___(退縮)becauseoffearsintheirheartandpessimismtowardslife,whilethelittlegirl,_________④________（倒裝句：雖然她殘疾了）,isbraveenoughto______⑤___(直面)thebiggestobstacleinherlife.Andsheshowsusthatwhenweareinthedark,__________⑥___________(強(qiáng)調(diào)句式：正是積極的態(tài)度）servesasthelightforustofindourcorrectpathandsecure

abetterdestination._____⑦_(dá)__________（倒裝句：同樣重要的是）ourconstantefforttowardsourgoalwiththecourageofnevergivingup,whichwill___⑧____(收獲)

suresuccess.第二十三頁(yè)，共32頁(yè)。讓我觸動(dòng)最深的是…Whattouches/inspires/enlightensmemostis..Whatimpresses/strikesmeis…當(dāng)遭遇困難時(shí)infrontofobstacleswhenfacing/encountering…facedwith/confrontedwithobstaclesmeetingwith/runningupagainst…退縮/放棄shrinkback;holdback;withdrawgiveup;givein;surrender;雖然她殘疾了(invertedsentence)Disabledassheis第二十四頁(yè)，共32頁(yè)。直面困難faceupto/face…withcourage;face…bravely,正是積極的態(tài)度充當(dāng)著指引我們正確道路的光(itis…that）,itispositiveattitudethatservesasthelightforustofindourcorrectpath.同樣重要的是(invertedsentence)Equallyimportantis…收獲成功yield/helpyoureap/harvestsuccess第二十五頁(yè)，共32頁(yè)。PossibleversionWhattouchesmemostisAnya’spositiveattitudeaswellasherconstanteffortwhenconfrontedwithobstacles.Inreality,toomanypeoplechoosetoshrinkbecauseoffearsintheirheartandpessimismtowardslife,whilethelittlegirl,disabledassheis,isbraveenoughtofaceuptothebiggestobstacleinherlife.Andsheshowsusthatwhenweareinthedark,itispositiveattitudethatservesasthelightwecanusetofindourcorrectpathandsecureabetterdestination.Equallyimportantisourconstantefforttowardsourgoalwiththecourageofnevergivingup,whichwillyieldsuresuccess.第二十六頁(yè)，共32頁(yè)。Timeforpolishing

Groupwork: reviseastudent’swritingbelow第二十七頁(yè)，共32頁(yè)。第二十八頁(yè)，共32頁(yè)。RevisedversionforreferenceIwasdeeplyimpressedbythestory.JustlikeAnaya,w