1、高考寫(xiě)作高考寫(xiě)作 1 評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn) 2 內(nèi)容框架第四部分：書(shū)面表達(dá)（滿第四部分：書(shū)面表達(dá)（滿分分25分）分）假設(shè)你是假設(shè)你是卜曼宜，你購(gòu)買(mǎi)了一部卜曼宜，你購(gòu)買(mǎi)了一部某外國(guó)公司生產(chǎn)的手機(jī)，某外國(guó)公司生產(chǎn)的手機(jī)，因有質(zhì)量問(wèn)題，要求該因有質(zhì)量問(wèn)題，要求該公司更換。請(qǐng)根據(jù)下列公司更換。請(qǐng)根據(jù)下列要點(diǎn)，用英文寫(xiě)一封電要點(diǎn)，用英文寫(xiě)一封電子郵件。子郵件。要點(diǎn)：要點(diǎn)：1.問(wèn)題：?jiǎn)栴}：2.手機(jī)不響鈴，不能發(fā)短手機(jī)不響鈴，不能發(fā)短信；該產(chǎn)品已售完，無(wú)信；該產(chǎn)品已售完，無(wú)法更換；型號(hào)新，無(wú)配法更換；型號(hào)新，無(wú)配件，無(wú)法維修。件，無(wú)法維修。3.要求：公司應(yīng)盡快予以要求：公司應(yīng)盡快予以更換。更換。注意：注意：1.詞數(shù)為詞

2、數(shù)為100左右；左右；2.參考詞匯：配件參考詞匯：配件sparepart3.電子郵件的開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾電子郵件的開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已為你寫(xiě)好（不計(jì)入你已為你寫(xiě)好（不計(jì)入你所寫(xiě)詞數(shù)）；所寫(xiě)詞數(shù)）；4.已給出的電子郵件的開(kāi)已給出的電子郵件的開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾不得抄入答題頭和結(jié)尾不得抄入答題卡?？ā?When I bought it home, I found there were several problems about the quality of the mobile phone. There is no ring in the new mobile phone, besides, it can not be

3、used to send short messages. When I want back to the local company, the manager told me this product has sold out and that I wasnt able to change it. Whats worse, this style mobile phone is a new product, there is no spare part and cant to be repaired. These problems worries me most. I hope your com

4、pany would change it for me as soon as possible. 【分析】基本表達(dá)清楚；時(shí)態(tài)運(yùn)用恰當(dāng)；采用了些簡(jiǎn)單連接手法；內(nèi)容較連貫；準(zhǔn)確性不夠。 中國(guó)式英語(yǔ)語(yǔ)態(tài)錯(cuò)誤動(dòng)詞用法錯(cuò)誤單詞誤用15第四部分：書(shū)面表達(dá)（滿分第四部分：書(shū)面表達(dá)（滿分25分）分）假設(shè)你是卜曼宜，你購(gòu)假設(shè)你是卜曼宜，你購(gòu)買(mǎi)了一部某外國(guó)公司生買(mǎi)了一部某外國(guó)公司生產(chǎn)的手機(jī)，因有質(zhì)量問(wèn)產(chǎn)的手機(jī)，因有質(zhì)量問(wèn)題，要求該公司更換。題，要求該公司更換。請(qǐng)根據(jù)下列要點(diǎn)，用英請(qǐng)根據(jù)下列要點(diǎn)，用英文寫(xiě)一封電子郵件。文寫(xiě)一封電子郵件。要點(diǎn)：要點(diǎn)：1.問(wèn)題：?jiǎn)栴}：2.手機(jī)不響鈴，不能發(fā)短手機(jī)不響鈴，不能發(fā)短信；該產(chǎn)

5、品已售完，無(wú)信；該產(chǎn)品已售完，無(wú)法更換；型號(hào)新，無(wú)配法更換；型號(hào)新，無(wú)配件，無(wú)法維修。件，無(wú)法維修。2.要求：公司應(yīng)盡快予以更要求：公司應(yīng)盡快予以更換。換。注意：注意：1.詞數(shù)為詞數(shù)為100左右；左右；2.參考詞匯：配件參考詞匯：配件sparepart3.電子郵件的開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已電子郵件的開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已為你寫(xiě)好（不計(jì)入你所為你寫(xiě)好（不計(jì)入你所寫(xiě)詞數(shù)）；寫(xiě)詞數(shù)）；4.已給出的電子郵件的開(kāi)頭已給出的電子郵件的開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾不得抄入答題卡。和結(jié)尾不得抄入答題卡。 However, some problems are presented with this mobile phone. In the first

6、 place, when there are phone calls, the mobile phone just cant ring. In addition, short messages can never be sent. when I came back to the mall for exchange, I was disappointed to be told that this model had been sold out. Worse still, it is a new model, thus no spare part is available at the momen

7、t. Nowhere can I have this phone repaired. Maybe there are some alternatives to handle this case, but I hope it can be dealt with and solved as soon as possible. In brief, my personal viewpoint is that you replace this mobile phone. Im looking forward to your reply.【分析】全文共九個(gè)句子,其中有兩個(gè)時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句,一個(gè)并列句;一個(gè)倒裝

8、句;一個(gè)表語(yǔ)從句。運(yùn)用了however,in the first place,in addition, worse still, in brief 五個(gè)過(guò)渡性詞匯。運(yùn)用了available, alternative兩個(gè)較高級(jí)詞語(yǔ)。whenwhenbutNowhere canIis thatHoweverIn thefirst place,Inaddition,WorsestillIn brief,availablealternatives251 評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn) keep to the point accuracy (spelling and grammar) bright points(words

9、, phrases and sentence) natural2 內(nèi)容框架 1 真題一（環(huán)境保護(hù) 一次性筷子的使用） (how to make your content logical) 2 真題二（周末集體活動(dòng) 介紹一個(gè)地方） (how to make bright points for your article) 3 真題三（討論動(dòng)物園是否應(yīng)搬出市區(qū)） (how to make accuracy) 4 歷年真題翻譯練習(xí)真題一真題一假如你叫李華，是一名高中學(xué)生。根據(jù)下面內(nèi)容，寫(xiě)一封倡議書(shū)，呼吁人們停止使用一次性筷子。注意：1開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已給出。2字?jǐn)?shù)100左右。3參考詞匯：reject thr

10、owaway chopsticks寫(xiě)作步驟寫(xiě)作步驟 1 擴(kuò)展 -邏輯性 -分段 2 翻譯 -亮點(diǎn) -詞與句 3 檢查 -錯(cuò)誤假如你叫李華，是一名高中學(xué)生。根據(jù)下面內(nèi)容，寫(xiě)一封倡議書(shū)，呼吁人們停止使用一次性筷子。注意：1開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已給出。2字?jǐn)?shù)100左右。3參考詞匯：reject throwaway chopsticks 目前狀態(tài) 導(dǎo)致結(jié)果 采取措施1擴(kuò)展擴(kuò)展砍伐森林會(huì)導(dǎo)致很多嚴(yán)重的環(huán)境問(wèn)題。面對(duì)這樣的情況，我們應(yīng)該采取一些措施來(lái)保護(hù)森林了。目前，中國(guó)的森林正遭受著嚴(yán)重的破壞。2翻譯翻譯第一部分第一部分 Do you know why sandstorms and landslides are

11、happening more frequently than ever in recent years? According to the recent statistics, 中國(guó)正面臨著嚴(yán)重的森林破壞問(wèn)題。中國(guó)的森林覆蓋率僅為13%，但是中國(guó)每年要生產(chǎn)大約450億雙筷子，而這些筷子就需要我們砍伐2500萬(wàn)棵樹(shù)。有環(huán)保主義者警告，照這樣的速度，中國(guó)可能在20年內(nèi)就要砍伐所有的森林。 面臨著 森林破壞問(wèn)題 覆蓋率 大約 450億 2500萬(wàn) 警告 滅絕 be confronted with the problem of deforestation be covered with approxi

12、mately 45 billion 25 million warn die out 中國(guó)正面臨著嚴(yán)重的森林破壞問(wèn)題。 中國(guó)的森林覆蓋率僅為13%，但是中國(guó)每年要生產(chǎn)大約450億雙筷子 而這些筷子就需要我們砍伐2500萬(wàn)棵樹(shù)。 有環(huán)保主義者警告，照這樣的速度，中國(guó)可能在20年內(nèi)就要砍伐所有的森林。 China is confronted with the serious problem of deforestation. 13% of china is covered with forest, but china produces approximately 45 billion pairs o

13、f throwaway chopsticks. These chopsticks need us to cut down 25 million trees. Some environmentalists warn the public that the forest of China will die out after 20 years by this speed. China is confronted with the serious problem of forest destruction. 13% of china is covered with forest, but china

14、 produces approximately 45 billion pairs of throwaway chopsticks. These chopsticks need us to cut down 25 million trees. Some environmentalists warn the public thatthe forest of China will die out after 20 years by this speed. Confronted with the serious problem of deforestation. 13% of china is cov

15、ered with forest, however approximately 45 billion pairs of throwaway chopsticks are produced by China annually, which means that we need to cut down 25 million trees. Therefore, some environmentalists warn the public that the forest of China will die out after 20 years by this speed.被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)定語(yǔ)從句定語(yǔ)從

16、句連詞連詞分詞作狀語(yǔ)分詞作狀語(yǔ)第二部分第二部分 砍伐森林會(huì)導(dǎo)致很多環(huán)境問(wèn)題，例如，水土流失，廢氣排放增多，溫室效應(yīng)。人類將會(huì)遭受一個(gè)由自己帶來(lái)的災(zāi)難。 砍伐森林 水土流失 廢氣排放增多 遭受 Excessive deforestation soil erosion the increase emission of carbon dioxide suffer from 砍伐森林會(huì)導(dǎo)致很多環(huán)境問(wèn)題， 例如，水土流失，廢氣排放增多，溫室效應(yīng). 人類將會(huì)遭受一個(gè)由自己帶來(lái)的災(zāi)難。 Excessive deforestation will lead to a series of environmenta

17、l changes, for instance, soil erosion,the increase emission of carbon dioxide ,especially the green house effect. Its sure that the humen will suffer from a disater which is caused by ourselves.第三部分第三部分 所以，我們是該采取一些措施來(lái)保護(hù)我們的森林資源了。 its time that sb did sth.萬(wàn)能措施一萬(wàn)能措施一 The long term goal of environmental

18、 protection is to prevent the creation of pollutants and wastes and to produce durable, recyclable goods.萬(wàn)能措施二萬(wàn)能措施二 In view of sustainable development, the exploitation of mineral resources should be under strict government.萬(wàn)能理由三萬(wàn)能理由三 Mankind should join hand in hand to create an inhabitable world f

19、or themselves and their offspring.3檢查檢查糾錯(cuò)糾錯(cuò) Do you know why sandstorms and landslides are happening more frequently than ever in recent years? According to the recent statistics, theyre due to the disappearing of forests. Dear friends, do you know they were eatlen by you when use the chopsticks? Eve

20、ry year it products 45 billion chopsticks from China. The forests only cover 13 percents in China. These need 25 million of trees. Someone who cares the environment has alarmed that China may use out all of its forests according to this speed! It means that the environment of China will break down e

21、ntirely. So please throw away chopsticks now! using the throwaway chopsticks may kill our forests. China whose forests only covers 13% of its land, produces 45000000000 throwaway chopsticks every year. This needs 2500 million trees to be cut down. Whats worse, some environmentalists even warned that

22、 if we continue using these chopsticks at this speed, it will be possible for China to use up all its forest resources in only 20 years.( At that time, we human beings could not live on the plannet any longer and there way be no living thing on the earth, either. What a frightening thing it is! )So

23、we should not use the chopsticks any more in order to make a better environment for our younger generation and for ourselves. Dear friends, lets take action from now on!必備詞匯必備詞匯 disaster, flood, hurricane, lighting, thunderstorm, tornado, volcano, wave, ash, furniture,feather,fur, latitude,equator,l

24、ongitude bury, occur, strike, ruin,erupt, eruption. current, tropical, violent, previous,常用表達(dá)常用表達(dá) 污染大氣 無(wú)節(jié)制地開(kāi)發(fā)資源 亂扔垃圾 砍伐森林 冰川融化 土地沙漠化 渡過(guò)災(zāi)難 回收再利用垃圾 減少?gòu)U氣排放 最大化地利用資源pollute the atmosphereexploit natural resources excessivelylitter arounddeforestthe poles meltdesertificationsurvive the disasterrecycle th

25、e garbagereduce the exhaust emissionmaximize the use of resources真題二（仿寫(xiě)）假定你是一名導(dǎo)游，你將接待一個(gè)外國(guó)旅游團(tuán)。請(qǐng)你擬定一份100詞左右的導(dǎo)游詞向客介紹青島。要點(diǎn)如下： 1.青島位于山東半島的南端，面積10654平方公里，總?cè)丝?99萬(wàn)； 2.青島三面環(huán)海，大海是青島的魅力所在； 3. 古代名人如李白，蒲松齡，康有為等的足跡遍布青島各地，留下了華美的詩(shī)文。 4. 青島是一座現(xiàn)代化城市，現(xiàn)代化的工廠和樓房林立。 參考詞匯；半島 peninsula Paris is the capital and largest city

26、of France, situated on the River Seine. It is one of the most beautiful cities in the world and is visitied by more than eight million tourists every year. cover an area of with a population of Qingdao is a beautiful city of China, situated in the south of Shandong peninsula , covering an area of 10

27、,654 square kilometers and with a population of 6.99 million. France is Europes third largest country and faces the United Kingdom acoss the English Channel. Florence is an Italian city which became famous because of the Renaissance. Qingdao faces the sea which becomes famous because of the blue sea

28、water. Many of Florence s most beautiful paintings and sculptures were produced by great artists such as Leonardo da Vinci and Michelangelo. Greeces best writers lived in ancient Athens. Their work has influenced writers ever since. poet essay celebrity Chinas best writers travelled around ancient Q

29、ingdao.Many of China s most beautiful essays and poems were produced by great artists such as Li Bai, Pu Songlin and Kang Youwei. international possess modern Qingdao is a beautiful city of China, situated in the south of Shandong peninsula , covering an area of 10,654 spuare kilometers and with a p

30、opulation of 6.99 million. Qingdao faces the sea which becomes famous because of the blue seawater. Chinas best writers travelled around ancient Qingdao.Many of China s most beautiful essays and poems were produced by great artists such as Li Bai, Pu Songlin and Kang Youwei. Qingdao is a internation

31、al city, which possesses a great many modern buildings and factories. 1 連接詞 2 框架詞 3 內(nèi)容詞 1連接詞匯連接詞匯表列舉：for example、for instance、 that is to say表補(bǔ)充：besides、in addition、moreover表對(duì)比：on （the） one handon the other hand, in spite of表原因：because of、thanks to、due to、 owing to 、as a result of 表結(jié)果：therefore、thus

32、、as a result、so表結(jié)論：to conclude、in a word、in brief、 to sum up in a nutshell in conclusion表轉(zhuǎn)折：however、nevertheless、yet漢語(yǔ)意思漢語(yǔ)意思普通用詞普通用詞亮點(diǎn)詞匯亮點(diǎn)詞匯不同的越來(lái)越面臨重視很多討論關(guān)注發(fā)生意識(shí)到differentmore and more faceemphasizemanydiscussionattentionhappenrealizevarious , vary fromgrowing, increasingconfront attach importance to

33、 vast, a overwhelming majority of, quite a few, an army of, an ocean of, a sea of, a multitude of debate, controversyfocusoccurbe aware of 漢語(yǔ)漢語(yǔ)意思意思普通詞匯普通詞匯亮點(diǎn)詞匯亮點(diǎn)詞匯認(rèn)為重要的支持不同意喜歡好的壞的thinkbelieve, hold, argue, maitain, harbor the idea that, take the attitude that, hold the view that, it is widely shared

34、 that, it is universally ackowledged that, to my mind, as far as I am concernedimportantessential, vital, significant, notablesupportbe in favor of, approve of disagreedisapprove of , frown on sthlikeprefer, feel inclined to , be keen on, be fond of , appeal to goodbenefical, positive, favorable, pe

35、rfect, pleasurablebaddreadful,unfavorable, poor, adverse普通詞匯普通詞匯亮點(diǎn)詞匯亮點(diǎn)詞匯名詞reasonfactor動(dòng)詞causecontribute to, attribute to , lead to , result from, account for連詞becausesince , in that , seeing that, now that普通詞匯普通詞匯亮點(diǎn)詞匯亮點(diǎn)詞匯第一項(xiàng)firstin the first place, to begin with, first and foremost第二項(xiàng)secondin the se

36、cond place, furthermore, besides第三項(xiàng)thirdin the third place, finally, last but not leastPage 43內(nèi)容詞匯內(nèi)容詞匯1解決解決2損害3給與4培養(yǎng)5優(yōu)勢(shì)Solve, deal with, cope with, handle, resolve, address, tackleDamage, hurt, injure, harm, impair, undermine, jeopardizeGive, offer, render, impart, provide,supply, affordDevelop, cul

37、tivate, fosterAdvantage, merit, virtue, benefit, upside, strengthPage 446缺陷缺陷7使迷惑8重要的9保護(hù)10確保Disadvantage, demerit, drawback, downside, weaknessPuzzle, bewilder, perplex, baffleProtect, conserve, preserveKey, crucial, critical, important, significant, vital, substantial, indispensable, imperativeAssu

38、re, ensure, guarantee, pledgePage 4511消除消除12導(dǎo)致13宣稱14有益的15影響Eliminate, clear, remove, clear up, take away, smooth awayLead to, bring about, result in, cause, spark off, conduce to, procure, induce, generateAllege, assert, declare, claimUseful, helpful, beneficial, profitable, rewarding，advantageousIn

39、fluence, impact, effectPage 4616明顯的明顯的17 占18與相比19展示20大約Clear, obvious, evident, self-evident, manifest, apparent, crystal-clearComprise, take up, account for, constitute, consist of, make up, occupy, hold, composeCompared with，compared to，in comparison with，in comparison to，by comparison with，by com

40、parison toShow, reveal, illustrate, demonstrate, depict, present, represent, describe Approximately，almost，about，around，nearly，roughly真題三贊成遷出贊成遷出反對(duì)遷出反對(duì)遷出1 游客多，交通堵塞2 郊區(qū)環(huán)境好1 建于1906年，中外聞名2 搬遷易造成動(dòng)物死亡假設(shè)你是李華，最近國(guó)內(nèi)一家英文報(bào)紙正在討論北京動(dòng)物園是否應(yīng)該遷出市區(qū)。以下是你所在班級(jí)的討論情況。請(qǐng)你給該報(bào)寫(xiě)一封信，反映討論結(jié)果。擴(kuò)展第一段 引話題第二段 正反議論第三段 總結(jié)第一段 引話題 When ask

41、ed about their opinion of career and family, people always respond differently. Some people deem it more important to pursue their career, while there are always other people who argue that family should be the number one in ones life. Punctuality is a necessary habit in all public affairs in civili

42、zed society.Without it ,nothing could ever be brought to a conclusion; everything would be in a state of chaos. No creature has received more praise and abuse than the common garden snail. Cooked in wine, snails are a great luxury in various parts of the world.第2段 正反議論贊成遷出贊成遷出反對(duì)遷出反對(duì)遷出1 游客多，交通堵塞2 郊區(qū)環(huán)

43、境好1 建于1906年，中外聞名2 搬遷易造成動(dòng)物死亡The other side of the picture is quite the opposite, One mans meat is another mans poison Some people take the attitude that . . can produce positive effects on us in more than one way. First of all Furthermore Whats more Others harbor the idea that . . may bring about neg

44、ative impacts on us. For one thing For another 第三段 總結(jié)（個(gè)人觀點(diǎn)） Perhaps there is an element of truth in both these pictures. I hold that . 討論 cell phone career and family When asked about their opinion of career and family, people always respond differently. Some people deem it more important to pursue

45、their career, while there are always other people who argue that family should be the number one in ones life. It goes without any question that career plays a key role in our life. In the very first place, career can give us an aim to live on. Without career, much of our living time will be certain

46、ly wasted. Whats more, career can provide us with a means to live on. Most of the people earn their income from a job. On the other hand, family is also an indispensable part of life, as many people will admit. Family is always regarded as a place where we can escape from troubles in life. In additi

47、on, we can obtain a sense of belonging to from family. Without it, anyone will feel lonely and desperate. In my opinion, career and family are not in opposition to each other. Rather, they can enhance each other so that ones life can become better and better. Therefore, its not a choice between righ

48、t and wrong, but one between ideal and practical.Page 591 北京動(dòng)物園建于1906年，有一段很重要的歷史。Page 60Page 61Page 62Page 63Page 64Page 65Page 66定語(yǔ)從句和分詞作狀語(yǔ)定語(yǔ)從句和分詞作狀語(yǔ)Beijing zoo was built in 1906 and it has a very important history.Beijing zoo , which was built in 1906 , has a very important history.Built in 1906 ,

49、 Beijing zoo has a very important history.date back to Page 67 這個(gè)公寓位于芳草街，離建新華文學(xué)校只有一站。Page 68Located on Fangcao Street, this flat is only one station from Jianxin Huawen School by bus No.11.Page 69 江城位于長(zhǎng)江邊，風(fēng)景優(yōu)美，適合居住。Page 70Settled along the banks of Chinas longest river, the Yangtze river, Jiangcheng

50、 is a beautiful town for people to live in.Page 712 我們之所以要去種樹(shù)，是因?yàn)闃?shù)可以給我們提供新鮮的空氣。Page 72Page 73原因句型原因句型The reason why + 句子 is that + 句子 （.的原因是.） Page 74The reason why we have to grow trees is that they can provide us with fresh air. The reason why we have to grow trees is that they can supply fresh ai

51、r for us. Page 75the reasons why I hold the view that name is very essential to individuals are as follows,Page 763 草樣年華這本書(shū)太有趣了，我看了好多遍還是大笑不止。Page 77Page 78倒裝句倒裝句So + 形容詞 + be + 主詞 + that + 句子 （如此.以致于.）Page 79So interesting is the book named The Age of Youth that I read it many times and cant help la

52、ughing.Page 80Never had a dream come true .Impossible is nothing.ONLYso do I, so I do ,neither do I asPage 814 時(shí)間是如此珍貴，我們經(jīng)不起浪費(fèi)它。Page 82So precious is time that we cant afford to waste it. Page 835 盡管一些西亞國(guó)家很富有，但是他們的民主制度是很難令人滿意的。Page 84Page 85Adj. + as + Subject（主詞）+ be, S + V （雖然.） Page 86Rich as the

53、 countries in west Asia are , the democracy there is by no means satisfactory. Page 87by no means = in no way = on no account 一點(diǎn)也不Page 88我們絕對(duì)不能忽略知識(shí)的價(jià)值。我們絕對(duì)不能忽略知識(shí)的價(jià)值。Page 89On no account can we + V （我們絕對(duì)不能.） Page 90Onnoaccountcanweignorethevalueofknowledge.Page 916 你愈努力，你愈進(jìn)步。Page 92結(jié)婚后就沒(méi)有歇過(guò)結(jié)婚后就沒(méi)有歇過(guò)Page 93 the + er + S + V The + more + Adj. + S + V,Page 94The harder you work, the more progress you make.Page 95我們書(shū)讀愈多，我們